Murder Christmas 2011

sorry to be so dark but.......

In the days before Christmas it was warm,

 Warm as blood.

 Red berries dulled, pine cones dropped,

 Houses adorned in red, green and gold.

Hope and peace carded the walls,

Turkey and creams stuffed the fridge,

 Canned laughter the T.V.

 And everywhere there were images of birth - and a baby.

 

It had rained for weeks, tirelessly battering the warmy windows

 And running down the glass.

Inside the telly beamed like a Christmas Star

Telling the Bad News,

 Then burst in a swell of blood which splashed the walls

And clotted the remote to our hearts.

Children by the crib flinched as the shepherds approached,

 Herod sharpened his axe - and the massacre began.

Families lay murdered in their homes,

 And nearby a berry dropped to the road

Splattering it with blood.

◄ CHRISTMAS SHOPPING

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winston plowes

Sun 29th Apr 2012 23:35

No apology necessary, Without darkness, there would be no light. :-) loved the line "Hope and peace carded the walls," Win x

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jane wilcock

Wed 18th Jan 2012 21:07

Thanks Ray, I have altered the line and agree with you that I prefer it. The last lines are both literal and a reference to the shooting of Anuj Bidve, I have worked in Salford for over 20 years.

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Ray Miller

Wed 18th Jan 2012 11:43

I like warmy windows and the remote clotted to our hearts. Just "Hope and Peace carded the walls" would do, I think.I'm not sure what to make of the ending - literal or metaphorical?

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Laura Taylor

Mon 16th Jan 2012 12:46

Mmmm, agree with Cynthia, never apologise! I like the trajectory of this piece...and your use of the word 'warmy' - that's great!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 16th Jan 2012 12:22

Don't apologize for a very strong poem, your point made with steely imagery and defining diction. The ending is dynamic with its ordinariness morphed into tragedy, a very apt bracketting of your theme.

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