Thank you,, Aviva.for your wonderfully crafted prompt comment. You're right...I maybe should have 'thrown off the shackles' in defiance when completing this one. That would have given a nice twist.
The main reason I didn't though is that I actually relish the rhyme/metre constraints. To me, they are the challenge of writing verse .i.e. to offer your thoughts in such a way that they fulfil these rules.
My 'gripe' is that such application often results in me spontaneously thinking in random rhyming couplets for, sometimes, days after. But it fades eventually,..... until the next time ! ?
Comment is about 'Rhyme Crime'! (blog)
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Thanks Again, Keith!
Clyde
PS, Love NYC.
Comment is about little NYC hotel on 23rd street (1980s) (blog)
Original item by Clyde McCulley
Clyde,
once again you take the reader straight to the place your are describing. I enjoyed this, especially the breakfast.
Thanks
Keith
Comment is about little NYC hotel on 23rd street (1980s) (blog)
Original item by Clyde McCulley
John,
I thoroughly enjoyed this poem as I occasionally write in verse, if it seems appropriate and comes naturally, but I do feel confined, restricted in what I really want to get across. In the main I now write unversed poetry which is indeed liberating but lacks the rhythm which has its own charm. A style that people have come to expect.
This is a very good poem and I thank you for it,
Keith
Comment is about 'Rhyme Crime'! (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13740)
Sat 2nd Jan 2021 21:58
I've got some tight white jeans with holes in them, I think my knees look lovely peeping out of them if a little bit knobbly xx little old nobbly knees me x
Comment is about HOLEY JEANS (blog)
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Thanks for the Like & kind comment Hugh
And the additional Likes Tony, Jordyn, Tom & Aviva. Much appreciated for taking time to read it.
Comment is about A New Breath (blog)
Original item by Stephen W Atkinson
And it's not only rhyming, but also the metre
And not only that, but how many feet or
otherwise this or that well known pattern
you feel forced to follow or else get spat on
or some other crisis you feel sure will ensue
there's certainly much that a poet must do.
But I was so optimistic to read your discerning
connection of words, it was truly head turning
It looked like you really were going to break free
from all of the chains that surround you and me
and go beyond couplets to completely uncoupled
and say something rude to them all - but you didn't.
maybe next time!
Comment is about 'Rhyme Crime'! (blog)
Original item by John Andrew Nield
Thank you Keith for your words of encouragement. I am new to poetry, having always been a visual artist and professor of visual art in the university from which I retired when I was in my early 60s. I am now going to be eighty in March.
The first poem I ever wrote was about 6 months ago, so I am looking for critiques and help. I am enjoying the creative juices which it stirs in my soul, as it did in painting and photography.
I hope you have the chance to read some of my other endeavors.
Cheers,
Clyde
PS I live in Portland, Maine
Comment is about scary night sounds (blog)
Original item by Clyde McCulley
Philipos
Sat 2nd Jan 2021 20:57
Thoroughly enjoyed some of your reads and especially the panic experienced when walking through darkened woods at night, since I had a repeat experience as a kid and occasionally it still returns to haunt.
P
Comment is about James (poet profile)
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thank-you for the like James and welcome to WOL.
Comment is about Bumper Pool (blog)
Original item by J.D. Bardo
Sat 2nd Jan 2021 19:54
Interesting piece you've written here, I enjoyed the read.
Keep Writing!
-J
Comment is about Pandemic Poetry (blog)
Original item by James
Thank-you all for the likes, and for the comments, Martin, Keith, and Moon,girl. much appreciated as always, I was unsure of this one for the obvious reasons, but it worked out.
thanks again JD.
Comment is about "Judge Not Lest You Be Judged" (blog)
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Thanks to Nigel, Jordyn. J.D Tom and Clyde for liking
Thanks for you lie and your thoughts they are always appreciated and well measured Keith
Bless you my friend and keep safe
Martin
Comment is about Counting the cost of disbelief (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Thank you Trevor for your comment
I am from receiving into gratitude. ?
Comment is about I Am From Experience Into Expertise (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Some legs are not fit for the full on reveal
Some bodies don't want to completely conceal
Not everyone wants to be seen as too smart
Some people hope to catch eyes and catch hearts
Though most people their edges too frequently hide
Some want to show there's a rebel inside.
And some, to seem like hard-workers by magic,
Lazily buy themselves pre-stressed fabric.
If the holes aren't indecent, far worse on the eyes
Are those wearing waistbands at the crease of their thighs.
Comment is about HOLEY JEANS (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18980)
Sat 2nd Jan 2021 14:16
Guys...you were young once...can you remember your own fashion disasters?
Comment is about HOLEY JEANS (blog)
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I am from reading into admiration. Like this.
Comment is about I Am From Experience Into Expertise (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
So sad, and yet so beautiful.
Comment is about Cause I wanted you to Love me (blog)
Original item by VHH
Absolutely! I look at these 'distressed jeans', and just think - Why!! They're fake blues!!
Buy a new pair, they're probably cheaper anyway. And if you must, wear them until you earn the distress!
Comment is about HOLEY JEANS (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Thanks, Tom. I think he already is. I think the only thing that could sour it is if he left us for another English club.
Comment is about THE LITTLE MASTER 2 (blog)
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<Deleted User> (29585)
Sat 2nd Jan 2021 11:17
Nice tribute John. Let's hope that Harry Kane will be the next Tottenham legend. Come on you Spurs. T ?
Comment is about THE LITTLE MASTER 2 (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
A brilliant poem beautifully constructed. Well done.
Comment is about A New Breath (blog)
Original item by Stephen W Atkinson
Thanks Brian and Graham. When I looked for the picture to accompany this, Graham, there was one of him and Harry Kane together. He looked in a bad way. The curious thing is that I mentally associated myself with Harry who is 45 years my junior rather than that sick old man who is 11 years my senior. (Not that anyone I have ever kicked a ball with would associate me with either!)
Comment is about THE LITTLE MASTER 2 (blog)
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I'm glad that you didn't wait for the Obit that we both know must surely come sooner than later JC.
Jimmy is rightly a legend, from the days when it really meant something.
Its a lovely tribute
Comment is about THE LITTLE MASTER 2 (blog)
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can I just point out
you could say
... mistakes in 'me' grammar
Comment is about Limerick. (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18980)
Fri 1st Jan 2021 22:04
Thank you very much Martin, & as long as I'm not singing it! ?
And thank you Julie, hope you've had a nice Christmas, & all the best for the New Year
Comment is about A New Breath (blog)
Original item by Stephen W Atkinson
Trevor,
This poem takes the words out of my mouth. A poem well articulated which must have a huge following.
Thank you for this
Keith
Comment is about Covid Crap (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Thanks also to everyone who clicked 'Like' for this poem. ?
Comment is about On Being A Phoenix (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
This poem has the ability to take the reader straight into that forest. The hallmark of a true poet.
Thank you for this
Keith
Comment is about scary night sounds (blog)
Original item by Clyde McCulley
Your grammar is perfect so I hope I am safe.
A good humorous poem
Thank you for this
Keith
Comment is about Limerick. (blog)
Original item by branwell kent
Martin,
Thank you for this as it has an insight which I don't think many are conscious of. A clever piece of writing and well laid out. It raised a few issues in my mind and will doubtless have a similar effect on other readers.
Thank you for this
Keith
Comment is about Counting the cost of disbelief (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
I hope you got lots of Christmas cheer
and look forward to reading lots and lots
of your poetry in the new year x
Comment is about Ruth O'Reilly (poet profile)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
A magical Christmas to enjoy
throwing snowballs of love
to both Mums and Dads.
Comment is about Christmas Card Poem 2020 (blog)
Original item by Andy N
A refreshingly honest piece of work witha helping of whimsey about it.
Love it
Comment is about "Judge Not Lest You Be Judged" (blog)
Original item by J.D. Bardo
Thanks for all your likes
Aiva Rifka
Aisha
Stephen
Candice
D.W.Hamilton and
Your Royal Poetess.
Comment is about Ice Breaker (blog)
Original item by Nigel Astell
There is only one King of Kings for us to follow.
Comment is about Game changer (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
I agree with Keith with this one. Marvellous poem. Also for me it has all the hallmarks of a song the way it it is paced. perhaps a folk song
Love it
Happy new year
Comment is about A New Breath (blog)
Original item by Stephen W Atkinson
Love it Ian. Sounds like a good album. All the best with it my friend and a Happy new year to you. Hopefully our paths my cross later in the year if live venues open up again before 2022
Cheers
Martin
Comment is about NEW ALBUM: 'Crow Lore' by THE CROWS OF ALBION (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Fabulous Bob. Happy new year too you
Comment is about Lucky Ones (blog)
Original item by Robert C Gaulke
Excellent stuff Ray. there are times that we can be both enthused and weighed down by the words that we write.
Comment is about NO ESCAPE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Wishing you a happy new year.
Comment is about JANUARY THE FIRST (blog)
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Hi J.D. Candice & Aviva - Thanks for your comments. Thanks for like Stephen Happy New Year to U4. T ??
Comment is about 2021 - Bring It On (blog)
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Well written and hopeful M.C. Happy New Year. T??
Comment is about JANUARY THE FIRST (blog)
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John Andrew Nield
Sun 3rd Jan 2021 00:24
Thanks for your kind comments, Keith.
I do tend to steer away from blank verse as the challenge for me is to express myself within the more traditional rhyming and metrical confines.
I have, however been moved now and then by the clever wordsmanship ( is that a word?) of some 'non-traditional' variants so I can appreciate the merits of such offerings.
Comment is about 'Rhyme Crime'! (blog)
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