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Harry O'Neill

Fri 16th Oct 2015 13:21


Lucky Michael.

(I like the inclusivness of line twelve)

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 16th Oct 2015 13:11


Well (very well!) said Graham.

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 16th Oct 2015 13:04


Changed mine!

In the stillness of
This autumnal windlessness
One leaf pirouettes

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 16th Oct 2015 12:34

Oops - my error in not following the first line.
Duh!
In the stillness of
a quiet mind
my imagination runs riot.

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Stu Buck

Fri 16th Oct 2015 11:57

hi ray. for maximum annoyance in the area of non-poetry look up steve roggenbuck.

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raypool

Fri 16th Oct 2015 11:11

Thanks Stu. You have correctly analysed the poem - it was written as a piss take - I just wondered why some of the stuff presented is just tarted up conversation.
I'm not sure if the word "blog" resonates with the spirit of inner exploration - I think not.

It does sound pretentious and "snobby" to elevate art , but it is worth some effort.

By the way my sofa is a disgusting resting place !
regards Ray

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Julian (Admin)

Fri 16th Oct 2015 11:10

Blimey! The Hughes family's gift to commentators and critics that keeps on giving, sadly. Intrigue, as ever with Hughes, Plath, etc. In the Heptonstall cemetery where Plath is buried there is another grave, that of Asa Benveniste - https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Asa_Benveniste -
and the inscription reads: foolish enough to have been a poet.
Old Ted must sometimes think the same as he looks down/up.

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Adam Whitworth

Fri 16th Oct 2015 10:06

The effort you have made here is obvious, i must applaud your determination. You have achieved the 5-7-5 syllable arrangement and also announced your work as a 'Haiku',
this is an impressive start and I believe you can develop even further, i would love to see your amazing progress.

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Abi Thomson

Fri 16th Oct 2015 09:43

Huw thanks for your comment sounds like a visualisation of my poem in life form, fantastic.

Lynne I have read Plath and like her poetry very much, massive compliment thanks so much X

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Lynne Coulstock

Fri 16th Oct 2015 09:06

Abi, your poetry puts me in mind of Sylvia Plath's poems, have you read her?

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Stu Buck

Fri 16th Oct 2015 09:02

my pretentious mind says 'what a clever attack on the mundanity of subject matter seen in todays poetry' but my normal mind says you need to clean your sofa.

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Stu Buck

Fri 16th Oct 2015 09:00

brilliant! the idea that only tortured souls can write poetry is wrong i think. however, i do subscribe to the theory that you need to have suffered to portray true suffering.
i dont know if it was meant, but there is a bitterness running through this that does, infact, indicate as certain 'rumness'!

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Ledger de la Bald

Fri 16th Oct 2015 07:31

Aye Aye John-she was certainly of independant thought.

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Ledger de la Bald

Fri 16th Oct 2015 07:30

Harry, please, surely you mean the cider house?

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Abi Thomson

Fri 16th Oct 2015 01:06

The structure is purposely all over the place to shown insecurity and unsettling emotions, perhaps interpreted to mean the structure reflects jagged memories and flaky truths

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Graham Sherwood

Fri 16th Oct 2015 00:00

In the stillness of
this dark melancholia
catastrophe stirs

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John Coopey

Thu 15th Oct 2015 23:33

As the great man said to his wife when she caught their son playing with himself, "I think you'll find it's just a phase he's going through for the rest of his life".

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Rebecca Miller

Thu 15th Oct 2015 22:50

Cynthia, I love this idea :) And so today during my lunch break I decided to give it a go.

In the stillness of
the early morning quiet
I moan out your name.

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 15th Oct 2015 22:45


Thanks Brandon, well spotted, fixed it thanks

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 15th Oct 2015 22:36


Don`t be intimidated John...Stick with it! Stick with it!

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 15th Oct 2015 22:21


In the stillness of
this autumnal silentness
one leaf pirouettes.


Could never figure out whether the syllables should be strictly counted or only stressed.






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brandon sproule

Thu 15th Oct 2015 22:21

High rise city centre fairy tale was very funny but did have what looked to be a typo in this line.

(To serve her and, so the she wouldn`t feel harassed,)

Thanks for reading my piece and for the advice.

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 15th Oct 2015 21:11

Abi,

Lust is at it`s most sensational
Mixed up with the pro-creational.
I shout it till the world goes deaf:
Ìts far more fun than I.V.F..

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David Moore

Thu 15th Oct 2015 20:46

Its a curse!

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John Coopey

Thu 15th Oct 2015 20:41

You never lose it, David.

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John Coopey

Thu 15th Oct 2015 20:39

I keep telling my pair to get me some grandkids knocked out before I'm too old to show them how to kick a ball.

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John Coopey

Thu 15th Oct 2015 20:37

A day well-spent in my opinion, Dorinda.
I can relate to being bribed to stop reading my poetry. (Between me and you I'd give a bob or two to avoid some of the stuff on this site!)

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John Coopey

Thu 15th Oct 2015 20:33

Your Aunty Doris sounds like a woman of eminent good sense, Ledge.

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John Coopey

Thu 15th Oct 2015 20:31

Marvellous, marvellous stuff and nonsense, Harry. But entwined in lovely ryhthm. I particularly liked "Scallops of Chantilly lace" which brings back personal memories of my glory days murdering Big Bopper's said song at the kareoke.

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Lynn Hamilton

Thu 15th Oct 2015 20:31

In the stillness of
My bated breath
I hold, release and escape

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David Moore

Thu 15th Oct 2015 20:24

WANKER!

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 15th Oct 2015 20:24

Dorinda
Not so much pure Jabberwocky -ish
But quite respectable Hilaire Belloc - yish.

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John Coopey

Thu 15th Oct 2015 20:21

Cracking stuff, George, More kids poems, please.

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 15th Oct 2015 20:11


Not that one that stands outside the alehouse, Ledge?

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Colin Hill

Thu 15th Oct 2015 20:04

in the stillness of
your arms I can almost find
my true happiness

in the stillness of
death black crows peck at my eyes
and tear at my flesh

in the stillness of
time what will become of me
dark oblivion?

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Alex Swarbrick

Thu 15th Oct 2015 19:52

Ps Writing is in my blood, I doubt I would ever give it up but good to break off and do other stuff

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Alex Swarbrick

Thu 15th Oct 2015 19:51

I haven't looked at my flowers for ages.

They were a beautiful idea.

You puzzle me.

You seem to write in fits and starts.

Sometimes you reply to my comments, sometimes you don't.

You are a man of mystery, guess that is why I couldn't resist another peek at your work.

Thank you for the time you said I had a wonderful way with words
lovely compliment .

Take care of you

Love Alex AKA Ally/Fredy

Ps I am much more on the level than when I kept changing my name, mind you things still pretty bad at home.

:) xxx

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raypool

Thu 15th Oct 2015 17:10

a lovely romantic and quite wistful poem, Tommy. It expresses how private and revealing feelings can be when stored and treasured like a sort of Victorian album. Nice one.

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 15th Oct 2015 16:02

I like the last stanza...as a finisher.

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 15th Oct 2015 15:35

Seems like fun. I'm a stranger to the format but here goes:
The rising sun blinks through the blind
I close my eyes and sink back
Seeking refuge in my dreams.

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Nigel Astell

Thu 15th Oct 2015 15:27

Write Out Words

Collage cascade of confetti
Sparkling words weaves light
Sun-splashed gentle tones
Shades no longer hidden.

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 15th Oct 2015 15:16

Sounds like a personal domestic tragedy. Enduring the loss
of a sentient animal in sudden circumstances can be very
traumatic even though animals like cats have the need to
wander, often far beyond their own homes, and that can
only add to the risk of getting the bad news...although
it is usually a vehicle that is the cause.

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 15th Oct 2015 14:57

I accept that citizens of any particular country must make
sure they know the law as it stands there but there seem
to be some countries whose system of law has no place in the modern world. Step forward Iran - with your medieval
fear-driven socio-religious controls. Maybe - just maybe -
in the times to come, your place in the world will be
earned and given respect and admiration. But on
present evidence that is a long long way off.
Avaaz should be taking up the cause of these two voices
in the wilderness.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 15th Oct 2015 12:49

This has essence, beautifully captured. 'twixt' is odd, but still, IMO, very appropriate to the tone.

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Steven Waling

Thu 15th Oct 2015 11:27

Good question. I always thought there was.

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Stu Buck

Thu 15th Oct 2015 11:23

this is great tommy. a fragment of time encapsulated with emotion and clarity. whoop and joy for you.

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Greg Freeman

Thu 15th Oct 2015 11:11

Good point, Steven, will amend. But is there an apostrophe in 1990's? I always think not ...

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Ledger de la Bald

Thu 15th Oct 2015 10:59

I like this one Tommy-it gives a glimpse, and just a glimpse, into a secret.

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Steven Waling

Thu 15th Oct 2015 10:49

I didn't know Slam performances started at the end of the 2nd century AD, I thought they didn't start till the 1990's (proofreading needed...)

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Lynn Hamilton

Wed 14th Oct 2015 22:35

I just like to write x

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