tony sheridan
Mon 11th Feb 2013 19:37
What can I say Pete? Well done! Take care, Tony.
Comment is about Through the Cracks (blog)
Original item by Pete Fisher
tony sheridan
Mon 11th Feb 2013 19:30
Love this Pete!! Spot on!! Take care,Tony.
Comment is about Freedom's Word (blog)
Original item by Pete Fisher
Pete
fantastic piece. I liked it when I read it, but hearing it in your dulcet tones added a world weary lilt to the hopelessness of the situation that was certainly enhanced from simply reading the words.
Great stuff
Ian
Comment is about Through the Cracks (blog)
Original item by Pete Fisher
Today's snow and ice a poignant reminder of that long, hard winter of 1963. Thank you very much for this, Cathy.
Comment is about Sorrow and joy: a pilgrimage to the grave of Sylvia Plath (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Don't let that coffee go cold
Comment is about Extra Hot, Extra Wet, Extra Shot (blog)
Original item by Katy Megan
love is in the air
hearts so true
broken in two
cupid's arrow fires
laughter to tears
if your card
gets sent to
the wrong address
and the one
that you desire
asks have you
got yours yet!
Comment is about Write Out Loud at Stockport on Monday (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Bloody ell Ray, are you trying to get me to spit all over the front row or sommat?! ;D I'll never be able to bloody enunciate that lot!
Re Daily Mail berating - it's a time-honoured thing, like laughing at your own farts. They stay funny, the Daily Mail stays a target. It's rags like that who print this kind of shite - missing them out would just be wrong.
Comment is about Jack's Alright (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
thanks for your comments on 'cacti plant' just when i was thinking it rubbish. there is a lot in there if you get the references but also just a simple write about the very complicated feelings surrounding exes.
Comment is about BT (poet profile)
Original item by BT
haha so THERE you are! Tommy
Comment is about Fran Isherwood (poet profile)
Original item by Fran Isherwood
Wave to me Sylvia- just wave.
Comment is about Remembering and assessing Sylvia Plath, 50 years on (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thanks, Yvonne, Steve.There's been others who didn't get the gist, Steve.
Comment is about When I Was Your Father (blog)
Original item by Ray Miller
Maybe summat like "Feel safe that faith in the Daily Fail." See, I'm programmed for rhyme.
It's apparent that you're referring to the Daily Mail, but in the context of the poem I don't think Fail is working. Also, berating the Daily Mail and its readers has been done to death.
Comment is about Jack's Alright (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Ti erdhe tek une virtualisht,
Si nje parfum dehes...
Dhe une druhesha te merja ere..
Pa ditur se era e dimrit,
Kjo kurve plake..
Do te conte tutje
Ne trishtimin e embel
Te dimrit ithnak
Ndofta shihemi ne pranvere..
Ku i dihet?
Asgje nuk duhet paragjykuar..
Comment is about Leon Qafzezi (poet profile)
Original item by Leon Qafzezi
Jeta ime nje re dhimbje
Qe largohet pafundesisht
Ne bardhesine e kohes
E mbarsur me stuhi
Qe befas ndalet...
Ne funeralin e ererave
Per te hedhur lopaten
E fundit te dheut
Mbi pafytyresine e Kohes!
(Kujtime ne blu)copright,Leon Qafzezi(2013)
Comment is about Leon Qafzezi (poet profile)
Original item by Leon Qafzezi
Mmm I like this too, has a lovely rhythm to it, and manages to evoke the scene in very few lines.
Is there a reason why you have - at the start and end? If it's deliberate, which I think it must be cos it's you, then it suggests missing lines...something unseen, unsaid.
Comment is about Past Midnight (blog)
Original item by Neil Fawcett
Hello lovely :) Hope you're doing okay. Ta for your comments, and yeh, it has been too long. We should get our arses together once hibernation mode is over, eh ;) xxx
Comment is about Rachel Bond (poet profile)
Original item by Rachel Bond
Thanks for reading and taking the time to comment folks.
Ray - yeh, still not sure on slander/ing - works both ways when it's performed tbh. And, it was originally 'facts' but I couldn't enunciate it so well when it came to it, so it got changed to 'true' - still fits with the rhythm though so I can make it work. You use rhyme much more than I do...I tend to fall on rhythm to make a verse work, in tandem with SOME rhyme, for performance poems.
Agree that 'your acts' could be improved on - will have a think on that. 'Daily Fail' stays as it's a spoof on Daily Mail, which I thought would be really clear to people. Is it not?
Chris - aye, the idea of putting those lines there is to kind of forefront the whole idea of propaganda by using several of the 7 categories of propaganda techniques, then using the phrases which match those categories. 'Hard working family/striver' is amongst the glowing/glittering generalities/bandwagon category, and 'skiver/scrounger' is in the bandwagon/name-calling category.
Works extremely well for the govt though, doesn't it, when you consider how many people actually do believe it when they repeat those terms?
Comment is about Jack's Alright (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Where ya gone, Bonny?
I can't fetch up your Profile page.
Anyway, thanks for the comments. I'm not so sure I like the idea of changing a dog's nappy.
Comment is about "PICK IT UP" (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Hello MC
Thanks for your thoughts on "Pick It Up".
Was your sister's dog a shihtzu?
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Hello Izzy,
I certainly agree with you about dog shit of playing fields.
I think:
1st offence - fine
2nd offence - put the dog down
3rd offence - put the owner down.
Hang on! I'm not sure I've thought that through.
"Lots on" = "Watson" - wassamatta with that!!!
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Hello Dave,
Thanks for your thoughts on "Pick It Up". I'm not sure I agree with you that there's a lot less of it about, although if there's the same number of dogs about as there was 20 years ago and there's more people picking it up than there was 20 years ago, there must be less dog shit about (unless dogs are shitting more!).
Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Hello Izzy,
I certainly agree with you about dog shit of playing fields.
I think:
1st offence - fine
2nd offence - put the dog down
3rd offence - put the owner down.
Hang on! I'm not sure I've thought that through.
"Lots on" = "Watson" - wassamatta with that!!!
Comment is about "PICK IT UP" (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Hello Dave,
Thanks for your thoughts on "Pick It Up". I'm not sure I agree with you that there's a lot less of it about, although if there's the same number of dogs about as there was 20 years ago and there's more people picking it up than there was 20 years ago, there must be less dog shit about (unless dogs are shitting more!).
Comment is about "PICK IT UP" (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thanks for your comments, and I'm glad you liked 'Maria en la Roca'. Cheers - David.
Comment is about Ian Whiteley (poet profile)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
<Deleted User> (9882)
Sun 10th Feb 2013 13:30
Thank you Ray - will edit and update - I know what you mean about the "bold" bit, I got stuck there - need to revisit it! Katy
Comment is about Ray Miller (poet profile)
Original item by Ray Miller
<Deleted User> (9882)
Sun 10th Feb 2013 12:02
David
many thanks for your kind comments. I've had a quick look through the rest of your blogs and am liking what i read. in particularly i enjoyed maria en la roca and thought the alternate title was totally appropriate to the piece.
cheers
Ian
Comment is about David Blake (poet profile)
Original item by David Blake
Nice poem. I'd like to see a half-Irish steampunk entrance. That would be summat, but I'd be "awaiting" not anticipating.
hares - not hare's
There's a fine, unforced rhythm except for this line -
Amongst stranger spectators, taking my hand bold
bold is not the word to end this line on.
Comment is about Extra Hot, Extra Wet, Extra Shot (blog)
Original item by Katy Megan
This is not by me - it is by Yvonne. The link to it was broken. I've managed to re-post it so that it can be part of the Cat competition voting
Comment is about The Last Kiss (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Hello again, I just wanted to stop by and say Keep up the amazing writing, I fucking love this, keep em comin. xo
Comment is about cacti plant (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
I like:- 'then his face
appeared less and less except
on telegraph poles and lampposts.'
I think the title is good.
May be you could add the words 'like you' in the penultimate verse:-
'Or else, like you, has just forgotten.
Great poem.
Comment is about When I Was Your Father (blog)
Original item by Ray Miller
Well done JC
I cherish the image of doggies in nappies when they are out.
I asked our local police if taking photos of offending dog with owner would help and they said no might be risky. - well yes if one was overt about it but I wouldn't be asking them to say 'cheese'
Comment is about "PICK IT UP" (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Chris - I don't dispute the point that the Tories were originally the party of the Shires - the old landowning gentry when land meant wealth and influence (no more, I fear!). But there was a distinct sense of noblesse oblige and an increasing acknowledgement of progress and the need to fund the education of new generations- and, importantly, the desire to encourage the INDIVIDUAL and his/her aspirations. I take the view that despite criticism and a belief in their "bad old ways" that lingers on, that it is now Labout (New or otherwise) having "got the foreman's job at last", happily defends its own financial aspirations within shifting definitions of "socialism". "New" Labour seems to have adapted to suit a changed society and "stole" where it suited them. Many well-off folk proudly define themselves as "Labour" and wouldn't vote "Tory" to save their lives. But where are they when the needs of the "brothers" are so publicly promoted and paraded? If the belief is "collective", then why not the actions and expense that the ideology appears to demand? Spread it around!!
Comment is about LABOUR MILLIONAIRES (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
I believe that certain owners actually shrink from the physical act of picking up their dog's mess. Alternatively, leaving it is a snide two-fingers at the rest of us. My sister's dog - a large black poodle called Henri (after the Arsenal player!) has the weird habit of backing his backside halfway up a tree when doo-ing what doggies do when they do their doo-doo. Wiping down the bark of a neighbourhood elm with tissues often invites curious stares! I often wonder if the tree gets any benefit from its unsolicited deposit and might even resent my efforts!
Comment is about "PICK IT UP" (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Steve. No, I don't mind that people find unintended meanings in my poems. Except that I'm aware that this particular poem has been repeatedly misunderstood so it becomes a problem for me. I'd like people to realise that it's a metaphor whilst retaining whatever subtleties are present.Sometimes a mere change of title can do the trick - but not with this one, I fear.
Comment is about When I Was Your Father (blog)
Original item by Ray Miller
I've really enjoyed your work so far Ian. Hope to read more of it soon!
Comment is about Ian Whiteley (poet profile)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Very nice. It sounds like you had fun writing it.
Comment is about The Collector (Roget's Soliloquy) (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Excellent war poem. Great imagery. Kudos, sir.
Comment is about Angel of Mons (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
hi laura, been too long girl! look at your biography list now, you little devil :)
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
god forbid hey?! people losing their jobs everywhere are feeling a sincere sense of putting their 'foot' in it :)
Comment is about Jack's Alright (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
No worries. And no, unfortunately I've never been to the Scillies, but would love to go if given the chance.
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
Original item by Greg Freeman
You capture well the personality change that comes over some men behind the wheel, Graham. Don't often see poems about this sort of thing. I used to be like that driving in London, and enjoyed it. Thankfully I don't have to do it any more.
Comment is about In Cars (blog)
Original item by Graham Clifford
Thanks. It's not really about a cat, metaphor and all that. I've tried 2 other titles for this - Changeling - To A Daughter Whose Name I'm Unsure Of. Dunno what's best.
Comment is about When I Was Your Father (blog)
Original item by Ray Miller
Dogs' bollocks to that Dave - there's tons of it around. Perhaps it depends on where you live. The pavements are bad enough but it really bothers me that some dog owners don't see the need to pick it up in parks and playing fields. Those fields aren't just for dog owners, they are for kids to play footie in.
lots on and Watson - I think you deserve a prize for 'forced' rhyme there John, but given the subject matter, it's quite fitting :)
Comment is about "PICK IT UP" (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Hmm, very, very clever. Plagiarist sets off copycat entries. I hope it's original?
Comment is about The cat, the damselflies, and the deer (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
tony sheridan
Mon 11th Feb 2013 19:45
Love this! More please. I read some of my song lyrics as a poem at open mike nights. A few weeks later I give them the song version. Take care, Tony.
Comment is about Hostile Street (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley