An event which is physically manifest in our bodies, marking those born before and after its occurance. In reality it was the test dates in the desert which are detectable in the bodies of those living at the time and thereafter.
Thank fuck all those thousands died that we might live in peace eh, because that worked.
David
Comment is about Shadowland (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Thanks for the overnight oats to those who sent them.
Just to expand a little on your comment Landi (or my response to it) carlin later distanced himself from his own offerings of solutions by saying in later life that he regarded himself as an observer and recorder of humanity, tbh I think this was a strategic (if honest) attempt on his part to maintain the validity his earlier work. I understand his action and he was a huge voice.
The truth is any artist who truly believes they can impact directly on atrocity might be a little off kilter. What is said may well influence people's positions and their thinking but it won't do much with immediate impact on those suffering violence or abuse or even damage to the planet. That said the slow shift is vital. I am a cynic but do acknowledge cynicism can be a very negative force which on occasion stifles action which could be beneficial to situations requiring more than a shrug of the shoulders.
Balance in everything I guess.
David
PS...Some comics deliver/delivered their comedy poetically, Lenny Bruce, Carlin (a student of Bruce) I would even venture to say Stewart Lee who is probably unknown in the US...and definitely Alexei Sayle.
Comment is about De-Compose (blog)
Original item by David RL Moore
Extremely relatable on many levels, it also made me chuckle. I really enjoyed this. Thank you Mike
Comment is about Flat Packed (blog)
Original item by Mike Horsfall
Thank you for liking my work Holden, I really appreciate it.
Thank you
Comment is about Holden Moncrieff (poet profile)
Original item by Holden Moncrieff
Lol landi,
I wouldn't argue with George Carlin, the man was a genius.
Thanks for popping by.
David.
Comment is about De-Compose (blog)
Original item by David RL Moore
Thank you so much Helene. I agree, writing is a therapy for me as well. It has been helping me with quite a bit. I appreciate the kind words, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Thank you
Comment is about Just Go (blog)
Original item by Evan Tyler
"..a lot of comedians I hear, when they complain about stuff they seem to imply that everything could be alright if we just do this or just do that. I don't care. It's never gonna work--if you think there's a solution, then you're part of the problem. That's what I believe..."
--George Carlin, Late Night With Conan O'Brien, Airdate March 20, 1996
Comment is about De-Compose (blog)
Original item by David RL Moore
Thanks a lot Tim and Stephen for your most generous comments, it means a lot to me.😊
Comment is about A Coachman's Lament (blog)
Original item by Manish
Keep writing Evan! I am 69 years old and writing has been a life-long therapy for me. Getting thoughts, emotions, and observations on the page somehow lifts me up and helps me transcend all the trials and tribulations we face. Love the lines "Talk to the loner. The one that speaks the least has likely observed the most. Eat at that dirty restaurant, the one that has old rings from past patrons resting their drinks on the splashed, soapy, unclean tabletop." Puts the reader right at the scene. Awesome writing!
Comment is about Just Go (blog)
Original item by Evan Tyler
Thanks for the comments, Graham, and Leon, and for the Likes, Steve, Stephen, Tom, Hugh, Manish, and Holden. It means something special to me, to be part of a community arts project in Northumberland!
Comment is about Puffins at Coquet Island (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
"breathe in the peace,
eyes closed, hark to
the conversation of trees
learn their language
exhale."
Lovely lines, Graham. Superbly written.
Comment is about (a2a2d0) The Colour Blue (blog)
Original item by Graham Sherwood
Graham,
Thank you for this poem. The penultimate stanza reminds me of a dell not far from where I lived as a boy which you have so aptly described.
Keith
Comment is about (a2a2d0) The Colour Blue (blog)
Original item by Graham Sherwood
The best water music there is! Leon wonderful
Comment is about CLASSICAL WATER MUSIC (blog)
Original item by leon stolgard
Hi Stephen - Thanks for positive feedback 👍
Thanks for likes - Stephen & Holden 👍
Comment is about Pain Is Pleasure (blog)
Original item by Tom Doolan
Thank you Stephen en offcourse Holden. Love.
Comment is about I sight (blog)
Original item by RudyardK
Reminds me
of my visits to Penmon point Anglesey ( boat trips to Puffin Island )
Comment is about Puffins at Coquet Island (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
People could be forgiven for tiring of angry poetry, I believe they should be. I used to enjoy my angry writing, these days I do not harvest much enjoyment from it because it is as tiring to write as it possibly is to read.
Also angry poetry does not do much by way of bridge building, it serves to voice an opinion and probably reinforces division more than narrowing the gulf. That said it can consolidate solidarity among the like minded.
Bitterness is another perception that anger might portray, this is unfortunate because it is not always the case. I have repeated often John Lydon's chant "anger is an energy" of course it is true, and anger can be harvested for good if manipulated very carefully. Mostly anger is an individual vent utilised to disipate something often damaging to the person venting.
Anger in poetry is a little like using shock tactics for attention, both can become tedious and will turn some readers off...quite often it leaves the author preaching to the choir, what's the point of that?
The alternative to shock and anger can be honesty delivered in a calm mediating manner. The down side of honesty and calm reasoning is that it can lose peoples attention very quickly, it is also in most cases a more convoluted process which many people are unwilling to give their time to. It is not as comedically maliable as anger or shock as a delivery system. I often think the stand up comedian has the best of both worlds in this regard, in one moment he/she can shock and rant in the next he can explain his rationale...short poetic verse is a difficult process by which to convey those emotions simultaneously, leaving the author exposed to accusations of irrational/misplaced anger or purile shock tactics. Of course there are those accomplished writers who have achieved such heights in ability, very few though and certainly none who are new to the art form that I know of.
My apologies for this extended comment, I thought it might be useful to share my own awareness of the limitations (on occasion) of some of the forms/vehicles of expression I use. Also that it doesn't exclusively please me or fill me with feelings of satisfaction.
David.
Comment is about De-Compose (blog)
Original item by David RL Moore
Interesting to note that ten years they've called you back Greg.
Looking forward to many more coastal poems perhaps?
Comment is about Puffins at Coquet Island (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
such a profound and generous comment BS ( and many more gallery fillers of the same standard to come I can assure you ) 👍
ALL liking lads I salute you 👍 X 6
Comment is about In our lost curved ball world (blog)
Original item by leon stolgard
There's real feeling and meaning here, Tim. Excellent poem.
Comment is about Bucket Of Love (blog)
Original item by Tim Higbee
Excellent, Tom. The audio is really well done.
Comment is about Pain Is Pleasure (blog)
Original item by Tom Doolan
Many thanks to Allan Sutherland of Amble Writers for including this poem in his imaginative and collaborative arts project 36 Views of Coquet Island. I wrote it more than 10 years ago, after a family holiday in Northumberland, when I never dreamed that I would eventually live up here
https://allansutherland.substack.com/p/7-to-12-36-views-of-coquet-island
Comment is about Puffins at Coquet Island (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thanks, Stephen & Tom for the encouragement & support. Glad you liked it! 😊
Comment is about The Fields of Avalon (pt 2 & 3) (blog)
Original item by Stephen W Atkinson
Great read, as SA said, love the flow
Comment is about The Eternal Flame (blog)
Original item by R A Porter
You're welcome. I like it so much I downloaded it.
Comment is about Pain Is Pleasure (blog)
Original item by Tom Doolan
so much like my life *chuckle*
Comment is about My fictional past (blog)
Original item by Robert C Gaulke
I think it's quite epic.
If we've made it this far as humans, we surely must come up with solutions for the problems plaguing our planet.
And please don't feel guilty for meating and meat-eating. It's also the joy-of-living.
Comment is about The Eternal Flame (blog)
Original item by R A Porter
Thanks for your feedback & comments Larisa, Bethany & Auracle 👍
Thanks for likes Manish & Hugh 👍
Comment is about Pain Is Pleasure (blog)
Original item by Tom Doolan
Sat 20th Apr 2024 19:56
Very clever Manish. I like how you used the coachman to inject the present into the past as he thinks about his past.
Comment is about A Coachman's Lament (blog)
Original item by Manish
Thank you beth, food for thought indeed. Thanks everybody! Special thanks to Holden!
Comment is about Box 11 (blog)
Original item by RudyardK
Yes, there are plenty of good people beneath dodgy flags.
Thanks for reading, comments and likes folks.
David
Comment is about You can kill some of the people some of the time but you can't kill all of the people all of the time (blog)
Original item by David RL Moore
Thank you so much Keith. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment is about Alien (blog)
Original item by Evan Tyler
There isn't any shortages of masterpieces in your minds gallery Leon-bravo!
Bethany
Comment is about In our lost curved ball world (blog)
Original item by leon stolgard
I'm convinced, that Larisa's lovely poetic comment, says it all.
Great poem Tom.
Bethany
Comment is about Pain Is Pleasure (blog)
Original item by Tom Doolan
Despite all of the available outside help that there is, Connor, my belief is that this ongoing problem of yours, can only, be solved by yourself
the reason for my belief is that no one knows you as much as you know yourself, and that knowing of yourself, is too deep for any stranger to get to the bottom of it.
Good luck with your future, and future relationships.
Bethany
Comment is about Entropy (blog)
Original item by Connor Patrick Barry
So relatably and well written piece, Mike, thank you.
Bethany
Comment is about Night's Embrace (blog)
Original item by Mike Horsfall
Hoping that as many beautifulnesses, as possible, come to the fore as soon as possible, as you all do, without any doubt.
and, in referring to you all, with gratefulness, I'm referring to Stephen Atkinson, Stephen Gospage, Tom, Hugh, Holden, Manish rob, Leon.
Bethany
Comment is about Enhancings (blog)
Original item by Bethany Sallis
Evan,
welcome to Write out Loud. I have been a member of this site since 2017 and it has been a joy to read the poems of others and receive criticisms of one's own work. Hope to read many more of your poems.
Keith
Comment is about Evan Tyler (poet profile)
Original item by Evan Tyler
Evan,
I am sure that this poem lies in the heart of many. A famous man once said that, 'we are in this world, but not of it'. I think these words are very appropriate for your excellent poem.
Thank you,
Keith
Comment is about Alien (blog)
Original item by Evan Tyler
Also flotsam jamming is a dangerous hobby, I've been told.
LOL
Comment is about Not sailing but almost sinking! (blog)
Original item by Rose G. Casserley
strong poem, easy to overlook.
Glad I found it before it disappeared of page!
Comment is about Embrace the Power within !!! (blog)
Original item by Write your mind
It's good Rob. I'm happy with you. Guess what, it's Kevin. 😄
Comment is about Restore the factory settings of my heart (blog)
Original item by Rob Cohen
Thanks for the support Stephen A and Stephen G, Hugh, Larisa, Holden and Landi and for the comments Leon & Keith.
"England is the most class-ridden country under the sun. It is a land of snobbery and privilege, ruled largely by the old and silly."
George Orwell, Why I Write
Comment is about Levelling Up - the undeserving poor (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
yeah it's good. It's pleasurable in a very mellow way. Soothing.
Pleasant
Comment is about Pain Is Pleasure (blog)
Original item by Tom Doolan
keith jeffries
Mon 22nd Apr 2024 09:37
Hello Rich,
Coffee has always intrigued me, especially those who find it an essential morning drink. Many claim it to be a stimulant, but I am unimpressed and find that this beverage has little effect on me. I drink tea in the morning and during the day but would often prefer water, a glass of wine or a fruit juice. I would be interested to know the effect of coffee on you personally. A thought provoking poem.
Thanks,
Keith
Comment is about Coffee the face (blog)
Original item by Rich Brew