Mon 3rd Mar 2014 12:57
welcome. lovely little poem here.
you may want to check your blogs as you have posted two empty messages here.
Comment is about Olivia Martinez (poet profile)
Original item by Olivia Martinez
Mon 3rd Mar 2014 12:54
very powerful, andy. the previous one made me shiver, this has done some more deeper.
really enjoying looking forward to reading this book.
Comment is about Prisoners of War (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Mon 3rd Mar 2014 11:20
First is the wellcome silence
then it returns to draw compassion
on his return to the world he was taken from.
If you make it to the next Stockport W O L
please can you bring a copy of the book it is taken from - - - thanks.
David R Mellor
Sun 2nd Mar 2014 19:28
thank you ms starfish x
Comment is about I FELT LIFE (blog)
Original item by David R Mellor
Sun 2nd Mar 2014 18:40
This is lovely! .....You and your seeds (Our House)
Comment is about I Am That Seed (blog)
Original item by Steve
Sun 2nd Mar 2014 18:35
Poignant piece of writing.
Sun 2nd Mar 2014 18:31
I really like this, particularly the line "brightened enlightened". Lovely picture too and title.
Comment is about to beyond the hills (blog)
Sat 1st Mar 2014 23:27
Not me, Graham. I was peeping over the top of our settee.
Comment is about Cantabrae Tales (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Sat 1st Mar 2014 18:41
It wasn't you chanting this at the Dnipri game the other night was it
Sat 1st Mar 2014 16:12
Thank u, Steve) I welcome you to Saint-Petersburg! It will be one of your fantastic travelling,no doubt. Wish you to get only joy of your creation!
Comment is about Steve (poet profile)
Sat 1st Mar 2014 15:44
Hi Lesya, thanks for looking in on my page. St Petersburg is a place I've always wanted to visit. Perhaps one day . .
Comment is about Lesya Grass (poet profile)
Original item by Lesya Grass
Sat 1st Mar 2014 15:42
Thanks for dropping in MC and Lesya.
You've got a good point about line 4 MC. That line has been stuck on my pad for a long time and has been responsible for starting off quite a few poems of mine but until now has never made into the final cut. Its been on the cutting room floor for so long -and its such a nice line- I decided to keep it in but as you have noticed it doesn't quite fit.
I continually re hash my poems so I'll return to this and sort it soon,
Comment is about The Secret of Happiness (blog)
Sat 1st Mar 2014 13:42
not sure how this formatted , first time I have posted from the inside lane of the m6
Comment is about Pancake Days (blog)
Original item by Shoeless Carole
Sat 1st Mar 2014 01:25
This is just first-class. Brilliant.
Comment is about They Put Milk in the Rain. (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Fri 28th Feb 2014 22:55
MC, you should never throw in the teet owl - it is an endangered species.
Comment is about Vive la Revolution (blog)
Fri 28th Feb 2014 15:19
So, when you get to Ga-Ga in Selby are you said
to have "thrown in the tea towel"?
Fri 28th Feb 2014 15:09
Welcome to the site, you the Goan poet. What a lovely, laid-back sort of poem, bringing warmth to our cold, wet winter.
Thank you for sharing the sunshine with us. I hope you post some more.
Comment is about Another Day Of Bliss (blog)
Original item by Sunny Chopra
Fri 28th Feb 2014 07:24
Absolutely. Celia, Trevor, the Railway Children who patronised the villagers, plus Beeching, they're all there!
Comment is about GHOST TRAINS ON THE MIDDLEWOOD WAY (blog)
Original item by Steven Waling
Thu 27th Feb 2014 23:48
right on track Steve :-)
Thu 27th Feb 2014 20:53
I am a new user, I have recently signed up, that's why all poems for me are new)
Thu 27th Feb 2014 20:33
hi Leysa thanx on reading and commenting on my poem. its quite old. I post new/old work. yes do work in a library, its good to be near books and do keep writing :)
Thu 27th Feb 2014 20:22
Fully agree with the idea "life is history"... Outstanding or dramatic, spectacular or unworthy.. It's you who decide to write a new history with events that nobody has never seen before.. Your life is your history.. Write a history of your own life! Thanks for a poem! P.S. I would also go to work in a library or ..school.
Comment is about GLIMPSE OF OLD THINGS . (blog)
Original item by nick armbrister
Thu 27th Feb 2014 19:55
There is something that made me think about happiness itself.. Simple phrases, but absolutely meaningful.. Always looking for something special ..special day.. special words.. and even special happiness... we're are missing the chance to be happy right now or at least.. to admit it.. You're happy.. do u feel it?)
Great! I like it!
Patricia and Stefan Wilde
Thu 27th Feb 2014 19:51
we could do with a compliant trip on this plane-two one way tickets to chillsville
Comment is about 'The prize' (blog)
Thu 27th Feb 2014 13:25
You're welcome, MC. It's from a tea-towel we sell in Selby Abbey.
Thu 27th Feb 2014 12:49
i agree with M.C. here, Andy. it's a very short piece but the silence after counting to ten made me shiver.
i am well familar with Paul Celan and think he would certainly have liked this tribute (i know i did).
When's the book out? If the rest of the book is as good, this should be a cracker of a book.
Comment is about Counting to Ten (blog)
Thu 27th Feb 2014 12:47
lovely stuff. cats are pretty cruel creatures i think sometimes but there is a innocence and a charm here which is really tender.
Comment is about Cat’s Prayer (blog)
Thu 27th Feb 2014 10:31
Ho-ho! Like your own "ages" and have shared them elsewhere.
Thu 27th Feb 2014 10:26
I like the premise of this poem - the sense of
not knowing what you have got when you have it
and the tragedy of awareness that comes too late.
From a personal POV, I would have discarded the
last line of the first stanza. It seems a bit
awkward in the context and I would have gone for
something like -
While life passed by pell-mell.
- also keeping the rhyme lines that feature in the
But that's just my view, no more.
Thu 27th Feb 2014 10:17
An intriguing use of modern terminology ("recycle
bins") in a poignant reminder of what was allowed
to happen in war when humanity lost sight of that very word and millions suffered unspeakable
horrors as a result of what was not conflict but hate-driven murder.
Thu 27th Feb 2014 10:02
An enjoyable rhythmic rant on behalf of many
of us who feel victims of unceasing and
apparently uncaring "progress" (for that read
I sympathise and add my own voice to the demand
for the new that does not exclude the old in
Comment is about I want a New Computer (blog)
Original item by C Richard Miles
Thu 27th Feb 2014 09:06
a poetry editor and a gestalt counsellor. Hmm, we dine with them don't we?
I think any perspective could furnish a poem, and a good poem stands on its own merits. All the philosophy, religion, psychology &etc available feeds in to the common experience - and that's what counts to my mind. More learning in poetry and the qualities of perception can only help, I'd have thought, but I don't know whether you're commending MM or despairing of him!
Comment is about The art of choosing: magazine editors reveal how they sift and select (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Wed 26th Feb 2014 18:42
thanks again David - yes Soundcloud is a good way for me to get some of the music tracks I've done on the new CD out as 'samplers', I've picked the more musical ones - there's a fair chunk of stuff on the CD that's more poetry based - with the music backings more 'ambient'. There's a corker coming up later this week once I've uploaded it - really spooky :-)
also - if you fancy a 'butcher's' at the old dog performing live - there's quite a few postings on youtube - some using backing tracks : https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCytAVhsFTTdxE2LAKYV2ZoA
thanks once again for your kind and supportive comments
Comment is about David Blake (poet profile)
Original item by David Blake
Wed 26th Feb 2014 18:34
No worries Ian. You seem to be keeping busy at least! I've 'followed' you on Soundcloud recently. Some pretty decent stuff there!
Comment is about Ian Whiteley (poet profile)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Wed 26th Feb 2014 18:30
thanks for the comment on 'Anytown' Steve and apologies for the tardiness of my reply - I've not been spending enough time on WOL recently and I've got behind with both my thank-you's and my readings of other folks work - something I intend to remedy as we head in to March :-)
Wed 26th Feb 2014 18:28
thanks for the comment on 'Walkin' Man' Dave and apologies for the tardiness of my reply - I've not been spending enough time on WOL recently and I've got behind with both my thank-you's and my readings of other folks work - something I intend to remedy as we head in to March :-) will be back in touch I'm sure once I catch up on my reading.
I also liked your reading at the last Tudor - as always - there's some quality stuff being read there at the moment
Comment is about Dave Carr (poet profile)
Original item by Dave Carr
Wed 26th Feb 2014 18:27
thanks for the comment on 'Anytown' Laura and apologies for the tardiness of my reply - I've not been spending enough time on WOL recently and I've got behind with both my thank-you's and my readings of other folks work - something I intend to remedy as we head in to March :-) will be back in touch I'm sure once I catch up on my reading
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Wed 26th Feb 2014 18:26
thanks for the comments on 'Anytown' and 'Here There Be Demons' Mike and apologies for the tardiness of my reply - I've not been spending enough time on WOL recently and I've got behind with both my thank-you's and my readings of other folks work - something I intend to remedy as we head in to March :-) will be back in touch I'm sure once I catch up on my reading
Comment is about Noetic-fret! (poet profile)
Original item by Noetic-fret!
Wed 26th Feb 2014 18:24
thanks for the comment on 'Anytown' David and apologies for the tardiness of my reply - I've not been spending enough time on WOL recently and I've got behind with both my thank-you's and my readings of other folks work - something I intend to remedy as we head in to March :-) will be back in touch I'm sure once I catch up on my reading
Wed 26th Feb 2014 16:40
experts on paper are nothing like experts with common fucking sense!(that's an angry exclmation mark by the way.)
Rock on Wildeys! (friendly !)x
Comment is about steeled (blog)
Wed 26th Feb 2014 15:15
J.C. - ho-ho! However, when reading some of the
reports of medical blunders, perhaps the chuckle
has a slight reticence about it!
Comment is about PROSTRATE WITH A PROSTATE (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Wed 26th Feb 2014 14:00
Wow. This is an amazing poem. As I was reading it, I was thinking of you in the shop, seeing the geese, and starting with the idea of this :D
I can't pick out any lines - top to toe this is fantastic, one of the best things I've read for a while now. Funny, poignant, gotta be original ! I think it must be the ONLY poem in the world about a frozen goose in the Tesco heh.
I will pick out one line. 'We eat what you are.' - so simple, succinct, powerful.
Nice one Ray
Comment is about Wild Geese in Tesco (blog)
Original item by Ray Miller
Wed 26th Feb 2014 13:54
Of course, I now need to know who ran that bill up!
Love this poem but do need to know where that bill is from!
Comment is about Take this bill (blog)
Original item by Gray Nicholls
Wed 26th Feb 2014 11:46
Very acutely observed, Graham, and with a happy ending, too. You take us on a journey backwards, away from death, which we'd all like to go on.
Comment is about H (blog)
Original item by Graham Sherwood
Mon 24th Feb 2014 23:20
Your last line reminds me of an incident 6 years ago when I was about to go under the surgeon's knife to repair a rupture. As I lay in pre-med slowly going under I heard the surgeon say, "I'm just going to take your hand"
I just had time in consciousness to think, "Shi..."
Needless to say I checked my limbs when I came round.
Mon 24th Feb 2014 20:55
This particular 'romp through' your mind conjures up many troubling images...positively kabbalistic at times! Are we locked into a fight with the demiurge? Are you to sacrifice yourselves saving 'us'? You seem to offer us hope. I wish I was as optimistic.
Comment is about Reception of Deception, Exodus in Revelation (blog)
Original item by Xero Xellotath
Mon 24th Feb 2014 20:12
we're going to need to be careful with our !'s
apparently,some 'expert' reckons it always denotes a joke..uh?
so if we comment on your poems in future and say oh! this poem was terrific!
will it look as though we are joking?
or if one nation declares to another-
THIS MEANS WAR!
the other nation might think-phew!thank god- its only a joke! or if a lover writes to another-oh! I love you!
would the recipient think-yeh right..
hahaha! and you can defo take that exclamation mark as jocular.xx
Mon 24th Feb 2014 20:04
I know that of which I write - being an ongoing
PSA/prostate biopsy patient at a major London
hospital. You have my sympathy for your own
Mon 24th Feb 2014 19:27
and-just think of the savings that can be made on heating bills!
Comment is about To let(anytime and forever) (blog)
Mon 24th Feb 2014 12:45
About `knowing what it`s about` (a true story)
As a sixty year old ancient desperately trying to
catch up with my education at Uni, I had two (yes two) prostate operations whilst studying.
I bet there were not many students went down with that during that particular year?
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