Welcome to WOL, Maki. I admire your honesty. Thinking is essential to poetry, so you are off to a great beginning. And writing definitely helps to 'sort things out'. You may find a 'free style' is a good way to start, without being hassled with rhyme. But, maybe, you actually enjoy that challenge. Whichever, always read over what you've written and ask yourself, 'What is here that I can say with fewer words, better ones?' I think that was the best advice I ever got. And I try to practise it always. So - have a thesaurus handy, the writer's best friend. And use it. Broaden your 'well of words' every day. Your mind can express only as much as your words allow. They are your 'tool' for building ideas for your own eyes and for others to share.

And a pure 'love of writing' is a wonderful thing - very demanding, but so rewarding.

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Good luck to Nicola Hulme

Who will be at - - -

Harry Potter Book Festival being held at Stockport Art Gallery

11 am - 3 pm Sunday 11th February

All young Witches Warlocks and Wizards are wellcome
as long as they drag Mums and Dads with them too!

Comment is about Write Out Loud at Stockport art gallery tonight (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Strong and true. Well said. The final line is excellent.

Comment is about Hijacked (blog)

Original item by Maki

Much enjoyed.

Comment is about BRIE de MERSEY (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Clever - much appreciated.

Comment is about Complex mathematics, Oldbury (blog)

Original item by steve pottinger

Discarded

Blue brown yellow green
silver sweet paper wrappers
they fly without care
like absent minded eater
enjoying flavours more than
harmful action they take
while always walking past
eager to take bin.

The theme for Monday night is - - - running in the wind.

Comment is about Write Out Loud at Stockport art gallery tonight (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Really clever take on the fantasy that is the printed garden, unavoidably hopeless and fruitless for me at any rate. Success in the garden comes at a heavy price. I especially like it as it appeared on my birthday, Tommy! (Is that a good sign, fingers crossed).

Ray

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Original item by Tommy Carroll

Welcome to WOL, Saniya. That is a lovely name. Does it have a special history, or is it a delightful new way to be just 'you'?

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Original item by Saniya

I love the way the media conveys news that minimises any advantages the UK may gain from withdrawal from European rules and regulations, thus strangling the new born at birth, even during its conception. Plenty of vim, harpic and hot towels need apply, Steve. In any case, the Math Haiku is intriguing itself. The title is excellent, a sort of dumbing down.

Ray

Comment is about Complex mathematics, Oldbury (blog)

Original item by steve pottinger

Ha ha! I do feel like an idiot. But never mind - nothing new about that. You do have a fine flair for words.

Comment is about I Can Be That (blog)

Original item by Saniya

is the answer 42?

Comment is about Complex mathematics, Oldbury (blog)

Original item by steve pottinger

Just spotted your like, Jonathan. Much appreciated !

Ray

Comment is about INERTIA (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Written following the government report which claims that, in the event of a no-deal Brexit, the West Mids economy will shrink by 13%.

Comment is about Complex mathematics, Oldbury (blog)

Original item by steve pottinger

Now meeting at South 16 in Buxton.

Review is about Spoken Words on 6 Mar 2018 (event)

Hi
I have always written my poems with the sound in mind - what you should hear if they are read. So the broken and indented lines are structuring the relationship of one block of text with the former - acting as exaggerated commas or parentheses, if you will. I hope it works! Perhaps it comes from some years writing computer programs!
Some of my poems rhyme too!

Comment is about Aberystwyth Scenes, 1970 (blog)

Original item by Chris Armstrong

Perfectly expressed Tom. We all need a space however small as long as it is private. As I get older, I find it a rarer occurrence, and more valuable. I've seen wasps doing this, but never a bee!

Ray

Comment is about Coffee Break (blog)

Original item by Tom Harding

Thanks Stu and Pat , really glad you liked this one. Much appreciated.

Laura Steve and Des i'm most grateful for your likes too.
It means a lot.

Ray

Comment is about INERTIA (blog)

Original item by ray pool

It has never been lost on me how the lunacy and brutality
of war seem destined to advance knowledge and the
products of progress at a rate not experienced in peacetime.

Comment is about A QUESTION OF WAR (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Thanks, Marc.

Comment is about HEY THERE VAGINA (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

TYPE III
Colonial history will still dictate how the men around here
Practice love through hate
For aesthetic purposes; an ethnic marker
Gender controlled by husband...son...father
Against my will.

I can let nature take its course, the uneasiness in how I pass
Bears nothing to your immoral force with which you open me up
Your gateway to a selfish pleasure
And I once believed that being loved
Was close to being treasured
I am as trapped as a bird in a cage
Modified and made ugly by your commission
Disfigured by tradition and religion and holy wars
And chained by the fear that renders me yours
Against my will

My sisterhood grows, from northeast Africa
To the sub-Sahara
Young and joyless and bound by doctrines
No pursuit of happiness. No pleasure to come
No great expectations. Nothing foretold
Nothing that has been or gone
Objects more of control than desire
My eyes that once shone with innocent love
Now burn with hate fuelled fire…and all because...
You denied me a fall from grace, you denied me self discovery
No different to putting scars on my face
Or is that too much a public recovery?
You denied me womanhood. You denied me choice
I censor my thoughts and silence my voice
And I think of our mothers and their mothers
And of the honour and pride they felt
When this exact same fate to them was dealt
And why did they not feel humiliated? Abused?
Mutilated? Used?
Maybe when we live in a world without light
We relinquish our strengths and fall prey to our plights
Enlightenment and knowledge, I was lead to believe,
Are the roads to freedom
Our mothers learned nothing other than to serve and to please
And here am I, enlightened but sedated
Imprisoned, captive, segregated
Dysmorphic now, a victim still
And all of this against my will

Comment is about HEY THERE VAGINA (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

What's the reason for the broken lines?

Comment is about Aberystwyth Scenes, 1970 (blog)

Original item by Chris Armstrong

Jon,

thank you for this kind comment. Your Dad sounds remarkable. The Bible gives us an allotted time of three score years and ten but eighty if we are strong. That says a lot for Dad.

Keith

Comment is about Three Score Years & Ten (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Hi Keith

A brilliantly worded piece, it has much in common with everyone's experience I should imagine.
Me Dad always says the Bible says we should live threescore years and ten but he's ninety one this year!
He reckons he's out of date.
A stunning last stanza mate.

Jon

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Original item by keith jeffries

Thanks to everyone who read, commented and liked The Close. I never intended to make it so lengthy and revisited it loads of times to edit and chop it down a bit.

I almost didn't put it on because of it's length but it's done now anyway. Cheers again everyone for taking the time out to read it.

Jon

Comment is about The Close (blog)

Original item by Jon Darby

Wow, that was quite affecting! Excellent work ?

Comment is about Letters (blog)

Original item by Chris Armstrong

My heart goes out to you, I'm so sorry for your loss. This is a beautiful, winsome, densely-coloured poem, that reverberates with profound emotions, and has a wonderfully original feel to it. Well, of course it does, you've never written this before, and you'll never write anything like this again.

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Original item by Maia Moon

Hey, thanks Steve ?

I had the first verse for this for ages, but watching The End of the F**king World recently plunged me right back to that chaos and vulnerability of youth and got me thinking - the end result being this poem. Glad you like it ?

Comment is about Not Exactly Miss Jean Brodie (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

What I love about this poem is the unashamed length. So often we rail against being too long or overwordy in the fear of perceived self-indulgence, both from the poet and his/her peers.
No such guilt on show here, oh no!
It's brilliant it's original it's long and all the better for it.
Thanks for being brave JBD, I would love to be in the audience for this one with a big bag of crisps and a sparkling water.

Well done my m8

Comment is about The Close (blog)

Original item by Jon Darby

Very atmospheric, David - I really liked the imagery: "while age sat weary on the family’s creaking roots" is particularly good (IMO!)... and "marbled with seams of old finger nails". It really captures the time.

Funnily enough, I have also just written about ash - but a very different context!

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Original item by David T Jones

Stu,

Thank you for your comment. It is much appreciated. Since I joined WoL last year in March I have discovered a group of fellow poets with thom I can relate. With your work I often feel a sense of affinity which nearly always has a strong spiritual element to it. Thank you. Keith

Comment is about Three Score Years & Ten (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

excellent piece of writing keith and as previously mentioned i find it quite easy to relate to. i just hope you find as much spiritual catharsis in your writing as i do mine.

Comment is about Three Score Years & Ten (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

'with his wings up'
'into the traffic of the courtyard'

love it!

Comment is about Coffee Break (blog)

Original item by Tom Harding

Thank you for the comment Keith!

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Original item by Jacob Martin

My condolences. Wonderful remembrance in poem form.

Comment is about Above (blog)

Original item by Maia Moon

thanks steve. i've been reading a lot of e.e. cummings lately (after picking up '73 poems' from the poetry bookshop in hay-on-wye) and i love his use of brackets and space. he almost seems to be writing two or three poems at once. anyway, thanks for commenting im glad you liked it. hope to see you at some point this year for more poetry/ale.

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Original item by Stuart Buck

Thanks for liking this Hannah. Much appreciated

Comment is about Waking up my people (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

Thanks to David for liking and Nigel Stu and Hannah for commenting.

Why am I not surprised that you singled out that particular line Nigel.

Glad you appreciated the banality of our lives sometimes Stu. I am reminded of the Good life and the Richard Briers characters response to the humdrum. Comically anarchic !

I can understand where you are coming from being a place with so many fire doors Hannah. there is always the hope that they will lead somewhere new. But it is seldom the case.

Thanks everybody
Martin

Comment is about Doors (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

There's some cracking lines in this poem, Laura. The couplet which finishes with "seamless pelt" is just beautiful.

?

Comment is about Not Exactly Miss Jean Brodie (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

That's a great first line, MC.

Comment is about A QUESTION OF WAR (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

I really like this piece, Stu. I must have read it three or four times, and relished it on each occasion.

Comment is about van (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

JC - I note your point about "enforced circumcision in infants" having religious causes but it is not equitable
with the effects of FGM in my view - for reasons previously shown.
But now I must get my supper and close my own contributions to this particular blog and the cause of
free speech (e.g. aka the right to give offence).
Please accept my nomination for the "Mel Brooks Award"
for bad taste. Oh vey!

Comment is about HEY THERE VAGINA (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Nice write and that picture is definitely not me LOL

Comment is about Diary Of The Southern Queen Entry #48 (His Fine Self) (blog)

Original item by Chiari Warrior Soldier

This poem is more about expressing my love towards someone. My reference to Luther was for Luther Vandross.

Comment is about I Can Be That (blog)

Original item by Saniya

Thank you!

Comment is about Daddy's Little Girl Wish (blog)

Original item by Saniya

Anyone can be a father, but it takes a real special person to be a daddy. Good poem.

Comment is about Daddy's Little Girl Wish (blog)

Original item by Saniya

I have to go now, Laura. I've looked out the window and there's life outside. I'm going to join them.

Comment is about HEY THERE VAGINA (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

I'll try to give my simple answers to the raft of great comments herein today !

David, thanks mate. You seem to re-inforce the poem's suggestion as to bringing influences to the table ; I personally think that some people are "receivers" or call them mediumistic in that parlance; others may have an innate sensitivity which acts as a trigger in certain environments. I have had too many weird experiences (apart from using WOL) not to be thus aware . It makes life interesting and also a challenge. The issue of redemption and all that jazz I think is drafted on or shall we say inwardly interpreted from a smorgasbord of issues, some of which are of course are inherited. I think some poems are "contrived" and others are outpourings with lots of shades in between. Not sure where mine lie -but I do like to be in control!!

Thanks Paul. The practice of exorcism seems to be connected with demonology and "evil influences." I have been with clairvoyants who claimed to have sent spirits on from an earthbound limbo attracted by past attachments. This perhaps is in the same vein as you mention, without of course the training and backing of a vast edifice that gives it credibility. As society becomes more materialistic in its methods, so the grip becomes more tenuous of course. Superstitions could give rise to mania and hysteria in the past. Thanks for reflecting on
the last verse. It is, like so much, just an idea.

Thanks Jennifer, so many stories out there! My brother camped in Glencoe, and swore that he heard massed bagpipes as he drifted off, It spooked him out. What he ate I canna say! Thanks for sharing that. Talking of Italy, actually Venice, check out Don't Look Now.!

Many thanks additionally for liking this,David, Ruby and Psylentskog.

Suki, fascinating thoughts indeed. We are mainly composed of chemicals and electricity I suppose and are we just terminals? wow! Quantum physics may yet reveal what you suggest.

Thanks Hannah. I know what you mean. Children seem to much more open to the unexplained, perhaps because parents have not had yet time to do it for them.

Also thanks Ray for trying to step up to the plate.

Ray Luv to all.

Comment is about RESTLESS SOULS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Nope. I've definitely not misunderstood you.

Comment is about HEY THERE VAGINA (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Thanks,each.
I'm not sure enforced circumcision of infants in some religions meets with your model,MC.
Laura. I think you have misunderstood my thread.I am not presuming to tell you what to think. I am telling you what I think which, I am sure you will agree, is within my ownership.

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