thanks tommy carroll

Comment is about Traffic Semaphore (blog)

Original item by Juhi Gupte

Get-away... Tommy

Comment is about Traffic Semaphore (blog)

Original item by Juhi Gupte

Yes, Harry and Ledge, and most of its true!

Comment is about THE VERGER AND THE MAGISTRATE (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Ha ha, Just brilliant John.

Comment is about THE VERGER AND THE MAGISTRATE (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Good Morning John,

Many thanks for the comment on "...And Along Came Jeremy". Refreshing to hear you say that you like the poem even if you don't entirely agree with the opinion expressed within.

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

Tommy,
That`s what I call poetically forgettin` your mac.

Comment is about Sodden (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Blimey, a snout and a beagle...you should be ashamed of yourselves (I`m not sure which selves)

Comment is about THE VERGER AND THE MAGISTRATE (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

thanks ray, im glad you enjoyed it (if enjoyment is the right word). i wonder how many michelles are currently sat alone across the country. a fair few i might guess.

Comment is about switch (for michelle) (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Hi Harry,

Thanks for your comments on "...And Along Came Jeremy"

Ledger

Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

Great feel to this Preeti. It has a languid atmosphere, and a sort of materialistic impasse at the end. As if the wanting is a sort of submission to the inevitable. Very nice.

Comment is about Mountain (blog)

Great stuff Stu. It's excruciating how cruel kids can be - I wonder if they would be the same today? The word retarded has been quietly dropped but it was common currency in the fifties. I notice the word switch and bewitch are very strong - I would probably have gone overboard on that and threw in a witch or ditch or something - you know me by now! Very powerful poem.

Comment is about switch (for michelle) (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

@David Ignorance of dangerous purposeful options has, is and continues to be blissful. Tommy

Comment is about Corbyn and and the death of Marx? (blog)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

rant...

Comment is about Corbyn and and the death of Marx? (blog)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

Noted. There have usually been plenty of socialist
"Grouchos" with links to Marx.

Comment is about Corbyn and and the death of Marx? (blog)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

Thanks for the (very heartening) comment on '...And Along Came Jeremy'. Cheers, Ledger

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

got you. its a good metaphor, especially for poets and one i should have tattooed on my mouse clicking hand! i dont think you need worry about things being to personal, the imagery and language makes you want to be inside your head, even if you have no reason why. i love the films of david lynch for this very reason. i leave each one annoyed and in wonder.

Comment is about Zach Dafoe (poet profile)

Original item by Zach Dafoe

You really are way too kind.
I like treading the line of too verbose and too vague, even if it's completely by accident. sometimes i forget that other people don't live inside my head and a lot of my writing (especially looking into last year and backward) has a lot more internal meaning that comes off jilted when someone else reads it. too much context is bad. not enough is worse.

the parable begins when a neighbor comes to visit the farmer. as he walks up the long pavestone path to the front porch, he hears this horrible yelping and howling coming from round back.
"What the hell is that raquet?!"
"My dog. He's sitting on a nail on the back porch."
"Why doesn't he just get up and move? Why doesn't he make it stop?"
The farmer thoughtfully puffed on his corncob pipe, exhaled, uncocking his head with the answer:
"It must not hurt enough yet."

a fallen mastery is knowing when to get off the nail.
I've yet to fully recognize this.

Comment is about Stuart Buck (poet profile)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Hello,
Nope, not heard it. Enlighten me!
I always enjoy your work, its surreal and wise, treacle thick with language and meaning. im not one for overly-wordy stuff (which probably shows in the previous sentence) as i feel it dilutes meaning, but you have a great mix. your longer pieces are like walking through twin peaks after a bomb dropped.
so, the farmers dog?

Comment is about Zach Dafoe (poet profile)

Original item by Zach Dafoe

good morning stu
thank you for reading me.
doomed loved is my speciality. I don't think I've ever had anyone break down my writing so succinctly. sometimes it's better to start with a feeling, abstract and big (impossibly vast), fuzzy and fluid, then work down into the details of a mortal word with a slight taper bridging the two.

I've been accidentally using it a lot lately. Probably a byproduct of those powerfully estranged feelings I get during karaoke hours.

Have you ever heard the metaphor of the farmers' dog?

Comment is about Stuart Buck (poet profile)

Original item by Stuart Buck

just reread the whole piece and it really is great. full of lines that stick in the brain, full of sensual imagery and rhythm. like ive said before, i read differently each time. ive done reincarnation, forgiveness, conceiving a child, sleepless nights of longing and family strife. its brilliant. it seems wrong for a newbie to say well done to an established poet, but i said it. so there. the gig was good by the way. i even sung a bit from brenda #2. not many people there but it was a nice place. anyway. great poem!

Comment is about Tableau 4: The Melting of the Ice (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

this is great. the first verse is very you, nicely surreal and vivid, but then the piece becomes more straight forward and direct, mirroring the content. the directness doesn't mar the style and quality of the writing. doomed love causes so much poetic greatness.

Comment is about karaoke 3 (08/21/2015) (blog)

Original item by Zach Dafoe

Gray beware! 40's to 50's is the swiftest decade. I blinked and missed mine. Shut the door quickly and don't look back.

Comment is about Heading towards 50 (blog)

Original item by Gray Nicholls

Preeti, this is so lovely - that river sounds magnificent - not sure that I'd recommend mountains, but I'm sure they have their uses. Great work x

Comment is about Mountain (blog)

Hi Harry - We live in hope lol :)

Comment is about It's Summertime (blog)

Original item by Tom Doolan

Thanks James, hope you weren't too psyched.
Thank you for reading :)

Comment is about James Roper (poet profile)

Original item by James Roper

Thanks for reading and commenting, Martin. I'll throw you a rubber ring!

Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)

Original item by Martin Elder

Thanks for reading and commenting, Martin. I'll throw you a rubber ring!

Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)

Original item by Martin Elder

Oh my! In my humble opinion this is so good.

Comment is about afterthought 2 ( (blog)

Original item by Zach Dafoe

Stu. I'm no expert but please just carry on doing what you do!

Comment is about stung (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

?? I have no idea what has been posted here. Why is Corbyn linked to Marx? Why has a death been announced? What silence?

Comment is about Corbyn and and the death of Marx? (blog)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

Within this silence is love
that screams in helpless pain
of what might have been
only heard in your poetry.

Comment is about Caring through Silence (blog)

Original item by Katy Megan

Hello - me again! Do we have a theme for the next Stockport WOL? - if so, please could someone let me know what it is? - Thanks so much, Dorinda x

Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)

Original item by Stockport WoL

It's best we know our place, Harry. Just keep your head down, Old Son.

Comment is about Happy 35th Wedding Anniversary (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Cheers Graham. I was aiming to create a sense of space, of peace, of relaxing, of it being over now. You've got me wondering now though. I wanted to break the pace up - maybe it just doesn't work though?

Yeh - I didn't want to initially blog the entire thing, but I think I will now, in a day or so.

Pretty ambitious piece of work for me, never done anything like this before, but yep, am pleased with it :)

Comment is about Tableau 4: The Melting of the Ice (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

This is indeed a tour de force piece of work. Not so sure about the staggered lines in V3 I think they distract from the read somewhat, but very effective words.

Will there be some way of gathering all this together to read as a completed work. I think it would be stronger.

Re: the last verse, someone needs to be the family sheepdog, herding everyone together occasionally. It's me in our family.

Laura, I hope you're pleased with this project and I hope it has satisfied YOU.

well done,

Graham

Comment is about Tableau 4: The Melting of the Ice (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Ray, thank you for your encouraging comments on War of Words.

regards,

Graham

Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)

Original item by ray pool

I completely understand. Most of my early poems were deeply cathartic - the series I've just written is cathartic. But catharsis must go hand in hand with trying to make each poem the best that it can be. Editing is something I didn't bother with much at first. But when I look back at my earlier poems, I KNOW they could be improved.You're already starting with strong material - you owe it to yourself to make it as perfect as possible :)

Comment is about stung (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

This is the fifth and final part of a series of five interconnecting poems. Recent events in my life were preceded by hearing Finlandia, by Jean Sibelius, on the radio, and it so completely described how I was feeling that it took me over, and informs the whole series.

As a big nod to Sibelius, I've decided to use a loosely-based symphonic structure, so the parts are laid out like this:

The Melting of the Ice

Movements:

1. Prelude
2. Tableau 1: Return of the Snow Queen
3. Tableau 2: Night of Years
4. Tableau 3: Tempest
5. Tableau 4: The Melting of the Ice

Comment is about Tableau 4: The Melting of the Ice (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

The importance of each word is something I am learning (slowly). I don't edit or rewrite any of my poems, and I write them all in the space of 15-30 minutes. I rarely even delete lines. I have a thing about editing, I want everything I write to be straight from me, conveying what I am feeling at that moment about that subject. For me, poetry is catharsis. Having said that, I am slowly getting better! I am getting confidence from being on here, and that confidence is making me see my work as something others enjoy, not just a chance for me to whine.

Comment is about stung (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Wow - thank you Cynth! :)

Comment is about Tableau 3: Tempest (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Oooo - like a psychic sewing the darkness - there's a line and a half!

Have to agree with Cynth and ray - this is outstandingly good, every single line is richly alive. The kitchen's wired shell. Too many lines in here I wish I'd have written myself :)

Comment is about Kitchen (blog)

Original item by Tom Harding

Yep - that is MUCH better. I always think that, in a poem, because it's a condensed and coded form of communication/language, that Every Single Word matters. Painless now communicates so much more.

Well that's the wonderful thing about WOL. I know that I wouldn't have written anywhere near the amount I have done without this place. In fact, when I joined, my biog page simply said 'Published nowhere. Performed nowhere' :)

Comment is about stung (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Absolutely a joy to read and identify with. It has so many ingredients at play and balances them in a structured yet free style. Very fine indeed

Comment is about Kitchen (blog)

Original item by Tom Harding

yes i think this is very nice, i like the blunt lines, still with plenty of emotion behind them.

Comment is about Collaboration in memory (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Tom,
I `d just started to cheer...then it started raining again.

But - like you say - the power of miracles :)

Comment is about It's Summertime (blog)

Original item by Tom Doolan

John,
Your last comment calls to mind a couple of quotes
from poet Coventry Patmore`s `A Married Lover`

Because although in act and word
As lowly as a wife can be,
Her manners, when they call me lord,
Remind me 'tis by courtesy;

Because, though free of the outer court
I am, this Temple keeps its shrine
Sacred to Heaven; because, in short,
She 's not and never can be mine.

Of course any woman worth her salt will lie through
her teeth and deny this.

And the Women`s movement think it`s all about
equality with men (are they kiddin!)

For Pete`s sake don`t tell Gertie.

Comment is about Happy 35th Wedding Anniversary (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Thanks Cynthia - very kind over generous words. I've been away awhile and this is the first poem i've finished in some months so glad you liked it.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hello there! I really do appreciate your feedback so there's no chance of telling you where to go. I post poems here for honest and open comments, as it's not easy writing in isolation as I'm not part of any local groups. You are right about the lines and I can see it now you have pointed it out - much appreciated as always, Katy x

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thank you Martin!

Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)

Original item by Martin Elder

thanks for your thoughts RM, especially regards my writing style. Advice on writing often says 'read as much as possible' but instinct shouts 'don't read anything else as it will influence your writing style'. When I was younger this was very much the case, anything I read I un/consciously copied (with a few exceptions). It doesn't seem to be too much of a problem nowadays.

I use a notebook for the occasional writing down of thoughts, words, lines etc - it will be forgotten otherwise - but 99% of my work is straight onto the laptop - meaning I don't get to doodle and scribble like I used to - which is a shame - although once my son heads off to university in September I'm hoping to regain some space for drawing and illustration.

thanks again for reading and re-reading my work, I will likewise with yours continue - your comments / rambles are always appreciated.

Comment is about cutting loose (blog)