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Isobel

Thu 11th Aug 2011 11:04

I see the point you are making Laura. I would like to live in a society that was clean and honest from the top down or bottom up. I'm not sure such a Utopia will ever happen though - it doesn't seem to be human nature. The best we can hope for is a peaceful society in which individual human rights are respected. How we achieve that we will never agree over :-)

I do take some comfort from the fact that cheating politicians have been named and shamed - many forced to resign. The police have made mistakes but are now so scared of making them it almost ties one hand behind their back. The fact that we deal with our transgressions in a public way (sometimes and eventually) probably doesn't help us in that it undermines our confidence in the system. I'm sure much worse goes on in other countries - things that never see the light of day. I do think we take for granted so many good things about this country of ours.

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darren thomas

Thu 11th Aug 2011 10:32

I went to this year's St. Ives Literary Festival and met some interesting, colourful people. They offered me the chance of reading at the Frug later in the evening but unfortunately I was unable to - hope it goes well!

I'll bring the sugar.

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Laura Taylor

Thu 11th Aug 2011 10:08

It's not JUST the bankers Isobel. I am trying to show the bigger picture. The corruption which is endemic in our society now. Brought about by an overarching push towards greed, towards consumerism, to the church of the dollar. These people are above the law. The law is corrupt. Where do we go from here?

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Isobel

Thu 11th Aug 2011 10:02

I'm not disagreeing with you that bad stuff goes on in government, banking - and there will always be the odd bad copper. Our country is no different to any other country in that respect though - in fact probably better than many. Individuals make mistakes - some times large numbers of individuals. We simply can't allow the civil unrest that has just happened to keep on repeating though and holding up bankers as a reason why we should 'understand' these yobs just doesn't cut it for me.

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Laura Taylor

Thu 11th Aug 2011 09:52

Yeh - they have us by the nuts don't they? Exactly. So they get away with vast theft, the police get away with murder, the politicians have more homes than they know what to do with and STILL steal more, meanwhile they keep the courts open all night (unprecedented - oo, and spending your taxes whilst they're at it) to lock up a load of kids who are practising the exact same actions but on a much lower scale. How many shops have been shut due to the recession? Damn sight more than have been over the riots.

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Laura Taylor

Thu 11th Aug 2011 09:48

Fab - I'll have a cup of tea waiting for when you get back then

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 11th Aug 2011 09:42

I'm off to St Ives this afternoon, doing some poems at Cafe Frug at the Arts Centre there tonight(quick plug!) I'll leave the key under the mat!x

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Isobel

Thu 11th Aug 2011 09:40

Bad parenting is a major contributor to the recent chaos, in my opinion of course :-)
In past generations I think there was more parental presence at home and certainly more discipline in all areas of society - school particularly.

I'd agree that bankers loot and get away with it. Unfortunately for us, our whole ecomomy depends on them - so there is just no getting rid of them. In fact I sometimes wonder if, as a country, we survive mostly on the revenue the City of London brings in. It's not like we manufacture or mine much, is it?

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Laura Taylor

Thu 11th Aug 2011 09:40

I always wanted a horse you know. I'll just cadge a backy off one of those women then I think :D

See you in about 6 hours then chuck - just off to catch the train ;D

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 11th Aug 2011 09:36

Of course you can Laura - just don't bring your horse!

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Laura Taylor

Thu 11th Aug 2011 09:34

Lovely poem Ann - echo all that has been said so far. Felt a deep sense of peace emanating from it. Can I come for me holidays? ;D

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Laura Taylor

Thu 11th Aug 2011 09:31

Thanks folks for reading and taking time to comment.

Dave - do you have that book? Would like to read it.

Cynthia - do you believe that I am condoning what has happened? Your comment about the American seems to imply that. My apologies if I read this wrong. I don't, for the record. I am just attempting to put forward my view, based on the times I have lived through and seen with my own eyes, on the change in the working class community and the consequences of Tory ideology. There was a time when I realised that it was changing, HAD changed, and it actually made me ashamed that these people, who were working class like myself, were behaving in this way, were holding these (to me) offensive and greedy and consumerist values. The whole ethos changed from a cohesive community life, everyone pulling together and looking after each other, to one which rejected that in favour of a ruthless 'every man for himself'. Where we were plunged into deep poverty through govt policy. Jobs gone, affordable housing sold off etc. But I thought long and hard about it, and looked at the bigger picture. I could type out an epic here, but I won't (or have I already?!). I would welcome discussion with you though in another channel.

And yes - absolutely - our entire society is corrupt. All of the authoritative structures are now shown to be corrupt - ALL of them. The police, the govt, the media, the banks etc. And the rich get richer, and the poor get poorer...same old same old.

*steps down from soapbox* ;)

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 11th Aug 2011 09:30

Wow, you are all so nice! Thanks! xx

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Isobel

Thu 11th Aug 2011 09:24

Great observations. The noise they make is very disquieting. I like they way you liken them to us.

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darren thomas

Thu 11th Aug 2011 09:23

I think this is wonderful. It has depth that resonates on every level. :)

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Isobel

Thu 11th Aug 2011 09:20

Great stuff Ann. I really like this one. x

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Val Cook

Thu 11th Aug 2011 07:18

Great poem Ann would love to join you, on your rock someday.

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 11th Aug 2011 06:27

I think this is great!
"pure terror havok and free stuff" sums it up.
"don't tell me what your ancestors did let me guess
intuition and the gift of firey speech" are wonderful lines.

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Francine

Wed 10th Aug 2011 23:54

This is very heartfelt. It is such a sad state of affairs what is going on - not only in the UK, but around the world... : (

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Francine

Wed 10th Aug 2011 23:38

Wonderful observations... They do squeal a lot, but I love the sound because I associate it with lovely, peaceful, fun times at or near the beach : )

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Francine

Wed 10th Aug 2011 23:30

This is incredibly beautiful in its sadness...

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Francine

Wed 10th Aug 2011 23:20

I really love the way you express the ordinary...
Fabulous ending sentiments!
And the photo is stunning!

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 10th Aug 2011 22:43

Ann, you're churning out some really fine work at the minute. Can I have some of what you're on please? Just for the rub, priceless!

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Isobel

Wed 10th Aug 2011 22:40

You've obviously never been to Wigan Daniel. If you were to pay us a visit you'd realise why my poetry was so lovely.... x

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Indigo

Wed 10th Aug 2011 19:40

Checked Google Maps, we're safe and it's back on.

Brilliant news. bring your poems and bring your enthusiasm, we won't let thugs take over the city!

Indigo.

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Indigo

Wed 10th Aug 2011 18:55

I know some areas in the Northern Quarter were attacked, but I'm not sure about Dale Street since the area near the train station was all cordoned off.

I'll be ringing An Outlet first thing tomorrow morning to confirm whether it's safe and will let you know the outcome.

If there was no damage then we're still holding the festival since shops were all open today and I'm not letting a few thugs ruin what we've been planning for months.

With love,
Indigo.

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Wed 10th Aug 2011 18:24

No horse
No dog
No man
Just a poetic mind.

I'd love to hear that song you invented.

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Philipos

Wed 10th Aug 2011 18:12

Hi Cynthia,'One wasp hidden in the gentle petals makes all the blossoms suspect and much joy is lost'

I would argue that this final stanza comes across more powerfully as a proverb because of its pithiness and wisdom of observation plus expression.

If it is a metaphor as well although I cannot see it as such, it may be of lesser metaphorical significance IOM.

That said, I would like to see it argued in other opinions as it is an interesting point. xx

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 10th Aug 2011 17:47

'go like' Attila? Or one of the burial party?

I like the ending - blunt and full of meaning. An interesting subject,this famous figure. I'm very shy of such an attempt. Dave did one on Winston Churchill, if I remember correctly.

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Harry O'Neill

Wed 10th Aug 2011 17:35




Surely not of a nose-bleed!

That guy in the picture is roaring at you to
rhyme the last stanza.

MUSCULAR!

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Harry O'Neill

Wed 10th Aug 2011 17:28




Reverse Ozymandias

The Oblivious ignores oblivion

SHORT AND NEAT JOHN

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 10th Aug 2011 17:19

Some very good points, Laura, and, IMO, some points that need further thought following the immediacy of the recent shock waves. Parts of this poem are too like the enraged American who, on the day of the 9/11 bombing, killed a Sikh gentleman because he wore a turban. But, while you're ranting, take up the whole pervasive, permissive society; the 'rights of children' gone completely amuck; and the total lack of caring about consequences for actions in all structures of society.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 10th Aug 2011 17:05

I like questions in poetry. I'm personally not thrilled with answers. For me, after raising such an interesting premise, the author should stay out of the equation, allowing the reader to participate. the diction and imagery is very good.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 10th Aug 2011 16:57

You are lucky, and the poem is superb. Your very thoughts seem always poetically turned, as you melt into your environment. Your humour is cutting edge; you are a formidable woman.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 10th Aug 2011 16:51

Indigo, are there any concerns about the Friday night venue on Dale Street? Please advise.

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 10th Aug 2011 15:37

I feel so lucky to live where I do. This was my early morning.

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Wed 10th Aug 2011 15:23


very grateful Tom
for your views on my poem
-Crepuscular-

much appreciated.

Stef.

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Wed 10th Aug 2011 15:20


my gratitude Ann
for abiding momentarily(or so)
on 'Biding'
and adressing my(poorly titled)effort
so nicely.

my thanks
and best to thee.

S.W.

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Dave Bradley

Wed 10th Aug 2011 14:50

This isn't great poetry Laura but it's from the heart and I totally agree with it. People think that trying to understand why bad stuff is happening is approving of it. Not so. I've just read 'A Week in December' by Sebastian Faulks. Now there's a book to open up what investment bankers are capable of - their inhumanity and greed. But - as you say - they get away with it.

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Laura Taylor

Wed 10th Aug 2011 14:31

So many images and ideas tumbling round in this. Cracking writing lately chuck!

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Laura Taylor

Wed 10th Aug 2011 14:30

Love this Dave.

To echo earlier comments, I really like those last lines in each stanza, those kind of asides. They really make the structure.

Tempest - 'tost' - made up word?

There's a real sense of shifting moods in this. Can also see parallels with the current
looting.

In fact there's quite a lot of comment on society within this. That kind of head-in-the-sand attitude that surrounds us, that is so
surprised by what has been happening lately.

I love that there are lots of ideas tumbling around in it that are ambiguous. Also - to camp is to make and live in a temporary abode. Very significant title.

Nice one :)

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Laura Taylor

Wed 10th Aug 2011 14:21

Cheers Dave, much appreciated

Kind of topical too, what with the various angles of reportage at the moment :)

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Neil Fawcett

Wed 10th Aug 2011 12:01

Alright John, I've just got your message mate. I'm on me 'olidays and won't be back till thweekend, see you next month though.
Auvoir.
Neil.

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Frances Spurrier

Wed 10th Aug 2011 11:47

Hi Phil. The fact that the whole idea of the struggling writer is a cliche doesn't make it any less true. It's only a few big names that manage to make any sort of a living without teaching or other jobs I think. As you say,it's only specific 'products' that have any market value.

You don't sound to me as though you are losing your marbles although I don't claim any particular qualification in that area! I think you're just exhausted like the rest of us. Don't forget to take a break - preferably with some walking boots on a nice coastal path somewhere - and don't forget society needs its writers and artists - it just doesn't realise that yet.

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John Coopey

Wed 10th Aug 2011 11:05

Pleased you like The Scourge of God Dave.
I tried a different format with an internal (lines 1 and 3) rhyme, but unrhymed outer (2 and 4). Still with a heavy trochaic rhythm.
I do have an interest in all things historic, so I don't suppose Attila will be my last; but no set subjects as yet.
(I do find the very readable and funny An Utterly Impartial History of Britain by John O'Farrell inspirational).
Once again, thanks for commenting.

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John Coopey

Wed 10th Aug 2011 10:59

Alternatively, if it's less trouble (all that damming rivers etc) I'd settle for a Viking send-off. Funeral pyre pushed into the River Aire, floating downstream, archer lets fly a fire arrow and WHOOSH! Up I go.
You must have seen The Vikings with Tony Curtis and Kirk Douglas?

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John Coopey

Wed 10th Aug 2011 09:22

People seem frightened to call a spade a shovel.
They do it cos it's fun and cos no-one stops them.

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John Coopey

Wed 10th Aug 2011 09:18

Never stop singing, H.

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Lizzie

Wed 10th Aug 2011 00:56

Thank-you :)

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Dave Bradley

Tue 9th Aug 2011 23:26

Enjoyed this John. Are you going to try any other historical figures?

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