Waking up my people

It can take time to get

My inner people moving in the morning

Like an old car on a cold frosty day

Where the windows have to be

Scraped and brushed


then the engine starts

Sometimes with several turns of the key

In order for a breath of life to start

The action of working in my mind

Where cogs turn

And fingers hit the keys

The frost and mist melting before my eyes

And the sun pours through

As the people begin to move

The spark flies and the engine kicks in

And they become busy

one at a time

Sometimes altogether

Talking fighting

Crossing swords

All vying for my attention

To rave race and capitulate

Things to do

Things to say

As the engine idles

And the car moves off

Finally going at full bore

Occasionally hiccupping or swerving on ice

Launching itself into a brand-new day

Full of expectation

Looking for those kindnesses that may never come

Though somehow a sliver of hope slips in

and the people no longer fight

when they drive the car in unison

Never stopping

Until it reaches its destination

At the end of day

◄ Who is the fairest

Doors ►


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Martin Elder

Wed 7th Feb 2018 22:45

Thanks for liking this Hannah. Much appreciated

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Martin Elder

Sun 4th Feb 2018 13:31

Thanks Lynn. You will be pleased to learn that I haven't done that with an old coat again

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lynn hahn

Sun 4th Feb 2018 04:24

LOL I love the poem and also got a big chuckle from your comment about your rain coat being wound around the fan in your auto. That would be a fun poem.

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Martin Elder

Tue 30th Jan 2018 23:31

Thanks to David and Desmond for liking and Colin, Suki and Ray for commenting

strangely enough this was based on some words that Sylvia Plath was supposed to have said when Talking about herself in trying to get her inner self going.
I always like to check under the bonnet these days Ray. As once many years ago I used to put an old raincoat over the engine of one of my cars to keep it from freezing overnight. Trouble was I forgot about the coat one day and started the engine with the result the coat was wound round the fan.

You are right Suki it does have quite a January feel to it

That's a good analogy of Willy Wonka's chocolate factory Colin. I like that.

Thanks again to all

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Mon 29th Jan 2018 08:38

like sneaking into Willy Wonka's chocolate factory and watching the Oompa Loompa's waking up and starting work. I'd post a link to the song but it's way too annoying! Good stuff Martin. Happy motoring. Col.

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suki spangles

Mon 29th Jan 2018 05:45

Hi there Martin,

I love the staccato rhythm of this; very apt for the subject and mood conveyed. For me,it also has a very January feel. Nice one!


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Sun 28th Jan 2018 17:36

A lot of fun Martin - keeping the analogy going in a straight line as it were. We like to try and rely on our closest as much as we do on the car, but do we likewise take them for granted?! Always check under the bonnet.


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