THanx 4 those precious and inspiring words...
you are very kind.

great 2 C U on Monday... Whats with Mal didn't like the wasp he was sucking???

Gus

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Yes - I agree Francine - interesting and insightful

Comment is about Talking (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Thanks for your comment Win - yes I enjoyed Bolton too - some great poetry and lovely to catch up with everyone.
No doubt see you around.
Isobel x

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Interesting...
There is some truth to this... unfortunately...

Comment is about Talking (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Love this Deborah... beautifully written : )

Comment is about Oyster (blog)

Original item by Deborah Jordan Bailey

this is a great poem x a subject that I can relate to.

Comment is about Divorce (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Love how I am reading along going awww...
and then comes the ending!

Comment is about Despair (blog)

Original item by George Stanworth

Possibly a bit long to get to it's point, but I think the poem on the whole is lovely..

Would split the last line thou from 'but you, Vincent, you were a man'

to 'but you,
Vincent,
you were a man'

or something

Comment is about Vincent (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

A great lyrical plea for poetic truth and human freedom, Stephen. Well done.

Comment is about Souvenir -(Persian Gulf 2001) (blog)

Original item by stephen smith

beauitful!

Comment is about Fawn (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

good stuff, Gem... Have you considered cutting out the last line? I am drawn to the fact if you remove it - you can sidestep the audience and that's always a favourite trick off mine..

Comment is about Constructive Criticism (blog)

Original item by Gemma Lees

Lot of interesting points I could say as I think you took a lot off gambles with the language in places and the length of some of the stanzas, but good stuff! Nice One!

Comment is about Thousand Yard Stare (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

I really liked this!
It reminded me of an exhibition I saw a few months back at the Whitworth Art Gallery in Manchester (my hat/my home). It is called Subversive Spaces and mainly deals with surrealism and the connections between female hysteria (as if there ever was such a thing!!) and the physicality of the home and furniture. A few photos featured a china doll being left in various positions in a house that left an atmosphere of abuse and it popped into my head when I read this....?? You should check it out online as there is still alot of information about it.
You are an exceptional writer!

Comment is about Delilah's Courage (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Hi Winston, i just want to thankyou for being so gracious, i've come to my senses now and hopefully i'll see you soon,
Janet Ramsden.x

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

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Hi Chris, just wanted to say many congratulations on your super win at the Bolton slam. You are a very worthy winner and i look forward to the next time you perform.

Janet Ramsden.

Comment is about Chris Jam (poet profile)

Original item by Chris Jam

Thank you for your comment on my poem, I am glad it connected. Poems are like pearls, the hurt becomes beauty for others to prize ..As yours has.
Steve Smith

Comment is about Oyster (blog)

Original item by Deborah Jordan Bailey

Hi Louise, just want to say well done for your efforts in the Bolton slam, i really enjoyed your very worthy performance.

See you soon, Janet.x

Comment is about Louise Fazackerley (poet profile)

Original item by Louise Fazackerley

Hi Gemma, congratulations on coming runner up in the slam, you'll get that elusive one yet yo just wait and see. :-)

Janet Ramsden.x

Comment is about Gemma Lees (poet profile)

Original item by Gemma Lees

Well done to Chris, a worthy winner.
Well done also to everyone who participated in the event to make it a brilliant night of poetry and entertainment.
Janet Ramsden.

Comment is about Chris Jam Wins Super Poet's Slam! (article)

Thanks for your comments John. Much appreciated. Really enjoyed 'Work Is Shit'. Reminds me of most jobs I have had.

Comment is about John Darwin (poet profile)

Original item by John Darwin

I'm a fan of your work and glad to see you here after such a long time .

Comment is about Oyster (blog)

Original item by Deborah Jordan Bailey

Hi John. Enjoyed your stuff as always at the Octagon the other night. Gloriously miserable poetry!
Win

Comment is about John Darwin (poet profile)

Original item by John Darwin

Hi... This is fantastic Isobel. Love the little tricks and loops it performs and surprises you with its turns and twists. Great to meet you in Bolton. Win xx

Comment is about You And Me Babe (blog)

Original item by Isobel

keep it close....i like this...evocative.. hmmm.. .deb

Comment is about Souvenir -(Persian Gulf 2001) (blog)

Original item by stephen smith

I really like this Michael. A fragile bird has flown from an armoured shell..i hope the one you wrote it for reads it too.Deb x

Comment is about Love Poem (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Wow... hmmm...

'I did 20 yrs mate
20 yrs of a lie
sure I got it up, inserted it
but my feelings never got that boost
must come from being a caveman
or crowing the cockerels cocky roost
from a hilltop
men are number one
killing everything aren't we?'

Interesting perspective... a bit confused though...

Comment is about Scouting for Girls (blog)

Lovely!
So many great lines in this...

'With the innocence and naivety that summer
The girls made us jump through hoops
At the playing field
And any flash of fleshy we would gratefully scoop up
Just to see what they looked like
We pinched our knee skin together
And he told me that that is what a vagina looks like'

You seem to capture it so well... I remember the boys at this age ; )

Comment is about the long hot summer of 1976 (blog)

Very real... and profound...

Comment is about One shot at life (blog)

It is, however the people I write to / comment to do speak it and understand it... sorry...

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Merci pour l'explication Gemma...
et c'est vrai ce qu'il dit DG ; )

Comment is about Constructive Criticism (blog)

Original item by Gemma Lees

Good attempt at rhyming couplets in the first stanza, but try finding a different rhyme at the end of each 2nd line, rather than just using the same one again .... might spice it up a bit!
Cx

Comment is about Site Stats for May (blog)

Rather like this. Some beautiful lines.
Cx

Comment is about Vincent (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Marrianne, somewhere, deep inside this crippled mind i have, i long for words like these to be said to me. A very loving piece, and i envy your partner : )
be well

Mike

Comment is about Thousand Yard Stare (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

I like it. Interesting mixture. Perhaps the musings of a homesick man. If it is a deeper observation on values you have to work a bit at what they might be.

Flows well.

Comment is about READING P. D. JAMES IN SAN FRANCISCO (article)

gracious recipricol vybZ n VybetteZ to all write out louders 4 ur support and encouragement. Posi NRG to all who competed there was not much in it at anytime and most importantly the atmosphere was creative and encouraging for all so big big up to write out loud.xXx

Comment is about Chris Jam Wins Super Poet's Slam! (article)

Wow jus been reading thy CV my god when do you breathe woman you sound very dedicated hope we get to meet and converse at a gig soOon
warm vybz till then.x ps soz 4 jamming ur coments section

Comment is about Gemma Lees (poet profile)

Original item by Gemma Lees

Thanks very much and well done yourself you were great :)

Comment is about Chris Jam (poet profile)

Original item by Chris Jam

hey gemma tiz Chris Jam here I didnt get achance to compliment you on your performance yesterday very strong and distinctive in both content and delivery.

Comment is about Gemma Lees (poet profile)

Original item by Gemma Lees

love the way that kid actually looks like your profile photo

Comment is about Constructive Criticism (blog)

Original item by Gemma Lees

Ha! I do tend to write in code sometimes! DTs are what we called detentions at school when you had to stay after school for an hour and clean desks and stuff. NI is national insurance, you get your card at 16 which has your NI number on it so that you can get a job. I just invented 'butty kings', a butty is a sandwich and the people who came in the bakery for one, particularly the men, took great joy in talking down to me as I was serving them.

Comment is about Constructive Criticism (blog)

Original item by Gemma Lees

Hi Gus, thank you for your very kind comments on my April blog, Scar. Twas very good of you to take the time to read and comment. It's about a place i go and sit by on the moors, am glad i posted my thoughts on it now, : )) thanks again, Deb

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Hi Tomas, thank you for taking the time to read and your kind comment on Paper Ghost, Deb

Comment is about Tomás Ó Cárthaigh (poet profile)

Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

Well done!

Comment is about Chris Jam Wins Super Poet's Slam! (article)

Photographs by Darren Thomas if anyone would like their pictures they can get the full resolutions from him darren.thomas1@hotmail.co.uk

Comment is about Degsy at the 'Superheroes of slam', Heat 1 at the Octagon theatre, Bolton June 2009 (photo)

Ironic title Gemma...
Nicely written with unfortunate truth for many...

What are DTs, NI card, and butty kings?

Comment is about Constructive Criticism (blog)

Original item by Gemma Lees

I love yours too Gus!
Jeeez... you give me a lot to think about...
I am so overwhelmed...

Need to escape...

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Félicitations Chris!

Comment is about Chris Jam Wins Super Poet's Slam! (article)

Many congratulations - you really deserve it.Your voice is sensational

Comment is about Chris Jam Wins Super Poet's Slam! (article)

It's good to go for the big themes, sometimes, so well done.

It's a neat trick in a mystic poem to avoid sounding too naively New Age, and I think you've managed it (though what do I know; I'm very conservative and not at all democratic in my religious views!)

There's an obvious typo near the start of these lines, Daniel ....

"We are the maintance the workers the guardians of this earth

and the body of the universe."

And personally, I feel poetry of this sort (eg the lines above) needs punctuation, to help it flow, to aid comprehension etc.

Comment is about The chalice of life (blog)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

enjoyed your performance last night ,
in fact the whole evening went well . :) i dont know who the organiser is , so cannot pass on my regards , however , i do have a facebook account ;)

Comment is about Mark Niel (poet profile)

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