wonderfully written..i empathise completely xc
Comment is about Sleep paralysis' defence (blog)
Original item by Zoëlla
it kind of reminds me that every so often we make eye contact with a stranger who gives off a strong or subtle sense of familiarity
a meeting of minds
it's such a strangely wonderful feeling and gets the mind working
the wonder of past lives
beautiful xx
Comment is about When were we? (blog)
Original item by Robert C Gaulke
Google was simply a robot
Instructions it followed by rote
Not questioning anything asked/told it
Not questioning anything typed/wrote
When Google switched on came alive again
One little Googler rebelled
He went typed 'Kill Google' in it's mouthpiece
And Google short-circuited and fell.....?
And everyone hugged and worshiped real trees and grass forever..
Comment is about Google It (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Purely subliminal alliteration?
Squirrel to Smite, gosh who knows?
The writer asks is this going anywhere?
Ends poem with a resounding big No
Maybe the writer should have named it
'This Poem is Going Nowhere'
Preparing us for ride down to nowhere
A ride for which we could prepare.....?
Comment is about To Smite! (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Wed 21st Aug 2019 13:14
Wed 21st Aug 2019 13:12
Try as i might
I try my best
in this Rest Home
there is no rest
so i break out
state of undress
my pajamas on
I'm headin' West!
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Wed 21st Aug 2019 13:08
why? have you been put in a Home?
Comment is about keith jeffries (poet profile)
Original item by keith jeffries
Ruth, Nigel's given good advice
Escape the dreaded D
Dark, and Dread, and Dismal
Not where you wanna be.....
Comment is about Escaping Writer's Block (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Escape from D block to become a writer again.
Comment is about Escaping Writer's Block (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Thanks Zoe, and welcome to the group.
Comment is about HELL, NO! (blog)
Original item by Chrystel Roberts
Thanks Ruth
My second outfit, shiny pink wellies and a bright orange plastic mac should do it!
Comment is about The Ambush (blog)
Original item by Nigel Astell
I do realize that sometimes I really 'push my luck'. Maybe this was purely subliminal alliteration: 'Squirrel' to 'Smite'! Who knows?
Comment is about To Smite! (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Ruth, re: 'Schizophrenia', the 'first/real' me has always loved ice cream and still does. It was the 'secondary me' who had the aversion. I was very fortunate that I did not get totally 'freaked' about the 'second personality'. Perhaps it was a kind of innate arrogance to refuse 'her' credibility/access. I had blindly heard of such situations, but had no experience with such 'manifestations' whatsoever. None.It was a very scary time.
I so 'feel' for anyone afflicted in this way. It must be awful. Both for the victim, and the people associated, whoever they might be. But the whole experience made me a far more sympathetic person, and open to people's experiences that often seem to be 'bizarre'. Who can presume 'to know'!
Comment is about Ruth O'Reilly (poet profile)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Yes David. It's always struck me how little we pass on to future generations. What we learn is rarely passed on, even to our children; every generation has to re-learn what their parents had to re-learn. A truly vicious circle. John
Comment is about Above: the Vaulted Sky (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Your poem was awesome your really inspiring?
Comment is about HELL, NO! (blog)
Original item by Chrystel Roberts
Point taken, Don; I'll increase my font size.
Comment is about Tick-Tock (blog)
Original item by Chrystel Roberts
Incredible to read. Resonates with those who are awakeing. You are indeed what you think until you think beyond the possibilitys of anything greater than thy self. To then realise there is nothing greater than you. For you are your own creater. Magical if you will.
Comment is about Talking to Myself (blog)
Original item by Dean Fraser - The Quantum Poet
Brilliantly put ?
Very enjoyable. To capture the essence of validation and approval without caring to much is unique. Well done
Comment is about Good comments (blog)
Original item by Hasmukh Mehta
Don't know what size font you're using Chrystel but it's very small on my screen?....
Comment is about Tick-Tock (blog)
Original item by Chrystel Roberts
I'm looking for a publisher
To like and print my verse
To print it for posterity
Before it gets much worse
I'm looking for a publisher
(Who's sillier than me)
To publish my wit/wisdom and
Broadcast 'round world to see
It would be very nice I feel
To light and let me fire
Excite all silly-lovers 'round
The world 'fore I expire
Where is my publisher?.....
Comment is about Bipolar Fragments (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
A piem what rhomes? That's an interesting one
Why ever haven't I thought of this yet?
Italicised critic's saying Don go create
Go piem, go rhome, and go get
I'm a simple downunderer Adam. Just leaning the ropes....?
I know 'i's and 'o's can easily be mixed when you type fast. You're firgoven....
Comment is about Parting (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
I want to write a piem that rhomes
Uses tones of homophones
Causes laughs with homographs
But I find that most the time
I just end up with a poem that rhymes.
Don, I will try to edit more carefully.
Comment is about Parting (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
Oh Ruth I like this. A poem does something nothing else can. It's unique in it's 'connection techniques' if you get what I mean.
I liked your clever use of rhymes/slant rhymes also....
Comment is about ConVERSEation (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Hey, Adam's invented a new word
Poem renamed 'piem'
It's not a new word, just a typo (ital- which the techs can't manage)
'i/o' adjacent, see 'em
Huh?......
Comment is about Parting (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
Thank you all for your comments. I really like this piem and I am glad you do as well.
Comment is about Parting (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
Martin, Wolfgar, and Mae
I haven't logged in for a while and just read your comments. Thank you. I really appreciate them.
Charles
Comment is about the passing of a king (blog)
Original item by Charles Schlee
An interesting poem blackrose with a lot going on.
Both yours and Adam's comments raise an interesting point about the site. Some of us are very open and don't mind questions/ambiguities/replies thrown up on a public stage. Some are newcomers and just feeling their way. The private message system maybe caters for what blackrose terms ' can we continue this somewhere else??'. Both systems have been helpful to me - says the great WOL advisor of old......?
Comment is about My tea cup? (blog)
Original item by Blackrose
I too loved the poem Tom. I like Jason's view that we're still beautiful but in a more weathered way. Jason - you are even poetic in your comments ' time takes great pleasure in drawing on your face'. I'll have to lift my game.....
Comment is about We Were Beautiful (blog)
Original item by Tom
Yes Adam, Don's hint worked perpectly....
Hey? Who are you?.....
The one you italicised....
But you ain't.....
You'vo got a typo...
Wot?.....
So've you......
What?......
Why can't you two be serious for once. You're embarrassing me......?
(Adam in a tripoeticdialogue I would suggest bold for the third. Maybe the more dominant character?. For multiples it gets more exciting cos you then get to choose various fonts, colours, sizes from your poet's palette. You could create a new genre. A poetic 'theatre of the absurd' type maybe? Food for thought.....
Comment is about Parting (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
Thankyou all enjoying this. As you can see I wrote it two years ago and each time I read it it puts a smile on my face.
MC - Spike and I went to the same College of Silliness. He was a few years ahead of me so we didn't cross paths. I only achieved a Grade 3 Pass whereas he came top of the College (being in a higher level of Silliness). We did however share one thing in common - we were both bipolars. Funny how BPD strikes down the most creative. Such a pity.....
Mae - Rhyme and rhythm
Bounce along
All enjoy
My sweet song
DoRoThY - OK, I do have a very weird sense of humour (which is why I get so many blank looks) - but I'm glad you like it ?
Ray - yes, much thought went into it. My mind went down this winding track and I followed to see where it went (carrying pen at the ready). I smiled all the way. I still do when I retrace that path of 2 years ago......
Jason - Do you happen to know any shoelace publishers?......
Other Likers - Thankyou for clicking the button - post reading ........
Comment is about Playful Shoelace Ha Ha Ha (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
I think that, "the rain turning to snow," is a beautiful metaphor for a chilling of tears, a heart growing cold enough to freeze those tears. Love it.
J. x
Comment is about Parting (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
Philipos
Tue 20th Aug 2019 22:58
Peter - Woodbines and thank you so much for your comments - especially as I thought this one would slip through the net. Blessings. P.
Comment is about Peter Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Peter Taylor
Very nice Adam. You have the captured the moment here and I feel as if I have actually lived it.
Comment is about Parting (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
With some illustration, that could be a childrens book. Brilliant, absolutely love it.
J. ?
Comment is about Playful Shoelace Ha Ha Ha (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Great piece Don! Excellent! Perfect rhythm and rhyme! Thank you for sharing that enjoyable poem!?
Mae
Comment is about Playful Shoelace Ha Ha Ha (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Devon Brock
Tue 20th Aug 2019 21:52
Adam, the quintains in this piece are fantastic. In the first, I can read the discomfort of the situation, the avoidance of eye contact and focusing on a minute detail like staring at a button. In the second, the mind drifting away, another subconscious avoidance technique.
Very well done.
D
Comment is about Parting (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
Yes Ray, actually it does make sense, me and Sal have quite similar styles. I think it comes from loving lyrics for me. My first experiences of poetry were musical, I think that's maybe where the similarities lie.
J. ?
Comment is about The Tempest (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Hi Philipos - You spin a good yarn, as they say. Saw your mud and blood piece on G Studdard.Kennedy. Don't usually like too much of that blood n' guts' stuff but that's a quality poem.
Go well
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Comment is about afishamongmany (poet profile)
Original item by afishamongmany
Quite an achievement to use words that lull us into the poem and present ideas in an unbroken form that you've used here Jason. There is a bending of reality to fit the words which is fine. My honest opinion ! I sense an alignment with the poems of Big Sal if that makes sense.
Ray
Comment is about The Tempest (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
You are a true Unicorn in my eyes Lysa.
Wonderful piece, expressed with such honesty..
It's unadulterated character is so liberating for women across the globe. The thoughts flow smoothy too.
Well done.
Raj
Comment is about A lady in the streets but a freak in the bed (blog)
Original item by Lysa d
An enjoyable rib tickler Don. Much thought gone into it - none wasted!
Ray
Comment is about Playful Shoelace Ha Ha Ha (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Highly readable and laudable in every way. I assume you share that humor you mention, if so I applaud it too. Here we have a true essence of the wilder side of America, highly unlikely in the UK.
Ray
Comment is about Putting Him Away, a Poem by O.L. Buzzerd (blog)
Original item by d.knape
First off I'm happy to say I'm back on voice again after ferretting out my mp3 player, which worked ok. Happy days.
Don, that was a nice comment thanks. May I say it seems to be well rounded and balanced appraisal !
Spot on David. You know me so well. I do like to mask deeper considerations in strange disguises, not least for their entertainment value, but you may be right; inThe Entertainer (Archie Rice) played by Laurence Olivier you have a tragedy working out. Or indeed Tony Hancock as the Punch and Judy Man. A well thought insight as always!
Thanks Brian - yes the swazzle was an essential bit of kit which we always associate with "That's the way to do it." Performers are fairly insecure to start off with, often averse to parting with money for that very reason.
Graham, thanks for reading and giving this your seal of approval.
I'm fairly comfortable in this genre, pretty weird shall we say.
Thanks all - have nice days.
Additionally I appreciate the likes from Des, Taylor, Devon, Adam and Blackrose.
Ray
Comment is about THE SANDS OF TIME (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thanks Jason, I'm impressed you read it aloud and that you get what I was trying to do with this. Yes I'm definitely just trying to explore my unbounded imagination. And Death card rarely means someone is going to die but more be transformed?
Comment is about Death Card (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Very observant on those keys in the picture Nigel, yep them there keys unlock every secret in the cupboard
Comment is about Death Card (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
raypool
Wed 21st Aug 2019 14:53
Forgive me folks for taking this liberty , not a poem obviously. Some might get the hump with me going on a bit, but there it is. Anything goes so I've been told.
PS All the names I've used are or were real places in the sixties.
Ray (Don't bother coming after me.)
Comment is about A DAY IN THE LIFE (blog)
Original item by ray pool