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charliebrogan

Mon 11th Aug 2014 21:58

I love the restraint of a Haiku and this is great. Really like it.

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Tommy Carroll

Mon 11th Aug 2014 20:26

Hi Chris, It has taken a couple of readings- and no doubt more- to get the gist of this work, obvious as it maybe. It resounds, almost a war poem, almost. Tommy

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Mon 11th Aug 2014 20:20

oh how spooky'n'coincidental! we did one on the very same subject,(2nd August)called 'Upon leaving the scrapyard'.Inclusive of the very same 'card wiping' procedure.Yeah spooky eh.

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John Coopey

Mon 11th Aug 2014 19:02

I do have peonies, as it happens, Iz. But the "stones" I invited my kids to see were really just stones!

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John Coopey

Mon 11th Aug 2014 18:55

Excellent, Laura. Agree with Graham about that phrase.
Can't stop hearing "The Living Yeras" in my head now!

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John Coopey

Mon 11th Aug 2014 18:51

I rather prefer it that way, MC.

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 11th Aug 2014 17:42

Laura, I really like this a lot. The words come at you like a whisper. Wonderful words like "all tissue thin and chalk for bones" bloody well done. A lovely piece of work.

Graham

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Tommy Carroll

Mon 11th Aug 2014 16:10

Come on Laura spill the literal beans. What are you on abt hmm? tommy x

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 11th Aug 2014 15:54

Hello Mick - I too had a family member - a maternal uncle - who was killed in action in August 1916. Family research turned up stuff I never heard from my mother who was of a generation which kept its cards close to its chest when it came to what was talked about. My late father also served and survived through 1917-1918...and was in uniform again for WW2. To have endured and witnessed so much grief and suffering in a single lifetime is almost beyond my own comprehension.

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Mon 11th Aug 2014 11:17

two breaths taken away (but only for a second or twelve)xx

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Mon 11th Aug 2014 11:11

you are too young to 'cackle'just yet Solar-and put that bloody broomstick down!

You'll be giving your black cat ideas!

as always-cheers.xx

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Mon 11th Aug 2014 11:08

Philip.
The answer to your question is as follows-

a small flesh-eating civet-like mammal of the family Vivveridae (or Herpestidae),found in tropical Africa and Asia,and noted for its ability
to....KILL VENEMOUS SNAKES (Marathi mangus)

so says/reads the Oxford English dictionary.

No charge for the info chuck and appreciate your reading of the poem.xx

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 11th Aug 2014 09:04

Hello Cecilia,

Welcome to Write Out Loud, we hope you are enjoying the site and we're really looking forward to reading some of your work. I know that you will be warmly welcomed by other WOL-ers too.

Thanks for having already uploaded a picture of yourself, it’s really good to see what our fellow poets look like.

Have a good look around, there’s always lots going on and if you have the time to make some comments about the work of other poets please feel free to do so, it’s often the best way to get some constructive feedback about your own work too.
There’s usually somebody who’ll help you out with any problems that you might encounter, so just ask and someone will get back to you.
WOL is a friendly, creative and unassuming place, so welcome from all of us once again.

The Write Out Loud Team.

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Dominic James

Mon 11th Aug 2014 08:50

Thanks for comment on Beethoven, Candice. Yup, he gets to me: it's music first I think.
Dom.

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Tommy Carroll

Mon 11th Aug 2014 08:48

Winston- 'Once more unto the breach...' Thanks for the comment you left for 'This time on a sunny day'. Like you, I like a surprise. tommy

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Tommy Carroll

Mon 11th Aug 2014 00:30

Hi Winston ta for your comment on ''Anyone for tennis?'' I could argue that the simpler the dialogue the easier to understand and the more powerful your message will resound: ''Eat less move more'' ;) tommy

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Tommy Carroll

Mon 11th Aug 2014 00:27

Hi Natalie, ta for your comment here. I like the idea of a lack of build up, enter mid-scene, leave mid-scene. I was told by my English tutor that that was not real literature(some years ago) and that put me off. Natalie, I have a log-book of such including this ''Hockey'' excerpt. You have only to ask. tommy 11656

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Tommy Carroll

Mon 11th Aug 2014 00:21

Hi Winston ta for your comment. I could argue that the simpler the dialogue the easier to understand and the more powerful your message will resound: ''Eat less move more'' ;) tommy

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Natalie Audoire

Sun 10th Aug 2014 23:06

This is so intriguing!! I want to read more...

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Cecilia Kovacs

Sun 10th Aug 2014 23:03

Thank you for your comment, Natalie!

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Natalie Audoire

Sun 10th Aug 2014 23:01

This is so beautiful. I read it twice and so apt on a stormy night like this. I had the soundtrack. I love the end - so strong, determined and full of faith..."it's not wearing out". Thank you x

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Natalie Audoire

Sun 10th Aug 2014 22:57

This is so stunning and heart breaking. Never get bored of your poems Solar. Please keep writing. x

P.S. Thank you so much for your comment on 12:26...I have set my alarm ;)

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Natalie Audoire

Sun 10th Aug 2014 22:52

Yes, I agree with Candice - Raw and honest and refreshing. I think poems like this are so important. I am sure there are a lot of people out there that can identify with your situation. That's what I love about poetry - if you dare to be vulnerable and put it out there, you can reach out to others without even realising it. Thank you so much for your comment on 12:26. It means a lot. x

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Natalie Audoire

Sun 10th Aug 2014 22:44

Thank you so much guys x

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winston plowes

Sun 10th Aug 2014 22:06

Loved before the busses. and the last line. great writing Tommy

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winston plowes

Sun 10th Aug 2014 22:05

Some very interesting words inserted here Tommy to keep our interest in this narrative whilst making us change our step. Win x

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winston plowes

Sun 10th Aug 2014 22:02

I have never written a play but You are showing us how powerful a simple dialogue can be here Tommy. Not so simple to do as well as this though. x

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Cecilia Kovacs

Sun 10th Aug 2014 21:36

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Rose Casserley

Sun 10th Aug 2014 21:33

no criticisms-just one word-BRAVO!..oh...
and-WELCOME CECILIA!x

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Rose Casserley

Sun 10th Aug 2014 21:21

had a cackle at this one Wilde duo!x

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Rose Casserley

Sun 10th Aug 2014 21:18

very very clever and effective use of simple words-
-a dish of a poem....



yumyum!x

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Rose Casserley

Sun 10th Aug 2014 21:15

what? no gold star guys?hey Mr Wilde! we'll have less of that and all!...;0)x

Martin-before I put that futon on ebay,fancy making me an offer? haha-BIG THANKS GUY!x

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Candice Reineke

Sun 10th Aug 2014 20:42

Agreed Dominic, his work is so inspiring and a wonder how a deaf man was able to create such moving music. Funny how you endearingly call him "SOB" haha

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Candice Reineke

Sun 10th Aug 2014 20:24

Phil, I like the brutal honesty of this, and I'm glad you have poetry as an outlet.

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Isobel

Sun 10th Aug 2014 18:44

Thanks for liking my stones JC :)) x

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Isobel

Sun 10th Aug 2014 18:42

Thanks for getting me to post summat Graham. It's reminded me how much I like sharing my thoughts. And I've loved hearing from old friends. I'll have to start writing again!

xx

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Isobel

Sun 10th Aug 2014 18:40

Welcome to WOL Candice - I'm glad you seem to be enjoying it. I've enjoyed reading your poetry - I'm not a great one for poetry about nature, but when it reflects emotions or moods, then I like it very much.

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Isobel

Sun 10th Aug 2014 18:34

Hi Harry - glad you found my poem entertaining one way or another - don't think she'll ever be singing that one - a less materialistic girl would be hard to find - I am very blessed! xx

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Isobel

Sun 10th Aug 2014 18:32

Thank you for commenting mon amie! Your comments always reassure me that I haven't quite forgotten all the french I learnt after all!

A bientot!

xx

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Isobel

Sun 10th Aug 2014 18:27

Thanks for your lovely comment on my poem Margaret - I'm much like you in that I'm not spending as much time on WOL as I used to - there is always something to catch my attention when I do though - we're very lucky to be a part of it!

Take care for now.

Isobel x

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Isobel

Sun 10th Aug 2014 18:24

All is wonderfully well with me and mine thank you Anthony :))

And thank you everyone for commenting!

This one wasn't meant to be at all sad - though I can see that it's open to interpretation. Full of hope? Yes - most definitely - life is a wonderful thing if you refuse to let it beat you!

John Coopey - do you have peonies in your garden too? I can remember my old dad totally embarrasing me in front of a school friend by using a similar line...

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Isobel

Sun 10th Aug 2014 18:12

You are very lucky to live near the sea!

I enjoyed the melancholy mood you created and then dispersed within the poem. People watching is a fascinating way to fill time and the beach a very calming place to be - you get that across in your poem.

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Tommy Carroll

Sun 10th Aug 2014 16:52

Well accompanied poems. TC

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Tommy Carroll

Sun 10th Aug 2014 16:48

Ian Hi, It strikes me as having a total lack of cynicism (skeptical yes, in parts and that's no bad thing at all) - which coming from your stand point is damn hard to do. Tommy

ps I'm surprised there are not a lot more posts for this work Ian :/ tc

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Anthony Emmerson

Sun 10th Aug 2014 15:00

. . . and her mother collects word, arranging them into wonderful and curious patterns . .

Hi Isobel, hope all is well with you & yours,
Regards,
A.E. x

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Dominic James

Sun 10th Aug 2014 11:50

because his music can bring tears to my eyes, make me cry.

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Martin Elder

Sat 9th Aug 2014 23:21

Nice one solar I love that last stanza
'and your fart riddled futon
left stashed in my hall
the one that even the dog refused to sleep on'.

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Francine

Sat 9th Aug 2014 18:20

Je suis tellement heureuse de te voir écrire encore... cela ne pouvait pas être plus parfait ! J'aime beaucoup ce poème, triste, mais aussi plein d'espoir.

Bisous mon amie :-)

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Francine

Sat 9th Aug 2014 17:58

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Graham Sherwood

Sat 9th Aug 2014 11:01

Hello Issie,

Welcome to Write Out Loud, we hope you are enjoying the site and we're really looking forward to reading some of your work. I know that you will be warmly welcomed by other WOL-ers too.

If you haven’t already added a picture to your profile please try and do so, it’s always good to see what our fellow poets look like.

Have a good look around, there’s always lots going on and if you have the time to make some comments about the work of other poets please feel free to do so, it’s often the best way to get some constructive feedback about your own work too.
There’s usually somebody who’ll help you out with any problems that you might encounter, so just ask and someone will get back to you.
WOL is a friendly, creative and unassuming place, so welcome from all of us once again.

The Write Out Loud Team.

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