Brilliant! J.C...I've no doubt the Noble
Lord would be envious of this modern take on his words.

Comment is about The Charge of the Light Brigade (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Funny you should mention authenticity Mike, just written a piece about that.

If you mean authenticity of ode structure, then I did TRY to keep to most of it...managed the 10 lines, and the accepted English rhyming scheme (with a teeny bit of artistic licence, ahem!) ;)

Steve, if it's me, then yes, because, as you should well know by now, we are Northern, therefore, we do what we want ;) Base thoughts? It's completely innocent is that. *cough*

Thanks chaps - just fancied a bit of daft for a change :D

Comment is about Ode to a Dictionary (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

I like the structure and the story Mike. Can't help feeling that maybe you could have tarted up the lines in it, from 'was' to more...well...tarted up!! Feel free to completely ignore me btw :)

I love 'sepia suicidal scene', and that last verse is great.

Comment is about OVER BY CHRISTMAS? (blog)

Original item by Mike Hilton

Actually, I am a fan of Top Gear, but I still found this hilarious! Well written, Donna, gave me a good laugh!

Comment is about Love is The Stig (blog)

Original item by Donna Scott

that third stanza holds so many opportunities of where you could go with metaphors etc. Its been a while I've stopped by mate.

Comment is about Prologue to a final solution (Scenes from a film unfinished) (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Dear Anthony

I just wanted say thanks and acknowledge the impact your comment made to my poem 'The little things destroy us'. You are always honest and have an owls eye for what works and what doesn't. I have changed it now and its very tight with a new stanza on Thatcher.

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Hi John, thanks for your comments on Rough Justice. I answered more in depth on the blog. :)

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

Simple,strong and confident. Fair play to thee !

Comment is about For a moment (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

Interesting huh?...lol ahhh me Yorkshire puddin face.. :D

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Dear Bessie
Is it legal to insert 'Yorkshire' into your name if you were not grown or produced there, or have become a naturalised daughter of the White Rose County?

The poem is terrific

I admit to my base thoughts
'Your concordance comes all over me'
Dear me Bessie!!!
Kiss Kiss

Comment is about Ode to a Dictionary (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

There are few things more powerful in life than reconciliation, and few longings deeper than the longing for it to happen. You've expressed that beautifully Harry.

Comment is about PATIENT BETTY (blog)

Oooooo Laura Bessie Yorkshire Pud.

Never mind authenticity - I love this!
`How shall I read you, my lyrical dove?`
"In a jillion years - you're a geek"

Brill....Rock on Bessie! This is the gravy on your Pud!


Mike

Comment is about Ode to a Dictionary (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Your poems always make me go 'awwww' Harry :) Enjoyed the intertwining of the prodigal story in this

Comment is about PATIENT BETTY (blog)

Wow - made my hairs stand on end this. Really hard to pick out individual lines - but that last part is outstanding. Only adversity could ever win me friends. Ha.

Comment is about rib (blog)

Or any other age, for that matter.

I thought Casanova was only spelt with one s, though.

Comment is about What Price Love? (blog)

Extraordinary and compelling. I've re-read it several times now. I've no idea of poetic merits, not being techie, but it carries the reader SO vividly into a world of feelings, and looking at things differently.

Comment is about rib (blog)

You're right Dave, things haven't been quite the same since Ronnie Ronalde passed away. (I had to check up on the spelling, and in doing so discovered that the technical term for a whistler is "siffleur.")

Regards,
A.E.

Comment is about Kaleidoscope (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

I am tempted to say that this is your finest piece to date. But I won't. :)

Comment is about Remembrance of Things Pissed (blog)

once did a gig in an underground pub between rugby world cup matches. nightmare!!. I find cafes are the perfect space, if they are small and intimate. Quietness is the key. Little independant ones who have books, and GOOD coffee, maybe a courtyard, ah the dream of the perfect venue.

Comment is about Nearly no More Poetry; or, who'd be a poetry organiser? (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

haha ray :) make em laugh is still the way

Comment is about Remembrance of Things Pissed (blog)

Enjoyed this..reads well as MC says out loud..made me laugh too at the thought :)

Comment is about Left Shiv'rin. (blog)

Original item by Graham Eccles

What a great read Julian, blimey WOL is almost in double figures huh?.

Comment is about Above and beyond (blog)

Original item by Julian Jordon

It's not autobiographical Stel (-:

Comment is about Kaleidoscope (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Brilliant..just can't stop laughing at the very thought!

Comment is about Don't Fuck with Dickens (blog)

Original item by Jack Pascoe

Oh this made me laugh Donna..great stuff and how I hate Top Gear!

Comment is about Love is The Stig (blog)

Original item by Donna Scott

You're right Ann. My Serendipity was there all along.

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Still laughing at Steve's comment..yes Dave do explain that line! enjoyed the upbeat of this.

Comment is about Kaleidoscope (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

I thought this quite beautiful Harry.. :)

Comment is about PATIENT BETTY (blog)

fundamentalist neo minimalism, my arse.
I belong to the blank generation and
I can take it or leave it each time

Comment is about Remembrance of Things Pissed (blog)

You have a valid point, the more I think about the actions I wish for, the more I see the agenda I have hidden.

Comment is about Just a click away. (blog)

i would still go back a lot of places i was burned id go back tomorrow and i d watch and wait for the right time to bring em down just cos i could. i write lots of things about forgiveness and forgetfulness but i am a woman i can hold a grudge for ever and ever and the more time of mine it takes up the bigger the damage its gonna be. i dont think any woman goes back to be nice.

Comment is about Just a click away. (blog)

fundamentalist neo minimalism stole my children it wiped their minds and replaced them with full stops.

all power to the absent

bring back ste black with his very selectively placed type.

:)

Comment is about Remembrance of Things Pissed (blog)

There are some things you want to blank out!
:-)

Comment is about Remembrance of Things Pissed (blog)

Thanks Ann and Ray!

Ray - My Dad says he agrees with you about those two lines.

Reference-wise, the aged lads are constantly buying each other bulky and heavy items that their cars can barely cope with for their road trips... things that inevitably end up broken, or breaking the cars, and it's all a huge jape. I think they bought each other statues for driving through Vietnam, for example.

Comment is about Love is The Stig (blog)

Original item by Donna Scott

Lost all his beard in the 5th...but "with the beard" in the 9th. That confused somewhat. But the "Goon-ish" fun is welcome!

Comment is about Don't Fuck with Dickens (blog)

Original item by Jack Pascoe

Hi Cynthia, again belatedly, many thanks for your comments on 'Night Sights'. This born out of being around in the early hours with an organisation helping young drunks. Not intended to be a prize winner, more a diary entry. Kind of you comment though. Much appreciated.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Well, that's more like it, Laura. I'm immediately drawn to the creative use of white space and the sure-footedness of the poem. There's a sense in some works that the writer has no overall aim and rather stumbles from one step to the next. Here, the intention is obvious from the start and one isn't disappointed.

Comment is about Remembrance of Things Pissed (blog)

It has the rhythm of "swinging down the lane" -
hand in hand! Like it.

Comment is about Kaleidoscope (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

In an age that obsesses about kids and "yoof", I wonder just how many youngsters from
previous generations were forced by circumstance to grow up too soon and take up adult responsibilities long before their time,
especially those who had lost parents and had
few if any relations to turn to. Hard times
indeed.

Comment is about OLD BEFORE HIS TIME (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

You are right, Harry: you never can tell, unless and until you give people a forum in which they can express themselves in their own way, their own language register and their own style. Which is precisely what drives me, and is what Write Out Loud is all about: encouraging the creation of such fora for all.

Comment is about Above and beyond (blog)

Original item by Julian Jordon

Okay then Ray - seriously now...don't you think your complete absence of punctuation misleads the reader into some kind of abstract space of thought where nonsense lies? Also, I think this kind of fundamentalist neo-minimalism is how wars are started, so I'd be careful if I were you.

Comment is about Remembrance of Things Pissed (blog)

I enjoyed this, especially the section from sorrier to eco-warrior. I found the rhythm and the references hard to catch in a few places. Like here

As they load each other’s rides with anvils for racing in the Bahamas

it’s the televisual progeny of Jeremy Beadle and Judith Chalmers.

Comment is about Love is The Stig (blog)

Original item by Donna Scott

heh.heh.heh..

Rach you crease me sometimes lady lol x

Comment is about Remembrance of Things Pissed (blog)

ipod,
thou poddest
he, she, it pods

we...
used to pod
but it will not be as
sweet as the moment
when the ipods go pop.
Like peace, in a pod.

Comment is about Kaleidoscope (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Thank you for your kind comments, Tommy. :o)

Comment is about Rough Justice (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

John, I understand that tax evasion is illegal, but tax avoidance IS legal.
Well, I'm not sure what this comes under. Either it shouldn't have gone to court or he's charmed all the jury.
(Mind you, legality is not the same as morality, is it?)
Cheers for comment. :)
Lynn (believe it or not, a fellow Spurs supporter)

Comment is about Rough Justice (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Julian,
Some stranger guy came in to a a gig I was at recently and knocked us all sideways with his poem a bit like this...and walked away with the prize.

You never can tell, can you?

Comment is about Above and beyond (blog)

Original item by Julian Jordon

Well, if whistling is your thing Dave, you perhaps would enjoy a whole weekend of it, including in the streets: The Big Whistle Festival. http://themet.biz/strand/big+whistle+festival/

Comment is about Kaleidoscope (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Dave,
The song of a happy man...it made me feel happy.

(I`ll only feel happier if City AND United
both get beat tonight)...Ahh...bliss!

Comment is about Kaleidoscope (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

It reminded me of the song Nowhere Man, maybe that's not Peter, Paul and Mary!It just seems people like that are easy targets, shooting fish in a barrel. I'd have liked more of the sort of stuff you have in the first verse.
I don't mind no punctuation, some poems are better for it. I just notice it when a poem is neither one or t'other, commas but no full stops.I think Isobel does the same thing. No big matter.

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor