This is great work in my opinion. I live the epic theme, the cadence, everything. I will enjoy rereading many times. I really don't know my poetry forms. Is this a particular form I could look up the rules of as I would like to try to write similarly. Thanks.
A.
Comment is about The Plains of Babylon (blog)
Original item by afishamongmany
I've just seen this chick on a date site
She had a sweet name, it was Ruth
But just when I went to Please Date Me
She hit the delete. Why Ruth? Strewth!
Cos you too far away.......
But we could digitize together?
Comment is about Digital Disappointments (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Hi John - it's my wife who's the real cricket fan but I often watch the highlights. I liked the expression on his face as he saw the finishing line coming up, *maybe*. You capture it good. ><>
Comment is about Ben Stokes (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Lovely piece d.k., beautiful. ><>
Comment is about WHITE HORSES IN A DARKENED FIELD (blog)
Original item by d.knape
I love the language play here and how old fashioned it is, almost like a ballad.
Comment is about Stranger At The Hearth (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Oh I have certainly thought about the light of stars that are perhaps dead and gone. A brilliant poem. I like how this could be taken many ways but you still make it uplifting.
Comment is about Sitting On The Shores (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
How strange, I know this poem as well, but I don't recall where I heard it. Maybe my auntie told it to us when we were small.
Comment is about A Childhood Nonsense Rhyme From Where I Was Born (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
You are too kind dear Jason! Sometimes one can't help but feel somewhat broken...It happens... There can be no light without the dark. Nor can there be poetry without it. if you can call all that poetry!
Thank you my dear friend ?
Mae
Comment is about My Better 3/4 (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Mae, I find it hard to believe that anyone could be the 3/4 to your 1/4.
I think the strength and insight that you express in your writing shows that anyone stood next to you would be hard pressed to be your equal and would receive every bit of effort they put in back in at least equal measure. The true insanity would be for them not to try.
J. x
Comment is about My Better 3/4 (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
<Deleted User> (17847)
Mon 26th Aug 2019 13:44
I,m assuming Adam, that in your particular profession, the best way to tackle any Teacher to pupil misunderstandings is along the lines of what you are more or less saying, connect to their wavelengths while not forgetting to inject a reasonable amount of humour into the proceedings, methinks?
I enjoyed the long poetic ride. Cheers!
Comment is about Safe Space (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
<Deleted User> (17847)
Mon 26th Aug 2019 13:37
Ruth, while mining your mind, if you come across any useful spare pieces, could I have them please? ?
poem? ?
Comment is about Rough Diamond (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
After seeing the recent news re' Brazil deliberately burning down large sections of rainforest it brings these thoughts back to mind, especially for those WOLers from Australia. Video attached is sobering.
Comment is about Hell In a Handcart (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Ah....the old self doubts again....
Comment is about Rough Diamond (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
There is an old Native American saying which says 'the soul would have no rainbows, if the eyes had No tears' . It feels kinda appropriate to this.
Comment is about Tear Up (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
<Deleted User> (22444)
Mon 26th Aug 2019 11:31
Wonderful Adam, I'll bet you are an awesome teacher.
Comment is about Safe Space (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
Someone has asked is this about me? Or about someone else? Or about bipolars in general? This is often the case when I read other peoples work. Are they writing about themselves or someone else?
It's not someone else here. It's me.
Little is understood by the general public about this mental condition. By writing about my condition my aim on WOL is to help remove the stigma. Education is the key.
Comment is about Tear Up (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Devon Brock
Mon 26th Aug 2019 11:16
America's future is in your hands once again, Adam. Now that is activism. Shaping minds in their formative years to love, respect, include and accept is challenging work against the barrage of cultural dysfunction. Godspeed.
D
Comment is about Safe Space (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
Thank you Devon! I love repetitions, they hold such power. I often like to use them, even in prose. I was a little unsure about whether the topic was fitting for a Ghazal but the authentic spirit of the genre just wouldn't come out of me! Yours, though, was spot on! Very well crafted and I liked the size of it, significantly more succinct than mine. I have yet to master the art of saying more by writing less. I also read Jericho Brown's Prison. Brilliant!
Thank you Devon! ?
Mae
Comment is about The Burden of Man- A Ghazal (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Thanks Kate and Adam.
May you all find your purest, whitest light
Comment is about Searching (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
Hi Hugh,
An orange-haired stripper? Must be quite a sideshow...
I particularly like your poem ‘An Attractive Addiction'.
I look forward to reading more of your work.
Comment is about hugh (poet profile)
Original item by hugh
Seattle huh?
home of Antifa mobs & homeless.
by the way, are those sharks behind you
in that photo?
No. It's the loch ness monster. Tourist tripping....
He don't look too gangsterish or homeless to me.
Comment is about d.knape (poet profile)
Original item by d.knape
Sad. But I like it.....
Comment is about Evidence of pain (blog)
Original item by Alta H Mabin (Ally)
"All it takes is a beautiful fake smile to hide an injured soul and they will never notice how broken you really are."
(Robin Williams – actor, committed suicide in a bipolar depression cycle)
Comment is about Darkness and a pretty smile (blog)
Original item by Alta H Mabin (Ally)
Good morning Don,
Not only is my name often mis-spelt, I have the added burden of seeing it shortened to ‘Chris'...such is life!
Enjoy your week
Comment is about Don Matthews (poet profile)
Original item by Don Matthews
Hi Jason,
The word ‘set'! Who would've thought...
Have an awesome week
Comment is about Jason Bayliss (poet profile)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Morning Lisa,
lol, I guess we all learn something new everyday!
Have a great day
Comment is about Lisa C Bassignani (poet profile)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
I oscillate 'tween what to screen
From what I've written, waiting
Comic? Serious? Nonsense verse?
Why am I hesitating?
Something inside me hesitates
Says what will others think?
It's opposite then nudges me
Says care not what they think
So I take opposite's advice. I don't.
Comment is about Tear Up (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
A jumbo airplane ?
Don - You've hit the jackpot! You're correct. Lisa you're runner up.
??? Well blow me down. Wot's a jumbo got to do with a teapot? Or a baseball match for that matter?. Being silly does apparently bring it's prizes Lisa. Go one further and be stoopid can bring you glory. Apparently. Think my stoopidity could bring me POTW? Entry question Don. What's a teapot, lose, April, May and June got in common? (think think mumble mumble) A jumbo airplane ? Yes Don! However did you guess (Yay!)
I'm so stoopid
Yay yay yay
Poem of the week
So they say
I won't pain you with a second verse....?
Kate, Devon, Jason, Fish, Ruth - How come you didn't see jumbo airplane? Staring you in the face. Then of course us Aussies are stoopid. We excel at stoopid riddles. Kate you surprise me......
Comment is about An Annoying Riddle (blog)
Original item by branwell kent
Getting ready for school to start again and after about 30 years of teaching...most with adolescents...i know that my only hope for success is to demonstrate that I am indeed an Ally, no matter what.
Comment is about Safe Space (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
<Deleted User> (22444)
Mon 26th Aug 2019 00:30
Don there is a lot of weird language thrown around the baseball diamond. I don't watch, but some announcers are rather zany...not unlike yourself.?
Comment is about An Annoying Riddle (blog)
Original item by branwell kent
Oh, I do like this Lisa. Why? It's got emotion. It rhymes. It's short and succint. And skillfully written. Well done.....
Comment is about Searching (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
It creeps up slowly...slowly....slowly....gotcha
Comment is about Addiction (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Lisa - if you're taking the plunge out on a limb I'll go even further (and sillier). A jumbo airplane ?
Comment is about An Annoying Riddle (blog)
Original item by branwell kent
I'm going out on a limb here.....A baseball game?
Comment is about An Annoying Riddle (blog)
Original item by branwell kent
Your 'experiment' really got me in Jason. What's going on here I thought. Oft, tis, twixt ? I like the sound of this.
Interestingly it didn't register with me as rhyme despite the use of end rhymes.
Being written on a Sunday I hope the rise and fall of breasts did not lead you astray.
Grab a beer
Cheers ?
Comment is about Stranger At The Hearth (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Like Jason I come back to my original assessment of Bran. "One mixed up poet. You gotta problem Bran"
He's messing with your mind folks. You'll end up silly like me and that would not be nice cos I got a copyright on silliness....?
Comment is about An Annoying Riddle (blog)
Original item by branwell kent
Crystal here
Chrystel there
Crazy English
Everywhere
Spell Don differently. I dare you....?
Donn?.....get lost.
Comment is about English is Greek to me! (blog)
Original item by Chrystel Roberts
Tis my mother tongue and I have to say, me too. Prime example below lifted from guiness world records. I have to say I can't think of more than about 10 definitions.?
"The word with the most meanings in English is the verb 'set', with 430 senses listed in the Second Edition of the Oxford English Dictionary, published in 1989. The word commands the longest entry in the dictionary at 60,000 words, or 326,000 characters."
J. x
Comment is about English is Greek to me! (blog)
Original item by Chrystel Roberts
I hope this happens every day! Trophy hunting pricks!
J. x
Comment is about If Only (blog)
Original item by branwell kent
Honestly, I still prefer my first answer.?
J. x
Comment is about An Annoying Riddle (blog)
Original item by branwell kent
Thank you Avishek, fish, Devon, Julia and Blackrose for liking.
Don't know what took me down this road really, just a fleeting idea of the devil dressed as an old man sat at a tavern fireplace gently leading the world astray. Bit of an experiment really, glad you liked it.
J. x
Comment is about Stranger At The Hearth (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
<Deleted User> (22444)
Sun 25th Aug 2019 22:03
You are so clever Bramwell - on the surface, a flippant piece with a helluva strong message. Well done.
Comment is about If Only (blog)
Original item by branwell kent
This is great, I hope it happens one day
Comment is about If Only (blog)
Original item by branwell kent
Devon Brock
Sun 25th Aug 2019 21:56
Great Ghazal, Mae. I love what you've done with the form. I think you may have discovered the true power of it's repetitions. I read quite a few Ghazals as we each sought to master the form, and I must say, this stands well above most, akin to Jericho Brown's "Prison". Different topic clearly, but equally as weighty. Well worth the wait.
D
Comment is about The Burden of Man- A Ghazal (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
<Deleted User> (22444)
Sun 25th Aug 2019 21:52
I'm still trying to work it out. Brilliant work, it has got me flummoxed.
Comment is about An Annoying Riddle (blog)
Original item by branwell kent
Don Matthews
Mon 26th Aug 2019 15:21
Away from your usual style. Very nicely put dk
Comment is about WHITE HORSES IN A DARKENED FIELD (blog)
Original item by d.knape