Just what I needed today. Love it!
Comment is about Your Time Will Come (blog)
Original item by Jordyn Elizabeth
Thanks for sharing your own experiences Keith and Mark. That throwing technique was like a regular for me too. The sad thing is nobody really deserved it; just a release for frustration coupled with a sneaky sadism, I reckon. An interesting word: insubordinate. It smacks of a pecking order inherent in any old hoary institution.
Of course there were liberties - we were much too cowed to try much on.
Graham, sports for me another terror laden experience. I had a medicine ball thrown at the back of my head once. Hence the poetry probably. Blackout material shorts and unforgiving football boots , cold showers. What's not to like?
Thanks too for your interest Stephen, Aisha and Holden !
Comment is about SCHOOL RITUAL (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thanks for that Aviva. It sounded like a dialect to me, but I wasn't sure.
Comment is about Passing Through (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Thank you Julie for your comment, and basically I created a whole new construct with 'they some' and I don't think it has ever been used that way before, but my muse told me to do it...
For those that don't want extra info, please stop reading this comment at this point (you have been warned! ?)
It is intended to be like an imaginary dialect/vernacular as a grammatically incorrect contraction for 'They are some of them'
The poem arose from those thoughts we have about what other people we see around us might truly be experiencing, at that time I would feel as if everyone must surely be somehow happier and luckier than me, but I wanted to think differently, or rather remember a more accurate perspective. So, the 'They' are the group of people that pass by (in the original inspiration for the construction of this poem) In a looser sense from the original intention I came to see that the group of 'They' doesn't have to be restricted to just those people that pass by.
It is automatic for me when I read this poem for me to consider where I am right now on the rankings of each verse and the poem also in that layer of meaning acts to remind that there is more than one way to be,
There is an alternative or dual interpretation for the phrasing which takes 'They some' to be 'They are sometimes'. In that way it represents that things change and our lives are full of a rich past and we are unlikely to have always been or always be at any level.
The title 'Passing Through' connects to both meanings.
Comment is about Passing Through (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
I like this one Aviva. I am not familiar with the term "they some" so I read each line without the "They" and started with "Some", which worked for me.
Comment is about Passing Through (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Danny,
This poem is raw and brutally honest as you address the inner self and question your deepest feelings. It is also clearly of a spiritually led nature which draws a canopy of hope over all that you have written.
Communication is everything no matter how sinister the truth
And each lie that we told has taken years off our youth.
I was particularly drawn to these two lines.
It is a poem of introspection with a strong underlying spiritual content.
Thank you for this
Keith
Comment is about emotional toxicity (blog)
Original item by Danny Giesbrecht
an old soul like my self us old souls need to lead this planet into an age of compassion love and forgiveness and when u use these weapons we will lead by example for eternity.
Comment is about Die a mortal or Immortal? (blog)
Original item by David
Thank you, that's a very intriguing comment Nigel. It makes me wonder what else words are like. I came up with this...
Words are like wool,
they can be knitted to make
something comforting
Comment is about Passing Through (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
I get your card every year
you never sign your name
but I know who it's from
love from Hooray Hooray x
Comment is about Love Is Forever..... Not Just Valentines Day (blog)
Original item by julie callaghan
Words are like people
they travel everywhere
in poetry they often do.
Comment is about Passing Through (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Thanks for the likes Tom, Dean and Adam.
Comment is about Love Is Forever..... Not Just Valentines Day (blog)
Original item by julie callaghan
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Sun 14th Feb 2021 17:05
Quite likely. I think its ever the first invention. Human interaction and before that a personal interaction of mind and soul.
Thank you for reading the poem.
On quests of lingering soul.
Comment is about old shoes (poet profile)
Original item by old shoes
Thank you for the likes and comments!
I admire your work.
Comment is about keith jeffries (poet profile)
Original item by keith jeffries
Imaginative and fun. Star-crossed still, it seems. ?
Comment is about A Valentine for our time (blog)
Original item by Candi
A pause for applause
In a very good cause.
But watch out for the chap
With a less welcome sort of clap! ?
Comment is about Blue Tinfoil Hats (blog)
Original item by Geoffrey Cheddar
Thanks to Holden Moncrieff and Dawn also for the love. Means tons you have enjoyed this madness also (:
Comment is about Consequences XVI (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Thanks guys as always for the comments. They are great fun doing these little pieces as we are never sure which direction they will be going. The running joke is how many people is Amanda going to kill off tonight or will Zombies appear in it? lol
Comment is about Consequences XVI (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Thank you Aviva and Aisha for the likes
Comment is about Last Summer I Was A Rainbow (blog)
Original item by julie callaghan
Thanks to Brian Stephen Julie Stephen Aviva and Holden for the likes and thanks to Keith for the encouraging comments.
I am glad this evoked some good memories of the past.
Blessings to all
M
Comment is about It were fun (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Brian and Shifa, thank you for your comments.
Keith
Comment is about Grandpa (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Keith
Masterfully done word painting of your Grandpa. I should have liked to know him, but you introduced him here in a deeply living way.
Comment is about Grandpa (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Keith,
Natrun. You capture the bleak nature of this environment. Yes, this is the place of the Desert Fathers. I have been to desert regions like this. Wow, great writing my friend. You capture the inner and outer in a beautiful and troubling blend. Well done.
Thank You for the experience of this poem.
Brian
Comment is about Retreat to Natrun (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Screaming can be heard
they say from the woods
but you can never be sure
could be just
another u f o sighting.
Comment is about Consequences XVI (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Thanks also to those who have clicked 'Like' for this poem. ?
Comment is about Elsewheres And Might Have Beens (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Thanks for your likes
Nazia
Stephen G
Aviva Rifka
Aisha
deanfraser and
Your Royal Poetess.
Comment is about When Cold Nights Just Got Better (blog)
Original item by Nigel Astell
It was always a talking point when getting undressed for PE to see whether that day’s miscreant had had a corporal or a sargeant!
Comment is about SCHOOL RITUAL (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thanks, Attila! You're always a good ally to have on our side!
Comment is about A huge thank-you to everyone that supported our fundraising appeal - you did us proud! (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Keith, many thanks for your eye and ear on this poem. This poem is one of the creations that I like. It speaks to an inner contradiction.
Gratitude,
Brian
Comment is about Since a Warrior (blog)
Original item by Brian Hodgkinson Jr.
Thankyou, Branwell and MC.
I confess that I am such a volunteer and it is, of course, tongue-in-cheek. But you can’t be too careful with the Thought Police who may censor me for inciting people to smack pensioners with a spade in their garden.
And thanks for the Like, Brian, Aisha and Holden.
Comment is about TO BE A VOLUNTEER (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
A tumultuous ride through an exuberant vocabulary which left me breathless with wonder at what I had read.
Thank you
Keith
Comment is about Since a Warrior (blog)
Original item by Brian Hodgkinson Jr.
Stephen,
Thank you for your comment. It is greatly appreciated.
Keith
Comment is about Retreat to Natrun (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Cheers Andy re "Under Broken Masonry" your 'like' is appreciated. ?
Comment is about andy simons (poet profile)
Original item by andy simons
Thanks for the likes Nazia and Stephen G. Thanks for the comments Nigel and Stephen G, glad you liked it.
Comment is about Last Summer I Was A Rainbow (blog)
Original item by julie callaghan
Thank you for your comment Nigel, and the footfall of fate passing will seem especially loud if we haven't even had time to ask, but fate passes still even when we do ask, and although we think the footfall seems softer in truth that's just how we hear it. Is it not?
Thanks also Stephen for your comment, yes, I think sometimes it is best not to know the answers, and after all, what could stop us from knowing how our own past ought to affect us going forwards except unbearable complexity of what even happened and what we might even be able to make happen or ought to want to make happen. And so we create a story for ourselves of what we wish to have felt and wish to feel, do we not?
Or perhaps it is only me.... ?
Actually I'm thinking this is probably only a truth for some, but then that's ok as it does start with the word 'sometimes' ?
Comment is about Elsewheres And Might Have Beens (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Art work by: https://www.desktopbackground.org/wallpaper/akumu-yume-nikki-by-jcm2-on-deviantart-571911
Comment is about 悪夢 | Akumu (blog)
Original item by Your Royal Poetess
Enjoyed this, Keith. You make a detailed, challenging text a pleasure to read.
Comment is about Retreat to Natrun (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Shades of a UK Tom Lehrer - and deliciously enjoyable for that reason. ?
Comment is about TO BE A VOLUNTEER (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Oh yes, this is real poetry. And what a story.
Comment is about Hobo (blog)
Original item by Brian Hodgkinson Jr.
A fine poem culminating in optimism.
Comment is about The Taste of May (blog)
Original item by J.D. Bardo
So many of us must have stood beside the ocean beneath an endless sky and found our minds considering the power and mystery
of the infinite before our eyes. Marvelling and questioning at the
same time at what is yet to be made fully comprehensible to our
limited intellects. The wonder persists and long may it do so for
humanity on its progress to ultimate awareness.
Comment is about Look at the ocean (blog)
Original item by Mahira
Intriguing poem, Aviva. Are there occasions when it is best not to know the answers?
Comment is about Elsewheres And Might Have Beens (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Candi
Mon 15th Feb 2021 15:06
Thank you. Yes it does seem so!
Comment is about A Valentine for our time (blog)
Original item by Candi