I love the gentle presentation of ideas such as yours Tom. Like fine bone china the poem takes shape with detail such as the tiny knot. The idea of our outside selves is a great thought, and the last line like a dissolution. Compelling imagery.
Just a point, is that a typo in the third verse ? I thought reimagine.

Ray

Comment is about Monday (blog)

Original item by Tom Harding

His uncle may be bald but his dad and grandad aren't...baldness is not a Hewitt trait!

Comment is about LOOKING A-HEAD! (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Thanks Jennifer, and yes, as I'm sure we know from experience, only too true.

J. x

Comment is about Little Birds (blog)

Original item by Jason Bayliss

Thanks muchly Mr. Foggin. A stimulating and enjoyable read. Yea! let's hear it for lines, whitespace and that Dylan man.
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Comment is about Poetry workshops, the ins and outs: line breaks (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

You continue to excel with another splendid poem which stimulates the readers imagination.

Well done and congratulations
Keith

Comment is about 'Star Scran and Honey Madness' by Kealan Coady is Write Out Loud Poem of the Week (article)

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Thank you so much Martin! ?

Comment is about Note with Note (blog)

Original item by Mae Foreman

So true...from national politics to the local weather forecast!

Comment is about DAY BY DAY (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

excellent as ever tom, really enjoyed this

Comment is about Monday (blog)

Original item by Tom Harding

Hi Randy - you make a strong point, and I feel that the Victorian salon mentality of women tightly corseted and blushing with fans and posies may have persisted into the atomic age. God forbid it is be resurrected under the cloak of poetry, but it sure is. Just a form of presentation wrapping under which foments the reality.

Ray

Comment is about A Bifurcated Analysis of Overly Indulgent Self-Reference and Metacriticism (blog)

Original item by Randy Horton

Thanks Keith. Hardly a day goes past when there isn't something
of the doom and gloom scenario being pushed at us. I wonder
just how much of it finds its way to the so-called third world with its
expanding populations and connected problems?

Comment is about DAY BY DAY (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

An excellent poem.
Thank you for this as I share your sentiments at the present time.

Keith

Comment is about DAY BY DAY (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Trevor,

Thank you for taking an interest in my poetry and for your kind and encouraging comments.

Keith

Comment is about trevor homer (poet profile)

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Thanks Vautaw and Ray! Agree about the water babies- it is slightly Victorian maiden aunt stuff, but it just came into my head and flowed along! Glad you liked it. Jennifer

Comment is about Beyond the Blue (blog)

Original item by Jennifer Malden

A beautiful poem flowing through the mind like a trail of thoughts - captivating and joyous, with lots of quite childlike imagery . I like the fact it has no sting in its tail and retains a credibility that' s delightful. Reminds me of the Water Babies by Charles Kingsley, a children's book from 1862.

Ray

Comment is about Beyond the Blue (blog)

Original item by Jennifer Malden

I love mermaids and I love this poem. Thanks for sharing Jennifer! ?‍♀️

Comment is about Beyond the Blue (blog)

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Indeed Jason. Thanks for reading and commenting. ?

Comment is about Twisted Love (blog)

Original item by Vautaw

Love it.

Comment is about Fashion victim (blog)

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Thanks for the likes.

Comment is about FOR BETTER...OR WORSE? (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Hard to argue with the basic truth in these lines. Cleaning up means
more than merely financial expectations. Helping yourself may be
similarly applied in this context.

Comment is about Getting Out From Under (blog)

Original item by d.knape

Thanks, Jennifer.
I’m not quite the voyeur I paint in my poem.
But I do think if women do it in public they can hardly be offended if people look.
It’s a bit like women being offended if people look at their chest when they’re wearing a t-shirt with a message on it.
As for that whopping kid - it’s probably got a full set of teeth too.

Comment is about BREAST FEEDING IN PUBLIC (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Am unable to write intelligent comments, so would just like to say I enjoyed this, and agree with Ray that it is gripping and rather unsettling.

Jennifer

Comment is about A DREAM OF MISFORTUNE (blog)

Original item by john short

Great little poem and unfortunately too true!

Jennifer

Comment is about Little Birds (blog)

Original item by Jason Bayliss

Agree with breastfeeding absolutely, but discretion should be used by spectators and the feeders as some people find it embarrassing. Anyway why on earth is she breastfeeding a child which must be nearly one year old?

Jennifer

Comment is about BREAST FEEDING IN PUBLIC (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Close to the vedge!

Comment is about ANTEDISESTABLISHMENT VEGETARIANISM (blog)

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Thanks for you like on The Helter - Skelter of Football

Looking at Perfectly Perfect

An emotional rollercoaster - - - love the title

Comment is about Bridgett Elizabeth (poet profile)

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Thanks for your like mate on - - -

The Helter-Skelter of Football

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

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Either or.?

(Just kidding, great poem.)

J.

Comment is about BREAST FEEDING IN PUBLIC (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Whoops Graham. I must admit to a fondness for bacon and eggs.. I'm not keen on the sanctimonious who try to run a slimline society. In many ways i am a sinner and hypocrite over food but I do yearn to do the right thing whatever that is. I went to a garden centre yesterday unwisely chose french onion soup... A slurry of onions floating in sweet gravy with no cheese or bread. So have a nice lunch! Thanks for the quick response. Ray.

Comment is about ANTEDISESTABLISHMENT VEGETARIANISM (blog)

Original item by ray pool

thanks both!

poet laureate. yeah i'd give it a go!

john, weirdly i remember that comic but have no idea why

Comment is about click/clack (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

hahaha! Ray

I write food and wine articles every month for a national magazine and the most aggressive feedback that I ever encounter is from the vegetarian lobby, so put on your tin hat!

As we speak, am awaiting feedback from a very recently penned vegan piece which is VERY 'in' at the moment.

Good work as usual Ray, especially as it's pissing down here! Shit! it's veg soup for lunch today.

Graham

Comment is about ANTEDISESTABLISHMENT VEGETARIANISM (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Bloody genius Stu.

I'm just sitting here in a really peculiar mood

thinking........................................'what if they made Stu Buck Poet

Laureate?'

Comment is about click/clack (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

and thank YOU sir
for your kind words
regarding "Sorry".
who's sorry now?
not I.

Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)

Original item by Martin Elder

Hi John, this is riveting stuff and quite claustrophic and unsettling. Is there a father figure dominating the relationship and coming back to haunt you - so it might seem. The juxtaposition of contrary ideas makes everything seem surreal.

Fascinating read !

Ray

Comment is about A DREAM OF MISFORTUNE (blog)

Original item by john short

Trying to fathom the depths of meaning here. The first line is startling and shocking, tossed out quite casually. In modern life we've become accustomed to horror. It also reminds me of a comic I read once where a guy in a fast food joint finds a finger in his burger and jumps through a plate glass window.

Nice work Stu.

Comment is about click/clack (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

All this needs is Hattie Jacques and Kenneth Williams onsite to lighten the atmosphere - which you have lovingly created with lots to weigh down the spirit Martin. Hard of breathing is a great phrase. In the midst of all this the smiling and caring faces seem like an antidote, and makes us sympathise with those in charge too.

Ray

Comment is about Another visit (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

The poem or the gawping, Jason?

Comment is about BREAST FEEDING IN PUBLIC (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

thanks all! as ever, it means a lot

hope your all keeping well

Comment is about click/clack (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

How true these words are. Each little twist binds us together.

J. x

Comment is about Twisted Love (blog)

Original item by Vautaw

Thank you again to everyone who commented, honestly it means so much that anyone even read it.

And all my stuff is free on my writers page on Facebook: kealan coady-writer.
You're all welcome to come have a look, there's some stuff up there I haven't posted on here.

Thanks again ?

Comment is about 'Star Scran and Honey Madness' by Kealan Coady is Write Out Loud Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Works for me.?

J.x

Comment is about BREAST FEEDING IN PUBLIC (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Took me right back to hospital and my thyroidectomy. They were great, the doctors and nurses, but I couldn't wait to get out.
Favourite lines, "In this place, for the hard of breathing."
Really evocative.

J. x

Comment is about Another visit (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

Not responding to this would be a travesty Stu. Your work is always challenging,and this can't be ignored. The word virus has a special significance for me, as there is a sense of infection throughout. The world of the immediate and the spreading of vicious circles all close in and well described in short form.
The taking out of the eyes reminds me of the creature in Pan's Labyrinth. Scary stuff.

Ray

Comment is about click/clack (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Thanks Martin, I quite like this one too.

J. x

Comment is about Little Birds (blog)

Original item by Jason Bayliss

Thank you so much Mona! ?

Comment is about Hello (blog)

Original item by Dragan Bozilov

This poem is neatly summed up and completed in that last line. a wonderfully presented piece of poetry.
Nice one

Comment is about sorry (blog)

Original item by d.knape

A very honest and well written poem that is summed up for me in the opening line. In that this is the way others who have never been through this can view people displaying such feelings.
Nice one

Comment is about Bi polar (blog)

Original item by Eden Louise

That last line holds the telling words to this poem and rounds it off very nicely.
Nice one Jason

Comment is about Little Birds (blog)

Original item by Jason Bayliss

This definitely has a song like quality to it.
Nice one

Comment is about Note with Note (blog)

Original item by Mae Foreman

I love that line 'how many nights I wished the dark would pause' what makes it even better is the way you have placed the 'would pause all on its own. Your poetry rarely ceases to delight.

Nice one Rachel

Comment is about the future is now (blog)

Original item by nunya

Yeah the world is definitely more surreal at times than a painting a poem or any other art form. I remember watching the Vietnam war on T.V which was probably the first real televised war and being horrified at what we the viewers were being asked to take on board as numbingly normal. All that happens now has certainly got worse.

nice one Stu

Comment is about click/clack (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck