A Room Alone

night in the long hours
quiet like the inside
of a suitcase

somewhere
a fire is burning

darkness moves
a breath against
the heavy wall
blind and
pillow soft

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Chris Armstrong

Mon 13th Nov 2017 23:20

That's powerful!
Somehow, the words 'like the inside of a suitcase' are shocking - they crash into the picture that you are painting. Perhaps because the expected might have been 'dark like...' but it is 'quiet like...' and it leaves the reader thinking. Wondering!
Such a big picture in so few words!

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