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From Afar

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Saturn's rings shine in splendor 
beacons of beauty in endless space
and glimpsed beyond, amongst the darkness
a small blue orb glows with grace

She's dancing there in sheer perfection
elegant, charming, and oh so small
No blemishes in her complexion
A simple magic azure ball

From afar we see no features 
From afar we see no scars
No hurt, no pain, no peaks, no valleys
Just a hint of blue among the stars

All our planet with all its wonder
its worries, woes and majesty
is seen waltzing on along her orbit
A delicate home for humanity

Way out here, there's fresh perspective
which sends a shiver down my spine;
that Earth is small and I am smaller
That's humbling and yet divine

◄ A Seaside Scene

A Northern Greeting ►

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Harry O'Neill

Sat 26th Aug 2017 12:01

David,
I`ve come back to this after realising how well the picture - with it`s contrast of size - reflects so well the actual poem.

The poem includes the `scars`...`hurt`...and `pain` of the Earth but the contrast indeed `perspectives` it into something `humbling` and yet `divine`

It is all done by distancing into perspective.

The picture reflects (rather than competes) with the poem
perfectly.

I think what I`m trying to `get at` is the way the poem tells that: in time (distance) suffering fades.

ramy

Fri 25th Aug 2017 01:29

Juxtaposition well done.

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keith jeffries

Thu 24th Aug 2017 23:05

David, you portray well a planet, although far away and link it not only to our own terrestial home but the presence of the divine also. Well crafted. Thank you. Keith

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 24th Aug 2017 22:22

David,
The contrast between the splendor`of the beacon` and the glow of the `small blue orb` in that first stanza set up the smooth sort of decorum of the next descriptive three stanzas (how well your word `delicate` fits it)

The last stanza is `fresh` with the humility of a new way of looking, which is enhanced by the `shiver down my spine`

Your poem has certainly conveyed it quietly and beautifully.

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