Ray,
about those last six lines of this...As an ex union negotiator I`m a little bit mystified by the intransigence of the rail unions about the present upset...I keep getting the feeling that there is something deeper involved.
I sometimes wonder if there is something in the offing...
for instance: there is much talk of driver-less cars around
and - given the congestion on the road - the mind boggles at the mere possibility....But given that trains run on very
predictable rails on predictable routes at predictable times -
they would seem (in this age of the data revolution) that they could be prime candidates for the driverless transport
age...I wonder?
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Hi Raj thankyou for your comments it's taken a long time but after a lifetime of being quiet seeing sleaze and listening to it i have found my voice at last . Regards Wendy .
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Yes, 'garbage' is harsh. I still have a thick layer of last Autumn's leaves covering the garden and they are more like a de-constructed duvet for whatever lies beneath than garbage.
Comment is about Autumn Leaves (blog)
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Thanks Colin, I'm getting there.
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Sun 19th Feb 2017 13:31
cuddling calm sounds lovely ? I always take something away from reading your poems Raj.
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Sun 19th Feb 2017 13:15
enjoyed this first time around and good to read again as POTW.
My attention was caught by the picture of the sea and together with the title made me think of Malaysia Airlines flight 370 that disappeared in 2014. The Australians played a key role in trying to locate the missing plane as I am sure you will be well aware of living in Perth.
I read it again and re-imagined how each stanza could be applied to that tragedy. Some worked and some didn't but it was interesting nonetheless.
Congrats on POTW Chris. All the best,
Colin
Comment is about 'Lost' by Chris Hubbard is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
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I make this your first blog Barry! definitely worth the wait.
Comment is about Turntable (blog)
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Ah! yes the beauteous fragility of the middle order collapse.
Comment is about JOHN COOPEY (R.I.P) (blog)
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Graham - how I envy those people for whom weekends are a time of stress-free relaxation instead of tribal hypertension. Roll on the cricket season!
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Thanks gentlemen, I really appreciate you reading and for making comments/suggestions.
Thanks Old Shoes, I must try that approach, my God, just think...I'd have so much time on my hands ?
Thanks Raj, wise words (now you've got me thinking about G+T) ?
Thanks Col, for shedding light on the problem ?
Paul
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And song thrushes are a bit gamey for my palate!
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JC you won't be saying that when we vanquish the mighty Fulham 4-3 after a replay and extra time!
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Thank you for stopping by and reading my pieces. I really appreciate it. Your writing is fantastic ? I see you are not here long on WOL, I hope you stick around and remain active. I look forward to reading more of your writing in the future. ??
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Was a good read, great rhythm
Comment is about 'Lost' by Chris Hubbard is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
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If there is one good reason to run POTW it is to be given the opportunity to read great poems that you missed when they were originally posted/and or you had forgotten.
I must look at WOL ten times a day for new member/moderation purposes but still managed to miss this.
There are too many good lines in this to single one out.
Well done Chris
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Enjoyed this one very much, Ray. Rattles along, even if the trains don't.
Comment is about PLATFORM ANNOUNCEMENTS (blog)
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MC - No chance. Those bastards have blighted my life; they're not blighting my death.
Colin - That's one for your record.
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Sun 19th Feb 2017 09:21
<Deleted User> (13762)
Sun 19th Feb 2017 09:19
well done for posting this Aviral. Good luck with your writing ?
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Sun 19th Feb 2017 09:15
excellent, spot on Ray and ditto Paul's comments. Every time I see ASLEF's Tosh McDonald I think ASLAN in The Lion, The Witch and The Wardrobe.
Comment is about PLATFORM ANNOUNCEMENTS (blog)
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Enjoy the journey Paul not the destination.
Be the inspirational artist and the craftsman rolled into one.
And hey, the perfectionist always has a reward -- another G&T?
Good work.
Raj
Comment is about write, edit, re-write, write, edit, re-write (blog)
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Getting back to the poem.
It was a well written, beautifully moving testament to your much loved uncle.
We all owe a great debt of gratitude to the likes of him, and we must "never forget".
Kevin.
Comment is about ANOTHER VALENTINE (blog)
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no, no, no, you just write once then edit once. no need for to much care, just move on to the next one, eventually a gem will come along. maybe, I guess. I'm still trying.
thanks
Old shoes
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yikes! an encore.
once in a blue moon atleast for me.
great job
Old Shoes
Comment is about Sensual rhapsody (blog)
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Hi Harry just been catching up on your recent output via the profile I player, all worthy of special comment.
I missed them first time round.
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Ray, another imaginative piece written with your customary panache. I know I've said it before but, for me, you have a such a unique ability for capturing quintessential aspects of British life....again, very enjoyable.
Aythangyow2
Paul
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Thank you Emer, M.C., John and Ray for reading and for your interesting comments.
I wrote this piece because yesterday morning (Friday) it dawned on me that, over the past 2 months since joining WoL, I have spent so much time writing, editing, re-writing.
And it's true, I keep waking in the night with "the magic word or phrase" that I have to write down because, in the morning I will have zip, zero, zilch recollection of it.
Ray, thank God I'm not the only one scribbling in the dark during the night. It's a skill I'm still learning. Often the next day, I look at the page and see words and phrases written all over each other in an indecipherable mess!
Fellow poets, let's hope the struggle will ultimately be worth it ?
Thanks again, Paul
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Hi MC
Just been catching up with your most recent enjoyable note worthy blogs. On the WOL profiles thinga-ma-jig I player
Ken.
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,A wonderful stream of imagery to coincide with the pondering of a journey in a sort of dream state. This captures the very essence of passive travel where the poetic mind is active.
Ray
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For me it often starts in the morning in the smallest room; i'm never quite sure what's going to come out. As long as the impulse is there though....
Seriously though Paul, I keep a jotter next to the bed and write block capitals in the dark. What seemed brilliant usually looks passe in the light of day ....
Aythangyow. Ray
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Concise pleasing vignette of nature at work set in Man's
modern artificial additions that prevent the intended
absorption and recycling in the soil.
Too often the curious eye perceives
The refuse sweeper binning leaves.
Comment is about Autumn Leaves (blog)
Original item by Hazel ettridge
I'm surprised you haven't found room for a football, signed
by the Spurs team - stuffed with fireworks to explode in
a glorious heavenly "send (him) off" as the flames call time!
Comment is about JOHN COOPEY (R.I.P) (blog)
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Know the feeling - except that much of what I complete
follows lying in my bed with a busy mind creating and
considering (editing?) what comes, knowing a single word
change can affect a line or even a poem. Getting it
"right" can linger on long after the original version and
sometimes I wonder just how many famous poems were
produced that way. It can help the occasional sense of
dissatisfaction and inadequacy.
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The struggle is real. ?
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Thank you very much Mr Hill. All critique and advice is much appreciated.
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Amazing piece of writing. Beautiful ..and your added audio is just perfect, flawless. ?
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Nicola Beckett
Sat 18th Feb 2017 16:04
Keep that stuff coming Stu. Tommy
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Daft as they are alleged to be, sufficiently alert to select a certain genre of victim
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Dear John!
Hi! Hope you are well and the writing is happening! Thanks for your kind words about my work. I like what you say about tone. Thanks. Word choice and tone are inseparable in my work (and in my head when I am writing) and I spend much time researching words and sometimes, particular subjects before I write, only for them to tumble out in ways I did not expect-- that's the muse part of my brain.
But I have my poetic idea-- the beanstalk first, in mind. This quite often includes a form. The time researching dictates how it grows.
World's End is a poem against the odds. I'm glad you like it. (I feel like hugging my son Joshua whenever I read it.) Sometimes, I feel like I am writing the same poem, over and over again.... I feel I have faith. I think, I do. See you soon, in Mold.
Love from, Suzanne X
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Yes it's about time the longest serving dictator ever was dislodged. Can't understand how he's been tolerated for so long presiding atop this overflowed vale of ever increasing tears
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Thank's MC and I'll put that rite
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Sat 18th Feb 2017 09:20
like this lots Maxine - I'm there with you on that beach and gosh it sounds so warm and inviting - but
it had to end didn't it? Which is why you said 'never want this to end' and the title is a memory. So now I'm sad because I too would never want this to end...
but it does.
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Sat 18th Feb 2017 09:15
interesting story Aharon and one that needs sharing. I look forward to reading more of your experiences. Thanks for posting, Colin.
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Thank you, glad you like my poem and thanks for your comments x
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Nice poem. If I can give constructive criticism try revising certain parts that are common such as your line " I fell under your spell." For example instead you could say "enchanting spells put me in a trance."
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Nice poem I love the line "Because I am bound in earthly contract."
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Harry O'Neill
Sun 19th Feb 2017 19:57
John,
Gert...Suttee?...what do you think she`s been saving that mysterious packet of tapers for?
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