Parallel Echoes of Love

In the long small hours of dark                 Through the later time of darkness

I pause and gaze out at the stars              As we lay entwined beneath the moon


Somehow the frosted ground                    The nightly scene now sacred

Sharpens the air and the starlight             Welcomes the soft moonglow


Which lights my very soul:                        Entering both our hearts:

Merciless piercing ivory light                      Soft gentle hunting owl light


Naked, I move across the grass                 Gladdened, we move across the space

Out, to the exact star centre                      On and on, to our close high point


To lie, and stare at heaven                         To lie, and feel our heaven

Crucified                                                   Satisfied


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<Deleted User> (13762)

Wed 15th Nov 2017 13:37

I read them both ways Chris - top marks for taking the time to think it through. I shall take a read of your phone friendly poem later. Col.

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Chris Armstrong

Wed 15th Nov 2017 10:51

Col - I suspect at least part of the problem is that the writing/editing page does not support tabs! The next one should be perfect for your phone!
Thanks for the comments.
I'm curious - did you realise that it could be read column by column as two 'stanza' or as a single 'stanza' with long lines with odd gaps in the middle?

<Deleted User> (13762)

Wed 15th Nov 2017 08:20

A great idea Chris and well executed but I'm afraid it doesn't transfer well to the small screen of a smartphone where the lines get a bit jumbled. It's ok though as I'm reading it on my laptop but I did check my phone out of curiosity. Thanks for posting. I always enjoy poems that play around with formats and ideas. It shows the writer is willing to push their own boundaries. Cheers, Col.

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