You try to escape the demons
But they latch on way too tight,
Their claws digging into my body
And mind, with all their might.
Fighting is exhausting,
It physically and mentally drains.
But still I endure it, hoping
One day I will finally escape the pain.
Sun 22nd Jul 2018 13:56
Thankyou very much, I wondered whether adding pain would be too long or not. I shall now be able to improve my piece. The laat bit didn't flow the way I wanted without that rhyme so thank you so much
Wed 20th Jun 2018 13:31
We understand each other Hayley. You know I'm a rhymer. This piece lilts along nicely. Can I suggest a last line which rhymes with 'drain'
'One day I will escape the pain' emphasise es-
If I thought more I might get a better flowing line. Anything rhyming attracts me
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