Ray, an intriguing insight into the past - an enjoyable reflective odyssey. If we hang on long enough we may be back there again. And besides I'm getting bored with all the derivative shit masquerading about the place'. Blind following the easily led I say! Keep on keeping on.Trevor.
Comment is about SCHOOL HOLIDAYS IN THE FIFTIES (blog)
Original item by ray pool
elPintor
Fri 26th Jul 2019 10:44
..reminds me of a scene, listening to a mother explain why she had purged some of her deceased son's belongings from her home, saying that she couldn't bear the way objects lose his scent...
Quite poignant and so is the writing.
Rachel
Comment is about Next Bed Over (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
Thanks to everyone else for the flowers
Comment is about Falling In and Out of Love (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
Hey Tom. I didn't think I had a poem in me at the time. I think we can all relate to falling in and out of love. Not just with a person, but with anything in our lives.
Adam, perhaps I should have put hand rails up. Some of those steps down are pretty big.
Thank you both for the comments
Comment is about Falling In and Out of Love (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
Thanks again, jennifer and trev
Comment is about 'Log In*' by Laura Taylor is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Thanks Jennifer, it's been a bit of a difficult couple of weeks, really sorry I didn't thank you before. Ironic that this one should become quite relevant to me, as I wrote it before my Dad's death.
Time really does exercise its own inevitable power of attorney.
J. x
Comment is about Atrophy (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Fast fashion's here for good I'm 'fraid
It's wrong Eve, cos of greed
For the taste of money
Which some must have, want, need
Don't care about no suffering
What are you talkin' 'bout?
I'm racin' to the fashion shop
Before the go sell out
What's that you say? My 14 T's ?
Two weeks gives one a day
I T-shirt round the neighbourhood
Let's all sing hip hooray.......
Comment is about The fabric of society (blog)
Original item by eve nortley
Thanks, Don and MC.
I don’t think any politician dances to the tune of their own choice, MC. Politics is about 80% reacting. But I will agree it’s going to be interesting. As a die-hard Remainer I’m quite looking forward to No Deal; I can’t wait to see what happens.
Comment is about "HEY BO!" (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
elPintor
Fri 26th Jul 2019 07:51
Good morning, all,
Great comments and food for thought, thank you...
Just for clarification, I tried to write this from the perspective of Silence, as an entity in and of itself--it isn't personal ) Furthermore, as with every coin there is another side and Silence is invaluable when Speaking doesn't know itself.
Is there cosmic karma? I don't know much about the idea of karma. And, though I find the idea interesting, I know only a little about the implications of the Aquarian Age and can't possibly articulate my personal ideas in any cohesive manner. I will say that I believe we are able to witness current events in ways that have never before been possible. And, that we are each bearers of the effects of what we experience--whether directly or indirectly--to the collective.
To simplify my meaning...
Say that I am witness to a crime which causes detriment to a fellow individual. I do not engage in the act of the crime itself nor do I act to prevent it--that is, I experience the crime indirectly.
Depending on my own nature, the nature of the crime, the identity of its victim(s), its perpetrator(s), etc., I could experience any number of psychological effects as a result. And--because I am able to relive the moment of my witness through my thoughts--the crime itself becomes a facilitator of sorts for my future learning.
Before I go any deeper...
Most all of us, here, are products of an education system which indoctrinated in us Industrial Age values. We are conditioned to react to alarms and to behave in ways that do not sever the organizational threads that bind us together. We are even conditioned to learn by set formulas. Those formulae have dictated how textbooks, curricula, even our public libraries, have been designed so that education could be standardized and made quantifiable.
However, our Industrial Age education system has left many of us wanting in critical skills, such as evaluation and analyzation, that allow us to recognize and interpret what we experience through information. By its sheer nature, the Information Age demands a shift in thinking. As individuals, our worlds have suddenly become very large--like it or not. And, if life is our classroom, it is likely the future will be a bit more difficult for those who demand to be continually spoonfed by a system that exists only to ensure that its students never surpass its teachers.
I don't want to be preachy--I'm only one little person--and, I do believe that the collective will eventually catch up to itself by evolving and more effectively harnessing the cognitive tools necessary to accommodating these shifts. Hell, I'll even go so far as to say I'm downright hopeful (sometimes).
Thanks for your comments. I hope I'm at least somewhat clear )
Off to work with me...
Rachel
Comment is about truth or dare? (even no answer is an answer) (blog)
Original item by nunya
Hearts can be a painful suit
I'd rather be clubbed
buried by spades, suited
deep in the earth
where diamonds dwell.
See, your poem just made me write that like that. It is so fun to read others' work. Yours included.
Also, I am still thinking of this sestina you mentioned and have decided that my first attempt will end
mountains
sky
stars
night
sunset
clouds
It will probably be very bad and I don't even know if one should write a sestina by planning the words first. But I will let you know how it goes.
I posted a few more today so hope you have a chance to give a read or a listen (same for anyone else reading this comment).
Comment is about I Loved And Loved- A Triolet (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Thanks for reading.
Is the end hopeful to you? Does it seem as though the light of the person, their memory stays intact but fluid as it whispers away? Or does it seem final and sad? Or both?
Comment is about Next Bed Over (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
Lisa,
The movement across the page really feels like falling...I was kind of afraid of the end before I got there.
Comment is about Falling In and Out of Love (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
As always, so much gratitude for anyone who reads this....
opinions about whether punctuation should be added or not would be welcomed
always interested if folks feel the title works, or what others might have used as title.
Comment is about At Noon (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
Daughters are seen as a burden in certain traditional cultures.
Comment is about her parents (blog)
Original item by Robert C Gaulke
Not sure how to interpret this. Money trumps love?. Maybe I'm completely on the wrong track?.......
Comment is about her parents (blog)
Original item by Robert C Gaulke
Bo, things are looking groovy, hey?
Bo, you're onna roll, hey?
Bo, go do you're Brexit trick, hey?
Bo, knife's only rubba, hey
Bo, don't listen critics, hey?
Bo, you're circus chief, hey?
Bo, top dog in charge of all, hey?
Bo, not gonna fall? hey?
(Blood oaf....)
Comment is about "HEY BO!" (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thanks Keith, just trying to coax those shy artists into expressing themselves out loud somehow. Really appreciate the comment.
Comment is about keith jeffries (poet profile)
Original item by keith jeffries
Hi Adam, thanks for the comment on Murmur Love. I'm just trying to encourage a shy artist into expressing themselves out loud. Looking forward to reading (and listening to) yours in the next few days. T
Comment is about Adam Rabinowitz (poet profile)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
Hi Lisa, this is really effective; it left me reeling a little. It's so authoritative that (if not for the final line, personalising it somewhat) I'd think you were making a statement about all relationships.
Comment is about Falling In and Out of Love (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
Mr Bojangles...now dancing to the tune of his own choice. Should
be interesting/entertaining - a change from the European Two-Step
of recent years.
Comment is about "HEY BO!" (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Devon Brock
Thu 25th Jul 2019 23:08
I've noticed the chat window problem with older versions of Windows. I don't have it with 10, but my work computer, Windows 9, I think, or whatever came before 10, has the same behavior.
D
Comment is about Adam Rabinowitz (poet profile)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
Is there cosmic karma Rachel? There appears to be certain phases of consciousness where lessons have to be learned (for example the thirties when so much conflict was triggered. I think we all share the spoils and the trials of humanity in equal measure to our " civilized" veneer . Social media is like the Aquarian age coming to roost, and we are using it here. That would not have been so freely available even in my parents' time.
Your thoughtful worrying poem is really a fine piece of reaching out, and I hope and trust you are doing OK.
Ray
Comment is about truth or dare? (even no answer is an answer) (blog)
Original item by nunya
elPintor
Thu 25th Jul 2019 18:53
I like the line
murmur love, ....
then I will sing...
Shows real support.
Comment is about Murmur Love (blog)
Original item by Tom
I'd forgotten all about this one. I don't get very many quiet nights at the telescope these days, I can tell ya.
Comment is about A Quiet Night At The Telescope (blog)
Original item by Tom
A theme which strikes a chord with me. I live on the 2nd floor (UK
definition) of a 19th century property and note constant to-ing and
fro-ing via my window frame by a line of tiny ants who occasionally
gather in numbers (especially around the base of my electric kettle
when the power is on - are they getting a buzz from it, I wonder?!).
I'm content to let them be, except when their numbers become
invasive in total. Then I take some aggressive action to deter their
impudence.
Comment is about 'I must have brought their home inside for fuel, heating my small house' (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Tom,
"Don´t be scared and keep going" are the words which stand out from this poem. Boldness, courage and persevereance as little is lost or of no value. There is a powerful message here.
Well crafted with a very appropriate vocabulary.
Thank you for this
Keith
Comment is about Murmur Love (blog)
Original item by Tom
Heck, memories of the WWII Years are almost 'the in-thing' right now, on a world platform. Someone might get a chuckle.
But 'childhood is childhood', isn't it? How much has it really changed?
Comment is about 'Brownie' Monster! (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Martin and others,
thank you for commenting on this poem. It is much appreciated.
Keith
Comment is about Beneath the Surface (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Bloody hell
Watcha asking
Me to do
I'm telly basking?
Brain is in
Chill-out mode
Soapy-type
Don't wake it, goad
Nihil wot?........
Comment is about NIHILISTIC POETRY (blog)
Original item by ray pool
dk I wait watching WOL's website
Waiting to pounce on your verse
Here comes a nice tasty poem
'Cat and mouse' play, (how perverse)
Here little poem......
Comment is about Cat & Mouse (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Rays of sunshine will soon touch the blackness
Comment is about Light and Darkness (blog)
Original item by jami
Thu 25th Jul 2019 12:46
Thanks Tom, Avishek, Lisa, Fish and Devon for the likes, and Don for the comment. Much appreciated!
Jennifer
Comment is about Leonardo da Vinci (blog)
Original item by Jennifer Malden
<Deleted User> (9882)
Thu 25th Jul 2019 11:02
and Lisa, not shit tinted glasses eh? a goodo Don one! ?
Rose ?
Comment is about Shit! How I Hate This Damn Phrase (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Great writing as usual Ray! Can really relate to this one - sounds very familiar - dilapidated bikes - decidedly scruffy like urchins - and we jarred our bones and tested our nerve doing things that could have had serious consequences. At that age injury or death is something that happens to other people!!!!
Jennifer
Comment is about SCHOOL HOLIDAYS IN THE FIFTIES (blog)
Original item by ray pool
progress at what cost.
Perhaps someone needs to invent special glasses so that everyone can see the world through a poets eyes.
Comment is about Shit! How I Hate This Damn Phrase (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Really liked this one, Zach, unusual choice of words, and the title is very original.
Jennifer
Comment is about liplit (07/24/2019) (blog)
Original item by Zach Dafoe
A very thoughtful poem. Thanks for sharing.
Binte
Comment is about truth or dare? (even no answer is an answer) (blog)
Original item by nunya
Thank you kindly!
Comment is about Dean Fraser - The Quantum Poet (poet profile)
Original item by Dean Fraser - The Quantum Poet
Hugo Paz
Thu 25th Jul 2019 01:13
I am enjoying the way this work is sounding in my ear, listening to slow jazz, trying to put off my late workout?
Comment is about Ga Ga Rhyme (blog)
Original item by Rick Varden
Devon Brock
Wed 24th Jul 2019 23:57
That is a great tune I haven't heard in years. Yes, culpability is a hard pill to swallow. It is often that I can only sigh and resign myself to the harm that I've caused, both in the personal and environmental spheres. On another note, I don't think that there was ever a time when we were "good". Not that I do not have hope, mind you. But hope, like faith, requires a leap from truth, which often involves an undeserved absolution.
D
Comment is about truth or dare? (even no answer is an answer) (blog)
Original item by nunya
elPintor
Wed 24th Jul 2019 23:35
Thanks, Devon. Just feeling like a bit of a ramble.
Before I saw your comment, I was just thinking...
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5mf-BIZumaA
I don't believe that history will look back on us, here, in the Information Age, quite as kindly as those that came before us--it may be that with knowledge, there is culpability.
Comment is about truth or dare? (even no answer is an answer) (blog)
Original item by nunya
Devon Brock
Wed 24th Jul 2019 23:29
This is a great poem. This can take on both a personal and societal reading. Personally, I would forego any edits, for what that's worth, it just packs a punch and I can read the exhaustion in it. Thanks for taking the time to put this one down.
D
Comment is about truth or dare? (even no answer is an answer) (blog)
Original item by nunya
Devon Brock
Fri 26th Jul 2019 10:52
Adam, I don't think this poem needs punctuation. It has a great rhythm that will stall if punctuated. This is just my opinion, of course. "Converse All-Stars high topped and rainbow". Dang Brutha! This poem moves seamlessly through flat societal expectations to an exuberant throwing off of shackles. I could see her flipping the bird and whistling down the way. So does this poem and it's title work? Yep.
D
Comment is about At Noon (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz