Martin,
Another highly imaginative and observant poem. It enables the reader to experience what you are saying. One of your best.
Thank you
Keith

Comment is about Bucket spades and ice cream days (blog)

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Ta tick Tom ;- )

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Ta la Tommy ,- )

Comment is about Becky Who (poet profile)

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It really is a great piece of writing, Martin.

Comment is about Bored (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

A great take on a couple stuck in a rut. Bravo!

Comment is about Bored (blog)

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A great poem popping with energy and rhythm. Thank you!?

Comment is about The Car Boot (blog)

Original item by Louise Clarke

JRM
The next PM?

Comment is about BITING BACK (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

i think this is the best thing you have ever written martin
an utterly brilliant piece of writing.

Comment is about Bored (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

I think i can spend hours reading what you write it's amazing ur a great story teller I just love this I can feel the summer and the nostalgic feeling it's sends off

Comment is about Bucket spades and ice cream days (blog)

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Simple, easy flowing, and I noticed your internal rhyme aided your imagery and poetic diction nicely. It all really came together well.?

Comment is about Mask (blog)

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Top notch sentiment. Each stanza could stand in for a verse in a song. Add a little chorus into each space between the stanzas and you have yourself a ballad or dedication. The poem itself is excellent.??

Comment is about she's the one (blog)

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Back of beyond, rednecks?

Comment is about South of South (blog)

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Sisters eh?

Comment is about Bored (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

This is amazingly described it's as if you are talking about a real person

Comment is about Bored (blog)

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take away art because of someones actions and you would lose a lot of beauty.

both poems are wonderful and a part of history. manchester uni is huge. why not display both?

Comment is about Modern Times; Don't decry Manchester students' Actions (article)

Original item by Mike Took

Appreciate your comments Keith..
Taylor

Comment is about keith jeffries (poet profile)

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Hi Martin, He's Not The One..wow compelling...
Thank you for reading my poem.
Appreciated your comments.
Taylor

Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)

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I feel that you are starting to get into your stride with your work. Almost changing gear , going up a gear so to speak and moving forward with power and vigour.
A brilliant read, but also I can imagine it being even more powerful hearing you read it.
Love it

Comment is about Shout it from the Hills (blog)

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I think a lot of us put on this sometimes amazing show. When asked are we alright we automatically say fine, even though we are not. Good stuff
As Keith says keep writing

Comment is about Mask (blog)

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There is a real honesty with this poem which shines through making it a must read for anybody who comes across.
Thanks for posting this
Nice one

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Superb Robert. This has the feel of a song for me. Love it

Comment is about South of South (blog)

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Thanks Hannah
Glad you liked it

Comment is about Bucket spades and ice cream days (blog)

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Thankyou very much, I wondered whether adding pain would be too long or not. I shall now be able to improve my piece. The laat bit didn't flow the way I wanted without that rhyme so thank you so much

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Awww thankyou Don ? this one came to my mind suddenly one day so means a lot

Comment is about Distrust is a bad trait (blog)

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thank you

Comment is about Violet (0) Prelude To Space Cowboy (blog)

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Taylor,
Keep writing....keep writing
Keith

Comment is about Mask (blog)

Original item by Taylor Crowshaw

Hello Kenny,
This poem proves to me that you are not insane as you stated in your profile because you write from the heart as all good poets do. You have some talents which are artistic so it is incumbent on you to use them. Keep writing and maybe send your beloved a poem as well.
Thank you for such a genuine poem
Keith

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Cheers Martin re "Driving responsibly " x

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Ta lah Tommy

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Hi Jon, thank you for taking the time to read my poem. Enjoyed Back To Nature. Taylor

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Hi, thanks for taking the time to read my poem..loving your work. Taylor

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Thanks for taking the time to read my poem Tom...Enjoyed New Year Blues..Taylor

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Kipling was never a great poet. Plus he was an apologist for empire and racial superiority. Bloody good on the students.

Comment is about Modern Times; Don't decry Manchester students' Actions (article)

Original item by Mike Took

Hi John. It's nice to have a parallel drawn with Dylan Thomas; that poem is like a furore of grief. Mine is a gentle little affair, but thanks for the comparison. There is a sequel: the partner now still comes to the garden but no longer sings, only a sort of death rattle, so sad now..
thanks.

Ray

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Original item by steve pottinger

The actions of students at Manchester University can find parallels elsewhere in the world where people find themselves uncomfortable with certain historic facts. Flags are frequently burned to display anger against a particular country´action or policies. Here in Spain, where I live, the target for such derision is often directed against the Franco dictatorship which lasted for several decades emanating from the Spanish Civil War. I have seen street names changed form Calle General Franco and replaced by Calle de Constitucion. Others are the removal of statues of the General from public places and more recently the proposed removal of his body from the Valley of the Fallen to another resting place. The question is ¨What does all this achieve?¨
It serves little purpose other than for people to vent their anger against the Franco regime. In reality it is a denial of history. People would do better to recognise that the dictatorship did exist for good or ill, as the country was very divided during the civil war. A socialist politician broke off the head of Franco from a monument which depicted him riding a horse. What did this achieve?
All nations have their histories and it is better that people acknowledge them and learn from them than to simply eradicate history or write a different version of it.
Those most keen to remove the remains of Franco, often do so to avert attention from their own inept policies.
Rudyard Kipling was a product of the Imperial Era and his poetry reflects that period of British history. Let´s learn to live with it in the hope that we never repeat it.

Keith Jeffries

Comment is about Modern Times; Don't decry Manchester students' Actions (article)

Original item by Mike Took

thanks for reading Martin - much appreciated. Col.

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I'm liking the addition of parsnips - it's not often they get a mention in poems. Hope life's treating you well pal.

Comment is about Langier (07/20/2018) (blog)

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I agree with Big Sal wholeheartedly - and linnets are delightful although not so very common where I live. Thanks for sharing. Col.

Comment is about Linnet (blog)

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'I'll show you a place where lovers come to die' is a line to die for . . .

Comment is about Violet (0) Prelude To Space Cowboy (blog)

Original item by Mikey V Kinsey

great poem Damon.

Comment is about Space Cowboy 8 Violet Moon (blog)

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Brian, 'tis I Tina here
(I'm 'fraid Gina's asleep)
We are unsure like you my friend
What round don's head does creep

We both here at call centre
Await his next reveal
We're sure it will excite us
He don't know word 'conceal'

It's not in his vocabulary
But take it from us girls
His heart is in the right place
FUNBUS with us and whirl

Cheers from Tina (and asleep Gina)

(ribbit ribbit) ?

Tina here again Brian:

Brian you created me
Then Gina birthed from don
Where would we be without you both?

(Still floating in the ether...
waiting for other creatives...
to take pity on us...
and give us a home...

(ribbit...ribbit...froggie talk for 'thanks guys') ?

Comment is about Did You Miss Our FUN BUS Launch? You Can Still Catchup (blog)

Original item by Don Matthews

Can anyone figure out the contents of Don's head?

Answers on a postcard please.

Comment is about Did You Miss Our FUN BUS Launch? You Can Still Catchup (blog)

Original item by Don Matthews

Dorinda, that's very unfortunate. May she rest in peace.

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A heart-wrenching poem. The last lines "Dreams take me" through "Majestic Delight" touched me deeply. Thank you for sharing! Get Well Soon!!!!

Comment is about Sepsis (blog)

Original item by John E Marks

Feel better soon.

Comment is about Sepsis (blog)

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Last line really wraps the whole thing up nicely and on a melancholic note. Keeps it warming the heart.?

Comment is about No guide, No hero (blog)

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Yes indeed, Brian. One can imagine how difficult that must have been for Europe.

Comment is about A SONG OF PATRIOTIC PREJUDICE (Pt 2) (blog)

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Fog in the Channel - Europe cut off.

(50's Times headline allegedly.)

Comment is about A SONG OF PATRIOTIC PREJUDICE (Pt 2) (blog)

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Thank you so much Frances Macaulay Forde for your kind words – they really mean so much to me, especially as I am very new to putting myself “out there” poetically online. You may be amused to know this sample poem (which does need a title, now you mention it) actually exists in 2 versions – the original is much freer in its rhythm and rhyming scheme, but somehow I couldn’t leave the text alone until I’d got the pattern to match in every verse.

Regarding describing myself as a slam poet – I hadn’t considered the label as a restriction as such, but I have to say I chose this particular poem to post as a sample because it is one I consider to be closer to “page poetry” than “slam poetry”. The relationship between these art forms fascinates me. I guess a lot of poetry (although not all) can be successfully presented in oral form, and can benefit from being recited well, but for me slam poetry really needs to be performed to be fully what it is. Page poetry can make paper sing, but a lot of slam poetry loses something when restricted to written form. I have always tinkered with words, but my discovery of the slam scene allowed me to at last find my writing voice, and to also get my adrenalin fix from the performance “buzz”. Now I am keen to explore other poetic forms too. Unfortunately living in a non-anglophone country limits my opportunities for exchange and for getting some measure of the success of my writing (and performances). So I was overjoyed to find this website!

Thank you again, I look forward to exchanging further!

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thanks jane and keith and i will change the name of the poem

Comment is about talking to a brick wall (blog)

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