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oldlancsman

Mon 9th Apr 2012 12:22


Hi Yvonne, What a nice little poem,very refreshing to read,thankyou for your comment.
From one surviver to another,,have a nice day.

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Yvonne Brunton

Mon 9th Apr 2012 12:14

we all need a private place to retire to/hide in at some time or other. 8 or 80 years old this captures that feeling.Well done.

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Travis Brow

Mon 9th Apr 2012 12:14

Thanks for the tip Ann.

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Travis Brow

Mon 9th Apr 2012 12:13

Thank you for your observations and comments, i appreciate the feedback.

Alan, I read some Eliot some years ago but not the Four Quartets I'll take a look now though.

Ann, the image you mention of the footsteps leading in opposite directions is a lovely idea. I'll check it out if you've posted it.

Thank you John, i do strive to make my poems seem as unforced as possible which sometimes means months spent knocking them into shape. My problem is i can never leave anything alone and always go back to poems and tweek them; obsessive i know, but for some reason it's very important to me. Thanks again, comments like yours, and others, make me happy.

Andy, thanks for commenting and please do come to a Mouthin' Off gig. The next one's on Sunday May 6th. If you ever want an open-mic slot please let me know.

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 12:12

delightful, wonderful, should easily take the nonsense prize. well done for such magical innocence. ta muchly Nick.

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 12:06

the power of the pen never ceases to amaze. don't know who said that but i do know who write this smashing rhymical sinusoidal enjoyabubble page above. for that i thank you, ta muchly, NIck.

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 11:58

the dynamic form you used has kept this good work at a high level of constant enjoyment. Per ardua ad astra - possibly! ta muchly, NIck.

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steve pottinger

Mon 9th Apr 2012 11:55

Thanks Ann & Mark! Glad you enjoyed the poem....

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 11:47

Just a nibble please, he spoke with ease, ta muchly, Nick.

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 11:44

if these are the drafts i can't wait for the more considered version. i like this a great deal. chow for now, Nick.

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 11:40

third stanza, second line, does it stumble or is that me. otherwise a fine performance particularly verse one - goodly stuff, chow for now, Nick.

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 11:37

Six of the best - does that bring back memories? yessir, half a dozen that conjure up so much from the cobweb areas back there! tanks MC nice one, chow for now, Nick.

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Lynn Dye

Mon 9th Apr 2012 11:21

Cheers, MC, thanks a lot.

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Jane Dards

Mon 9th Apr 2012 10:36

Our first open mic was a great success, with over 20 people attending. Feedback included "Lovely evening - thoroughly enjoyed all the poetry", "Such a lovely evening with many wonderful words", "Excellent start", "Great!" and "I'll join in next time!".
Suggestions for frequency were mostly for bimonthly, with some preferring quarterly.
We plan to hold the next one on Thurs 21st June.

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Andy N

Mon 9th Apr 2012 10:36

thanks win for the comment over the 30 poems thing.. so far - it's proven fairly straight-forward although some are better than others which i guess is to be expected.. if i can get maybe 6 or 7 which are workable into something better from it - i'll be happy.

see how i go of course

andy

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winston plowes

Mon 9th Apr 2012 10:20

Hi Andy. Thx for the comment on Tommy and my poem. good luck with the poem a day. must make a note to do this next year.

Win

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Andy N

Mon 9th Apr 2012 10:17

just read because of Win's piece.. quite different but just as good.

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 10:16

Hi andy, if you get beat up during any love poems you have to pay extra! I know I do - Oops! let the bag out of the cat again, tara for now, Nick.

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Andy N

Mon 9th Apr 2012 10:13

good stuff, andy.. like the fact as others have commented you pack a lot into a few short lines - good skill to have.. need to try to pop down to one of your nights soon (reminds me) when i am on a good shift.. when's the next one?

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 10:13

hi, glad you enjoyed 'Space Knits' just a spot of this nutter seeping through. I'm not always about but I'll see thee - awfully Yorkshire, What! tara for now, Nick.

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Andy N

Mon 9th Apr 2012 10:10

excellent stuff - the last two stanzas in particular.. powerful writing

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Andy N

Mon 9th Apr 2012 10:09

brings a lot of similar memories back for me this piece also locked in memory.. good stuff matey

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Andy N

Mon 9th Apr 2012 10:08

lovely piece, ann... you defo have a feel for kids poetry.. love it - perfect start to the day for me xx

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Yvonne Brunton

Mon 9th Apr 2012 01:19

Lovely poem. The spirit of the isle is calling to you but time does not stand still.

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Yvonne Brunton

Mon 9th Apr 2012 01:10

There was no molly-coddling just cod liver oil.
No second hearing, just a clip round the ear.
No central heating, just smokey old coal
That yer dad used to fetch in every New Year
No need to sort rubbish into multi-hued bins
The rag and bone cart used to pile it all in
Hand-me-down clothes were often the rule
And nobody took you by car to yer school.
Mecchano,scalextric or Hornby for trains
Life was an innocent pageant of games.

I'm a survivor. XX

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John Coopey

Sun 8th Apr 2012 23:15

You generate a lot of power wth seemingly so litle effort, Andy. I admire the management of the rhythm perfectly suited to the tone.

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John Coopey

Sun 8th Apr 2012 23:07

Hello Larisa.
This reminded me very much of G K Chesterton's "The Donkey". Keep posting.

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John Coopey

Sun 8th Apr 2012 22:59

Delightful, Harry. I particularly enjoyed the variation in rhyme patterns.

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John Coopey

Sun 8th Apr 2012 22:50

I've always thought that railways and stations intensify emotions - partings, homecomings.

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John Coopey

Sun 8th Apr 2012 22:46

Lovely vioce,Ann. I won't be the first to say the name Sandy Denny to you, will I?

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winston plowes

Sun 8th Apr 2012 20:45

I also remember being 'trapped' on a train some years ago with a whole coach full of Newcastle fans. To this tune they were singing

He makes us sing and he makes us dance
he's a superstar, and he comes from France.
Ginola.
la la laa Ginola
Davida Ginola

ad norsium

Win

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winston plowes

Sun 8th Apr 2012 20:40

My finger hovered over 'play'. Glad I made the right choice. the 'Panel Engineer.' addition was so ridiculous to be hilarious. Entertainment via the pages of WOL. Thx for putting in the effort to make us laught John. Win

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winston plowes

Sun 8th Apr 2012 20:29

hi Ann, What a lovely idea and subject. Cozy

Some people seek comfort in the freedom of wide open spaces. Other in being snuggled up in a small space. I think that these opposite instincts may be with us from birth and unchangeable. Living on a canal boat, guess which camp I fall into?

Win x

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 8th Apr 2012 19:26

Like the Mousetrap! you go on and on!

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 8th Apr 2012 19:16

Don't change a thing. Captivating!

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 8th Apr 2012 17:34

Ha ha! This reminds me of being a young lad and building tree houses. We always assumed that nobody knew w were up there, invisible, secret. I'm sure we weren't.

I liked the solitary feel of this Ann. Verse three is somewhat out of balance I feel, but a lovely piece. Hope you're well by the way? Regards, Graham

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Alan Pascoe

Sun 8th Apr 2012 16:41

Alanna,Some lovely images but you're not pushing your talent to the very edge. Could you intercut each stanza with the voice of Eleanor Ida? It would make the poem stronger and give it more dimension if we heard HER voice, even if it's only as metaphor.

After the first stanza indent a stanza with her voice. This will bring the distance between their voices closer together. Each is aware of the others presence, yet their separation still continues, as it always will.You have a real skill for editing. Superb!

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Andy N

Sun 8th Apr 2012 16:24

no probs, Greg. Surprised John hasn't mentioned this - guess he's been busy...

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Sun 8th Apr 2012 14:17

heh hehehehe...Oh John what a cracker of a write.. :))

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Sun 8th Apr 2012 14:14

Def worth a post Alanna..so many good lines and a great ending too..ta for posting :)

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 8th Apr 2012 12:54

Strong stuff for one so young. Well done!

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 8th Apr 2012 12:31

Deserving of multiple readings for its richness of imagery and invention. The commitment is as clear and bright as any star: a treat for Easter - and any other time.

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 8th Apr 2012 12:26

"You'd have no Caer in Philly
With a performance so full of Brie-o
If you don't mind not being fed a
Delicious twang of Cheddar
Some Wensleydale would make a tasty trio!"
Sing on, pal!!

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 8th Apr 2012 11:49

Andy - I'm really enjoying your poems. As to where to comment back to comments made, the poet often writes the comment on the same page as the poem cos other people might like to see what they've said, but you could also cut and paste it to the profile page of the individual person who commented, otherwise they might miss it. Hope that helps!

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 8th Apr 2012 11:45

I enjoyed these poems too. I was particularly taken with "Toast". I like it when a small experience links you into something bigger. I wrote a poem a while ago about muissing my son who'd just been staying with me, and the image that brought the feeling into words for me was when I was walking home up a muddy footpath after seeing him off on the bus, I recognised our footprints going in the opposite direction together. Blah blah blah - sorry but it's how your poem made me remember that.

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 8th Apr 2012 11:39

Great! I'd love to experience you live - bet it would be fun!

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 8th Apr 2012 11:33

Yes I did enjoy thanks! The words will do me good I think - very positive thinking-wise! Why not post it on the blog section - that's where folks usually find poems rather than on the profiles.

("did the first man in space
feel a bit out of place
when he thought that they,d left him behind ?"
- love it!

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Isobel

Sun 8th Apr 2012 10:50

Hilarious - I love it - this kind of poetry is right up my street. There isn't enough laughter in this world - we need to clone you, then flood the blog area with your work :)x

ps Can I be one of your backing singers?

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Alanna

Sun 8th Apr 2012 10:44

Wrote this whilst on a scenic bus tour in Barbados last year...this is a few drafts in. Not sure, but worth a post anyway.

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