Gus Jonsson

He Found a Diamond

by Gus Jonsson

Friday 17th February 2012 4:31 pm

He found a diamond

A fire too hot to handle

Burning his fingers

Burning his cold toes

Keeping his ear to the ground

Quietly like a mouse

Quietly like snowfall

He stole into the brightness

A lightness of touch

A lightness a foot

He trod where angels fear to

Stepping into hell

Stepping out lightly

Into a future long past

Life had passed him by

Life had not been kind

Love and mirrors the cruellest

Lovers always lie

Lovers always cry

Wetted jewels deep dark eyes

He found a diamond

◄ Just Another Line

The Last Ferry ►

Comments

Gus Jonsson

Sun 19th Feb 2012 10:18

Thanx so much everyone, ...Haiku what can you say ... it;s japanese... as for beautiful and free ...well ... I find it artificial and stilted...and very frustrating. However serves as a great mind excercise... Once again thank you for reading and commenting

Love the pants off ya all!!

Seeya all soon
Love
Gus

Andy N

Sun 19th Feb 2012 09:55

clever stuff, Gus.. as i was reading it - was wondering if it was a haiku but clever stuff to write it in sequence like that.

hope you are good, man... see you soon (i hope)

Andy N

Isobel

Sat 18th Feb 2012 10:24

I didn't realise this was Haiku till Ros pointed it out. I like it like that - with no ugly bumps just to fit into some dictated form.

'Stepping out lightly
Into a future long past'

I like that juxtaposition - it works. I wonder how many of us feel like that at times :)

Ros

Fri 17th Feb 2012 17:23

Hello Gus...I notice this is in haiku with variations of links at the end and beginning of stanzas,very interesting. I like the poem very much and get the feeling the diamond is not of the jewellery sort. Hope to see you soon...Ros xxx

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