Poetry
that's too obtuse
will leave you
even more confused
before your hurting head
comes loose
give it a boost
read Dr. Seuss.

?

Comment is about Don Matthews (poet profile)

Original item by Don Matthews

I don't know what to make of this
To laugh or bloody cry
I simply shake my head about
And give a great big sigh.......

Comment is about THE LAUGHING POLICEMAN (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

So well executed Keith. You lead the reader along and explain all the above in the final line. It's like the reverse of a joke which leads you along to the end punchline. Anyhow, that's a similar technique I feel you have used here for a 'sad' theme. Well done.......

Comment is about Damaged for life (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Adam,

A spectacular poem rich in its language which speaks of our celestial home as not being inert but full of life and activity,
I really enjoyed this
Thanks
Keith

Comment is about Desert Landscape (blog)

Original item by Adam Rabinowitz

You have given facts and feelings all wrapped up in one here Belinda. All in beautiful poetry.......

Comment is about Did You Know I Have Cancer (blog)

Original item by Belinda Sue Kiser

They watched the oak tree grow and grow
They watched, and also grew
Until they could no longer watch
They died, but oak still grew

Their children watched this oak tree grow
They also watched and grew
My story will go on and on
(Through generations too)

The mighty oak stood proud and tall
A stranger passing by
Did wonder who this oak tree plant?
A whisper came, 'twas I

Comment is about Sing Me To Sleep (blog)

Original item by Jason Bayliss

A real emotion delivered so simple. I quite like the contrast between 'the sound of thunder and the calm of soft rain". I can almost hear it.

Well done.

Comment is about Inside my soul (blog)

Original item by Alta H Mabin (Ally)

Since I am heading off to the mountains for a number of days...thought I would post a landscape poem. Looking forward to reading what I missed upon my return

Comment is about Desert Landscape (blog)

Original item by Adam Rabinowitz

Beautiful emotions well expressed!! ?

Comment is about Inside my soul (blog)

Original item by Alta H Mabin (Ally)

I'm glad your cat told you your glasses were perched on top of your head. Ah, the problems of getting old. Now where is that 'd' on my keyboard? Lost my glasses. Sorry........

Comment is about d.knape (poet profile)

Original item by d.knape

That it will Don, that it will.?

J. x

Comment is about Sing Me To Sleep (blog)

Original item by Jason Bayliss

Perfect description of a hair raising moment or rather continuous moment in time, galvanising us into an unfeasible witness role David.

Welcome to the D & W fold !

Comment is about MAN ON A WIRE (blog)

Original item by David Cooke

Yes Keith, as Devon says, the ever unanswered question.......but a never ending source of inspiration for poets......

Comment is about All around us (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

So beautiful Jason. I have never heard of this kind of cemetery. The oak will outlive all of you....

Comment is about Sing Me To Sleep (blog)

Original item by Jason Bayliss

Thank you all so much. My Dad's having a natural burial, they plant a tree over you, we chose an oak, the place is beautiful. So I'm pleased you liked it, this one has some deep personal resonance for me.

J. x

Comment is about Sing Me To Sleep (blog)

Original item by Jason Bayliss

Luxuriant in it's simplicity, Jason. You deserve a gentle repose.

D

Comment is about Sing Me To Sleep (blog)

Original item by Jason Bayliss

That's the ever unanswered question, Keith, the core of each belief and faith, the hope of all self-reflective mortals and the million pages of philosophers. Well done.

D

Comment is about All around us (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Almost therapeutic in its somnolent quality
Good poem
Thanks
Keith

Comment is about Sing Me To Sleep (blog)

Original item by Jason Bayliss

Like the Great Phoenix

Comment is about Knowing Me (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

Really like this Jason, nicely done. Thanks for sharing.

Comment is about Sing Me To Sleep (blog)

Original item by Jason Bayliss

Beautiful...

Comment is about Sing Me To Sleep (blog)

Original item by Jason Bayliss

Thank you Adam for revisiting! It would be alright even if you didn't like my poem my friend, no worries! Maybe the language I use falls short in this piece. Maybe it sounds ambiguous, if I understand correctly your impression was that it's not clear whether I a)usher the reader to submit to the despot until the despot is weak and then betray the despot
b)I accuse the reader for doing all that...

Do I have it down right?

Here's how it is. Neither. The person speaking in first person is addressing himself and his comrades. The victims of tyranny think the only way to survive is to obey and suck up to him. Appeasement! Everybody around him are doing that, including himself. And he gets mad about it. As for the "wait till he's upon his last breath" part that's merely a possible outcome, a foreboding, something that he foresees happening if he and the others don't do something soon to change things. Something that has happened before perhaps by cowardly powerless victims like him.
And he just doesn't like it... Which causes him even more distress... He's trapped and having a moment of self-loathing, anger towards himself and the others around him doing the same and maybe he is befoere an awakening. Clearer now?
Anyway, thank you for liking and reading and commenting dear Adam! ?
Mae

Comment is about Appeasement (blog)

Original item by Mae Foreman

Mae
I feel perhaps I was not strong enough in saying how much I liked the poem. I have reread it now several times and I agree that I brought to it to much of reading it as a set of instructions that I wanted to follow but could not rather than as the fine print warning of potential error or danger.
Thank you.

Comment is about Appeasement (blog)

Original item by Mae Foreman

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment Raj! I'm not familiar with your work, I will stop by your profile though, welcome back!
Thank you ?
Mae

Comment is about Appeasement (blog)

Original item by Mae Foreman

You've overwhelmed me with this thoughtwave Ray

Comment is about One Marble (blog)

Original item by d.knape

I thought 'stars' were various body parts combined in a special way to create fans. Seems I've been misguided.......

Comment is about BRING ME SUNSHINE (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

I'll try to be clever as usual D. To me the marble is the earth dwindled in size to suit the person's scope. It's still a marble!

Ray

Comment is about One Marble (blog)

Original item by d.knape

All the genuine ingredients here Tommy. You've succeeded grandly in a moving tribute to real life. The grindstone that wears a man into a polished version of himself.

Ray

Comment is about Daughter in 2020 (Dementia onset) (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

I love this stars as memories metaphor and the beautiful flow of the language.

Comment is about Mnemosyne  (blog)

Original item by Chris Armstrong

At least you've got two marbles
I'm sorry, I got sidetracked
You mean, I guess, the head-like type
My mind's gone blank, gone slack

I guess this indicates dk
(Looked on keyboard, lost d)
That I am losing marbles too
I can't find the d, you see?

Now Devon's also having trouble
You've begun to worry him
From icon he does look quite young
He'll think he's losing vim

You've got him worried now (where's that jolly d?) dk.....

Comment is about One Marble (blog)

Original item by d.knape

Great description and I really liked

see poppies translated

as if all those opiate dreams were spoken by the poppy in smoke signals. Great stuff.

Comment is about Poppy (blog)

Original item by Alan Travis Braddock

Aha...supporting the dictum that we see/hear what we want to see/hear. Mum's the word! ?

Comment is about BRING ME SUNSHINE (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Ignoring all evidence to the contrary my mother always maintained that stars had points on them.

Comment is about BRING ME SUNSHINE (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

I was going to comment with a witty riposte, but I went to kitchen for coffee, but forgot that I was going to the kitchen for coffee, and in the process forgot what I wanted say. You know what I mean. The mind is a wrinkly thing.

D

Comment is about One Marble (blog)

Original item by d.knape

Can someone please find my marbles?

Comment is about One Marble (blog)

Original item by d.knape

1) Government run.

2) Health and Safety strictly observed.

3) Sex workers over the age of 21 only.

4) Minimum rates standarised.

5) Usual Tax allowances (HM Revenue & Customs).

6) Trade Unions recognised.

Comment is about Brothel Planning (just a thought) (blog)

Original item by Don Matthews

"In all brutal honesty": Why am I reminded of that well-known and often used phrase "With respect but..."? ?
I certainly agree that all art is derivative. The secret is not to bore
- with blatant plagiarism at the forefront of perceived creative sin.

Comment is about REPEAT AFTER ME (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Thanks Devon. I did have it sorted up to two weeks ago . I hope for some solution but am not quite clear yet !

Hi David. A concise summary and one which fits the bill thanks.
Marriage usually includes the emotional version of the north/south divide, the status quo of circumstance. I'm glad you got to this as it was really to see if I could still download audio clips!

Thanks Graham.

Thanks for the like, Binte !
Ray

Comment is about TIES THAT BIND (blog)

Original item by ray pool

I'd like to read your comment but...
I lost my glasses.

Comment is about Don Matthews (poet profile)

Original item by Don Matthews

My best m8 forever supportive of even the shittest of my poems... Cheers John

Comment is about Siphon not Syphon (blog)

Original item by Richard Alfred

Thank you for sharing your love and desire for being a 'mom'.
Unable to have children of our own, your words have hit my heart, and there made a home ?

Comment is about Have been a mother, will I be a mom? (blog)

Original item by Juhi Gupte

Don re HTS - always good to get positive feedback - will be heading off to the Spoons later for me daily slurpo as the Aussies might say. Better I make sure there's no Kango poo on the pavement though - wouldn't want to slip up. You never know with my local town what's going on with all the whirring cranes - ever the building site is Woking - you want to take a look at the place - always something to write about here that's for sure or do I mean gripe about. Whatever. Cheers. P ?

Comment is about Don Matthews (poet profile)

Original item by Don Matthews

"I explore the coral
Of my own reef
And find it jagged, dangerous.
I have sharp edges of my own."

and then..
fallling to the earth
Empty, exhausted, extinguished.
Everything and all
Extinguished.

I've always enjoyed your writing Hazel.
I've been away, going within.
Back now. Hope you are well.

Raj

Comment is about The Row (blog)

Original item by Hazel ettridge

I have followed this commentary with interest. I think you're right Keith. Most people are content/apathetic with the status quo.

However, your statement:

."The Elites are nefarious and know how far they can go. They manipulate within certain boundaries; it is only when they cross the boundaries is there due cause for concern"

of crossing the boundaries, can be the trigger needed for the content/apathetic balance to be changed. e.g when a government/council cross the border the public soon make their voice known.

Comment is about The Elite (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

'The power of grace' still resonated within me Cynthia. Missed your lucid work.
Anyway, Im back now to feed on your wonderful nourishment.
Soul-satisfying!

Raj x

Comment is about Social Respect (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I used the live here once Mae but then went away to go within and find that better version of myself.

And hey, am I glad I'm back? I feel nourished by poems like this.
I'm going to make it a point to read your work Mae. Lovely concept.

Raj

Comment is about Appeasement (blog)

Original item by Mae Foreman

I used the live here once Mae but then went away to go within and find that better version of myself.

And hey, am I glad I'm back? I feel nourished by poems like this.
I'm going to make it a point to read your work Mae. Lovely concept.

Raj

Comment is about Appeasement (blog)

Original item by Mae Foreman

Touched my heart. You’ll take birth and I will born sums up everything.

Comment is about Have been a mother, will I be a mom? (blog)

Original item by Juhi Gupte

I do like this Julie....

Comment is about Sharing (blog)

Original item by Julie Schultz

Dizzy disease has struck Vautaw
Oh no oh no oh no
So what can I scrip to undizzy dizzy?
Dunno dunno dunno

Wot a useless scrip.......?

Comment is about Third Eye Blind (blog)

Original item by Vautaw