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raypool

Sun 12th Mar 2017 19:19

Superbly descriptive and invasive - a tearing sense and loss of reality encapsulated in great gothic tradition Stu. Fantastic in every respect.
Deep in such mythology are the dark superstitions and fears re-inforced by religious and sexual intrigue and suppression. Move over Sleepy Hollow.

Ray

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Little Bit

Sun 12th Mar 2017 19:02

thanks seamus! ?

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Little Bit

Sun 12th Mar 2017 19:01

andy,
i don't know if my birth mom is alive. i haven't really done any searching. i want to, but get busy or put it out of my mind. i guess i'm not quite ready yet.

i'm working on being loud and making mama proud. i'm getting louder and louder ?

thanks for your comments. always good to hear from you!
LB

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elPintor

Sun 12th Mar 2017 18:28

Hey, Suki! No need to worry about me..I manage to keep my more base instincts under a pretty tight rein these days. Glad you liked it, sir.

elP

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elPintor

Sun 12th Mar 2017 18:21

Hi, Stu,

This is sparking thoughts going in all directions..most too cryptic and fragmented to address here. That's a cop out, I know, but it really is an absorbing piece of writing.

If I come up with anything more coherent, I'll let you know.

elP

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keith jeffries

Sun 12th Mar 2017 18:19

I have read all the poems on your profile here. They are remarkably good as they emanate from your inner being where your honesty gives free rein to you emtions and thoughts. Write more, lots more. You are very talented. Your suffering is your strength. Thanks Keith

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Emer Ni Chorra

Sun 12th Mar 2017 17:53

Brilliant. I really love the last verse. Well done ?

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Paul Waring

Sun 12th Mar 2017 17:43

I really enjoyed this Stu, I like the idea that it could read as being haunted by, or yearning to be bitten by, a wolf. And the repetition of wolf and other words works well.

Cheers,

Paul

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Paul Waring

Sun 12th Mar 2017 17:21

Thanks Stu, so pleased you liked this and picked up on the sense of claustrophobia, noise and bustle that I was trying to create.

And I agree entirely about being too near to numbers of people!

Paul

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raypool

Sun 12th Mar 2017 16:57

Thanks for comments Stu - I think I must be a wandering fetishist, head in the past. Very pleased you approved of it!

Ray

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Stu Buck

Sun 12th Mar 2017 16:30

so much history and lovely description in your words as usual ray. as david said, anyone with any knowledge of the area cant help but be transported back there.

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Stu Buck

Sun 12th Mar 2017 16:28

claustrophobic and full of noise and bustle. a great piece of descriptive writing, i felt almost uneasy reading it as my idea of hell is anywhere with more than three people within 50 metres.

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Stu Buck

Sun 12th Mar 2017 16:27

brilliant as ever ian but a personal piece for me and a wonderful, subtle use of the black dog metaphor which brings the whole piece together.

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Stu Buck

Sun 12th Mar 2017 16:24

what an excellent piece of writing. all your work showcases a real world weariness, and captures scenes and visions that only those who had the experiences that you did could hope to understand. but you translate them beautifully and allow us a glimpse into your mind, which is a dark yet attractive proposition

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Stu Buck

Sun 12th Mar 2017 16:23

this is excellent, the repetition really works and i would love to hear an impassioned live version, it would work really well.

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Stu Buck

Sun 12th Mar 2017 16:22

great stuff. i attended hymers college in the mid nineties so identify with the area so this really resonates with me. enjoyable, immensely so infact.

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 12th Mar 2017 15:49

Thanks Ken. I like to combine the hope and the reality of
life occasionally - without becoming too maudlin!

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keith jeffries

Sun 12th Mar 2017 15:34

Thank you for reading ´A Bibulous Few ¨

I like Hazy & Dull, quite possibly because I can relate to it. I also generally like your style. Thanks. Keith

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Paul Waring

Sun 12th Mar 2017 08:59

Thanks Colin, Ray and Suki.

Col, I spent 4 hours on Thursday in Lisbon Airport Terminal 2 hell. Even Columbus would have struggled ?

Ray, I plan to avoid airports for as long as possible, flying has zip, zilch, zero appeal these days! Aythangyouw.

Suki, on Thursday I coped by writing about what was happening around me. I'm glad I did now! Staying with close friends until our furniture arrives. Moving is always stressful, eh? But now the relaxation has begun....thanks for your kind wishes.

Cheers to you all dear chaps.

Paul


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Rick Gammon

Sun 12th Mar 2017 07:22

This is from me book - the final version post-edit is at the printer. Me 'ead is slowly becoming mine again - after 6 months of editing - ferreting mistakes - all I have is negative rats running around my head.
The proof reader edits one of those "Health" mags - I'm thinking of applying for the position of 'Star Applicator' even 'Junior S.A.' would suit me fine ?

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raypool

Sat 11th Mar 2017 22:57

Thanks Suki - as a musician I learnt that if you have a strong start and a good finish you have a result - I do try for a nice ending.

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suki spangles

Sat 11th Mar 2017 22:36

Dark, stark and kinetic. I can sense the racing pulse - moving, circling, homing in in to do the deed.

I don't want to get on your bad side!

Suki

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suki spangles

Sat 11th Mar 2017 22:15

You moved, and you had time to write a poem about the airport experience? You must be some kind of poetry Superman!

Hope the move wasn't too stressful.

Have a chilled weekend, Paul.

Suki

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suki spangles

Sat 11th Mar 2017 22:13

Pleasure for pleasure's sake - nothing wrong with that. I love the last line: "..a cosmic destiny, a guilty joke".

Suki

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raypool

Sat 11th Mar 2017 22:03

Harum scarem, Paul . I don't fly i'm afraid, so this scenario I've managed to avoid . Things before the threat of terrorism were much more civilized, when I last ascended.
You've conjured up a very real picture with plenty of detail and a sense of confusion- a feeling of the sense of being bombarded, reminiscent also of the modern rail terminus too.

Ray

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Sat 11th Mar 2017 20:49

"By prevailing over all obstacles and distractions, one may unfailingly arrive at his chosen goal or destination." Columbus ?

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keith jeffries

Sat 11th Mar 2017 20:45

September Sister is beautifully and sensitively crafted. Keith

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keith jeffries

Sat 11th Mar 2017 20:38

This is good. Any more?

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keith jeffries

Sat 11th Mar 2017 20:30

A good style Isaac. Don´t give up as you have much potential. Keith

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raypool

Sat 11th Mar 2017 20:24

HI all you lovely commentators!
David, thanks mate. I discovered this spot via a Peter Sellers film The Optimist of Nine Elms made in 1970. I went to investigate in the late 80s before the marina and there was still dereliction and traces of industry; an old railway yard lamp swinging in the breeze and the smell of gas. All gentrified now, but the pub remains(no longer the Balloon).
Guilty as charged.
elP, it is an international feature i'm sure , America still has the diners and manned petrol stations I suppose. Thanks for taking the trip.
Col: I borrowed that line, it seemed to fit and it is powerful in Penny Lane placing it firmly in the imagination.
Cheers Paul. It's nice you and David picked up on the fondness .strange how places can be so personal to us.

Thank you all and may you all dream on!

Ray

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keith jeffries

Sat 11th Mar 2017 18:46

There are instances in this where I can slot myself as I suppose will many others.

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Eugene Williams

Sat 11th Mar 2017 18:03

A wonderful symmetry of words that brings you back too natures field of hope.

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Paul Waring

Sat 11th Mar 2017 17:57

First of all dear friends, please accept sincere apologies for replying so late. Since I arrived back to live in UK a few days ago, it has been non-stop, post-move mania.

Frances, how incredibly kind of you to do this. I loved reading it on your wordpress site and love the site too!

Andy and Cynthia, loved reading your comments. It's fantastic to think how many people have similar stories to tell!

Many, many thanks, Paul

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keith jeffries

Sat 11th Mar 2017 17:53

Good Afternoon Eugene, or at least it is here in the Canary Islands where I live. Your biography caught my eye when I read the words Escondido, California. I was in that part of the world in the 1980´s at University near San Diego. I took my driving test in Escondido.

I am interested to hear of your short stories. So far I have only dabbled with poetry but am tempted to enter the world of stories soon. Katherine Mansfield is a favourite of mine and wrote using that particular genre. I have not read any of your work. Is it available online?

Kind regards
Keith

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Paul Waring

Sat 11th Mar 2017 17:50

Thank you so incredibly much Cynthia for the most beautiful comments in praise of my writing. I am deeply touched and can't tell you how grateful I am for your kindness.

Paul

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keith jeffries

Sat 11th Mar 2017 17:27

John, Thank you for this poem which resonates with me in a very intimate sense. Your description of Charlie, your thoughts about him in relation to yourself make the poem one of deep beauty. Thank you again. Keith

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ken eaton-dykes

Sat 11th Mar 2017 16:26

Love's tender spring shoots slowly hardened off

Nice one MC

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Sat 11th Mar 2017 15:55

you may well be correct there Mr Waring ? Ta!

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keith jeffries

Sat 11th Mar 2017 15:18

Hola Juan,
I like ¨My Mentality ¨. I can relate to it. Your other verses display all the hallmarks of real potential. Your Christian Faith shines through. This will enable God´s grace to work through you, to his and your advantage. Saludos de Tenerife. Keith

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kJ Walker

Sat 11th Mar 2017 10:40

hi Keith . thanks for comment on "we all watch".
I was inspired to write this after watching Punch & Judy whilst on holiday.
cheers Kevin.

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Paul Waring

Sat 11th Mar 2017 09:56

Hi Tom,

Honestly, I love your writing and I have read and enjoyed some of these poems before. I started to read your stuff after commenting on Night Music in December. It has stayed with me and remains one of my favourite poems on here.

I sincerely wish you all the best with this excellent
collection.

Paul

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Paul Waring

Sat 11th Mar 2017 09:33

Really enjoyable poem, Ray. Rich with historical content and memories and, for me, a sense of love and sadness about a lost past that, as David says, we old buggers love.

And, Mr Hill, as a newly returned Merseyside resident, I think the song you have in mind is Penny Lane ?

Paul

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Sat 11th Mar 2017 08:46

I had a quick scroll through and thought the presentation was superb. Are they your illustrations? When I get time I will come back and read more thoroughly. Colin

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Sat 11th Mar 2017 08:41

that first line is bugging the hell out of me - have you borrowed it from a song Ray?

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Sat 11th Mar 2017 08:29

ditto Tom's comment but I desperately want to take a surgeon's knife and excise the negatives and leave only those lovely warm images but yeah, I know what you mean Ian.

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kJ Walker

Sat 11th Mar 2017 08:20

I really liked this one. It really gives the sense of drowning.
Was it meant to be taken literally, or as a metaphor? Either way it read well.
Cheers Kevin

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kJ Walker

Sat 11th Mar 2017 08:02

If this was just a piece of fiction, then I would comment "loved it" , because it told the story so well.
But it wasn't a piece of fiction, innocent children are loosing their lives. So instead of "loved it" I will say well written.

Kevin

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kJ Walker

Sat 11th Mar 2017 07:36

Hi Keith. Thanks for taking the time to read "keep it in the bedroom" . I appreciate your feedback as I'm new to writing poetry.
I've just done my first open mic session, where "Fred's little problem" seemed to go down well.
I'll definitely read some of your stuff and leave a comment.
Cheers Kevin

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David Cooke

Sat 11th Mar 2017 06:27

Hi Ray Thanks for kind comment on Prickly pear. David

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Tom Harding

Sat 11th Mar 2017 06:08

Some great flowing imagery here Ian, enjoyed it.

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