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Robert C Gaulke

Wed 19th Sep 2018 23:49

Thanks!

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 19th Sep 2018 23:15

More than one read required I think

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Martin Elder

Wed 19th Sep 2018 23:00

I love the whole poem but particularly that line
'the sticky edge of sleep and wakefulness'
wonderful stuff but at the risk of showing my ignorance I have to ask what Adirondacks are ?


Nice one

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Martin Elder

Wed 19th Sep 2018 22:55

Wonderful description her Ruby. I was totally able to be there with you in the taxi, metaphorically speaking.


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Phillip Kelly

Wed 19th Sep 2018 22:54

Wow u have similar poetic style themes of lust to me here....yet u do it in a much more effective narrative style ... Combining rhyme wiv free verse.. WOW!!!! I LOVE IT

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Martin Elder

Wed 19th Sep 2018 22:52

I agree with Anya WOW! Rose you have excelled yourself here this must be your best yet.
Fabulous use of words.

Nice one girl

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Martin Elder

Wed 19th Sep 2018 22:50

You have a way with words both in description and directness that is totally individual. Wonderful stuff David
By the way I agree with Keith about Haig.
Nice one

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Phillip Kelly

Wed 19th Sep 2018 22:48

I like the rhythm rhyme and flow in this poem....... But some real powerful imagery....... Like the repetition of eyes shut yet seeing......

My fave line is the powerful metaphorical personification here which is really powerful
"nightmares given a tongue""
.
ove this line too....
"" only murmurs to drown""

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Hugh

Wed 19th Sep 2018 22:46

Definitely a great theme for one of the relationships in a t.v. soap.

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Martin Elder

Wed 19th Sep 2018 22:43

The thing I hate is when a poem comes at the most inopportune time. Usually when I haven't got something to scribble on or I am driving .
Nice poem

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Martin Elder

Wed 19th Sep 2018 22:40

Fabulous poem Darren. Although this would appear to be about disco dancing it puts me in mind of an episode of Steptoe and son where the old man teaches Harold to ballroom dance. The problem being he taught him all the woman's steps. So he went in one direction and she went off in another. marvellous description here


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Colin Hill

Wed 19th Sep 2018 22:39

thanks Martin - I must catch up with your latest when I get a few spare moments. All the very best. Col.

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raypool

Wed 19th Sep 2018 22:38

A sense of frustration at the seeming helplessness which engulfs us. It seems strange to think Macmillan said: "you've never had it so good." Perhaps things were more egalitarian then but that's a big question and one for more focussed minds than mine. The poem ends optimistically and poses that big question.
A deserved poem for POTW, congratulations Janey.

Ray

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Martin Elder

Wed 19th Sep 2018 22:36

I always look forward to reading your work Robert and this piece doesn't let you down in any way.

Nice one

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Martin Elder

Wed 19th Sep 2018 22:35

That reads and sounds to be like a sonnet. very eloquently written. Love it

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Martin Elder

Wed 19th Sep 2018 22:33

Sounds like the words to a song that you may have written here John. But you are right about the state of somebody's heart that says so much about them.

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raypool

Wed 19th Sep 2018 22:32

Excellent scene setting and sense of poignancy and it seems a tale of lost love. A nice sense of lingering, bittersweet . Lovely poem Martin.

Ray

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Martin Elder

Wed 19th Sep 2018 22:15

Fabulous performance Becky. I know what you mean about trying to rhyme it seems to slip into my poems most of the time whether I like it or not.I think you have summed it all up. Its not about whether it rhymes or not it is indeed about keeping it real

beautiful poem

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Hugh

Wed 19th Sep 2018 22:15

A brilliant performance by Becky Who,
Transmitting rhyming techniques for us to do.
Up there on stage you definitely did shine,
Capturing our attention with every single line.
Well done.

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Martin Elder

Wed 19th Sep 2018 22:06

Beautifully put Col. I love the attention to detail regarding the calf skin gloves whilst interweaving the whole piece with imagery of trees.

Nice one mate

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Anya

Wed 19th Sep 2018 21:34

Hi there,

Thank you so much for reading and commenting on this poem. It is a very personal one.

I’ve been having rides on an emotional rollercoaster lately. Trying to keep things together but falling apart. The girl in the mirror is my vulnerability which I am strongly trying to avoid...

This poem is the result.

Hope it makes sense.

😘😘😘

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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 19th Sep 2018 21:26

Hi Becky, you describe so well how it is to be a poet who rhymes. It is just the way it comes to us like an internal rhyming metronome. All emotion can be expressed in rhyme effectively. As you say when dealing with emotion the important thing is to keep it real. Thank you Becky well said..Taylor πŸ’–

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kJ Walker

Wed 19th Sep 2018 20:48

Nice one. I can usually guess the punchline, but this one had me.πŸ‘

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Hazel ettridge

Wed 19th Sep 2018 20:35

I relieved my celebrations as the desperate often do - such brilliance!

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Wed 19th Sep 2018 20:26

Hello, Martin! Thank you so much for commenting on my poem. Much appreciated. With warmest wishes, Larisa

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Wolfgar Miere

Wed 19th Sep 2018 20:22

Thanks Ray,

I am considering a visit to Beirut next year, I hope it happens.

"He's just a human being"

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9E4J7EoUPS0

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raypool

Wed 19th Sep 2018 20:07

Thanks Graham. Still seeking- I think your poem about France may be near them.

Cheers Taylor; yes indeed.

Hannah, I must admit I get some weird ideas - good for getting the brainbox into gear!. Thanks.


Very kind Big Sal thanks.


Over to Mrs May on that one David. You make a salient point about confinement and seclusion - similarly would some of the visionaries of olden times had religious experiences perhaps.

Anya and Darren, thanks for the likes.


Thank you all !


Ray

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keith jeffries

Wed 19th Sep 2018 19:38

Darren.
Honesty and humour abound in this poem. I love the line, Β¨we gyrated around like an unrestrained spin dryer on its last legs Β¨.
Billiant and thank for this
Keith

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Jane Briganti

Wed 19th Sep 2018 18:15

Fantastically Funny!😊

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 19th Sep 2018 18:14

It would be hard to think this autobiographical
but then only the looker knows the truth.
As we age we begin to recognise other faces looking back from the mirror.
We can see there hopes wishes and dreams too, often unfulfilled.
Just recognising them is enough!

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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 19th Sep 2018 16:50

The words gently weave a story, meandering through a wonderful poem. Thank you πŸ˜„

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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 19th Sep 2018 16:48

So true and I am liking the haiku..πŸ˜ƒ

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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 19th Sep 2018 16:45

Welcome back Kate...wonderful imagery..wonderful poem..πŸ’•

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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 19th Sep 2018 16:43

Enjoyed this Ruby another good poem.....x

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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 19th Sep 2018 16:35

I agree with all the comments Rose an exceptional poem beautifully haunting. Thank you πŸ’•

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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 19th Sep 2018 16:31

I wonder too about the girl Anya who is this mysterious girl. Excellent loved it..πŸ’•

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Robert Mann

Wed 19th Sep 2018 16:17

David - you takin t'piss or wot? Aiming a stream of acerbic abuse at public figures through history sounds like a new hobby for you! Laughed so hard I thought my trousers would never dry! Very witty mate - nice to see you're keeping an equilibrium later in life. haha
Rob

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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 19th Sep 2018 16:14

This is so true it hit a cord with me. Always waiting for inspiration...often it comes when least expected...πŸ˜ƒ

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Wolfgar Miere

Wed 19th Sep 2018 16:07

mmmmm thoughtful stuff Raymondo,

After Brexit will we need a visa to visit our states of mind, will they be borderless still?

At least these havens cannot be taken from us.

I think Brian Keenan and Terry Waite could teach us the value of those places of refuge in our deep selves, and the great and healing properties therein.

Lovely.

David.

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Wolfgar Miere

Wed 19th Sep 2018 15:58

Dance like no-one's watching pal, joyous stuff indeed.

I like "fell without landing" its like a never ending story, and feels like a kind of unquestionable commitment to each other, which is lovely though very rare indeed.

David.

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Wolfgar Miere

Wed 19th Sep 2018 15:53

Hi Jon,

Very true and very sad your words describe well how lives are brushed aside, the circumstances of a persons fall from grace of little interest to any passers by.

Whilst reading the verse it struck me that the refuge may as well be the people themselves, bundled into sleeping bags or layers of dirty old clothes, it wouldn't make much difference to whether people showed them any regard.

Last weekend I was in Leeds City Centre, late night and early morning, and the last few days I have been in London late and early. It seems to me that over the past 12 months the number of people living on the streets has again become much more evident. Mostly the local authorities discuss moving them on and harassing them whilst it is left to charities to show care and compassion. I don't know the answers, but it make me very angry and very sad.

Good thoughtful words Jon,

David.

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Brian Maryon

Wed 19th Sep 2018 15:28

Question is...were you looking in or was she looking out?

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Big Sal

Wed 19th Sep 2018 15:17

I used to work with my brother as a repo/clean-up crew for people that had lost their homes in a subdivision in my town. This one lady got pissed off at me because I was filling up the dumpster of the neighborhood (which itself was rented by management), and not once did anyone nearby give a shit what had happened to the family inside. Self-preservation is the first law I guess, but as an aside, no one helps others self preserve unless there's something in it for them.

Just a thought.

Great piece Jon.πŸ‘

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Big Sal

Wed 19th Sep 2018 15:11

I promised my wife our vow renewal ceremonies would progressively get better than our wedding until she could get the day she had always wanted. In hindsight, I may have bit off more than I could chew. Oh well. Shit happens when you party naked!

Great piece Rose.πŸ‘

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Big Sal

Wed 19th Sep 2018 15:06

Thanks for reading people. Taylor - glad I could pay it forward.😁

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raypool

Wed 19th Sep 2018 15:04

A winning combination of the droll and the ascerbic, while the acid and informative audio comment had me laughing.
You're absolutely right of course. We should show some respect even if it is only in retrospect. Cyclists please note.
Top stuff.

Incidentally there was a class of loco called Lord Nelson, and I have been on the footplate of the eponymous engine. Born 1926. I wrote a short poem about it. Should I piss on the poem? Perhaps not.

Ray

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Big Sal

Wed 19th Sep 2018 14:57

Reminds me of a piece from my book. Enjoyable imagery, empathetic in its approach, and evenly distributed word choice, well done on this. The chlorine/sunscreen line really shone bright today, a lot of great lines here.🌷

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Trevor Alexander

Wed 19th Sep 2018 14:50

... and the stars look on as witness. Had to read this one two or three times Rose. Lovely.

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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 19th Sep 2018 14:25

Always enjoy your poems Hugh..πŸ˜‚

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Darren J Beaney

Wed 19th Sep 2018 14:25

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