I really like this Mike...
Though I knew it was concrete before the last verse...

Am I missing something?
Not sure this last verse fits with the rest...

'It is the birth of boys trained
To go to war, it is the death of vision
And start of television stare and dare
I say;
It is concrete, not made for ‘us’ at all.'

Comment is about Enemy (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Proud to be a mixed-up, who-the-hell-cares-where-my-ancestors-came-from-or-what-colour-they-were, mongrel too!
Cx

Comment is about British, Not Pure (blog)

Original item by Simon Rennie

@winston : thanks for reading had a look at your poems too enjoyed them :)

@andy n : yeah sure was fun writing them way back in 2007 especailly the sat nav one ;)hehe

Comment is about JEFF.W (poet profile)

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thank you. x

Comment is about present is the moment (blog)

John, I am really pleased we have found a mutual appreciation in each others work. Keep posting. see you soon. Winston

Comment is about John Darwin (poet profile)

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Yes - I agree with Francine - death is pretty final but life goes on. I like the unsentimental way you handle the subject.

Comment is about present is the moment (blog)

I was really touched by your comments in Stockport, the way you came and sat next to me and said all those nice things about my work...it is very heart warming and I look forward to having a longer conversation next time about culture :-)

Comment is about Cate (poet profile)

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Mr. Page, beyond its excellent poetic craftsmanship, I found this poem very thought-provoking. The prior comments are great. In addition, I appreciated the juxtaposition of the structured 'story events' (where cause and effect are strictly organized, manipulated, to create the ultimate desired 'effect') with the real world situations where cause and effect are multiple choice.

Comment is about READING P. D. JAMES IN SAN FRANCISCO (article)

Winston, Decree Ni'si is so striking I can't get it out of my head since I heard you perform it last week. Wonderful. I wish I had written it....

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

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You have captured the moment beautifully Emily...

Comment is about present is the moment (blog)

I find these words said so romantic...

“When we have lost,
All our meanings, and resolved
All our mysteries, we will be alone,
Together, on an empty shore."

Comment is about Alcyone (blog)

Beautiful poem Cate - how could anyone not be touched by the wonder of new life .

Comment is about For Isla (blog)

Original item by Cate

This is beautiful...

Comment is about For Isla (blog)

Original item by Cate

Hi Marianne, I believe things are settling. lol. I have read this poem several times and each time something new breaks the surface. It never quite lets you in and doesnt allow things to settle. I think it is in your choice of combinations of words and phrases which jag around. eg just when you are settling down to a lullaby, paint splashes back on her body. It has an etherial almost sci-fi feel to me at times which Im struggling to explain in my words. Maybe your word are all we need to do this? Winston

Comment is about Thousand Machine (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Georgie Porgie starts his antics in the playground, and revisits us throughout our adult life it seems to me Joan. We just have to learn to recognise him in his different guises!!
Very succinctly put!!

Comment is about Playground Games (blog)

Hi Winston,
many thanks for posting a comment about 'Performance', my first blog. Enjoying your work,

Sam

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

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Sorry I didn't make it to the Bards last night - I did try ever so hard but had a catalogue of disasters. The M58 being closed at Orrell was the final straw. Will try to make it next month. Hope you all had a good night.
Isobel x

Comment is about Steve Regan (poet profile)

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Hi Andy,
i like this one.
It shows an insecurity and yet the character knows really that they are worth more and deserve better.

Janet.x

Comment is about Wish (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Hi John,
i can see a lot of me in this poem.
Although i do have self worth these days. :-)

I'll be buying the book by the way.
Janet Ramsden.x

Comment is about The Fool Who Ate The Gruel (blog)

Original item by John Togher

Whoever thought Chemistry could be so poetic, love a bit of H20 myself, essential for life!

Comment is about Norman Hadley (poet profile)

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Hi Yosh,
sometimes we have to accept the things we cannot change gracefully though! :-)

Janet.x

Comment is about INDIGO WAYS (blog)

Good morning, Antonionioni,
I like the sonnet above. Looking at your website its a pity you dont have a column in one of the national daily papers, it would spice up the news and bring it home.High standard and an enormous output. Great

Comment is about Would you like a haiku? (blog)

Thank-you for reading, and commenting on 'Close' - glad you enjoyed it.
Cx

Comment is about Cate (poet profile)

Original item by Cate

Hi Cate... This is quite a common format of poem. (The list of personal traits). May I say that your poem is a great example. Has a great grittiness and edge. Loved it, the middle section-

Your nightmares repeated.
Your hopes all deleted.
Your sighs half forgotten
Your morning sheets sodden.

I thought particularly original. Winston

Comment is about I am..... (blog)

Original item by Cate

Hi Marianne,this is an amazing piece. I need to let it settle in as there is so much to it. Winston

Comment is about Thousand Machine (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Hi Jeff, Liked the idea of your poem Dad. Keep writing. Winston

Comment is about JEFF.W (poet profile)

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Me gusta mucho esta y me gusta los osos polares y casas de la moneda ..
i like this very much and i like polar bears..and mints.
debz xx

Comment is about Would you like a haiku? (blog)

sí, son amapolas Español,
muchas gracias Gus
Deb xx

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

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I remember you writing all of them, Jeff! Wasn't the tom tom wrote after it nearly drove you into a river? Good to see you on here!

Comment is about JEFF.W (poet profile)

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Thanks for your comment Christine .
I think you may be right about it being a performance poem Steve, I`ll try it out at the Tudor sometime when the mood is right!!

Comment is about I am..... (blog)

Original item by Cate

Hi Steve

glad you like 'here'

steve x

Comment is about Steve Regan (poet profile)

Original item by Steve Regan

well done your stuff is image rich but not sickly which can happen if you use too much.

Comment is about Marianne Daniels (poet profile)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

you have a talent!!!!
you are officially talented!!!!

Comment is about Thousand Machine (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Somewhere deep in a charcoal vein

is a hush and when it seems

that she is losing grip,

the room perfumes,

as warm as the amber

in the throat of wine.

like these lines very much

Comment is about Thousand Machine (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Glad you liked the poem, i adore journal heart attacks, i have a great fondness for twisted writing styles. well done,
have fun,
Jordan xx

Comment is about Marianne Daniels (poet profile)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

NICE,..pop along to wirral ode show poetry night ,thursday 18th june,the stork hotel ,price street birkenshed,,,bout 830 id love to hear that being read....j

Comment is about The Invitation (blog)

Original item by Carol Falaki

Wow, a good'un

Comment is about Would you like a haiku? (blog)

Awww... I felt the frustration...
Wish you would have recorded an audio for this...
I love the way you express yourself : )

Comment is about I only came to get a pint of milk (blog)

Que tu me fais rire!

'Turn your rubber hand on
And Service me with a thousand of
Your very best Tefal oscillations
Crotchless and bored with the predictable rotations
Of the high speed spin'

Comment is about Robbie and the White goods (blog)

Aha... je vois de plus en plus clairement... : )

Comment is about Poem from a train (pathetic am I) parts 1 & 2 (blog)

Really like this, well done Cate.
Cx

Comment is about I am..... (blog)

Original item by Cate

Like this.
:-)
Cx

Comment is about Would you like a haiku? (blog)

Mike, there are bundles of lines in this that rap and rip like pneumatic drills in tandem!
Steve Smith

Comment is about Crude Oil (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

I write a lot of haikku..and anti-haikku.
This is excellent.Top class.
Steve Smith

Comment is about Would you like a haiku? (blog)

Thanks for commenting on my poem. You wonderful selection of poetry on here - so varied. I have enjoyed the read.

Comment is about Carol Falaki (poet profile)

Original item by Carol Falaki

Many thanks for your comment and welcome Winston - I enjoyed reading your poetry - particularly Ghazal and Revelations. I can also see you have a sense of humour.

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Thanks for your comment George - I like all your poems.

Comment is about George Stanworth (poet profile)

Original item by George Stanworth

Yes - I can identify with this one. Have been at the giving end of many collections and they always seem to wind the bastard idea up just before my birthday - not that I am uncharitable or anything...

Comment is about There's Another Person Leaving (blog)

Original item by George Stanworth

Like the play on words on this one George and i think the rear bites well enough.

Comment is about IT Support (blog)

Original item by George Stanworth

Give a fox a mint
Halitosis go away
Can’t bear you to smell

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