Fri 22nd May 2015 18:15
thank you Lynn - though I prefer to call them mules rather than clogs
Comment is about alive (blog)
Original item by jeremy young
Fri 22nd May 2015 16:20
As you usually do, you baffle me with these words. The first six lines I find incomprehensible but the remaining nine are really quite lovely. You are a Rubik's cube poet for me.
Good to see you back again on here.
Comment is about Now (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Fri 22nd May 2015 16:16
I've made some changes. Here's the original:
When you come to me
problems laid out on a plate
wetness glistening your eyes
looking to me desperately
for some miraculous reply
I cannot give
do you forget that I too
struggle with how to live?
Appreciate the feedback thank you x
Comment is about The Struggle (blog)
Fri 22nd May 2015 15:45
It was good to see you at the last Stockport W O L meeting will you be putting those mug shots of us on the site or are they that bad!
Comment is about Julian Jordon (poet profile)
Original item by Julian Jordon
Fri 22nd May 2015 14:17
So Luke said to my wife, 'I can't eat this beef stew.' My wife said, 'Shut up! It's custard pie!
Comment is about 'Poetry should have bite and snarl, but it's better for joy and sadness than anger': Luke Wright (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Fri 22nd May 2015 13:25
I love this. You are a clever clogs.
Fri 22nd May 2015 12:20
an interesting subject on which I dare not comment !
However, may I suggest that in line 3 the first 'once' is not needed?
Comment is about something i must hide (blog)
Original item by muse
Fri 22nd May 2015 11:57
Thank you for your comment on 'The Smugglers Tunnel' always appreciated.
Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)
Original item by ray pool
Fri 22nd May 2015 07:53
typos too. x
Fri 22nd May 2015 06:48
Thank you, Quadrya.
Comment is about DREAMING FOR ALL TO SEE (blog)
Original item by THE PEN AND THE PAGE
Fri 22nd May 2015 06:17
good one this although you stopped for too many p's on the way up. x
Comment is about Towards the shoulders of a giant (blog)
Fri 22nd May 2015 05:35
Fri 22nd May 2015 00:44
What a lovely memoir of an historic occasion, poetically speaking. I have just got in from hearing another poetry hero, Brian Patten, reading at the Live from Worktown festival. He talked of spending evenings chatting in his orchard with Adrian Mitchell, brandy and glasses to hand. You were there, and you remember it, David. Impressive!
Comment is about 'A tremendous sense of occasion': David Andrew on the Albert Hall Incarnation (article)
Thu 21st May 2015 22:48
Yes and good ones at that ha :)
Comment is about THE BREAKFAST OF CHAMPIONS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thu 21st May 2015 22:44
I have often reflected upon Lennon's 'Imagine'.
When I was young it did inspire me to think about the various questions Lennon posed in its text.
Somewhere in time it became somewhat of a dirge to me, and although it is undeniably a work of great composition and simple melody time has exposed Lennon's then youthful naivety, which of course all youth shares.
I wonder how Lennon himself would now feel about it. I think he might possibly dislike it intensely, and may even be slightly embarrassed by it.
I am a Humanist and am deeply irreligious, although I am also fascinated by the so called great religions. That said if these religions were to be absent from our world, mankind would find some other perversion to replace them with. At the very least they make life more interesting.
Aspirational dreams become a problem when we expect them to be delivered, they are then no longer our dreams. Indeed sometimes they morph into our living nightmares.
We should guard against our dreams, and certainly the dreams of others as they are rarely the same as our own.
Thu 21st May 2015 22:42
I'm afraid these are just memories now, Helen!
Thu 21st May 2015 22:40
Now, now, Harry. Don't give in. We're both still Young Turks inside.
(An' what you doin' lookin' at yer scrotum for?)
Comment is about Don Juan in his decrepitude (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
Thu 21st May 2015 22:36
Ah, got it, Graham. It was Gaia in Eden. I read it as Gala (Bingo).
Comment is about In search of Eden (blog)
Original item by Graham Sherwood
Thu 21st May 2015 22:32
Made me laugh. A lot!
Thu 21st May 2015 22:31
Natalie, I really like this. It is very powerful and made me stop to question certain aspects of my own life. Great stuff.
Thu 21st May 2015 22:28
Wee sleekit cow'rin tim'rous beastie"! You're lucky you got one; they don't have a lot of moral rectitude!
Comment is about GOODBYE TO A LITTLE LIFETIME (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Thu 21st May 2015 22:10
No, Cynthia I like it. It's more direct more powerful. Thankyou. X
Thu 21st May 2015 21:27
Very topical, with reports of even more "well known" people
under investigation for criminal acts against youngsters when youth and its urges were in charge of barely lived lives.
Comment is about FALLEN IDOLS (blog)
Thu 21st May 2015 21:08
Thanks - I am lost and raypool. It seemed somehow more
affecting that the little life should expire within view from
the regular "eyeline" from my chair rather than a hundred
and one other places out of sight and mind.
David R Mellor
Thu 21st May 2015 20:40
thank you Colin for taking the time to comment, heart warming that you like it , all true
Comment is about I realised i was me (blog)
Original item by David R Mellor
Thu 21st May 2015 20:13
Lovely simple and direct style that is quite wistful and after my own heart! Nice title too.
Thu 21st May 2015 20:09
nice one David, especially the 'creating Marvel figures before tea' line
Thu 21st May 2015 19:29
Thanks for the advice. I will give it a go at the next open mic and see how it goes :) x
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Thu 21st May 2015 19:04
Yes indeed. This piece was inspired by that very beautiful song.
Thu 21st May 2015 18:26
Thu 21st May 2015 18:16
I do like this, it offers so many questions for discussion.
If you were to end the text with one additional line, just one word 'Discuss'
It would be extremely effective and provocative.
Maybe you did that on purpose though, leaving it to the reader to contemplate the un-posed questions.
Comment is about Love (blog)
Original item by Clive
I am lost
Thu 21st May 2015 17:50
I like the way the poem was written. I can vividly imagine what happened there.
Thu 21st May 2015 17:44
I like this one...
Comment is about Silence (blog)
Original item by Hannah Metsker
Thu 21st May 2015 17:38
great first line.
also like the fact the title doesn't get repeated.
I was cutting the lawn myself yesterday but I'm not sure I quite fit your description.
Maybe you should ask Mr Adonis round for some garden maintenance. Or just read one of Titchmarsh's novels.
Comment is about grabbing the giddy moment (blog)
Thu 21st May 2015 17:27
Comment is about Incision (blog)
Thu 21st May 2015 16:38
And as for the poem's title: it can still happen!!
Comment is about Old man rising (blog)
Thu 21st May 2015 16:25
Thanks for your comments on "Passing Feet". The poem
was inspired by my own need for a stick these days (until
the medicos get around to treatment on a back problem!).
It is even more noticeable how quick people walk when
limited to a slower pace!
Comment is about Steve (poet profile)
Original item by Steve
Thu 21st May 2015 16:19
Reading, writing and music...and surely texting? Tommy
Comment is about Hannah Metsker (poet profile)
Thu 21st May 2015 13:22
Thank you for reading and your flattering comments, Cynthia. Your comments are very much appreciated :) x
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Patricia and Stefan Wilde
Thu 21st May 2015 13:20
a lot of U's wasted that could have been emphasized ?
Comment is about ;) (blog)
Thu 21st May 2015 13:15
great! all builds up to a very humourous conclusion.xx
Thu 21st May 2015 13:12
awww poor old soul.Actually it isn't far off describing Mr Wildes early(ha!) 'skirmishes with trying to verticalize
Thu 21st May 2015 13:06
We thank you Rose for gently rap rap rapping on our chamber door....wooooooh! xx
Comment is about Spooked! (blog)
Thu 21st May 2015 10:55
Hi James. Thanks for this. I was going for a stop/start feel to match the theme of the poem.
Comment is about You - (blog)
Thu 21st May 2015 10:20
thank you travis - suggestion noted and change made
it's one of the problems when you get caught between two horses - free verse that begins as a sort of villanelle, half way through wants to be a sonnet - and then decides to be neither - words hang around
Thu 21st May 2015 10:04
Hi Gra(ha ha)am.Sorry I forgot the inclusion of bollocks and bogies.
There again,being a Lady of refinement (yeah right!)
Thu 21st May 2015 09:56
In the interests of accuracy Rose I feel obliged to point out that you omitted ball scratching and nose picking from the before he stood up section. Just saying.......
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thu 21st May 2015 09:44
May God give me strength! - a pointed pen against self-important academia - and a travesty of Aristotelian intent.
I almost want to puke.
Comment is about 'Self-schooled poet' Simon Armitage bids to become Oxford professor of poetry (article)
Thu 21st May 2015 09:43
Hi guys. Colin,thanks.Suggestions taken on board.
As to the man mauling,since there is enough of it on WOL to carpet a lot more than one mansion,maybe I 'll give you blokes a few days off!.....;o)
Last verse stays.I want to give the impression of PHEW!
M.C. Thanks for your positive views on life as a senior.Hope I can deal with it in the same way,if and when I get to your age.I 'salute' you!
Thanks also for typo spotting.
Thu 21st May 2015 09:34
oo-er! hints of 'The Raven' Keep rocking P.S.(and S.W. of course..;o)...! )
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