He’ll be working on the decks with Biggie and Jam Master Jay,
Keeping Tupac off at arm’s length just in case,

This is the only bit that doesn't ring true. Peel enever played any gangster rap in all the time I was an obsessive

Comment is about The Greatest Gig Of All (article)

I'm with Daniel on this one. Powerful passion.
Somehow i don't sense sadness in this, it feels mor sensual than that, sensually powerful.
Maybe it's my erotic side showing i don't know.
It's almost tantric like the joining of two souls even when they're apart.

Janet :-)

Comment is about The Parting (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi, i removed my photo and profile and took up an alias for a short while. Didn't work though so decided to just be me. I can't seem to upload photos to wol, it just won't go in which means mithering poor Paul in admin to do it for me. :-)

Are you thinking of coming along to the Tudor any time soon?
Good luck with your musical stuff. Are you doing gigs?

Janet.x

Comment is about Horace Thespider (poet profile)

Original item by Horace Thespider

Hi Ros,
nice to see you here. I'll Look forward to reading what you write. :-)

Janet.x

Comment is about Rosalind (poet profile)

Original item by Rosalind

Hi Ctae, thanx for that, yes like getting it off my chest and will be reminding you of it when you start with the kids, Ha! Nice one, hope to see you soon, I'm bit behind so catch up with your latest poem soon, see ya Jeff X

Comment is about Cate (poet profile)

Original item by Cate

Although i used to get the M/boro train from Leeds, i got off before it reached it's destination. I have navigated thru it in an automobile a cupla times and stopped there once to go to that museum near a park with big black metal gates.
No,further west I be. In't North Yorkshire Dales. No city for miles and miles. lotsa sheepses and prettyness but not many shopses.Thing i made was cos of one of your lovely comments on my words. see ya, debz x

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Janet
Thanks for your kind comment. I have been pursuing a musical comedy project with a friend for the past few months.
Why have you removed the photo of yourself. Are you undergoing metamorphosis?

Comment is about Syllabic Nightmare. (blog)

Hi all,

Thanks very much for taking the time to read my poem – moment and making comment it makes me smile to know that I can mess about with words and achieve : )

A little of Robert Lowell John – high praise indeed : )

Comment is about John Darwin (poet profile)

Original item by John Darwin

A very powerful one Cynthia. Anthony is right - your poem does make the reader feel the anguish of loss.

Comment is about The Parting (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Your just naughty so Naughty! Your poems make me laugh all the time. Your latest is great!I think we all need a "shaved brazilian". Would be cleaner, cooler, less mess, all around a better deal for all.Tell me, do men sport a "shaved Cuban"? My own sick joke, Im sure, as I giggle and wonder if anyone else would get it.? xx

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

HI Aoife,
I like your poems, they have a raw sence of truth and life to them. nice work, keep it up, with love from Texas!

Comment is about Aoife Mannix (poet profile)

Original item by Aoife Mannix

Winston, thanks for your comment on The Parting. You solved one problem for me absolutely: I have dithered endlessly over 'my heartbeats measure the night' or 'my heartbeat measures the night'; I have spoken the line, sung the line, nearly dreamed the line ... and you're right ... you read what it should be. Thanks

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

This is a great read... love it

Gus x

Comment is about Prophet Protest Phony (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Well who's a big girl now then


Good luck! just enjoy the pant's off it...

see ya soon

Gus x

Comment is about Rosalind (poet profile)

Original item by Rosalind

Hi Rosalind, Go for it... we are a friendly group I hope you will find. Winston

Comment is about Rosalind (poet profile)

Original item by Rosalind

You're not still on holiday are you? Time for work.

Comment is about sian howell (poet profile)

Original item by sian howell

hi Jeff, thank you for your comments on Oyster.. when you getting to Heb? its not on next month tho, so I'm told. other x'iting stuff on instead. thanks again, deb x

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

Original item by Jeffarama!

Hello Cate. Many thanks for your kind comments about the two recent pieces. I'm very glad you liked them and felt moved to comment. Graham.

Comment is about Cate (poet profile)

Original item by Cate

Beautiful imagery in this...
with the last verse changing the tone...

Comment is about Souvenir -(Persian Gulf 2001) (blog)

Original item by stephen smith

thank you Gus, for your kind comments on Blackwater. I was going to come down for the next WOL but Winston told me it isn't on in july. The poetry in the woods thing looks good on Saturday but is it going to rain i wonder? I was hoping to see you at the last WOL night i went to, April i think it was. I was carrying with me a small thing i made for you but it returned back up north again and now it sits on my desk. it will travel with me by train in August for the next meeting unless you are off travelling the world that month. thanks again, deb x

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

A great read Dave, like the way it`s set out. Happy too that the deer got away,it must follow the river.

Comment is about as if by magic... (blog)

Original item by Dave Morgan

Adorable : )

Comment is about we are made like clouds (blog)

Awww...
Lovely imagery depicting such a lighthearted scene : )

Comment is about Come, Run With Me (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sad day to see the demise of the poetry bus and you missed a treat for the barbie.

Dave, why don't you call this 'Radcliffe Road, Bolton' and submit it to http://www.rainycitystories.com

Comment is about as if by magic... (blog)

Original item by Dave Morgan

Oh Great! Yes your feedback has really helped!! Thankyou!

Comment is about as if by magic... (blog)

Original item by Dave Morgan

Yes - glad you posted this Cate. It is easy to lose sight of the beauty of rhyming poetry - there is nothing quite like Shakespeare and this is a very clever poem.

Comment is about A Pretty Shitty Little Ditty... OR.. It Was Good Enough For Shakespeare.... (blog)

Original item by Cate

Mmmm - someone threw you a challenge of writing a 12 syllabic nightmare - wouldn't mind taking a guess on who that was! lol x I tried doing that and ended up tying myself up in horrible knots. I think that if you perform a piece well enough you can lose the odd syllable here and there - just distract them with a sexy growl or a purrr here and there. Well done for taking up the challenge Janet - I like some of the imagery in here - it is very different - particlarly 'throat as dry as polystyrene solidified' - reminds me of how I feel after the Tudor sometimes!
Isobel x

Comment is about Syllabic Nightmare. (blog)

thanks Cate but it was only a virtual nightmare.
I asked someone to set me a challenge to get me writing something again. Didn't manage the criteria for it but it did get me writing again.

Janet.x

Comment is about Syllabic Nightmare. (blog)

lol yes was waiting for this ...remember you reading this in Stockport :-)

Comment is about A Pretty Shitty Little Ditty... OR.. It Was Good Enough For Shakespeare.... (blog)

Original item by Cate

Ahhhh... Im living the nightmare with you Janet!.....usually a dream like this when something is pressing down on you ,and you feel like you`re drowning, means something is very amiss in your life. Lucky you to wake up and find it was only a cat!!
Cate xx

Comment is about Syllabic Nightmare. (blog)

Hi Horace,
nice to see you back.
I bloody hate spiders but you're such a nice guy.
I've had a go at being a subject of a poem, i enjoy experimenting in this sense.
Nice one, it has some humour with leafy images and i even saw a drainpipe and there isn't one mentioned in the poem. That has to be good.

Janet.x

Comment is about Hanging Loose (blog)

Original item by Horace Thespider

Oh the poor deer.
Oh you poor dear.
This comment could get a little confusing so i'll stop, right this second. :-)

Janet.x

Comment is about as if by magic... (blog)

Original item by Dave Morgan

What a wonderful web of spiderly sloth youve woven here Horace!!
Cate xx

Comment is about Hanging Loose (blog)

Original item by Horace Thespider

I'll tell you what. You've drank some fizzy pop!

I see you with a grandmother/auntie?
These short poems rely heavily on a really profound statement or a revelation right at the end.. They're held together with their determiners which can really reinforce what it is we're trying to say.
"as we watch
the faded picture
of your old
tv set"

OR

as we watch
a fading picture
from an old
tv. ?

As its currently written, it could be construed you are watching (or looking) at a 'photograph' of an old tv. Unlikely, I know - but possible.
The word 'set' is acting like a cork. It's obstructing the phonology of the vowel sound 'veeeee' and not allowing it to float away. That's how I read it anyway!

I remember you said you were a 'lousy' poet Emily. If I can use an unpoetic phrase here. EJM a lousy poet? My arse.

Comment is about bridget (blog)

Wonderful images,
I can't see a gazell shaped hole so it must have been extra to requirements.
Brittle and beautiful... like you.

Comment is about Who are you ? (blog)

This is great. Simple is as simple be.

In the title Emily, you tell the reader about 'Star Wars'. I think that's enough for a reader to fill in the blanks if you later say 'and watch movies full of stars'. It's leaves a little something else for the reader to do - and maybe, bring on one of those - 'ahhhhh' moments.

Nice to see (and read) you back.

Comment is about lets all fall in love with star wars again (blog)

Ha No I think there are women like this too....especially at kareoke bars ...Its a real place Charlies in Manchester and a very strange one at that. You always wonder why and how you eneded up there! If you have any constructive critisms please let me know because I am very new to the poetry thing and trying to learn as much as possible. Thanks. Take care.

Comment is about as if by magic... (blog)

Original item by Dave Morgan

Oh Isobel. If you were male and had years of psychological nous, you would not be fooled so.
There is another orator - lawyer, full of vacuous rhetoric, on the world scene. Be cool - watch and wait. Thanks for comment - I notice the anti-gravity is holding up.

Comment is about Alternative report on Iraq (blog)

Original item by Barrie Singleton

Absolutely love this! The imagery is fantastic in this piece! Magical!

Comment is about Fawn (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Hi Deborah wonderful stuff, says so much in such few words, I think they said this about the atom bomb, or something similar! Jeff X

Comment is about Oyster (blog)

Original item by Deborah Jordan Bailey

Again mysterious stuff with wonderful description, takes a bit of reading but worth it, best wishes JeffX

Comment is about Fawn (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Hi Marianne, very interesting stuff and a bit of mystique in your lines nice one Jeff X

Comment is about Vincent (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Your poem is clever as always Barrie - it was such a shame we ever fell for all that - and I had so much respect for Tony Blair-- still do in some ways - he just made one hell of a mistake.

Comment is about Alternative report on Iraq (blog)

Original item by Barrie Singleton

Stars are good....
Cate xx

Comment is about lets all fall in love with star wars again (blog)

I like this. Something very innocent about it.
Cate xx

Comment is about Come, Run With Me (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

So love your little poems - they leave such a beautiful image.

Comment is about under the night sky (blog)

thanks win. took up your suggestion. sways fits nicely.

i'm really enjoying the poems i've been writing lately. been a lot of fun.

x

Comment is about under the night sky (blog)

Hi Andy, Thanks for reading and commenting on Father-like Son. Winston

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Perfectly true Winston , all happened in thirty seconds two weeks ago.

Comment is about as if by magic... (blog)

Original item by Dave Morgan

Im sorry Lorretta, I cant even read the whole poem.I was married to a man that made children he never cared for so that his father would not kill him. I married him, he seemd fine in every way, except for a few now, that I look back on it. I think self control is a must. To tell the truth, I can get very upset with men and feel the need to be even and in the very distant past go with females. Never was it what i wanted. Im really trying to understand this go and do with anyone type of thing.Your poem was almost like reliving 12 years of hell. thanks. but good work as it did rage my mind.

Comment is about Scouting for Girls (blog)