Hi Carol, good luck. in my experience DS dependence can be difficult to cure. Liked many bits in this tale. Liked the end esp, will ring bells for many of us…come with me son, and let us be strangers no more.
We’ll visit the park, have adventures, explore, and play football.
Are you ready to go? Look son, I have opened the door.

Win x

Comment is about The Invitation (blog)

Original item by Carol Falaki

Eggcellent... (groan) Many people have left comments worse than this on my posts so I have taken this opportunity (Sorry). Hello Joan and welcome to WOL. More seriously... this was a good read, enjoyed the comedy bits esp. Win x

Comment is about Crack Me (blog)

Like this Ant... great post. At lastI am not the only Haiku poster. lol Win

Comment is about Would you like a haiku? (blog)

Mythical, mysterious, satirical and surreal. Infamously entertaining.

Comment is about The Fool Who Ate The Gruel (blog)

Original item by John Togher

Cate, I can envisage this working especially well in performance. It has a mechanical rhyme and rythmn to it, and yet the subject material is personal and emotional. Powerful.

Comment is about I am..... (blog)

Original item by Cate

Clever. I love haiku.....says so much in so little.....

Comment is about Would you like a haiku? (blog)

Thanks Nabila for your comment on my first post. Much appreciated.
You too Isobel.

Comment is about I am..... (blog)

Original item by Cate

I love this poem Joan. It is funny but works on a number of different levels. I enjoy the way the egg is used as a metaphor to represent the fragility of the self. It has great rhythm and pace to it also.
George

Comment is about Crack Me (blog)

Hi Isobel.
Thanks for your comments regarding 'Despair'.
I think 'You and Me Babe' is excellent.
There's some grat lines in this such as the 'Binding Blowtorch'. I agree with some of the other comments that the poem is full of rythm.
George

Comment is about You And Me Babe (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Hello Joan,
just browsing around the site and spotted this one. Just about says it all for me.
Yes it is witty but has so much deeper meaning to it which is not really funny when one is at the other end of it. :-)
Janet Ramsden.

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Yes - i like this too - some good and unusual imagery - like the piratical squirrels walking the planks and the light-sabres of sun fighting the dark side. You've made me feel a tad guilty for being on the computer though when I should be out there with the kids. On that note...

Comment is about The Invitation (blog)

Original item by Carol Falaki

A great poem Cate - maybe we are all this for someone.

Comment is about I am..... (blog)

Original item by Cate

that's the spirit ....I have a collection of rejection slips , doesn't mean my work is crap :-) I'm published too .....It's all subjective

I like this - very good


keep writing and keep entering - we are all in the same boat

Comment is about The Invitation (blog)

Original item by Carol Falaki

this is wonderful :-)

Comment is about I am..... (blog)

Original item by Cate

ouch, a crackin' good read

Comment is about Crack Me (blog)

This just sounds like too much fun for me...lol

Comment is about Bad Kebab (blog)

So true...

'He destroys

Yet he employs such skill
With optimism and blanket deceit
In ways so bad'

Some things are better left unknown...

Comment is about Man the virus (blog)

Love this Joan... so witty

Comment is about Crack Me (blog)

Hi Jeff, Thanks for you comments on 'Muse' - glad you enjoyed it.
Good to meet you the other week in Wigan.
Cx

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

Original item by Jeffarama!

A funny poem wiht some good symbolic imagery expressing the passion of human relationships. Well done, Joan, and welcome to WoL's poetry universe.You use the expression "hun" in the poem - so are ye from Merseyside? And would you like to come to the Bards of New Brighton poetry sessions?

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It rather depends how you define hero Andy - don't think many woman would want one of those cartoon characters - though i realise 'what a woman wants' isn't necessarily at issue here. We all would like to be greater than we are - lucky is the man/woman who is truly content with themselves - and perhaps foolish also.

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Original item by Andy N

Very comfortable to read I enjoy this easy flowing style of poetry. The imagery and commentary with just a hint of the unexspected.

to piece together a complex jigsaw
of a universe where
effect follows cause
as night follows day,

Well deserved POM Jeremy
Gus

Comment is about READING P. D. JAMES IN SAN FRANCISCO (article)

You will just have to be your own hero then...

Always remember that you are unique, and special in your own way ; )

Comment is about Wish (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Drove my poor cousin Humpty up and right off the wall being an egg...

Comment is about Crack Me (blog)

Hello Andy

Are you really sure there are no super hero's?

Couldn't you apply to be Robin...
I've met many a man who told me that they were Superman and Mr Fantastic... Sadly they only talked a good game.

Augusta

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Comment is about Wish (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Hi Gus, you'd be most welcome at the Bards of New Brighton. Love to hear yoiu perform with us. We meet second Monday of every month, Magazine pub, Magazine Brow, New Brighton, starting 8pm. We are all open-mic sessions, and everybody gets to perform. Feel free to do us some of your sauciest!! Steve Regan (Bards MC). PS Next meeting Monday 8 June.

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Thanks for your comment Andy - the last 3 lines were my favourite too.
Isobel x

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Hi Andy

Good to hear from you... Thanks re your comments on Black Oven and Sweet Velvet rose...
your comments are always valued.

Hope u r ok
C ya soon
Gus

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Thaks Steve for your kind comments re Black Oven... sorry but the more earthy reputation is borne by performance...page poetry ...quite a different Kettle of fish..
Once again many thanks.... and I would like to come to the Bards ... if you can take abit of the old Jonsson at his most ribald.

Many thanks
Gus

Comment is about Steve Regan (poet profile)

Original item by Steve Regan

Very good. Like the surprise at the end.
Cx

Comment is about Despair (blog)

Original item by George Stanworth

Hi again -
glad you liked 'Muse' - I've been having some very strange dreams lately!
Cx

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

A grim view of Summer here Ant.... Reminds me of a time I lived in Didsbury, when on a fri night in the summer there were more people outside the pubs than inside and the pavements were as you described. I would choose a nice secluded dark corner inside of course. Win

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Good stuff!
Cx

Comment is about Lay It Down (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Gemma

You bring to life, for me, those awful, god awful days <shudders>

Comment is about Constructive Criticism (blog)

Original item by Gemma Lees

hi George

Clever and I really love the personification of emotions...this is a fine example

Comment is about Despair (blog)

Original item by George Stanworth

hi Marianne

I could be all these things.
The eyeleash you brush from her cheek,
that could be me.

I really like this style and I thoroughly enjoyed the write but for me it ended perfectly at the above stanza! Dunno..what do you think?.. :)

Comment is about Divorce (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

What a shock for the reader as well as yourself George. Like the astral imagery combined with the simple statement ' but you weren't into long distance relationships' - is caustic the word I am looking for? But understandably so.

Comment is about Despair (blog)

Original item by George Stanworth

Yes - a great poem that 1 in 3 will relate to! I feel like writing Divorce 2 but I'm struggling so hard to forget...

Comment is about Divorce (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

hey martin. saw you at the slam at the wirral. i have to be honest- political poetry is not to my particular taste- however i wanted to say that you have all the makings of a great performance poet- presence and a nice style about you. everyone fluffs their lines now and again- next time eh? i'm considering putting something on for the 25s and under- to help develop our up-and-coming poets. are you interested?

Comment is about Martin Nelson (poet profile)

Original item by Martin Nelson

Cheers hun, you were great too, I love that poem more evry time you perform it!!!

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

Original item by Jeffarama!

Not so sure your mind`s ever a "blank sheet" Isobel. Seems to me it`s always teeming with words.... ideas.... stanzas....metre....etc... etc... etc ....... xxxxxx

Comment is about Lay It Down (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Thanks for your comments Steve - would love to come to the bards one day - but I'm terribly ignorant - have ignored all things scouse for years, cos I'm a true Wiganer! Can't see where and when it is from the events calendar - can you enlighten me?
Isobel x

Comment is about Steve Regan (poet profile)

Original item by Steve Regan

Yes - I think you are all with me really. Never intended to explain myself but what the hell... The words 'Lay it down' were possibly the last words heard by someone very dear to me. They will always speak to me of the ephemeral nature of life and the necessity of making our actions count. It is so easy to get caught up with trivia, to follow the pack, to get things wrong... Often we strive for things that we never really needed in the first place and realise too late. The last 3 lines is the dream - sometimes I think I've got there and then I have a relapse cos I'm only human.
Steve - you are maybe right to say that the impure and the ignoble elements make life interesting. Perhaps heaven is a very boring place and there is a place for evil in this world! An interesting thought....
I should make all my poems so obscure - they attract more comment! LOL Thanks to all.
Isobel x

Comment is about Lay It Down (blog)

Original item by Isobel

I just stumbled on this by accident and how fortunate that was! Brilliant! Like punching a wall and actually knocking it down. Well done!

Comment is about A poem dedicated to my girlfriends parents: (blog)

Original item by Jordan

Rags to riches. Ooh i do love rags to riches story lines.
Haven't a clue what you're talking about Antonionioni but Eliza Doolittle struck gold eventually. That's what the first line said to me.

Hope you're well. Janet.x

Comment is about Find the deep meaning, and tell me what it is (blog)

Absolutely superb, Deborah, very well done. The first line reminded me of a Leonard Cohen line - Take this longing from my tongue - that same sense of being stuck with a feeling that can't ever go away - for me anyway.
Cx

Comment is about Oyster (blog)

Original item by Deborah Jordan Bailey

Hi Win,
Thanks for reading and commenting on 'Close' - glad you like it.
How are you?
Cx

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Thanks for your comments on 'Close', Andy, - glad you like it.
Cx

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Thanks for your comments on 'Close' Gus -
Glad you like it.
Hope you're well?
Cx

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