Hi Colin - thank you for sharing your thoughts, I'm really interested to read your interpretation. For me, when I wrote this, the subject's mind is whirring away, turmoils of thought preventing them from interacting - which would be just like a printer whirring away. I can see the analogy!
Thanks again for sharing your thoughts.
Rich.
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Hi Keith - you're right, I wrote it with that intention; I'm pleased that you enjoyed it. I had not thought of spontaneity being a remedy - I nearly ended it with something along the lines if "I don't know why I bother" (ie socialising is too traumatic), but I felt this version works better.
Thanks for your kind words.
Rich.
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Thanks for the likes Karen and Col.!
HI David, Good point about Eton - ironically a symbol of British influence throughout the world - open to all comers.
Money of course facilitates benefaction. I'm glad you like this, I felt it may have resonated .
Ferris, I appreciate your interest - I wanted it stripped back almost matter of fact to emphasize the ease of access to a world of privilege. I'll check out the song ! I'm flattered that you think me consistent. That's nice, as I have a wide sphere of interests to write about.
Ray
Comment is about FAMILY PLANNING (blog)
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Lads! lads! lads!
It was a joke!...I was just having a traditional English whack at my Co- Britonians in Scotland, Wales, and (despite my name) Ireland (I missed out the Isle of Man somehow).
(so was the peein` thing)
Where`s your English modesty...(or English sense of humour.? ) ?
Comment is about DON'T MENTION THE ENGLISH! (blog)
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All comments gratefully received and read. Thanks to
everyone giving their views.
There's a readiness to attach "blame" to deeds past (or
even present) to the English identity instead of praise
where it's due, with a blithe tendency to forego the fact
that numerous other lands and their rulers have been
busy acquiring empires/colonies/wealth at the expense
of others just as busily if not as successfully as the
English....perhaps the more civilised "Romans" of recent
times for what has been given to the world in the wake
of the above. We cannot change the past but compared
with the contemporaries of those days, we have no more
to apologise for - and arguablya lot less! Witness how
many still use our language (thanks Keith) and the legacy
of residual "systems" (the law, medicine and railways
anyone?), and choose to come here to live if they can.
My ask is simple; why is the term "English" so
rarely heard in use now? Is there a policy in existence to
"absorb" the identity in the convenient contemporary (more globally acceptable?) appellation: "British"?
Colin - the Cornish have a connection with the Welsh,
and, of course, trade beyond our shores, and have felt
(with some historical justification) ignored by a distant
Parliament and its national considerations when its
people were in need of more direct and deserved help
and attention back in the day. As a Devonian (born),
I can't recall my fair county being so remorselessly discontented, but we had Drake and Gilbert, and a more
easy-going frame of mind to see us through the hard
times of the past. Moaning wasn't at the forefront of
our mental state...more milk and the hope of some honey perhaps? ? But we had pride in being English, I can
tell you that much.
Comment is about DON'T MENTION THE ENGLISH! (blog)
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Fri 25th Aug 2017 12:26
Great writing David.
Invoking the spirit of youth. Thanks.
Comment is about Daydreams and nows (blog)
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Colin and Harry, we may ask where is our culture? We have a language which is incomparable and I say this as someone who speaks Spanish every day, German and Arabic. We have a temprament which no other nation has, one of being calm in the face of adversity. Our writers and poets are world acclaimed as is our inventiveness. We do not need traditional clothing or emblems because we know who we are with supreme confidence. Thanks to all. Keith
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Fri 25th Aug 2017 09:12
lovely bit of writing David. The opening three lines drew me in and I was hooked and mesmerised in your 'diamond splashes' and 'ash-arches of sunlight' all the ways to the finishing line. Fine, fine, fine.
Col.
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Fri 25th Aug 2017 08:48
whether intentional or not this has the look and feel of a continuous printer - the words and data being fed onto those never ending boxes of side perforated paper. I think some of the words used here hint at this: response, actions, controlled, precision, calculated, status, deliver, target, crunch, analysis, capacity. As if the writer is sat in a busy office surrounded by all these computerised machines churning out data, invoices, facts and his own mind and way of thinking has become switched into the same mode of function. I think it's very clever, whether or not my interpretation is correct doesn't really matter. Thanks for posting Rich.
Colin.
Comment is about Divided (blog)
Original item by Rich
This poem captures time, wonderful and thought provoking.
Comment is about John Baylis Post's 'Track' wins Write Out Loud's Milestones competition (article)
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Thanks Patricia! It has been awhile. Tying up loose ends. So glad to be back
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ramy
Fri 25th Aug 2017 01:36
ramy
Fri 25th Aug 2017 01:29
David, you portray well a planet, although far away and link it not only to our own terrestial home but the presence of the divine also. Well crafted. Thank you. Keith
Comment is about From Afar (blog)
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Rich, this poem has a profound quality which speaks of the inner self and the turmoil experienced when inter acting with others. It does not address spontaneity which, although often reckless, can be a release from such a dilema. Well composed and a poem which many will relate to. Thank you. I enjoyed it enormously. Keith
Comment is about Divided (blog)
Original item by Rich
Dave,
I can feel the curdling of the curry in the gut in this.
(mind, if someone steps in to rescue you pray that it`s not the Chinese...they`re buying up everything.)
(great to see you face on the blogs again!)
Comment is about The Great Indian Takeaway (blog)
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David,
The contrast between the splendor`of the beacon` and the glow of the `small blue orb` in that first stanza set up the smooth sort of decorum of the next descriptive three stanzas (how well your word `delicate` fits it)
The last stanza is `fresh` with the humility of a new way of looking, which is enhanced by the `shiver down my spine`
Your poem has certainly conveyed it quietly and beautifully.
Comment is about From Afar (blog)
Original item by David Lindsay
Hear,Hear, M.C.
The sooner we purify our pure English culture
from all the detritus of sporrans, leeks, and shillelaghs the
better.
the other day a foreign- looking guy alongside me in the gents smiled and asked: Eur-a-pean? (I nearly punched him
till I realised that he only was asking was I a peein` ?)
Comment is about DON'T MENTION THE ENGLISH! (blog)
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Heartfelt indeed, MC. Mothercare's the solution. My only embarrassment is when I ask them if they have any maternity trousers with flies in.
Comment is about "WHAT A FUCKING DIET!" (blog)
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You can find many more of my poems here on Write Out Loud or by searching on line for DAVID SUBACCHI.
Comment is about SONNET FOR ROONEY (blog)
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Hello David, A beautiful portrayal of nostalgia with some interesting metaphors. Thank you. Keith
Comment is about Daydreams and nows (blog)
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Done Us Proud
Ugly bug ball not at all!
opening vocal cords to uplifting poetry
turning up volume came the applause
Cheering Oldknow crowd while clapping nonstop
they shouted and lifted their glasses
Stockport you have done us proud!
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Janet Lees
Thu 24th Aug 2017 15:02
Wonderful winning poems, big congratulations all! So happy to be appearing alongside you in the anthology as a shorlistee ? xx
Comment is about John Baylis Post's 'Track' wins Write Out Loud's Milestones competition (article)
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MC. Thank you for this as it is so very true. From experience to be proud of being an English person can even be attributed to being an extremist or a fascist. I find this strange. I am an Englishman and what a gift it is to be as such. Keith
Comment is about DON'T MENTION THE ENGLISH! (blog)
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Heartfelt...well read instead of well fed perhaps?!
"If excess weight you hope to avoid
A guaranteed way is an over-active thyroid!
But - if medical means fail to impress...
Be cruel to be kind and start eating less!"
Comment is about "WHAT A FUCKING DIET!" (blog)
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<Deleted User> (10985)
Thu 24th Aug 2017 09:24
Well done John Baylis and Martha Blue, Stephen Devereux and Caroline Gill. Lovely stuff! : )
Comment is about John Baylis Post's 'Track' wins Write Out Loud's Milestones competition (article)
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Thu 24th Aug 2017 08:28
yes Ray, the second paragraph is all true apart from the family feud. Would make a good spoof comedy or sitcom though don't you think? I was imagining the real Lombardo brothers, Victor and Lebert, chasing our impostor Tony Smith around the country from venue to venue. But as you suggest, I'll keep taking the pills. But maybe it's the pills that are causing these delusions...
Comment is about AN EVENING OUT IN THE 70s (blog)
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elPintor
Thu 24th Aug 2017 04:29
Karen, you are a gem..WoL would be bereft without you.
Rachel
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Anna Scanna
Wed 23rd Aug 2017 23:04
This sounds real - I hope it's not.
Comment is about Sleeping bag (blog)
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Thanks Col. I take it the Al Pierson bit was true though? Keep taking the pills and/or back to the hills. I forgive but I don't forget(only short term stuff). !
Ray
Comment is about AN EVENING OUT IN THE 70s (blog)
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Wed 23rd Aug 2017 20:16
most definitely a great piece of advice Wendy as Rose says-(typo R.C.!) Thank you.Jemima.
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Wed 23rd Aug 2017 20:04
Spoof knowledge Ray. I own up. I made the Tony 'Lombardo' Smith bit up. Hope you can forgive me? ?
Comment is about AN EVENING OUT IN THE 70s (blog)
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Ah thanks everyone, a small and select audience - the doors are locked and no escape!
David What a programme that was. Just to be on there was to be reviled . How society has changed. Mind you, with the likes of Ant and Dec nothing does change I reckon.
Rachel, I am intrigued. I know Dangerfield was in Caddy Shack as an unwelcome golf member; your follow up does have me interested... but don't worry if it's too much trouble. He epitomized Jewish humour as did Jackie Mason,
Cheers Col. You amaze me with your knowledge - I have
The Observers Book of big bands and Lombardo is in there, extant in the 20s but no mention of follow ups. Apparently it was a first rate band as Louis Armstrong was impressed with it in Chicago. My name was conceived out of thin air to give a Latin flavour to the north. I am sadly without ammo for further research, but bow to your own unearthings!
Laura, I quite take your point. Smashing wonderful super lovely etc. This entrenched anti feminine attitude as personified by Andy Capp may have been just the self defensiveness of men for their ineptitude in the face of the real strength and flexibility of women. Not funny anyway.
Mark: The master of that genre was Les Dawson, a funny man and certainly no woman hater as he was happily married twice. A gentleman too and bought musos a drink every time. A salient point about Loose Men. Would it stand up? Would only work with comics I suppose.
Thanks Patricia for your like too!
Love to all Ray
Comment is about AN EVENING OUT IN THE 70s (blog)
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Wish there were more of this quality around. A delight.
Comment is about Cottage Garden (blog)
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I'm right back with those comedians on the TV in those days. Now, the mother-in-law jest is nowhere to be
heard and I'm still waiting for a TV show called "Loose Men"! ?
Comment is about AN EVENING OUT IN THE 70s (blog)
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Love this. Sadness expressed in such carefully chosen detail.
Comment is about Flight (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
I occasionally watch re-runs of Bullseye. Reminds me of how and why I became a feminist!
Comment is about AN EVENING OUT IN THE 70s (blog)
Original item by ray pool
great title Karen.
poem stands up well too.
good write x
Comment is about I Was Born With Too Many Echoes (blog)
Original item by Karen Ankers
the splitting of the last two lines away from the rest of the piece is masterful.
excellent write x
Comment is about Siren (blog)
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Wed 23rd Aug 2017 12:02
Thank you for your comment David. Hope your having a perfect day
Comment is about Away from the sun (blog)
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Albert, thank you for this poem which caught my attention and brought to mind the person of Stephen Wiltshire. His childhood was highly problematic but now a famous world renowned artist. Keith
Comment is about The Boy Who Seldom Speaks (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Wed 23rd Aug 2017 09:31
an oldie but goodie Karen. Great title.
Comment is about I Was Born With Too Many Echoes (blog)
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I just thought this was beautiful Desmond, thank you for posting, you've set my day up perfectly. David
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Wed 23rd Aug 2017 09:05
I seem to be following Keith's trail of comments and agreeing with him. Thought provoking indeed. Thanks for posting. Colin.
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kimafia Jones
Fri 25th Aug 2017 22:45
thanks guys..... I'm happy you enjoyed it.....trying to write more hopefully you enjoy what I'm going to share in the near future.... every comment you guys give a bit of encouragement for me...thanks again Kim and Collin
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