<Deleted User> (19836)
Thu 19th Jul 2018 12:10
A poem of accuracy...well done!
Comment is about Dying Into Each Other (blog)
Original item by Jake Vincent Belmont
<Deleted User> (19421)
Thu 19th Jul 2018 12:00
Wonderful words Ray, I really like the first stanza, is works really well and I think works just as well standing alone.
Well done!
DJB
Comment is about ‘Bye bye blackbird’ by Ray Pool is Write Out Loud’s Poem of the Week (article)
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<Deleted User> (19421)
Thu 19th Jul 2018 11:32
I have no idea what it says - but it looks great!!!
DJB
Comment is about লস্ট ইন ট্রান্সলেশন (blog)
Original item by Nafees Sabur
<Deleted User> (19421)
Thu 19th Jul 2018 11:30
<Deleted User> (19421)
Thu 19th Jul 2018 11:29
Darren,
Thanks for your kind comment. It would seem that when I write from the heart, the truth, my words sound more real.
Keith
Comment is about Love at Last (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
<Deleted User> (19836)
Thu 19th Jul 2018 11:19
This lovely poem just warmed my heart. ❤
Comment is about Him, Grace. (blog)
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<Deleted User> (19421)
Thu 19th Jul 2018 11:15
LOL!!!
Fantastic!
If only I owned a comb.....
DJB
Comment is about blown it (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
<Deleted User> (19421)
Thu 19th Jul 2018 11:13
Wow Keith - that is some poem,
Thanks for writing and sharing!
❤
DJB
Comment is about Love at Last (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Thank you for this, as my experience of life has taught me that the words of this poem are true indeed.
Keith
Comment is about Him, Grace. (blog)
Original item by uncover
<Deleted User> (19421)
Thu 19th Jul 2018 11:00
Ah! the good old Stinkwheel days eh?
Comment is about THE OLD FELLAS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thank you so much Anya!? It is very much a pleasure to be here -talented poets indeed!You're one of my favourites?.
You liked my poem too?, Thanks!
Comment is about uncover (poet profile)
Original item by uncover
Good Morning Kporho,
Thank you for your poems which paint a very vivid picture of your life and surroundings. You have a good deal of potential which you must exploit as a poet. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Keith
Comment is about Kporho Vwede Daniel (poet profile)
Original item by Kporho Vwede Daniel
Big Sal
Thu 19th Jul 2018 02:35
If I want to learn history, then I read an encyclopedia. If I need to touch up on vocabulary or poetic diction, then I read Suki Spangles.? Well done. Again.
Comment is about Fifty Shades Of Freckle-Faced Dalek (blog)
Original item by Suki Spangles
Big Sal
Thu 19th Jul 2018 02:30
Can't wait to see what else you have in store. Raw emotion waiting to be untangled in lines of poetic parchment.?
Comment is about RandomBubbles (poet profile)
Original item by RandomBubbles
Big Sal
Thu 19th Jul 2018 02:28
There's a powerful voice inside this piece, and it screams "justice incarnate". Socio-political poetry is some of the most powerful on the planet, so well done on this. Really enjoyed reading it.?
Comment is about MEN ON BLACK (blog)
Original item by Kporho Vwede Daniel
Big Sal
Thu 19th Jul 2018 02:26
Your similes in the first and last lines really draw power to this piece in ways that normal poetic diction cannot. Well done, that's for sure.?
Comment is about The hunter and rose deer (blog)
Original item by Arina
What you have written reminds me of the old AA motorcyclists who stopped to help motorists. It also puts me in mind of an episode of 'On the buses' When Olive who was heavily pregnant was wedged in her husbands sidecar and at a junction she went one way and he another.
A lovely poem Ray with a wonderful last line
'As the vision like a loping gentleman slips quietly away'
Nice one
Comment is about THE OLD FELLAS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
F.F Doesn't that mean I'm going to be my own death. The third promise I made you was if you die before me I'm following you into the dark. Anya thank you.
Comment is about Letter To Firefly (blog)
Original item by Mikey V Kinsey
splendid article Keith and a real encouragement.
Cheers
Martin
Comment is about Poets: Voices of Prophecy and Custodians of Truth (article)
Original item by Mike Took
<Deleted User> (13762)
Wed 18th Jul 2018 22:50
Thank you for this article Keith - good to see your name up here. I look forward to more. All the very best, Colin.
Comment is about Poets: Voices of Prophecy and Custodians of Truth (article)
Original item by Mike Took
elPintor
Wed 18th Jul 2018 22:06
Hi Suki,
I am glad to have noticed your latest comment, I might have otherwise not seen this gem.
"spiritualise your new eden.."
..followed by that final stanza--good heavens I'm breathless.
Take care, Suki--I always look forward to reading your posts.
Rachel
Comment is about Ascension To Prophecy (blog)
Original item by Suki Spangles
Thanks Keith for observational comments. The lady in question is my wife's friend of many years, her mother was in service - from humble beginnings the inflation began -there is a need for pretence ingrained. She has enough money to live the dream!
Brian, I checked out that track - what a genius. He was Undervalued at the time, but full of social gems. I love "back yard bacchanal." Cheers!
Thanks for all your likes, Col, Jon, Anya, Becky and Uncover.
Comment is about NAMEDROPPER (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thank you, Jane.
Sorry I forgot to thank you, MC.
Comment is about So inattentive and so frail (blog)
Original item by Jon Stainsby
Thanks Big Sal. That's the thing isn't it? We have limited control over ageing but more choice about how we think about it. It can be really frustrating but we have to adapt and find different ways to make the most of life, otherwise we waste what time and capacity we do have left.
Comment is about Still 23 (blog)
Original item by Janey Colbourne
<Deleted User> (19836)
Wed 18th Jul 2018 19:24
Encouraging and optimistic...I love it❤
Comment is about I know (blog)
Original item by Jon Stainsby
<Deleted User> (19836)
Wed 18th Jul 2018 19:20
Your words ring true for many. A great poem!
Comment is about So inattentive and so frail (blog)
Original item by Jon Stainsby
<Deleted User> (19836)
Wed 18th Jul 2018 18:47
This poem is beautiful and heartbreaking. It makes me want to reach out and give you a hug. I hope I am not offending you! I don't want to believe that you are really alone. Perhaps you are like many who are victims of social media. Personally and I quote "Personally" I think Facebook is poison! It makes us feel that we are missing out on things when perhaps those who spend their days posting on FB are missing out. Keep writing...it heals the soul. Thank you and I apologize if I have said too much.?
Comment is about No Purpose (blog)
Original item by Mikey V Kinsey
Big Sal
Wed 18th Jul 2018 17:34
I like the couplets of your sample - that is often the format I write in since it makes rhyming a lot easier. And like Anya said, welcome.?
Comment is about Mayah ROSE (poet profile)
Original item by Mayah ROSE
<Deleted User> (16099)
Wed 18th Jul 2018 16:46
another piece of you given with open heart and compassion
thank you
Comment is about Wait for me (blog)
Original item by Nicola Byrnes
Thanks for liking Jon !
Glad you like it Jane, thanks.
Comment is about BYE BYE BLACKBIRD (blog)
Original item by ray pool
<Deleted User> (19836)
Wed 18th Jul 2018 15:37
Hello Suki. Nice to meet you. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. Your thoughts are appreciated!?
Comment is about Suki Spangles (poet profile)
Original item by Suki Spangles
wonderful stuff chris, 'a late moth blunders' is beautifully penned
Comment is about A Dark Night (blog)
Original item by Chris Armstrong
<Deleted User> (19836)
Wed 18th Jul 2018 15:28
Excellent depiction. I enjoyed the read!
Comment is about A Dark Night (blog)
Original item by Chris Armstrong
Thank you for this excelleny journey of the Saharan Sands. A storm generated in the Sahara carries the sand up to quite an altitude and then progresses westwards, as you so rightly say. However, ´en route ´it deposits a considearble amount on the Canary Islands where I presently live. Locally it is known as a Calima of which there are several in any one year. A muggy yellow cloud causes temperatures to rise and many suffer as you have described. I never realised it managed to reach Texas. Glad to know that we do not suffer alone.
Thank you for this,
Keith
Comment is about Sahara Sand (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Those so besotted in the throes of their prose
Would dearly love to say go get knotted, (up your nose)
But rhymers like us would say with a cuss
Don't mess with us, prosers, 'cause we'll make a fuss
Now I'm not as skilled as the masterful MC
My verse is plain drab (which many tell me)
I'm no William Shakespeare, can't even spell write
Is it right that I'm wanting, dunno, maybe it's rite
See, I'm real hopeless, MC he's a'cringe
Why am I commenting, he'll think I'm unhinged
Perhaps I should go prose-like, I might have more luck
Bugga, just remembered I might get nose-stuck
D?
No offence intended MC or any attempt to 'undermine' your verse which I thought was clever and delightful. Thankyou for sharing it. I have this annoying habit of rhyming into action with the smallest of prompts....I call it minds intellectually bouncing around... (I'm surprised no-one else has commented. Prosers should be up in arms..)
Comment is about SNIFFY (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
<Deleted User> (19836)
Wed 18th Jul 2018 14:31
A poem with profound meaning. Congratulations!
Comment is about BYE BYE BLACKBIRD (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Stop it now, elPintor. You’ll have the Poetry Police onto you. ?
Seanin - Not sure you saw this first time so I’ll post it again knowing that you’ll want to do something positive for kids with cancer. (I guess not, seeing as the total hasn’t moved). Anyone else with a good heart is welcome to do so, of course. I find doing something positive more constructive than bleating.
https://www.justgiving.com/fundraising/john-coopey1
Comment is about UPSKIRTING (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Of course you don't have to read them. That way you never have to challenge your own racist assumptions. Many of them are now published by highly respected publishers (including Carcanet, Faber and Bloodaxe) since being mentored by this scheme. But heck don't let facts get in the way of a good prejudice.
Comment is about Addressing The Poetry Periphery (article)
Original item by Mike Took
elPintor
Wed 18th Jul 2018 10:21
I happen to recall a series of vile pornographic posts from a particular female blogger that garnered absolutely no negative feedback...
The sensibilities of the crowd certainly are fickle.
Comment is about UPSKIRTING (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Martin,
Thank you for your comment. The person in the poem is known to me personally but it makes me wonder how many other souls are in similar predicaments. Many blame her for not divorcing her husband but to have done so fifty years ago it would have seriously damaged her reputation and standing with her wider family. Therefore she suffers on.
Thank you again,
Keith
Comment is about Facing the Truth (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
A fine poem well delivered, all the better that it is based upon and actual person and events though sad that this has happened to this lady.
Nice one Keith
Comment is about Facing the Truth (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
<Deleted User> (19836)
Wed 18th Jul 2018 09:15
Matt, "Thank you" seems so frivolous in comparison to the comments you have written referencing "The Beach". But, nonetheless I do thank you. Your comments give me the courage to plow forward with my writings in the hope that someday I may have something published.
Comment is about Matt Tyldesley (poet profile)
Original item by Matt Tyldesley
john short
Thu 19th Jul 2018 12:34
Hi Ray, liked this one very much. A little snapshot of reality. Evocative, you can smell the earth and insects. And it has depth. Well done!
Comment is about BYE BYE BLACKBIRD (blog)
Original item by ray pool