When she smiles, that's me at peace,

My favourite line Martin :)

Pehaps if you complete a few like the one above you will then be able to attempt one that is true to you..?

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You could play with that first line, lots couldn't you?..it would change the whole perspective of the read with say a Should it be
the plan of man..this little one got me to thinking.. :)

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Because of the title..arghh...all I can think of now is vodka ginger ice and lime...Think this is a fiesty write..smashin stuff.. :)

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Clever twist Terry..brought a wry smile to my face.

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Isobel. I have just been reading charlottes page and noticed a comment you made there...
do you know what? form the experience of the manic depressive condition/bi polar personality...i can honestly say that living with the so called 'sane' sometimes unbearable, never mind difficult.
sometimes like existing in flatline.
I am attracted to most my friends by their range of emotion, depth of empathy and understanding, capacity for excitement and generally enriching experience as people who make the world real to me. I dont look at the condition/label, i forget the name of it, get it mixed with the others for I care less about it than for the love my friends and the need/want for their presence in my life.
mainly the sane bore me to death and their blinkered vision makes me laugh.
living with anyone is difficult, life is difficult x

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The idea was smart and the execution just beautiful

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Isobel - perhaps I should write
"Is it not the plan for Man..." :-)
M.C.

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thanks for your comments on 'kiss me...'. will look up m. piercy :)

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aha xD don't worry about it.

I'm manic depressive - i wouldn't want my girlfriend to go cheating on me or hitting me. Everyone has different perspectives on the whole affair and my opinion is that he did drive her to it.

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Hi lynn, thank you for your comments on the poetry i have written. I very much appreciate all comments be they good or bad, they can only make me a better writer. I have placed Harlequins Meditation back in the blogs for you, and you can find it here;

http://writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=25080

Thank you once again Lynn,

Much love to you and yours

noetic-fret!

xxx

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brilliant!!

re the last two lines-are they meant to imply
the t-coloured-t giving you a slap
or vice-versa?

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Original item by Martin Nelson

dennis'cat

much like ma pal fae new york
i watch the buffoonery of ma ane hong kong fooner he
hae a bit maer wit tho fae shooer.

gnasher ma braer
black and spiked
little fellar
an accomplice
a clyde to his bon.

i get nae cred
for keeping them oot o tha gaol
but soo wit?

a cat's life is ne'er
maer than aloof


haha apologies to any real scots readers...this was my attempt at an irvine welsh style stab at the Dundee dialect of which my only experience was witnessing big nasty bar fight and waiting at hospital for friends to come out after the fact.
Dennis the Menace was created and written in Dundee. Little hard knock ;)
also based on time spent living in Glasgow and travelling in scotland this accent might be a bit skewed ;p

bring back hong kong fooey, dennis and the late great cartoons of my youth!!

hope you like stella, im waiting for batman :)

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haha i like your point isobel. the personal detachment has allowed a great flow and gentle humour.

julians comments - absolutely. i believe the art of poetry is to channel the subconscious inspiration. i am a follower of C. Jung and regard his theories on the psychological relationship with the collective subconscious and his work on archetype to be both fascinating and real for me.

applied to poetry and writing/arts in general Jung sates the gift of the artsist to be a connection and a vehicle, a medium almost (but not in spooky ghost way :)x

i always recommend the book 'women who run with the wolves' Clarissa Pinkola Estes, as a great example of Jungian psychological analysis of writing, particularly for the female experience. Its all about fairy tales x smashing read.

'artifice' - indeed it cannnot be faked Julian x crafting is something i m much better at if i let go, as stella has here.

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Am being nosey and commenting on your comments re Ted Hughes. I don't really think anyone can judge another for sure without knowing them personally. Films and media can portray things in skewed lights. I imagine living with a manic depressive would be very difficult, to say the least. I don't think it's a crime to fall out of love, either. I would tend to judge a person on how they treated their kids, mind. That is a completely different relationship. It can be made difficult when people separate though. The kids and the ex partner can become a package that not all people can unwrap.

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And now, on reflection, I'm thinking that he needs to work on his calf muscles.

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That is a very hideous body. I'm not sure why he bothered with the red underpants. It couldn't really get any worse or better for that matter. Quite why men do this to themselves, I've no idea, since I've never met a woman who likes it...

A fun idea for a poem Larisa - you prefer to fuck brains - so that's where I've been going wrong! LOL x

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Thanks Peter :)

Sylvia Plath is wonderful, i'm a massive fan. i'm not a fan of her husband, partly because i just don't like his poetry, and partly because i believe he contributed to her suicide.

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She sounded like my kind of woman until we hit the racism...

I found the poem hard to get into, like Steve. I like the lines that people have picked out already.

I don't think of it as a political poem - more of one commenting on society and changing values.

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No, it's not :(

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In my view, and experience, good writing tends to operate at two levels, the conscious and the subconscious. We cannot always know what we are writing until we have written it; and even then not be sure.
I would go further and say that those who try to craft subconscious consciously - the clever beggars - risk having the result smacking of artifice.
Well done with this stellar piece, Stella.

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I'm with Rachel on this one. I think it's great when poets can move beyond their own realm of experience and write on different themes. I think if this had been based on personal experience a little more anger would have come through, which might have spoiled it. Then we'd all be saying 'Aww poor Adolf - look what he had to put up with' ;

It was great to hear this performed last night. x

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Thanks for the comment on my audio blog entry Lynn. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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i'm not sure i understand what you mean xD

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Charlotte
In response to White Noise I was taking off from your comforting words at the end, "Afterwards, I would coax her out from under the sofa,
Stroke her hair when she would sob.

It’ll be okay, baby,
We’ll be okay." At times I settle for such resolve as in; It's sawright wit me because it's alright already. Always has been, you know what I mean? White noise as a metaphor is very real for me.I hope I have been more clear.
J. Otis

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Just uploaded another poem on Australia Day 2008, and heard of another black death in custody... being Sorry is not enough... we need to change our practices, our words and our hearts...

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Thank you Winston. Just love Write Out Loud! Rose

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thanks everyone for comments, they are inspiring.

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the inherent cleverness is its gift stella x it doesnt matter that you never saw it from outside i believe poetry and the poet can be gifted on a purely subconscious level. i always work back to front, in my art work, dance appraisal/critique and writing. i make, then study. i think its a common method.

ps i think i am unique in having would be fascist grandparents?? who would think?

This is still brilliant and so are you (and slim:) x)

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Hello Lynn
You spotted "A Bloke's Back Brake Block Broke". Is the thumbprint of my doggerel so obvious?
Glad you liked it.

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Aristotelian ethics in a poetic pill!
This poem could have saved me 4 years study!

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Thanks, Greg and Phil.Yeah, Droitwich/ Phoenix, hard to tell them apart really.

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I enjoyed the subject matter as well as the observational conundrums. Nice one.

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Greg nicked my fav bit, so instead I'll plump for 'Of all the days in all the Mays she dies upon the hottest - always inapposite: mini – skirted in her forties, wearing high-heels and stockings; she had the legs'. Nice one.

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Prophetically speaking I suppose the earth in the wider scheme of things is merely a grain of sand on the beach of some incomprehensible island.

I always enjoy reading this type of poem because it helps me to realise how insignificant we are - mankind has applied his deeper thoughts to these issues since time immemorial. And will until the end of time I guess.

Thanks Noetic, I enjoyed this.

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Hello Greg, many thanks for commenting on 'Evening' and congratulations on your recent poetry recognition.

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A Big Thank You to Mr Dave Gilbey..A Wonderful bass Singer...Dave is a great singer and would grace any event and as one poet said to me' his voice raised the hairs on the back of my neck'....

Thanks a lot Dave and an ex -rugby No2 shirt wearer - the same as me!

Graham Robinson - Poets Corner

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Hello Charlotte. I agree with Scott there is indeed a lot going on in your poems. There seems to be a busyness in them, more than is spoken by the words alone. I look forward to seeing more of your work.

By the way, I like Sylvia Plath but not in the usual way as I find her work very hard to digest. I don't understand what she is saying at all. Which is strange as I'm an ardent fan of both her husband and daughter.

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Chris Coey (seen above as Guest Poet at 'Poets Corner')
on the 18th October 2011...
A Muti-Award winning Poet!
Am proud to call him my friend and thank you Chris for a great job at the opening night at 'Glassfire'....
you are welcome back as you would grace the stage at any event!

Thank You - Graham Robinson -
Poets Corner at Glassfire..a great night 3rd Tues in the month!

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David Costello (above) joint winner at 'Poets Corner'
David also co-hosts both The Liver Bards and New Brighton Bards with Steve Regan.
He gives a touch of 'poetic class to any event'

You are welcome back any time David -

Graham Robinson
Poets Corner.

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Intriguing piece.
Who is feeding off who? I need to call the window cleaner and then still won't see the point.

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This is really good, Michael, I enjoyed.

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Good to see you back Michael with some thought provoking poetry, you read them really well. Do you still have the Harlequin, I would love to hear it again if you wouldn't mind reposting it? Thanks, Lynn xx

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Wow! I really enjoyed this, Chris, so well done.

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Love it, John! I saw the title under recent comments and just knew it had to be yours! (Perhaps the bloke's broke back brake block should join Ken Dodd's Dad's dead dog??!!)

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Original item by John Coopey

Ok folks :)

Because I appreciate all the positive replies that this write has given me I feel I just have to say something about it..I feel as a fraud might do because when thinking about this and it did take me some time to finish, I never for one moment gave thought that it may be read on a more personal level..and to me that is so very shallow..I have no idea why I did not give thought to others interpretations, so when I read such replies I feel a bit small, (wish it was slim) for it appears far more clever than it actually is...anyways felt I had to say that.. :)

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Isobel...ta for the great comments on my Hitler poem..I have changed that expendable drasticly to requisite and it holds far more punch...now to a confession...I am going to shove it up on my blog, mainly because I do not feel the poem deserves such praise from a well respected poetess as yourself :)

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p.s. I doubt the wife would have been expendable. People like that feed off control and they need someone weaker than themselves to do that.

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Brilliant poem Stella. I'm glad it's not biographical for you. Living with Hitler would be the most soul breaking thing imaginable.

There is so much to like in here. The fact that you only really have a glimpse of the wife. That lovely line about ash falling like snow and all the grey, disturbing connotations that brings with it, mentally and pyhysically. I liked the bit about the sheets too - you wouldn't think it possible to get humour in a poem of this nature but when you put the control freak in a domestic environment, it's there. Only funny to those on the outside though.

I loved this. x

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oi! where's my picture? :P

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Hi Stella, thank God indeed. I should have grabbed a recent book which takes us through the final stages of the war - although I do know of at least one other person I work with who used a similar title as a metaphor for a personal experience.

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