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Fri 14th Oct 2011 20:01
I knew I must finish or I'd be bereft
Before I made my excuses and left.
Keep 'em coming. This is good for the health.
Comment is about "Imagine my Surprise..." (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Fri 14th Oct 2011 19:57
I look forward to you doing an audio of this, A.
Comment is about Blue Bluest Blue (Series No.2) ( To be read in conjunction with previous poem) (blog)
Original item by Augusta Darling
Fri 14th Oct 2011 19:55
Wossa last yellow word, Ann?
Comment is about apple haiku (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Fri 14th Oct 2011 19:52
You're a wicked man, John Coopey, a wicked, wicked man. Fiona Millicent is brilliant!
Fri 14th Oct 2011 19:51
Even better than the poem with the music.
Is it you playing all the instruments, a group of you or some clever computerised wizardry? Either way it's brilliant.
I posted a poor attempt at a song earlier this year, "Nights in Prestatyn". Not a patch on this though!
Comment is about Daddy Knew Johnny Cash (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Fri 14th Oct 2011 19:35
Hi Neil, glad that you found my words fitted so well with Martin Waters' Artwork. Not sure if its still current but his assemblage pieces were on exhibit in the deep aquarium in hull earlier this year. They are all composed from items found on the beach over a period of time. Things like, bread bag ties, lighters , bottles, gloves plastic doll parts. all collected, sorted and displayed. The effect is actually quite amazing. You can see more on his site at -
click on assemblages to see the pieces.
Comment is about Neil Richards (poet profile)
Original item by Neil Richards
All seems to be well at my end
Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)
Original item by Winston Plowes
Patricia and Stefan Wilde
Fri 14th Oct 2011 18:51
your comments are better than the poem
that honestly made me 'Laugh Out Loud'
Comment is about pitying of a lost soul (blog)
Fri 14th Oct 2011 18:48
I would love to know
how this little belter
got past my usual scrutinizing?
'if only all this were for me'
blimey! how much do you want?
Patricia and Stef.xx
Comment is about Love Games (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Fri 14th Oct 2011 18:47
Yeah, it's nice. I like how slow enough and falling through stand out.I see you live in Worcester. I live in Malvern. Do you do any open mic in these parts?
Comment is about Rain (blog)
Fri 14th Oct 2011 18:41
Great little piece this Neil. I seem to have heard this idea of rain within water before somewhere. Regardless it is a poem deeper than its lines are long as all good poems of this style should be, Win
Fri 14th Oct 2011 18:34
Love it, Stef, lets hope he falls over in looking for himself, and meets himself coming back... Lol. Luv Lynn xxx
Fri 14th Oct 2011 18:26
I just love this witty poem of bird observation, Dave, well written. xx
Comment is about Not a tit at all (blog)
Original item by Dave Carr
Fri 14th Oct 2011 18:00
Mais bien sûr : )
Comment is about Colours of California (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Fri 14th Oct 2011 17:45
inspired by the unwanted presence
of a nuisance neighbour.
as the saying goes-
'you always get one!
Fri 14th Oct 2011 17:12
And great minds think alike..... :-))
Fri 14th Oct 2011 17:08
Sounds like you had a wonderful holiday Dave - and a very inspiring one! A nice idea to use colour to represent your thoughts and experiences.
I like the way you have ended it with nature triumphing over materialism - you can just picture those fish. x
I have to agree with all that has already been said...
Sounds like you had quite an inspiring adventure! Lovely photo too!
Fri 14th Oct 2011 16:53
Enjoyed this Dave! particularly the first three parts.
Nice the way you`ve used the first three colours -the white, the brown, and the green - as the possessors, the replacers, and the prize
in a calm, unracist, manner, and then used the green as a snaring kelp.
Also the way you`ve used the threats to species and the oil to warn against doing the deeds of the previous owners.
And all within a freshly observed, colourful holiday poem!
Fri 14th Oct 2011 16:18
Very kind comments indeed. Many thanks Greg and Steve.
Comment is about SKANKY STREETS. (blog)
Original item by Philipos
Fri 14th Oct 2011 16:16
Great poem Dave - and a good idea to use the colour theme (should it be color?)
Some wonderful descriptions and analogies.
I once got stopped by the police for speeding past a church in Utah. Doesn't get more serious.
Fri 14th Oct 2011 15:39
Many thanks for your comments Laura! X
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Fri 14th Oct 2011 15:13
I have no idea what you mean :-)
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Fri 14th Oct 2011 14:21
Oh nice one Dave..wish I could have heard this and as Laura says some wonderful images..welcome back after what sounds a wonderful holiday .. :)
Fri 14th Oct 2011 14:15
Found your audio of JC. I don't have facility to play it at the moment but will when I get home tonight.
Comment is about A DISTANT HAZE (blog)
Fri 14th Oct 2011 13:44
Terrific poem, Dave; twitching in the wry. Have you got any more comical bird observations up your sleeve? Would make a great collection.
Fri 14th Oct 2011 12:55
To J.C. from M.C. - I don't mind using my fizzog on chuckle-cheek verse...but leave it out for the more serious stuff. I wouldn't
want to upset the mood - or the reader!
Comment is about The Spider (blog)
Fri 14th Oct 2011 12:43
Funny how our feelings can hang on something so
simple as a scent. The smell of wood smoke and
the crackle of burning timber never fades.
John - I uploaded an mp3 of an audio version I
have of DKJC - guess it didn't come off. But it's there to see. I have only just got
Adobe Flash 11 on my own netbook. More B.C.
Fri 14th Oct 2011 12:12
Eh up, rather than keep derailing your fab poem, thought I'd reply here.
Ah no worries re Sat - and deffo see you at the next Tudor mate :) Take care
Comment is about Neil Fawcett (poet profile)
Original item by Neil Fawcett
Fri 14th Oct 2011 12:11
Enjoyed very much.
Incidentally, further to your comment on the word "fizzog", if that's yours at the top of the page I'd take it back. It's been well used!
Fri 14th Oct 2011 12:10
Aww, you had me all choked up last night when you read this. I think you were a little choked yourself too. Beautiful, so poignant. Really well read too John, always a pleasure to see you
Comment is about the day of her leaving (blog)
Fri 14th Oct 2011 12:01
Benvenuti Arianna, it is wonderful to have a Sicilian among us! did you meet Ann Oxley at St. Ives? How did you find out about the website?
I love the Citizen kane poem. As discussed offline, I am not sure that the English translation does justice to your work.
For instance, could 'mentre' better translate as 'when'? and that second line might sound better as
'when three o'clock is about to strike' (no 'the' and 'are' becomes 'is').
Just suggestions of course, to make your work easier for us to comment on.
Comment is about Arianna (poet profile)
Original item by Arianna
Fri 14th Oct 2011 11:48
I only saw him twice, both times at Nottingham Forest.
When he first got the ball he approached Forest's full-back Peter (Mary) Winfield and feinted left, feinted right and feinted left again, only to find Winfield still there from the first feint! He didn't make the same mistake again.
On the second occasion he was earning a crust at the end of his career with Fulham. I left 10 minutes from the end with Fulham leading 2-0 to buy a pair of trousers before the shops shut. As I walked by the Trent I heard the crowd roar 3 times. Forest won 3-2!
Comment is about George Best - football legend (blog)
Fri 14th Oct 2011 11:40
Disagree with Steve. You're very good at this.
I appreciate the technical expertise to rhyme internally in such short lines and stay faithful to the sense.
Keep posting. (Where's the audio?).
Fri 14th Oct 2011 11:34
Hi Ann, thx for commenting on 'fit'. As I have said somewhere, for someone who doesnt know anything about (Or actively avoids) football, you would never guess that these creations came from a match report. Win
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
Fri 14th Oct 2011 11:31
I don't believe you, Dave. You'll be telling me next that Welsh Rabbit is cheese!
I can feel a Discussion coming on.
Fri 14th Oct 2011 11:15
Ah, shades of Steinbeck run through this alongside the many colours. A great idea for a poem, and some wonderful images. Enjoyed this last night.
Fri 14th Oct 2011 11:12
Incredible. Beautiful. Otherworldly. Can't string a sentence together ;)
Comment is about She Changes (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Fri 14th Oct 2011 11:10
Agree with the others, a totally original piece of work with some amazing lines in it...borderline leonine is one of my favourites. Can sympathise...I am also surrounded by people with poor drinking capacities. Can't take Bob anywhere, he gets mashed on one glass of red,for shame.
Comment is about September (blog)
Original item by John Darwin
Fri 14th Oct 2011 11:05
That yellow text is a killer on the eyes Anne.
I much prefer the first haiku
Excellent Dave. Agree with the others re your stuff and the Tudor last night.
I dabble in a bit of incompetent bird-watching and the bearded tit is one bird which has always proved elusive. It's all those reeds it's alleged to hang out in. I don't think it exists, it's all a conspiracy.
Fri 14th Oct 2011 11:03
Simple, pure, and - woodsmoke is my most favourite smell in the whole world, so you get a gold star for that alone :)
Fri 14th Oct 2011 10:47
Hi Greg, thanks for your comments on my recent Woking poem since slightly modified. Am learning more and more about the place with other work I'm doing in the quieter hours. Cheers.
Fri 14th Oct 2011 10:44
Fantastic, I loved this last night. Have been really very down of late, but you and Ian, amongst others, really made me laugh out loud. You don't know how much I needed that!
Sometimes I wish I could write funny, but there's no need, when you do it so well :)
Fri 14th Oct 2011 10:43
Cheers Isobel - was more than a bit cathartic for me that
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Fri 14th Oct 2011 10:14
There should be a dawn chorus all singing "Lovely poem Dave!"
Fri 14th Oct 2011 10:11
Thanks - I have added an alternate version.
Marianne Louise Daniels
Fri 14th Oct 2011 09:07
Remarkable. Had the same reaction as Dave Carr. Don't know what to do with myself now...
Fri 14th Oct 2011 07:56
Blummin hilarious, in true Dave Carr style! This raised more than a titter at the Tudor - you had us laughing like hyenas... xx
Fri 14th Oct 2011 07:53
I really didn't appreciate how good this was till I heard it performed. It's one of those poems you just have to hear. I would say that it is exceptional - for me the best serious poem I heard last night or that I've heard in a long time. x
Comment is about Clear Blue Air (blog)
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