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This Mortal life

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This mortal life

Seems thinner now

 

As we move away from

The old and sick relatives

 

Keep a safe distance

See everyone as a potential disease

 

This moral life

Seems thinner now

 

And in a darkened room, all alone

She sits tapping her fingers ,

Hoping the bell will ring

Or someone will call

 

Her mortal life

Thinner now

Passing away

All alone 

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David R Mellor

Fri 24th Apr 2020 11:56

thanks keith and yes it may be a sad reality

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David R Mellor

Fri 24th Apr 2020 11:55

Thanks raypool for taking the time to comment and its pleasing to read what you said about the poem , thanks

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raypool

Thu 2nd Apr 2020 23:10

A highly charged and powerfully yet constrained account, beautifully read and gives us pause for considered thought. The alteration from mortal to moral and back to mortal brings another layer to the poem, and it's so well constructed that nothing is wasted. It comes to life and never runs out of essence, the sign of a good poem in my opinion.

Easily the best on here I've read in a long time David.

Ray

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keith jeffries

Thu 2nd Apr 2020 16:20

A sad reality I'm afraid.

Keith

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