Strong stuff! The clipped phrases really heighten the emotive element of this poem.
Comment is about On stolen sheets (blog)
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Balloon whisk - sounds like we may have entered 'Allo 'Allo territory, but I suppose its up to you what you do with your utensils!
Comment is about The blend of old and new (blog)
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Could do with the grey matter having a good floss myself! Perhaps this nonsense poem of yours will do the trick! Nice one Yvonne.
Comment is about The Newberry Dye-Pass Crossing AKA The Rules Of The Road. (blog)
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Thx for commenting on my last Gus. Glad you like it.
Memories seem to be a theme that neither of us strays too far from. They're always there wanting to have their say.
I can say that is something in your case that I am thankful for.
Best
Chris
Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)
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Bit of an epic tale - the sort a wandering minstrel might spin. Worthy of the occasion Yvonne.
Comment is about Cecil the Saint (blog)
Original item by Yvonne Brunton
Very poetically put Gus,
Thx for reading and the considered thoughts...glad you like the piece.
Best
Chris
Comment is about Our day out (blog)
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Superbe, Monsieur le roi des sonnets, je vous salue.
Comment is about May (blog)
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The cat's whiskers as opposed to the dog's ........ That is to say top of the tree for this effort (better call the fire brigade).
Comment is about Whisker (blog)
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Good that you should write about your sleeping beauty, rather than them wake up and find you staring at them! I found this one both rich in content and expressive in imagery.
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I agree with the comments on variation of rhyme and rhythym - something I am not averse too. Splendid effort Harry and a bit of an epic.
Comment is about ANY POET`S ANSWER TO THE ASTROPHISICISTS (blog)
Thank you Jane- (re On stolen sheets)I often write in an almost flippant way only to find the 'feeling' emerge at a later reading. 'dark'- as you comment upon- has opened up another facet of the piece. Tommy
Comment is about jane wilcock (poet profile)
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Hi Jane, text posted up on the computer voice blog entry. Win x
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We are taken on a journey, which, once completed, makes us glad we went. Commitment and craft in equal measure, with a fine use of phrase that lingers in the mind.
Comment is about UNCTION (blog)
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Another treat from the Master of "Hit Song Revision". I squirm with anticipatory delight at what you might do with a title like "The Wayward Wind"!!
Comment is about You Won't Batter Anymore (blog)
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Seems there's a glint in your eye Harry! A woman's effect no doubt clouding your senses and sensibilities.
Comment is about promised poem for Kathy after the party (blog)
Least said - soonest mended.
Comment is about a cautionary tale... (blog)
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Reminiscent of my retreats into the 'man cave' for respite from the world. The inner child is something we should strive to never lose. Lovely sentiments.
Comment is about tent (blog)
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Beautifully written. Conjures up images of perfect sunsets tinged with the sadness of awaiting a loved one's return.
Comment is about our bench (blog)
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This is lovely, death to life, frost to warmth.
Comment is about May (blog)
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oooh, a very haunting sonnet. I loved the volta from the practicalities to the whimsical musings. The final line is fantastic.
Comment is about May (blog)
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Green heart, Ispbel, I don't think it's beating yet. Yep, I have the same problem.
Comment is about That poetry podium feeling: Greenheart prize-winner Laura on a grand night out (article)
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Just, dotted my T's and crossed my eyes guys, so, sorry this is up again a month later. Be intersting if anyone could guess what this is about though. It's a biographical piece and about an event which took place. I had..... thanks to Cobi Stone, fellow WOL member, about and hour in a challenge to write about Anticipation. So I wrote this about my teenage son.
Comment is about ANTICIPATION (blog)
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Hey Cobi,did you notice the ANTICPATION too, first letter of each line.
Comment is about ANTICIPATION (blog)
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I can't seem to connect to the site. It keeps on saying that I'm timed out and that it has reached its maximum pool size. Is anyone else having the same problem?
Comment is about That poetry podium feeling: Greenheart prize-winner Laura on a grand night out (article)
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Mon 30th Apr 2012 13:45
I really like your poem Jeff, it is so true. Music speaks to our souls in a language evreryone understands, crossing all cultural barriers and lifting us above the hatred, bigotry, and politicd. Uniting us, and giving us the gift of friendship
Id love to see you live but cant make the Manchester gig, may all enjoy and be blessed by it's power
Comment is about It's the Music that Matters!! - A Poem For Sophie Lancaster - Never Forget X (blog)
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Cheers Win- I had struggled with the 4th myself and at 3am called it a night. Thanks for the comments and advice. Tommy
Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)
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Cheers Win- I had struggled with the 4th myself and at 3am called it a night. Thanks for the comments and advice. Tommy
Comment is about On stolen sheets (blog)
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It could well have been the George, Win, probably was, in which case I'm sorry to hear it has gone - although for some reason the names Brown or even Spotted Cow come to mind. It was all a very long time ago! Btw, your current pic looks a bit like it was snapped through a space capsule - though I suppose it's your barge window.
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Ah, you're all so lovely. Have been really ill lately with bronchitis plus chest infection so it's cheered me right up reading all your comments :)
Yep Jane, the poems are up on the Greenheart site now.
Harry - I used to want to be a journo, funnily enough ;)
Mike - no, you can only speak to me by appointment now. Ahem ;)
Comment is about That poetry podium feeling: Greenheart prize-winner Laura on a grand night out (article)
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Hi Alison, thanks for your perceptive comments on The Show. It's show week next week! Greg
Comment is about Alison Smiles (poet profile)
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Re the computer emotions - glad you concur. This seems like a discussion thread in the blogs section but it was the only way I could include the audio, thx for commenting. Win
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
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Thanks for your technical comments on The Show, John, which I'm very grateful for. I plead guilty to the accusation oft levelled at managers by football fans: "You don't know what you're doing!"
Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)
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Hi Again Greg. I believe the newspaper offices were near the pedestrian crossing opposite WH Smiths. They have now mooved to near the traffic lights and town hall. And also that the pub you mention could have been the Criketers or the now gone George. Win
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Thanks for your comment on The Show, Jane, which buoyed me up no end, since I'm not actually an amateur thespian. On the other hand, I'm very close to someone who is!
Comment is about jane wilcock (poet profile)
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I agree, John, it's another gem, hugely entertaining.
Comment is about You Won't Batter Anymore (blog)
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Tommy, Had to comment on this one as it grabbed me by the throat and demanded it. The collection of NUS card and photo ephemera really adds to the words. Strong opening. viciously real second stanza. Loved the rhythm and sylable count of third stanza. Might fiddle with the 4th (the repeated were and otherwise a bit clunky). 'Turned the water dark' Fabulous. A great poem Tommy. Win x
Comment is about On stolen sheets (blog)
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Hi Win, thanks for your kind comments on The Show and The Cruet Set. Little did I know when I left the district office of the Yorkshire Evening Press in the mid-1970s that 35 years on I'd be corresponding with a former resident of the town - no doubt in short trousers when I was around - and a current one whose tunes and lyrics give me a laugh night after night. I remember Gowthorpe, of course - our little upstairs office was on it - and a Sam Smiths pub that did excellent meat pies at lunchtime, which put me on the path to the current shape I am. Greg
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Welcome, Ann,
that's great idea, I'll check blog section, and put there at lat these translations. In fact, I need more translations..
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Mon 30th Apr 2012 06:16
Lovely poem Yvonne -
we have 2 cats and had 5 budgies flying free, if the birds fluttered near the cats they ran away terrified.
They have no problem with external wildlife whilst outside, however if they bring anything into the house they immediately ignore it. We had an escaped field mouse under our kitchen cupboards and no matter what I did the silly cat was backing off meowing like crazy to get away. They must have some sort of NATO pact of non aggression inside the house border!
Comment is about Whisker (blog)
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Sun 29th Apr 2012 23:56
"Truth isn’t as simple as accuracy" nor as repeatable as rhythms and grooves but there must be something somewhere I can rely upon
Comment is about ICON (blog)
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No apology necessary, Without darkness, there would be no light. :-) loved the line "Hope and peace carded the walls," Win x
Comment is about Murder Christmas 2011 (blog)
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Hi again, did you mean blighty? (ln 8). Win
Comment is about Insane Poppy (blog)
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Well, I have a unique angle perhaps as a lepidopterist and past train spotter. What a great idea to try and combine the two! Stoney places? Win x
Comment is about Statto of the Railway Lines (blog)
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Hi Greg, Re John battering songs, I have strong boyhood memories of the Selby friers. There was this one chip shop right (On Gowthorpe in the middle of the town). We called it "Fatty Bowls'" The two elderly brothers serving were always decked out in matching white 'overalls' had slicked back pure white hair. Must get more accurate details from my mum. lol
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John, another fine rendition to keep us amused. Thankyou.
Greg, I have strong boyhood memories of the Selby friers. There was this one chip shop (On Gowthorpe in the middle of the town). We called it "Fatty Bowls'" The two elderly brothers serving were always decked out in matching white 'overalls'. Must get more accurate details from my mum. lol
Comment is about You Won't Batter Anymore (blog)
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Conjures up images of a fraught fryer in a Selby chippie on a Friday night, with plenty of salty language! Another gem. You must have enough songs for a CD by now, John. Please put me down for one.
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Sun 29th Apr 2012 22:40
winston plowes
Mon 30th Apr 2012 18:43
Hi Yvonne, yes thats the word a sort of detached 'loneliness' that always comes across in these computer voices. I thought at the end it (he) sounded rather deseprate! Win
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