OK, we've all been there. Usually as you lie sleeplessly in bed running over and over an argument/conversation/discussion - whatever in your head and you're coming out with killer arguments and quips which would have slain......if it wasn't 5 hours too late.
Comment is about The Little Voice (blog)
Original item by Stuart Bright
Gideon Puccio
Wed 4th Jan 2017 01:52
Well written Jeff... Love this poem. Very powerful and meaningful and the ice cream made me chuckle as well. Great work...
Comment is about They Said, I Said, She Said (blog)
Original item by Jeff
Andromeda
Wed 4th Jan 2017 00:17
I really like this. As always your work is simple, breathless, but powerful.
Comment is about They Said, I Said, She Said (blog)
Original item by Jeff
Tue 3rd Jan 2017 23:14
Wow! Cynthia! This is brave and beautiful...Bowdlerizing is a strange word..Are you really keeping it clean enough not to corrupt Victorian schoolboys?
What exactly have you shackled yourself with? What are you leaving out ?
I guess we're talking PC, aren't we? No place in poetry. I lived in T&T long enough to at least begin to see that old divisions, old perceptions abound and still bind, until life shows them as totally meaningless.
This is a lovely, touching piece. Thank you for setting it free.
Comment is about The Spanish Girl (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Whatever the weather
The season is right
For wonderful and
Young in life
Comment is about December Collage Poem: Disappointment - Part 2 (blog)
Original item by Stockport WoL
Cynthia, thank you so much for your welcome, lovely to hear from you. Paul
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
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Lovely uplifting comment Colin! I have a Ray Bradbury collection too; I love The Illustrated Man and The Long Rain. I'm old enough to remember Journey into Space on radio! I would like to share a spaceship with you, as Williams Fortesque.
Harry Thank you for your encouraging observations. I'm glad you identified with the indifference. The five line stanzas just came out that way to be honest.
Thanks elP. Let's hope this is in the long future after the next Messiah presumably.
Cheers Jeff That experiment is a bit confusing for the uninitiated but once tried is there any other way?
All things are possible but first must be conceived in the mind. (?!) Ray
Comment is about JOURNEY THROUGH THE STARS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thank you Patricia and Stef for your warm words about my poem and for your interesting anecdote and funny story about shopkeepers where you live, how lovely. Your greengrocer sounds like a funghi(!), not to mention your butcher!
Hazel, thank you so much for your comment, I'm so pleased you enjoyed this.
I'm grateful to you all, Paul
Comment is about HIGH STREET BLUES (blog)
Original item by Paul Waring
This guy reminds me of my music teacher at the secondary school ( I was later seconded to the grammar thank God). He rode a bike with dropped bars up the wrong way , thus contradicting one of the most obvious laws of physics . I was the only person in the class with any interest, and soon beguiled him into a corner with my recorder....
Your poem perfectly describes the type and the careworn sense of the hopeless that us older ones recall so well. Mind you, what has happened to characters full stop? Certainly there are less in the music business. I noticed the heavy drinkers flushed out when the breathalyzer came in, and then it became softies all round!
Happy new year Greg.
Comment is about The Grammar School (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
The cri de coeur of many a parent, no doubt. But with the
leavening of wit to soften the message.
Comment is about Unwed (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
<Deleted User> (6895)
Tue 3rd Jan 2017 18:41
we loved this poem very much indeed Paul.Where we live,fortunately,a lot of the little shops have been retained.
We mean,where else would a greengrocer(79 years old-there at 7'o'clock every morning)not only sell you two mushrooms,if thats all you needed,but also welcome you in the back of his shop for a brew? Beat that Marks and Spencer!
In the meantime,here (hopefully) is a laugh for you.
Whenever I (Stef) am passing our local butchers (again a small local shop) I pop my head in the door and say-excuse me,but do you happen to sell meat? haha!
Cheers!
Patricia and Stef.xx
Comment is about HIGH STREET BLUES (blog)
Original item by Paul Waring
Thanks again for encouraging comment Paul. 'Last Orders' is one of a group of poems which will be in my new collection After Hours to be published next April by Cultured Llama.
Comment is about Paul Waring (poet profile)
Original item by Paul Waring
The intention of the title was two-fold: to show that hope
could cope - and having the hope TO cope!
Harry - thanks for the positive response.
JC - in a sense, this was written as an antidote to the sort
of thing that is likely to cause depression in even the most
evenly balanced state of mind. As I've mentioned elsewhere - it seems that "misery loves company". There
IS, however, a world of difference in the attitude that
is firmly tongue in cheek about the vicissitudes of life and
how to deal with them. I really do agreed with the words
"You don't stop laughing when you grow old,
You grow old when you stop laughing".
Comment is about HOPE TO COPE (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Welcome to WOL. Paul. I've not been much on line these past weeks, but will certainly follow up on your work already posted.
Comment is about Paul Waring (poet profile)
Original item by Paul Waring
The time I've spent on this work beggars belief - years! I have to set it free and get it out of my head. I must feel that it has a message worth sharing or I'd have jettisoned it long ago. It has been a real thorn in my brain.
I've been cramped by reality as I knew it in the ascribed time period, and the shackles I currently feel about ''bowdlerizing' the vocabulary. Is that the right word - powder-puffing expressions for 'finer discriminations' of the current day? I actually really object to that. History is history!
Anyway, I'd welcome any comments.
Comment is about The Spanish Girl (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
This everyday drinker shown
has the hangover of
christmas and new year
no one must suffer!
Comment is about December Collage Poem: Disappointment - Part 1 (blog)
Original item by Stockport WoL
Hazel, I happened to stumble upon your profile. Call it serendipity. The universe moves in mysterious way I guess, all we have to do is be receptive.
I'd like to know more about your Mindfulness practice.
Then I would like to share my beliefs on it.
Comment is about Hazel ettridge (poet profile)
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Trevor,
Mind, when they get into that slaughter-house and smell what`s going to happen to them, I bet they all go a bit wild! ?
Comment is about Wild Haggis (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Tom,
All (rhymingly) remembered....It always pays to keep the poets sweet.
Comment is about 2016 - Taken but not Forsaken (blog)
Original item by Tom Doolan
hahaha!..too many big words for a Northerner like me Paul.....but a great way to remember them...Jeff....
Comment is about Breakfast at Dictionaries (blog)
Original item by Jeff
Couldn't agree more. Zombie culture - same old shops the world over....Jeff......
Comment is about HIGH STREET BLUES (blog)
Original item by Paul Waring
Wonderfully well written and evocative David, I enjoyed reading this very much. Paul
Comment is about Last orders (blog)
Original item by David Cooke
Jeff, this made a pseudo-haiku Snap, Crackle n Pop out of my head:
One day lacuna
Now onomatopoeia
What's going on here?!!
Comment is about Breakfast at Dictionaries (blog)
Original item by Jeff
I have to agree John, I love 'em too, there's nothing quite like spotting a gem amongst the jumble! And thanks for your comment. Paul
Comment is about HIGH STREET BLUES (blog)
Original item by Paul Waring
But MC, our levity would not be anywhere near as levitous without the contrast against the self-indulgent whinging of others.
Comment is about HOPE TO COPE (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
The repetitiveness of High Streets is depressing, Paul. I like the way you capture this.
I am out on a limb though from others who bemoan the influx of High Street charity shops. I love 'em.
Comment is about HIGH STREET BLUES (blog)
Original item by Paul Waring
Great lines - The arid Earth had turned its back
seeking a new master - I like Sci-Fi but science fact is far more bizarre, & even if you don't believe it, its true. Take a look at Young's double slit experiment...Jeff...
Comment is about JOURNEY THROUGH THE STARS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Sunil Sharma
Tue 3rd Jan 2017 07:03
really a heart touching poem...keep up the good work...
Comment is about Loss (blog)
Original item by Brian Belyea
Sunil Sharma
Tue 3rd Jan 2017 07:02
Gideon Puccio
Tue 3rd Jan 2017 06:08
Gideon Puccio
Tue 3rd Jan 2017 00:58
elPintor
Tue 3rd Jan 2017 00:52
Sleepers in the cosmos? That last verse wraps it all up quite well for me--pre-programmed..mission accomplished.
Very enjoyable.
elP
Comment is about JOURNEY THROUGH THE STARS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Gideon Puccio
Tue 3rd Jan 2017 00:26
This is a wonderful piece! It spoke to me so deeply because it is like how my mind works as well. Just superb!
Comment is about A Simply Confusing Thought (blog)
Original item by Monami Kundu
Hi Jeff, as you said "..Gawd Blimey" and, as Harry said, "ouuuch". And, as I'm saying......."ouuuch, ouuuch, ouuuch"!! (eyes watering...) Paul.
Comment is about The Day They Took Me Foreskin (blog)
Original item by Jeff
Many thanks Harry, I really enjoyed reading your comments. Best wishes, Paul.
Comment is about Nostalgia (blog)
Original item by Paul Waring
Fine and `oakenly` nostalgiac with it`s `engrained` `steeped` `seeped` and `etched`engrossing us into the memories of this particular place.
I like the congruence of that `soft stainglassed light` with the rest of the scene.
Comment is about Nostalgia (blog)
Original item by Paul Waring
<Deleted User> (13762)
Mon 2nd Jan 2017 22:33
No sooner said than done Col, I get your point entirely and hope you find this amended version pleasing. I'm not sure where my weird concepts come from but keep on reading 'em, aythangyow.
I do remember the song when I was in gig format myself.
Great that you reference that, I think I was a classic!
Raymondo.
Comment is about WORLD OF PLASTIC (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Ray,
I think that the next four lines after `ray` would perhaps make a good stanza (of how the earth was) sort
of balancing the next five line stanza (of how it is)
The last five are a good example of the `indifference` which so aptly often finishes this kind of poem.
well executed.
Comment is about JOURNEY THROUGH THE STARS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thank you Colin for your kind comment, I am very grateful to you and pleased you enjoyed reading it. Best wishes, Paul.
Comment is about Nostalgia (blog)
Original item by Paul Waring
<Deleted User> (13762)
Mon 2nd Jan 2017 20:57
I'm playing catch-up with your offerings Ray and this is simply wonderful although I feel you maybe lose your rhythm a little in the last 4 lines? I want to add another 'plastic' before clouds or maybe lose a line but I'm resisting the urge to offer further suggestions other than this:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=v98HEQvtpgo
C?L
Comment is about WORLD OF PLASTIC (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Mon 2nd Jan 2017 20:49
sometimes I think we are on the same spaceship Ray. I love this and it makes me want to grab my old tattered Ray Bradbury's and get lost in other dimensions.
Sc-fi is a great lure away from the normality of our mundane day to days although I can't profess to be an ardent reader of the genre.
All the best fellow Earthling.
Comment is about JOURNEY THROUGH THE STARS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
elPintor
Mon 2nd Jan 2017 19:29
I agree with Colin..this piece is very welcome. I really like the intermixture of the two languages and it sparked me to do a little research on some of the terms you use. The ideas presented, for me, dovetail into some things I've been reading about the interplay of disparate economic forces in South America. It's a heavy subject that has enormous implications of which, I realize, I've only begun to scratch the surface.
Well written and thought-provoking...
elP
Comment is about Wake Up/Despierta (blog)
Original item by E.M Chino
Many thanks, fellas, for the benefit of your collective experience. I don't know why I should be so disappointed that this had attracted an all-male response.
Your advice on wiping it on an Arsenal shirt made me snot, Graham
Comment is about LEAVE IT IN THE GROUND (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
<Deleted User> (13762)
Mon 2nd Jan 2017 17:56
Gideon Puccio
Wed 4th Jan 2017 06:32
Ain't this the truth! I am no strange to that voice among a cast of many others in my head either. Great poem!
Comment is about The Little Voice (blog)
Original item by Stuart Bright