Like the idea and the flow of it all, nice one Dave.

Mike

Comment is about The Myth Of The Perfect Man (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Thanks Guys( Cynthia,Isobel,Patricia & Stefan, Laura) for your comments and ideas. Much appreciated.

The idea came out of speaking to people who had been involved in the war. They tended to remember things in short, sharp triggers like smell, colours and sounds etc.
I then saw a documentary film of WW1 which started in sepia then gradually changed to an early colour prodution.
It was a bit spooky as it was just like what the people had said in short, sharp shots etc on the film.
Hence, that may have come out in the way I laid it down on paper.

Thanks Guys

Mike

Comment is about OVER BY CHRISTMAS? (blog)

Original item by Mike Hilton

Great poem Andy - well done on getting it in there too

Comment is about Pinned back against the Wall (blog)

Original item by Andy N

LOL - where did you get that picture of me from?

Great idea for a poem - and there is so much truth in it, beyond the humour. But how come the perfect woman isn't a myth? ;)

Comment is about The Myth Of The Perfect Man (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

"...as she bends in this hot light"
I agree with Laura, all the pictures are very striking.

Comment is about Falling Colors (blog)

Original item by BT

'song orange' - :)

These pictures you are putting up - are they yours? I like them very much.

Comment is about Falling Colors (blog)

Original item by BT

You have a truly original voice - I've not read anything quite like these pieces. There's an almost conversational feel to them, and it REALLY works.

Comment is about Some Times I Change My Mind (blog)

Original item by BT

Another good piece BT - I do like the imagery of the pregnancy within this

Comment is about Your Aquiantance (blog)

Original item by BT

Another cracking piece of writing. I think you are writing up mania really very well. I love that reassurance of 'really, I'm getting better'

Comment is about Super Hero (blog)

Original item by BT

Yup, jampacked with fantastic imagery here...I get the feeling that the same person is involved here as in 'Fire flies'

Great poem

Comment is about A Ribbon Cut As Red As my Heart (blog)

Original item by BT

Scuse the french but this is fucking outstanding - my god, it's almost like you've captured part of my own past here.

Brilliantly written and executed - the way you start and move through the tenses/times and capture that mad crashing. Agree with Rach - this is one of the best things I've ever read too.

Comment is about Fireflies in Glass Jars (blog)

Original item by BT

Hola BT - many thanks for your note on Tigerella - I'm glad you enjoyed it :) I will have to have a look through your offerings

Comment is about BT (poet profile)

Original item by BT

I think we've come a long way with gay rights. But there will always be people who seek to to isolate/ridicule/hurt those who are not mainstream for whatever reason.
I can remember back in the 80s the girlfriend of a friend of mine being beaten up, making her way home from a gay nightclub. I'm guessing therefore that lesbians do have some homophobia to contend with. No doubt it's worse for gay men though, for the reasons you state, MC.

Comment is about I LOVE HUMANITY, IT'S PEOPLE I CAN'T STAND (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Thank you guys!

Comment is about Connections (blog)

Original item by Brutus Paulinus

What is charming about this tale is the love of a mother for her child makes her determined to preserve his expectations of her invincibility.

If a parent can manage to maintain that illusion all the way up to double figures, then they are doing well!

Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Serendipity (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

O2 be an electron, now that spring is near...

I enjoyed your poetry of physics, perhaps some of my expelled molecules will play a part in a sequel? ;)

Best wishes - and welcome to WOL - Dave

Comment is about Vapor (blog)

Original item by BT

Thank you so much for your critic, I'm really horrible at editing, but things just turn out all the better when you do. I'll give it a try. Thanks again you for being so very helpful. Best wishes

Comment is about Sugar Revolution (blog)

Original item by BT

I like this and i want to read it again. In fact I have. But an initial reaction is that there is too much here. Rather like candy floss, there's too much sugar. I think editing out some lines could make it a much finer poem.

Comment is about Sugar Revolution (blog)

Original item by BT

A quiet nod to a loss of innocence; the realisation that nothing lasts forever. And, I
agree, the last line is well done!

Comment is about Demolition (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

I like bleach poem. You have an original style impervious to germ killers x

Comment is about BT (poet profile)

Original item by BT

I'm not sure about the title either but enjoyed the poem, which is effective. It fitted with a discussion this morning led by Rev Bob Callaghan National Co-ordinator of Inclusive Church. The times they certainly are a changing in some quarters. But not others. Yet.

Comment is about I LOVE HUMANITY, IT'S PEOPLE I CAN'T STAND (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

When I watched my infant school torn down in sections..the little girl in me surfaced..so many things of my past being destroyed. Funny that I came to this today for I have had that very conversation about losing pieces of the past.chilly

Comment is about Demolition (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Stella: You write like someone in love with darkness, shades and ambiguities; how will you know if you get what you want? Better yet; how will you want what it is you get? This poem and the one about death opening automatic doors illustrate how well you know the answers.
J. Otis

Comment is about Visitation (For The Ghost Theme) (blog)

Nice one.. :)

Comment is about what passes off as rubbish nowaday's (blog)

Original item by SPACEGHOST

I love this...I really do love this..hell yeah!

:o))

Comment is about Esoteric (revised) (blog)

Original item by J. Otis Powell‽ (with interrobang)

I think this subject is a good one, Mike. Whether 'sepia' is the colour of 'time distance' or the shades of old film clips, its use is very evocative. The third stanza is especially strong. Your idealogical point is well-made and the repetition ties the whole theme together. I have a suggestion only: Since you are building on 'sepia', how many words for shades of brown, gray, greenish and yellowish could you come up with, to keep the target idea of 'sepia' absolutely focussed, and then be so sharply contrasted with modern full colour exposure of WW11. Especially since the real point is what does not change - the winnowing of loss.

Comment is about OVER BY CHRISTMAS? (blog)

Original item by Mike Hilton

I am clicking and snapping inside with excitement. Your writing makes me feel alive. Not being afraid to write, I have been afraid to write my whole life, hiding it from everyone I knew, because everyone I knew was a writer, how could I compare? but fuck it, why should I hide my thoughts my fears, my loves. Your writing moves me and that's how i know it's art. Please never stop.

Comment is about what passes off as rubbish nowaday's (blog)

Original item by SPACEGHOST

this is a classic mate i think
all and every bit

Comment is about Super Hero (blog)

Original item by BT

driven by the moon i will shake this earth at least once
powerfull words !
nice on !

Comment is about BT (poet profile)

Original item by BT

To have a place to live I’ve recreated the universe
I’m writing an afterlife in case.

Stunningly beautiful and strong.

Comment is about J. Otis Powell‽ (with interrobang) (poet profile)

Original item by J. Otis Powell‽ (with interrobang)

I.G. - John? I'd hazard a guess and feel
complimented that you had a certain Mr Coopey in mind...right?

Comment is about CHAIN RINGING (blog)

Original item by Ian Gant

'towards the subway' sorry for the typo. don't know where the 'toe' came from.

Comment is about New York, Honeymoon Poem no.3 (blog)

Original item by Tom Harding

Hi Tom,
I like the images in this poem, the urban scenes, especially the people cascading like leaves towards toe underground. If it was mine, I would go through it being rigorous about taking out unnecessary words and even lines, where you have caught the image and don't need to carry on: one example is that if you take out 'blow toward one another' you still have the limbs crossing arms, so it is enough to make the point. words like 'one another' and also 'someone' are not useful, like splodges of the wrong colour in a painting. 'And perhaps we are' is another example. The poem would be a bit 'crisper' I think without it.
Just my opinion of course.

Comment is about New York, Honeymoon Poem no.3 (blog)

Original item by Tom Harding

Isobel - from a general perspective I'd say that men are certainly intrigued by a woman to
woman relationship and do not feel "threatened"
as they surely do by the idea that a man might
have the same ideas about his own sex. It may
be ego that enables men - however lacking - to
think they might be "sex objects" for other men
but that ego & unease still exists...hence the
the ongoing undercurrent of "rejection" in society and its effects which I raised in my verse. Is society ever truly "whole" unless it
can accommodate its own humanity/people?

Comment is about I LOVE HUMANITY, IT'S PEOPLE I CAN'T STAND (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

I think I can predate any of this, having had my concept collection of verse and lyrics published at my own expense by Janus Publishing
Ltd back in 2006 - title: "Singing Words". It
is available online through various outlets
including Amazon. Songs of mine have been
recorded in Nashville and released on CD over
there.
Sorry Faber - as far as the idea is concerned
you're a bit late!

Comment is about Jarvis Cocker to give free reading in Cambridge (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

We are pulling your leg Lynn. I like the simplicity of your story - it works. Happiness is different things to different people. For me it's about being in control of my own destiny. I'm not sure I'd like to date the boss - but we are all different. Perhaps we should have a themed competition about happiness - that might produce a lot of head scratching for some of us...

Comment is about Serendipity (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Very Jolly Ann.

Comment is about silly housework poem (warning - contains the word bugger;) (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I guess what I was really aiming for was a sense of irony in that she found out by chance that this was what the word meant.
It is up to the reader to decide whether it is a happy story or not.
Or perhaps it is only happy if you just take it at face value, and not imagine her getting dumped with her poor sun under a bus! :o)
Thanks for comments though, all welcome x

Comment is about Serendipity (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hi Isobel...Thanks for the critique (constructive - lol).. I think it's just an ageing thing really..haha..Yes I have had a bit of 'block' on since last year n book publishing n poets corner n FOF n Care Home readings etc..etc.. have not had a good 'blog' for a while haha..
I have written mainly - Life..Observational..Political..Waxed Lyrical..Humour.. Sadness..Fed Up ness!..so not a million miles away eh?..lol
All the best to you and hope to see some of our Wigan friends come and 'big up' Petrova on Tuesday!..if not see ya'll soon! Love - Graham xxx

Comment is about Now Broken (blog)

Original item by Graham Robinson

I'm not sure the poem does match the title perfectly. For me the title seems more universal - applying to both sexes - the human race. The poem seems to relate more to men, in particular to how they are guilty of and affected by homophobia. I'm assuming the 3rd verse relates to the difficulty of getting common law gay relationships accepted in the eyes of the law.

A great theme to tackle - I'm sure the same difficulties must be faced by women as well - or is male society more tolerant of lesbians?

Comment is about I LOVE HUMANITY, IT'S PEOPLE I CAN'T STAND (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

This seems to me to be a much more unbiased and eclectic way of of judging poetry competitions. All too often individual judges have chosen as winners poems which most closely resemble their own style of writing.

Comment is about £3,000 e-book poetry prize competition (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

The world of tense and tentative relationships. I enjoyed your perspective within the poem. The title matches the poem perfectly.

Comment is about I LOVE HUMANITY, IT'S PEOPLE I CAN'T STAND (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

I enjoyed your poem Hazel. The internet is just like that with the creation of so many cyber friends. Your poem flows well throughout.

Comment is about FRIENDS (blog)

The poem comes from two perspectives, the boy and the demolition man. I really liked this poem. It is short,diverse, and to the point. The last line is absolutely inspired.

Comment is about Demolition (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

I enjoyed this read.I was going in a different direction with my interpretation until I read the final Stanza. My naivity led me towards the literal as to the metaphorical tunnel. A good graphic piece of emotional turmoil.

Comment is about TUNNEL (blog)

Original item by NICK ARMBRISTER

Hi Graham. Nice to see you posting - and an unusually serious one for you.

I imgine this would perform well but I think you could still work on it to get a better rythm in some of the verses. Also if it was mine, I would chop the mankind/kind verse.

Comment is about Now Broken (blog)

Original item by Graham Robinson

I think this is a fabulous poem, Steve: acutely observant of the kites, looking for a deeper meaning, and ending on an uplifting note.

Comment is about Red Kites over Loch Ken (blog)

Original item by STEVE RUDD

Hi Andy thanx for your comments re 'Diamond' really miss you and the scene but have been vry busy but will be returning ...slide inthe back door somewhere soon.

Keep well
Love to all

Gus

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Thanx so much everyone, ...Haiku what can you say ... it;s japanese... as for beautiful and free ...well ... I find it artificial and stilted...and very frustrating. However serves as a great mind excercise... Once again thank you for reading and commenting

Love the pants off ya all!!

Seeya all soon
Love
Gus

Comment is about He Found a Diamond (blog)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Ha - that's cos you're a cynic and imagine that a week later she'll be dumped and jobless :)) The thought did cross my mind...
But that in itself might be a piece of seredipity cos there might be some soul mate just around the corner, who wins the Euromillions days after falling madly in love with this single mum...

Comment is about Serendipity (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye