Nice one. I can fully understand the comfort of knowing that there is an escape plan, even though you will probably never need to use it.
Cheers Kevin
Comment is about I Bought A Kayak (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Thanks Don. I did try to avoid any overdone judgments in this poem, as it is really up to the reader to make his or her own. If we get too drawn into the morals of behaviour it just draws fire and then fizzles out in my opinion. You're correct in your analysis, thanks.
HI David. Your take on this is very astute and I would totally agree with it. I'm glad you drew that inference, as it suits the form of the writing which doesn't go anywhere in terms of cures or answers. the insouciance or the couple is way out of my reach thank heavens. Everything should be potential, however frustrated.
Hi Kate, your comment is a nice surprise, as from it you have drawn your own conclusions and made comparisons. Of course I wanted to show opposites, but I feel they have a grotesque quality which I like to portray in poetry!
Thanks all for your wise and close appraisals.
Especially thanks to Rachel Jon and Devon for your welcome reading.
Ray
Comment is about HOW THE OTHER HALF LIVE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Rachel
I always love the fact that your poetry make the reader think rather than just swallow up a whole load of words. Great poem proving there is so much creativity in science.
Nice one
Comment is about elucidate (blog)
Original item by nunya
Real men get into paradise, don't you know.
Comment is about Twisting the Hermenuetic Turn (blog)
Original item by Randy Horton
Brian - you'll have to pull yourself together (or let yourself go) - thanks...
Don, I'm up a creek without a boat - Don comes by to check what I wrote, his approbation makes it float. (It should be shit creek but it doesn't sound right).
Lisa, thank you - I do get you and the fact that rage can be let loose or not according to the drinker. Most often murders are committed under the shadow of the bottle. Then again a tiny minority. Where is this going? All the best to you!
Ray
Comment is about THE CURSE OF A NON DRINKER (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Just wanted to say thank you for liking Devon, Emma, Dorothy and Ruth.
J. x
Comment is about I Bought A Kayak (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
To each sound of music your poetry sings.
Comment is about Poetic Pianist (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Him
Only if once you have seen my latest emuji
which is much better of my large cucumber!
Comment is about Mixed Messages (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Thank you j. Your words of encouragement are always welcome x
Comment is about Mind over matter (blog)
Original item by Lysa d
Fox hiding in sox
Heard the flackers in sack
And said what a good fox am I
Cos I haven't wriggled in and mucked up their fun
Am I a red fox or a grey fox?
WOL Riddle Master where are you?
Comment is about Black Jack (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
You inspired me to write Aspirations of a a refugee.Thankyou
Comment is about Hope Springs Eternal (blog)
Original item by Chrystel Roberts
Leon
I know. You've still got your treasured beads and bells in the bedroom drawer. And I also know that when the full moon shines you don said treasures, sit bare-foot cross-legged on the floor and dream of Woostock. Was that you I saw cavorting naked in the mud? ....
Comment is about All These Aging Hippies (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Very clever Ruth. I'm lost for words. Would a tomato do?.......
Comment is about Mixed Messages (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
I've often thought it's funny how as you go through life from childhood to old age, you go through stages of knowing nothing, to thinking you've got it all sussed to eventually realising that you really haven't.
Shades of grey are all there are, and an open mind is the best we can do.
Really liked this Lisa.
J. x
Comment is about Mind over matter (blog)
Original item by Lysa d
Yep, it does pay to look emojis up if you don't know what they mean?.
J. x
Comment is about Mixed Messages (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
The 'Poet in Training' label was not in jest. I only started writing two years ago and felt I hadn't earned the title of 'Poet' at that stage. At the bottom of my work I would always put:
I want to create And I want to share
I then found WOL and now feel happy to be called a 'poet'. Albeit an offbeat and skewed one. Not screwed.
Comment is about Poet in Training 2017 (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Ruth this is very crafty ❤
A real insight into today's dating world.
Great job x
Comment is about Mixed Messages (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
<Deleted User> (17847)
Thu 5th Sep 2019 12:24
at least we ( say's old hippy moi ) lived through one of the yet to be bettered eras
while I live on with love, peace, beads and bells echoing in my purple hazed head, I 'll leave you to your environmentally damaging now.
go easy bro-be cool man!
Comment is about All These Aging Hippies (blog)
Original item by d.knape
One day ' the tsunami will take you where you want to go. If you don't take time for yourself , the universe will make sure it happens. And safely it shall ❤
Comment is about I Bought A Kayak (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Spot on Keith ❤
Thank you kindly for your comment.
It's quiet easy for someone to only see the black and white in life. But once you introduce the grey into your vision; it's clear to see we all struggle.
And every struggle is indeed the same. It may not appear that way ' but the emoctions behind the struggles are felt by all
Comment is about Mind over matter (blog)
Original item by Lysa d
<Deleted User> (17847)
Thu 5th Sep 2019 12:16
oh! that soulful elusive utopia Keith, could it be this heaven we keep hearing about, being promised?
Beautifully written. Cheers.
LS.
Comment is about A Spiritual Home (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
You may have wrote this as a poetry trainee
Now 2 year have passed...
You've got your WOL Degree?
Comment is about Poet in Training 2017 (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Well Don thank you so much, and Lisa I am definitely humbled by your comments, thank you also my friend. I've been the proud owner of an inflatable kayak, (Quite a good one), for about three years now. I have inflated it once, and once only, in the living room, to make sure everything was ok. It was.
I then deflated it and packed it away ready for, "The big trip."
This obviously never came, and nor has it yet.
But maybe, one day.......
J. x
Comment is about I Bought A Kayak (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Hi Jennifer. It's always a nice event when you drop by. You could be right about that but Americanisms are so ingrained that it's hard to see the trees for the wood.. whoops.
Ray x
Comment is about A DAY IN THE LIFE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Lysa,
Words truly spoken which are well phrased to encourage us all. The line, "while others seem to have it easy" are good but in reality people often use camouflage to conceal their difficulties. We are all on a roller coaster of highs and lows.
A good poem and thank you
Keith
Comment is about Mind over matter (blog)
Original item by Lysa d
Thu 5th Sep 2019 11:20
the poem was just about
how some people do not change,
live in the past
right down to the same clothes etc.
Woodstock is the little yellow bird in Charley Brown-
wink.
PEACE.
Comment is about Don Matthews (poet profile)
Original item by Don Matthews
Thu 5th Sep 2019 11:13
The poem was just about how
some people do not change
that's all.
thanks for the flower though.
I wear it proudly.
?
Comment is about Ruth O'Reilly (poet profile)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Thanks Jennifer! That all makes sense of course. A trap was a fanciful term for the necessity to conform which he happily complied with. The phrase stuck in the past comes to mind but then we all have our favourites. He never wore jeans and mum never wore trousers!
Ray
Comment is about MY FATHER WALKS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
you provide us with laughter regularly . Never dim your shine ❤
Keep them coming
Comment is about Poet in Training 2017 (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
I hardly feel qualified to comment on this John . I believe all perversions of human nature can be examined in retrospect but the Holocaust stands alone in terms of the sheer scale and secrecy at the time. I have read widely on the subject. I found Primo Levi's personal account perhaps the most moving and of course the Hitchcock's film too so ghastly.
You have struck a rich seam of truth about the compliance of ordinary people .like the mass beliefs that can dominate acquiescence. Perhaps persuasion and fear can go side by side.
Your poem is successful for me for its ability to examine without emotional overload and an inspiration . If nothing else we have to be wary of ideology as delusion.
With respect Ray
Comment is about Final solution (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Thankyou Lisa.
I'm a mixed bag when all is said and done. My serious and comic always fight to be centre stage. It's I who holds the key to the stage door.
I have always fought for humour to be more a part of WOL. We all need it to brighten our day.
Comment is about Poet in Training 2017 (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Your very welcome chrystal. It was a plesure to read x
Comment is about Lysa d (poet profile)
Original item by Lysa d
Your sence of humour is needed
in more ways than one
So stop scratching your ballowx
And get those poems done
You tend to make me giggle
During which I tend to wiggle
Laughing so hard
I'm hungry
Where the f is my bagal
Been a silly git
Requires a level of wit
And you don Matthew's
You sure do have it ?
It's all fun and games
Until you get serious
Then we're left wondering
Has don gone mysterious
Your poems are always a pleasure to read
Some take time
Others require speed
But when you make us laugh
Sure that's all anyone really needs
So please
Keep them coming
Were waiting anxiously ?
Comment is about Poet in Training 2017 (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
My eyes have just been opened wide
Crushed testicles will not let you
Into the Lord's assembly
(And cut off penis too)
(Deuteronomy 23:1 NRSV)
Comment is about Twisting the Hermenuetic Turn (blog)
Original item by Randy Horton
Wow friend.
This is by far the best poem I have had the privilege of reading since joining WOL.
The flow flew effortlessly ' the verses wore empowering and very much heartfelt.
To know one has the choice of alone time amongst the chaos of life is fulfilling enough.
One human can not be stretched so far without feeling defeated.
This is truly remarkable and was needed today. Your poem has started my flame once again. Thank you for sharing your beautiful talent x
Comment is about I Bought A Kayak (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
It's something I would not wish upon those I have no time for.
Thank you for reading and placing your self in unfamiliar ground in order to understand. Very much appreciated don ❤
Comment is about Time is precious (blog)
Original item by Lysa d
The only people who can fully understand what you went through are those who experienced the same thing. I can only empathize and try to imagine .. Even then I fall way off the mark.
Comment is about Time is precious (blog)
Original item by Lysa d
Jason
All I can say is this is very, very clever.
Comment is about I Bought A Kayak (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
I am a novice poet
Trying to learn the ropes
My friend said it will drive me nuts
How am I gonna cope?
Began my new-rope learning
In two-o-seventeen
I now can rhyme my it with git
Great progress this has been
Major leap.....
Backwards......
Go home. ?
Comment is about Poet in Training 2017 (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Yes, I think we've all got that probably never to be realised escape plan. It's probably more important for what it represents than what it actually is. For me it's the idea of peacefully drifting on the waters.
J. x
Comment is about I Bought A Kayak (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Vautaw. Thank you so much for your comment. Its a tough thing to face head on for sure ?
Love and light my friend x
Comment is about Time is precious (blog)
Original item by Lysa d
It's a thought that has never crossed my mind don ?
But the debt of my poem runs deep. Until you experience similar, you could never understand the raw emotions that hit you harder than a speeding train whom lost it's brakes.
It's a whirlpool of absolute numbness.
Anger is one emoction I felt deeply. I was so angry and heartbroken that I allowed the blame game to win over facts.
At 30 to have one parent left , to then be frightful of loosing another as you witness doctors not wanting to try other forms of medical use , it's just the chemo they want to continuously pump her vains with , you sit and watch them disintegrate rapidly at such speed to hold there hand as they scream crying telling you they can't go trew with another round. You see fear and sadness and the helpless feeling takes over leaving no room for anything eles in your mind other than a new treatment. And as you try and try to help more and more you notice how reluctant the doctors are to even try. ??
Comment is about Time is precious (blog)
Original item by Lysa d
<Deleted User> (18980)
Thu 5th Sep 2019 07:35
Good optimism Chrystel. Too many people are fearful of what the future might hold.
Comment is about Hope Springs Eternal (blog)
Original item by Chrystel Roberts
<Deleted User> (18980)
Thu 5th Sep 2019 07:32
Hi Jason...I like the idea of being comforted by the knowledge that it is there. Dust-covered bicycles in garages perform a similar function.
Comment is about I Bought A Kayak (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Keith,
'Hope....where is the origin of this source?'
I had the opportunity to meet a refugee who had fled into Zambia from the DRC. Apart from her life, she had lost literally everything -including her children who were brutally slain due to so-called Ethnic-cleansing.
That woman epitomized the resilience of the human spirit: the ability to retain hope in the most hopeless of situations.
In my opinion, hope is an intrinsic human quality which lends much credibility to belief in a Creator, as opposed to the Evolution theory.
Keith, Lisa and Vautaw, I appreciate your comments, guys!
Comment is about Hope Springs Eternal (blog)
Original item by Chrystel Roberts
Very, very skillfully written. Very, very keenly observed and very, very deeply felt. Just beautiful in a painful sort of way.
J. x
Comment is about To Know Her (blog)
Original item by Sarah Mae
I've read a few love lost poems over the years and God knows I've experienced the feelings, most if I'm honest, I didn't really like a I think perhaps they either weren't subtle enough or, they were so subtle they didn't connect. This one though, for me, was perfect, like being softly punched into submission. Sometimes I say, "Favourite line was..." but singling out a favourite line in this poem would be to do the others a disservice, I really loved every well crafted, well balanced line. Not over embellished, not underwritten, not too flouncy, not too stark. Just about perfect, I think.
J. x
Comment is about numb (blog)
Original item by Sarah Mae
One thing I am so grateful for in life is that cancer has not struck me. It seems to strike people out of nowhere. With no warning. We all live from day to day with this 'possibility' hanging over our heads. One can't worry and let it get us down. We can only empathise and support when needed.
I wonder how many deaths were caused by cancer before we knew all about it?
Comment is about Time is precious (blog)
Original item by Lysa d
raypool
Thu 5th Sep 2019 22:19
David - my secret is that initiation was a puny affair , my dad trying to get me to take to it, me failing somewhat , but thriving in the beard department after he tried to shave me leaving sore wheals. He was easily pissed, and so am I . Drink is a very unsteady guide dog for me. But yes, my friend, I do like the dark Guinness and i'll have one much thankee.
Ray.
Comment is about THE CURSE OF A NON DRINKER (blog)
Original item by ray pool