Rather like this. Some beautiful lines.
Cx

Comment is about Vincent (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Marrianne, somewhere, deep inside this crippled mind i have, i long for words like these to be said to me. A very loving piece, and i envy your partner : )
be well

Mike

Comment is about Thousand Yard Stare (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

I like it. Interesting mixture. Perhaps the musings of a homesick man. If it is a deeper observation on values you have to work a bit at what they might be.

Flows well.

Comment is about READING P. D. JAMES IN SAN FRANCISCO (article)

gracious recipricol vybZ n VybetteZ to all write out louders 4 ur support and encouragement. Posi NRG to all who competed there was not much in it at anytime and most importantly the atmosphere was creative and encouraging for all so big big up to write out loud.xXx

Comment is about Chris Jam Wins Super Poet's Slam! (article)

Wow jus been reading thy CV my god when do you breathe woman you sound very dedicated hope we get to meet and converse at a gig soOon
warm vybz till then.x ps soz 4 jamming ur coments section

Comment is about Gemma Lees (poet profile)

Original item by Gemma Lees

Thanks very much and well done yourself you were great :)

Comment is about Chris Jam (poet profile)

Original item by Chris Jam

hey gemma tiz Chris Jam here I didnt get achance to compliment you on your performance yesterday very strong and distinctive in both content and delivery.

Comment is about Gemma Lees (poet profile)

Original item by Gemma Lees

love the way that kid actually looks like your profile photo

Comment is about Constructive Criticism (blog)

Original item by Gemma Lees

Ha! I do tend to write in code sometimes! DTs are what we called detentions at school when you had to stay after school for an hour and clean desks and stuff. NI is national insurance, you get your card at 16 which has your NI number on it so that you can get a job. I just invented 'butty kings', a butty is a sandwich and the people who came in the bakery for one, particularly the men, took great joy in talking down to me as I was serving them.

Comment is about Constructive Criticism (blog)

Original item by Gemma Lees

Hi Gus, thank you for your very kind comments on my April blog, Scar. Twas very good of you to take the time to read and comment. It's about a place i go and sit by on the moors, am glad i posted my thoughts on it now, : )) thanks again, Deb

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Hi Tomas, thank you for taking the time to read and your kind comment on Paper Ghost, Deb

Comment is about Tomás Ó Cárthaigh (poet profile)

Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

Well done!

Comment is about Chris Jam Wins Super Poet's Slam! (article)

Photographs by Darren Thomas if anyone would like their pictures they can get the full resolutions from him darren.thomas1@hotmail.co.uk

Comment is about Degsy at the 'Superheroes of slam', Heat 1 at the Octagon theatre, Bolton June 2009 (photo)

Ironic title Gemma...
Nicely written with unfortunate truth for many...

What are DTs, NI card, and butty kings?

Comment is about Constructive Criticism (blog)

Original item by Gemma Lees

I love yours too Gus!
Jeeez... you give me a lot to think about...
I am so overwhelmed...

Need to escape...

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Félicitations Chris!

Comment is about Chris Jam Wins Super Poet's Slam! (article)

Many congratulations - you really deserve it.Your voice is sensational

Comment is about Chris Jam Wins Super Poet's Slam! (article)

It's good to go for the big themes, sometimes, so well done.

It's a neat trick in a mystic poem to avoid sounding too naively New Age, and I think you've managed it (though what do I know; I'm very conservative and not at all democratic in my religious views!)

There's an obvious typo near the start of these lines, Daniel ....

"We are the maintance the workers the guardians of this earth

and the body of the universe."

And personally, I feel poetry of this sort (eg the lines above) needs punctuation, to help it flow, to aid comprehension etc.

Comment is about The chalice of life (blog)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

enjoyed your performance last night ,
in fact the whole evening went well . :) i dont know who the organiser is , so cannot pass on my regards , however , i do have a facebook account ;)

Comment is about Mark Niel (poet profile)

Original item by Mark Niel

It feels distinctly like a 'Billy Collins' type poem, and I adore Billy Collins.

It seems there is more going on around the poem's blurred edges. Unlike Francine's interpretation, I didn't really sense any humour in its text. Yet those last few lines are written in such a way that they're very subjective.

What I really like about this piece? It somehow challenges a reader to make their own discoveries as to what's 'behind' or 'inside' its words; as it's already shown.

Great poem. Well done, Jeremy.

Comment is about READING P. D. JAMES IN SAN FRANCISCO (article)

Hi,

Really enjoyed your set at Leamington last night. Will definitely try to make it to MK at some point!

Thank-you for a good evening,

Chris

Comment is about Mark Niel (poet profile)

Original item by Mark Niel

Love it!
Feeling out of touch and so far away can at times
make you feel as though you are on another planet...

'Her man is on the Norfolk coast again
while I am on the Pacific seaboard
thousands of miles west,
on another planet.'


Very funny too...

'my TV orders me to open my heart
to Jesus, embrace eternal life;
and a man, who has
surely inhaled something,
mistakes me for Elton John;
thanks me for the song
I wrote for Diana.'


Très bien fait : )

Comment is about READING P. D. JAMES IN SAN FRANCISCO (article)

Liked the imposing opening line "My heartbeat measures the night" Shouted out at me. Great. Win x

Comment is about The Parting (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi Daniel. The middle section of this reminds me of one of my favourite poems/poets.What do you think?

I have seen eternity
Balls of fire burning bright
In the sky of never ending darkness and chaos
You say God created this


Henry Vaughan (The World)

I saw Eternity the other night
Like a great Ring of pure and endless light
All calm as it was bright.
... Driven by the spheres,
Like a vast shadow moved, in which the world
And all her train were hurled

enjoyed your poem keep posting

Win

Comment is about The chalice of life (blog)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

winston!!!!
thankyou for the comments!

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

beautiful layout and a beautifully simple poem which makes you think

Comment is about Connotation (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

when your heart is a shield you definately don't want to lower it!
I found this poem powerful you have a way with words!

Comment is about COLD (blog)

Thanks for your comment Gus, I really appreciate it x

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

You've covered it well here Shane...

'The courage to emerge from every battle hes in, He came up hard, He had to win, And when struggle beat him down, He had to do it again'

I love Marvin Gaye's music... so much passion, soul and inspiration...

Comment is about TROUBLE MAN (inspired by marvin gaye) (blog)

As always... so real...

Love these lines:
'Opaque windows fight the sunlight,
And the rays rebound into blackness'

Comment is about UNTITLED..(personal) (blog)

Well - i was just following Jonboy around, who it appears was following Francine around! Another hilarious rant that would be brilliant to hear write out loud. Didn't realise there was quite so much pressure on men to look good - they certainly don't go for the old plastic surgery very much. Am off to bronze myself in the sun now - got to keep looking good - especially when you can get it for free....

Comment is about the pressure to look good (blog)

Ahh yes.... I remember it well.

and his lady wife Ruth... yes it was not my scene... The Bridge... is very nice ... I oft astride the Towpath...

We may well see one another across the Bridgewater..

Augusta

Comment is about Dermot Glennon (poet profile)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Love it! ...and why is everything on tv like this nowadays?

Comment is about the pressure to look good (blog)

Love this!
Que tu me fais rire... toujours...
Que j'adore ton rire... toujours ; )

Comment is about the pressure to look good (blog)

Me? Naughty?
Oh!
I believe that I have been led astray...

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Tu es marrant ; )

Comment is about lynx lover man (blog)

Hahahaha... heureusement tu n'es pas comme ça ; )

Comment is about lazy alpha male (blog)

J'adore la passion que tu mets dans les expressions de ton écriture...
Tu sais que je suis entièrement d'accord avec tes sentiments...

Comment is about corn fed if it kills me (blog)

Not far away Dermot... Appleton

I used to attend a writing club in Stockton Heath at the Red Lion...but I grew out of it...I felt it was
a little too respectable.
Augusta

Comment is about Dermot Glennon (poet profile)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

"When my blood's rhythm drowns my mind"
I especially like this line. It is a very relatable sensation, telling of how susceptable we are to passion.
A very powerful poem!

Comment is about The Parting (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thanks for your lovely comments Gus - particularly the one on my bollocks poem - I have a quirky sense of humour and wasn't sure if the subject matter was to many people's taste so quickly overblogged it but was glad to hear someone appreciated it!
Izo x

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Thanks all. Francine, Kirby est une région au bord de la Liverpool elle est trés belle; tu doit La visiter une fois. Augusta, Darling, our leader is looking forward to meeting you. Steve, I don't believe in free will because our brains are made of chemicals and our minds are the mental product of those chemicals and thermodynamics together with the interpretation that we put on current stimuli in the light of our back-stories, and as such our decisions are just a by-product of all of those things obeying the laws of physics and sociology.

Comment is about The Kestrel (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Salut DG!
J'aime beaucoup ce poème...
I like the fact that you can interpret the Kestrel as a metaphor for man...
Love the rhyming, flowing, profundity of it all... ; )

Juste une question... qu'est-ce que c'est Kirby's?

Comment is about The Kestrel (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

This has happened to me ... on more than one occassion.... i didn't know which way to turn.

So I tossed a coin...

Augusta

Comment is about wrong night at the swingers club (blog)

Hello Dermot
How many are there of you?
Take me to your leader.

Your poem is stark and minimalist .. simplistic and quite beautiful.

Coincidently Bargain Booze sells a minimalist larger...branded Kestrel.. of course only the grey people know about that.

Augusta

Comment is about The Kestrel (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Hi once again Izo

The sizzling snappy rhythm is wonderful great lines

The intertwining of the couplets are superb
Particularly like

The higgerty jiggerty
Jumping jack joy of me
The wouldn’t hurt a hair
On the head of a fly of me

Just love the delicate under apparel off this poem!!!


Gus x

Comment is about You And Me Babe (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Hi Izo

I love the way in which you have word danced and embroidered rhythm and images
throughout this very clever poem.

Llew desserpmi yb siht daol fo dlo skcollob

Gusx

Comment is about A Daol Fo... (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Hi Dermot... This is raw and real and fantastic. Winston

Comment is about The Kestrel (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Good stuff, neat contrasts in habitats, and a hint of this great paradox ... that wildlife seem noble in their 'natural settings' (besmirched though they be at the substantial edges by man); yet man, for all his modern corruptions, is perhaps the superior beast.

Because men (and women) write poetry; kestrals don't.

Also hinted at, humankind's moral choices - a consequence of the great gift to humans of free will, which mere animals, in their simplicity, needn't bother about.

Big themes ... with Kirkby, of all places, as a backdrop.

Comment is about The Kestrel (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

LoVe ThIs YoU aNd Me BuSiNeSs

great double wammy.
great summer scorcher.


blinding blowtorch = thumbs up
skin and the salt of you = thumbs up

super work.

Im a fan of this (not sure insert poetic term here) this....er " the xyz of me" I too have used similar so this poem or these poems ring a bell for me.

they err ring the bell of me.

"slide down the leg of me"
"dredge the dregs of me"
"sledge the sludge of me"

scmashin IsObEla
im always looking forward to reading your poems, im poppin ya on my fan list

Comment is about You And Me Babe (blog)

Original item by Isobel