Pete Crompton

Thu 20th May 2010 23:44

hey i voted x

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Isobel

Thu 20th May 2010 22:58

Hi Andy - sorry I couldn't chat. Was in middle of trying to sort out audio on my poem. I hate rushing poetry - too many loose ends, things I don't really like. Ended up changing it and then it didn't tie up to the recording. It won't seem to take the new recording though. Blast and double blast - that will teach me to rush things...

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Peter Mowat

Thu 20th May 2010 22:35

Tremendous title for a poem. Really made me want to read it.

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 20th May 2010 22:24

"I woke up late for life again." Nice! ;-)

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 20th May 2010 22:20

I like this one! Esp. those first three lines - and the last bit (after "Then suddenly; Light") is particularly lovely too.

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Joseph Kennedy

Thu 20th May 2010 21:38

Yeah, the latency of the rhythm change is meant to show ambivalence, didn't think anyone would pick up on that, kudos.

Thanks for the grammatical tips :)

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Ray Miller

Thu 20th May 2010 21:15

I was liking the rhythm and language of the first 5 lines, especially "Fuck me with your influence" and then it changes, inexplicably!Does that imply ambivalence?!Well, at least I learnt what Horchata is.It's hindrance, only one "e" and you don't need the apostrophes in besides and suits.

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Ray Miller

Thu 20th May 2010 20:45

Liked these lines very much:Spinning made me
and I spin still.
Smoothed thumb and finger
and wet earth
from honest mud.
That was my birth.
The gods made me to carry the can.
Poor womankind, to get the blame from man.
Though you could probably omit "from honest mud" same as wet earth, really!

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Nash

Thu 20th May 2010 20:45

Thanks Lynn! that one is ooold!

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Nash

Thu 20th May 2010 20:42

This is beautiful!

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Lynn Dye

Thu 20th May 2010 20:40

Enjoyed this, Nash. Made me smile.

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Thu 20th May 2010 20:37

Thank you, dear Lynn for your comments.
With warmest wishes, Larisa

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Thu 20th May 2010 20:35

Thank you, dear Lynn.

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Nash

Thu 20th May 2010 20:19

Another nod (ok, ok it's a total rip off!) to the greatest poet that ever lived - Pablo Neruda

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Francine

Thu 20th May 2010 20:15

J'ai voté pour toi : )
Bonne chance !

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Lynn Dye

Thu 20th May 2010 20:14

A lovely poem, Larissa, with a lot of truth in there.

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Nash

Thu 20th May 2010 20:13

One always needs a good duvet, Ann. Always!

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Nash

Thu 20th May 2010 20:13

Thank you Francine - I haven't performed in 8 years and am weaning my way back slowly. An audio may be a good place to start. I'll try to figure out the technicalities as I'm all too new to this. Glad you found it funny though! Always a good thing. Nash

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 20th May 2010 20:07

I keep thinking it's called Online Love (for John Lewis). Maybe you are desiring of some frying pans Nash, or a nice duvet! ;-)

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 20th May 2010 20:05

We need more jam! This is April jam! If no one else volunteers I'm doin it again! (And we don't want that do we!);-)

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Francine

Thu 20th May 2010 20:05

This is so funny! It flows really well, and would sound brilliant
performed - you should do an audio of this!
I love the comments you make to yourself in parenthesis too.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 20th May 2010 19:57

TC, thanks for your excellent observation. My prior comment was obtuse; so I axed it. Your remarks are in themselves very apt for us all.

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Ray Miller

Thu 20th May 2010 19:35

Hell Andy. Liked the first two verses very much, the dominoes thing is fine, maybe "on" the nearby coastline?3rd verse I think you could end at "struggle to contain". 4th verse, how about:trying to impersonate Greek goddesses, in reality loking more like The Gorgons?I think it tails off a bit toward the end, but an interesting read, much enjoyed.

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Graham Sherwood

Thu 20th May 2010 19:08

Hello Dave, many thanks for your kind comments on both the Pandora thing and my previous stuff. Just read your Haiku. Love the middle line especially.

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Nash

Thu 20th May 2010 18:39

Thanks chaps!

Chris: alternative poetry was always my aim in my youth. So, proud about your comments, thanks.

Isobel: you have no idea how much that is watered down from the reality of some of the things I have been approached with since entering into singledom!

Much love to you both, Nash

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Isobel

Thu 20th May 2010 18:01

This made me laugh! I know a number of people who've tried on line dating agencies. It is quite common place for people to wipe 5-10 years off their age and post pictures taken 20 years ago - much like WOL really - why do you think I stick with a wine bottle?

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Isobel

Thu 20th May 2010 17:58

Re your comment on Pandora's Box -you are getting me worried Andy!

The competition is just a bit of fun - not to be taken too seriously. I am fascinated by how one theme can be developed so differently by so many. All of the poems reflect beautifully the personalities and stlyes of the poets. How does one compare apples and pears? The more I think about it, the less I want to be the judge...

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Thaumaturgically Charged

Thu 20th May 2010 14:49

Well for me this is the Panodra's box of poetry. You start to write a piece and it turn's out completely different than intended, taken in this context it is a total success.
TC X

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Thaumaturgically Charged

Thu 20th May 2010 14:45

Brilliant! this paints a vivid picture to the minds eye, to me always a sign of successful piece of work.TC

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Thaumaturgically Charged

Thu 20th May 2010 14:41

Good stuff Dave, I can't write Haiku either, Loved the centre line. Thank you for your kind comment too.
TC

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Thaumaturgically Charged

Thu 20th May 2010 14:37

I like this, it is one of the more traditional takes on the theme, and refreshing in presentation.
TC

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Isobel

Thu 20th May 2010 14:32

You cunt run that by me again could you? Love the humour. Am trying not to read too many in case I get influenced - but I don't think I could produce anything like this - I'm far too angry and scornful!

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Thu 20th May 2010 14:31

Can,t do Dave-you see I,m a member of rage concern-haha(and that-IS-a joke.But I am a trick cyclist(shh!)heading your way-where are you? all I can see is an empty crisp bag and a half full(half empty-positivity there-haha!)bottle of Navy rum.Are you lying down-in another darkened room-lol! cheers funster-Stef.

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Rachel Bond

Thu 20th May 2010 14:05

hi steve...just got your message about mc ing at liverpoetry. yes id be happy to do that if the offer is still there...x

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Thu 20th May 2010 12:40

Thanks Isobel for commenting on 'The Angry Man' - I'm currently baffling him with polite responses, lol.

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Thu 20th May 2010 12:37

Hi Isobel - I penned this one as a response to the actions of a guy on one of the social networks.

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Isobel

Thu 20th May 2010 12:27

An interesting one Dave. Respect for others and their opinions, however different, is a biggie, a real biggie.

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emmanuel sairosi

Thu 20th May 2010 12:04

Gershon Thomas, thank you. People rarely take time to read and you have, despite all else, my stories proceeded from there. I have no regrets, the pen is mightier than the sword, more power to the muscle

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Thu 20th May 2010 11:51

Who said that! haha(re you computerising in the shade)Good morning Dave and family.Enjoy your day.Have you been onto age concern for free lightbulbs? hee..hee..catch you later pater-Stefan.

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Gershon Thomas

Thu 20th May 2010 11:43

My Brother, My friend, what a blessing to have met and fellowshipped with you.
My heart weeps for the pain inflicted upon yours and so many others by our people of South Africa.
“umuntu ngumuntu ngabantu”(a person is a person through other persons)
& I am that person because of you my brother.

"When The Power of Love, Overcomes The Love of Power...Then The World Will Know Peace" Jimi Hendrix

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Thu 20th May 2010 09:55

I agree with banksy.
the first verse is really powerful..x

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Thu 20th May 2010 09:29

I love your voice! And I read that it was a jar too.

Maybe hope is a nasty pastie - it is just prolonging humankind's torment...

great poem ann! x

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Thu 20th May 2010 09:15

I love the line
"they will return to everyday life like
a pair of over stuffed vampires," and in fact what follows this is brilliant.
That painting is brilliant - is there any way to see mor eof her work?

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Isobel

Thu 20th May 2010 08:45

Now this, I liked.

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Isobel

Thu 20th May 2010 08:41

Banksy - I should have warned you that my second name is Corleone - an excellent reason for keeping it quiet -don't you think?

Sister Cate has all those instruments on display because my brothers have nicked the cases...though I am sure, given the nature of your poetry, you are used to waking up in the morning with that warm sticky feeling....

Gropecuntelane is an excellent stimulus for a poem. I could well imagine TC spending a bit of time there!

Going back to Pandora's Box - I guess illicit affairs are pretty similar to that box, wherever they take place. The ills of the world released, along with the tiniest hope...

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 20th May 2010 08:30

cute!

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 20th May 2010 08:29

I love this Josh. You have such a fresh clear voice. Hope you keep posting. (Have you heard of a book called Submarine by Joe Dunthorne? I think you'd like it. He's a poet too. Somehow this poem of yours reminded me of the book.)

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 20th May 2010 08:23

This is a very unusual and also extremely poetic "take" on the theme. I was somehow expecting more of an ooomph of an ending for some reason. But on re-reading a few times, I like the dreamlike quality in which the whole thing just seems to swirl away before your eyes.

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Andy N

Thu 20th May 2010 08:20

enjoyed this, ann.. lovely stuff

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Andy N

Thu 20th May 2010 08:19

i remember this poem well, Gus.. One of my favourites off yours.. Good to see it in a slightly new shiner version

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