I think I understand, Tommy. If me, you and a dog are having a pint and me and the dog decide to form the government, you'd go along with that.
Graham - STOP THAT! - I've got a split lip!
Comment is about THINGS CAN ONLY GET BITTER (PART 2) (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Mon 14th Sep 2015 05:15
Oh, this is sweet! I'm going to show this one to my kids - they'll love it x
Comment is about THE BALLAD OF THE QUACKING OWL (blog)
Original item by THE PEN AND THE PAGE
Corbin in, his task begins
With very little thanks
It's hard to build a cabinet
With so many short planks
Comment is about THINGS CAN ONLY GET BITTER (PART 2) (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Latest news...
Scouser is shadow home secretary..
Latest news...hahaha it just gets better!
Comment is about THINGS CAN ONLY GET BITTER (PART 2) (blog)
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John the democratic process stands whatever the numbers involved are. Your analogy is similar to a dozen screws is better than a gross of
screw-drivers when a single tea-bag is required.
Comment is about THINGS CAN ONLY GET BITTER (PART 2) (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Lynn Hamilton
Sun 13th Sep 2015 21:56
Thank you for reading and commenting, Ray. Much appreciated. x
Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)
Original item by ray pool
Colin - David Miliband is one of the great "What Ifs" of recent politics. I suspect we wouldn't be where we are now with Corbyn as Labour leader and a Tory government in power if it had not been for Ed;s vanity.
JH - This is a little off-piste for me. I aspire to tripe, as you know.
Tommy - I assume you respect the democratic process which returned Cameron to power. (He garnered 11m votes, of course, not 300,000).
Comment is about THINGS CAN ONLY GET BITTER (PART 2) (blog)
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60% ha! The utter contempt in this post shown for the democratic process. Hahaha. JC for me and a different JC for thee. The right wing have ruined the Labour party and crippled the trade unions. Blairites v Corbynistas come on down.
Comment is about THINGS CAN ONLY GET BITTER (PART 2) (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Sun 13th Sep 2015 21:03
sacrificial lamb - David Miliband to save the day (maybe) when his International Rescue contract expires - it's all playing into his hands as planned - knight in shining armour riding in to save the party blah blah
good poem John
Comment is about THINGS CAN ONLY GET BITTER (PART 2) (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
The Enchanted Art Gallery Weekend
26 & 27 September 2015
This is your chance to have your Enchanting poem on display!
just bring it along with the register form on Monday night
all work has to be sent in this week to be sorted out!
the theme for the night is Jazz
Jazz It Up
Blow hard
let cheeks
go red
if nothing
is happening
rub it
for luck - - -
always works
for me!
Comment is about Write Out Loud at Stockport art gallery tonight (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
why thank you mr pool. my wife is also tired and wingeing today but i made her some tea and she seems happier now. i have altered the ending a bit (me, editing!) and it ends up more grand in scale now. which i like.
Comment is about soft (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
sort of predatory in a personal way Lynn. Shades of Fatal Attraction . Excellent.
Comment is about Nodding Bitch (blog)
Stu, I'm envious . Your freedom of expression is innate, and today I feel like a blundering penpusher in comparison. Such a personal sense in this one. I won't strip it down as I'm tired today and wingeing. It's nice that we both share the same universe.
Comment is about soft (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Thank you's! I much appreciate your words, thank you. Children- even the adult ones I have now, I cannot stand to imagine leaving them entirely. I'm going to hide myself in poems.
Comment is about Family Tree (blog)
Original item by CathyLCrabb
Looks like you were inspired by Diggers?
Comment is about PILGRIMAGE (blog)
Original item by Pete Slater
<Deleted User> (13762)
Sat 12th Sep 2015 20:46
yeehaw! - love it Lynn - in a good way of course
Comment is about Nodding Bitch (blog)
this is an exceptional piece of writing.
Comment is about An Interrogative (blog)
Original item by Noetic-fret!
<Deleted User> (13947)
Fri 11th Sep 2015 23:57
Thank you Cynthia for your comment on 'Summer Rain' :)
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
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liked this a lot Tommy :-)
Comment is about ...take those lips (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Hi Cynthia / Tommy. Good to see you still posting on WOL. These text format 'accidents' can sometimes add to a piece? I liked this despite/because of them. :-)
Comment is about The Astronomer (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
A Big Hello Audrey!
I hope you find Write Out Loud a pleasure to be part of.
Thank you very much for your comment on my poem Internalizations of the External. It means a lot to me.
I shall dip into your work soon. Very tired but inspired right now by David Moore's work.
Be well, be strong and if you can't be happy...........fake it. God knows they love it when people succumbe to how depressing this World can be.
Much love
Mike
Comment is about lolaudrey (poet profile)
Original item by lolaudrey
Isn't it fabulous what you can do with a few different turns of words, their order in a line, in a verse, in the whole entity? Both poems are really good, just a shade different. It would be so easy to like the first one better; but that may be just because I read it first, and captured its mood so clearly, with such pleasure.
Comment is about August (blog)
Original item by Tom Harding
certainly does. first person present tense really conveys an immediacy and personal nature that i love, especially live. im not an academic, nor do i approach poetry in that way, so i find all this language analysis and metres a bit dull (has its place but im more interested in the stand up and shout side of poetry). you certainly are in a fine vein of form, something i am currently lacking!
Comment is about IN THE SHOWER (blog)
Original item by ray pool
cheers, Stu. I'm in full flow at the moment, but that sounds like a pun! Lots of stuff about the wrong end of life though - hope it' not a premonition!! I am enjoying using the present tense a bit, does that do it for you?
Comment is about IN THE SHOWER (blog)
Original item by ray pool
nice observations on age and death. lovely metaphor in the last verse, and one that people don't need a doctorate in language to decipher (its a compliment).
Comment is about IN THE SHOWER (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Wow, Micheal. I was truly moved by this piece. Your syntax and word play perfectly juxtaposed the emotion within the piece. Simply amazing work.
Comment is about Internalizations of the External (blog)
Original item by Noetic-fret!
Really painted a picture, nice work.
Comment is about Smokey Mirrors and Lust (blog)
Original item by lolaudrey
HI Laura, I'm enjoying this to and fro. As Freddie Mercury might have said: we are the thinkers. For me it's quite a new thing to lay out my thoughts on to the trestle table of public scrutiny. In that challenge lies a sort of recollection of youth misspent, so I am living it out now. Could that be an elixir in itself? I think so, although in the way an actor dons a cloak etc. Keep all mirrors well clear, probably a good idea.
Memories of age like ripe fruit need to be fed and there the analogy ends, as it falls off the bough eventually!
Cynthia has commented too on the tram poem, she has been helpful , so I am in the pink at the moment.
regards, Ray
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
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Hi Harry, thanks for your comment on Open the Borders, yes it is a turn up with us and the Germans, it now seems that some sense is prevailing, for various reasons! thanks Jeff
Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
Hard hitting this Martin, well written and sadly a common state of affairs, in this day and age, it shouldn't be anything like that, I hope your poem gives anyone reading it who is suffering strength.
Thanks for your comment on 'Open the Borders', much appreciated, I will be reading it at Sale WOL on Tuesday if you can make it, and read a poem or two, be great to see you, I'm standing in as MC, thanks Jeff
Comment is about Your turn (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Huge improvement. Glad I came back. Always listen to Laura. BTW, I thought 'except for moments of history' was superb.
Comment is about AT THE END (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Laura, re: 'Reading the Sign' - the diverse interpretations are amazing. I still think you understood what I meant; but maybe not. Maybe I don't understand what I meant, although I thought I did when the words just flowed through my head and hands.
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
finally someone has poetically expressed the disillusionment i feel when i have spent my hard earned cash on a gig ticket just to have the entire thing spoiled by selfish, mundane tossers recording half the fucking show on their stupid bloody i-phones. thanks!
Comment is about Reading the Sign (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Oh, and by the way - you wouldn't believe the amount of research I've done on poems before, to make sure of the accuracy of some of my claims or ideas. I've often found it leads me into some incredibly interesting territory - to the point where it's completely changed the poem that I started out with and made it something very different. I recommend it every time.
Haha - an elixir of youth? No such thing chap - unless, of course, you'd like to write one into existence? Hmmm...now THERE'S an idea ;)
Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)
Original item by ray pool
Thanks Laura - largely thanks to your inspiration. It's such a thrill when you can focus up a mental image with clarity. Ayethangyow..
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Oooo now see - THAT works. That fits beautifully, makes sense, sounds wonderful, feels poetic, and doesn't pull the reader up into 'what the..?' territory.
Nicely done :)
Comment is about AT THE END (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Funny l was just using Damien Hirst's shark as an example of the su text being stronger than the article.
Comment is about ? (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
I've done it now Laura: "to reverse the rows of slatted seats." I think that is more understandable . There is no record that I could find about the procedure, so there it is. Thanks again.
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
THanks for all that encouragement; I take any comment as a compliment and yours especially as you wouldn't bother unless you were 100% sure of yourself I reckon.
Is there any other alternative to socialism that gives a fuck about people - I don't know of one. So it does matter - just give me an injection of youth I would be there.
I'll still try another line maybe in that cursed poem if I can do better. Maybe reverse rather than pull forward.
By the way did you know that the old trams had a small pierced screen half way up the staircase to block the view of ascending ladies in their voluminous skirts.!! owz about that?
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
such a lovely thing. can we ever be sure we have made the right choice? gentle and enormous at the same time. congrats.
Comment is about LOVE TRIANGLE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Well, I must admit I am tempted, but I won't. I do actually love how words take on new meanings outside of the original writer's head, and I am actually happy to let all those amazing lines wash over and around me, and create their own meanings each time. It's a delightful thing about poetry.
Comment is about Zach Dafoe (poet profile)
Original item by Zach Dafoe
Hola,
I am infamous for my ability to pick up everything that isnt there and nothing that is, giving me the dubious ability to enjoy things on an entirely different level to how they were meant/everyone else does.
so here i read the passage of time, a fresh ice age, religious barbarism, humanity prevailing and a new dawn, all seen through the eyes of a coma vicitim. upon re-reading i got half of that and loads of other stuff too. and the lines;
a nameless cause like novacaine
blistered thunder in my veins
looks like hate, tastes like home
backpacking the fall of rome
are superb.
Comment is about Zach Dafoe (poet profile)
Original item by Zach Dafoe
thanks guys! ray, i am now a celebrated clearhead as well, but i admit to being a scamp in my time!
tom, thanks a lot. i try to sway between stream of consciousness and the ability to still be succinct.
Comment is about the tent flaps of perception (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
evening stu,
thank you for reading me again.
definitely was not expecting any amount of praise for that bear trap. it kind of accidentally was a blur of feelings i put what seemed like way too much time into at the -- er -- time. started out as a love letter but turned into something a little more genuine.
the symbols mean a lot to me, but im more interested in what they might mean to other people. what do you think?
Comment is about Stuart Buck (poet profile)
Original item by Stuart Buck
hi laura
thank you for reading me.
'ballad of the bear trap' is a good example of a piece of yourself (well, myself in this case i guess) losing restraint to the author's original interpretation.
it is very surreal outside of the context of my own head. i kind of absent-mindedly typed it out on a 14 hour hazy-headed car ride, initially as a love letter but it kept going and turned into something a little bit bigger. mostly unconscious. the definition of anything according to me, especially in the exploration of all abstract things is not as important as what YOU, the reader, think it is. 'please teach me something about myself.'
i can tell you what i think it means though, if you like. :)
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
stu really like your stuff, it's free flowing but neatly pieced together - a great trick!
Comment is about the tent flaps of perception (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Tommy Carroll
Mon 14th Sep 2015 08:50
As the most honourable and worthy Ali bin Khayriyyah Karim al-Rashid said in a recent interview on the World Service: "suck it and see" ;-)
Comment is about THINGS CAN ONLY GET BITTER (PART 2) (blog)
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