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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 29th Apr 2010 17:04

I'm just plain dense today; I still don't get it. But I think the poem is good.

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barrie singleton

Thu 29th Apr 2010 17:02

Hiyacynth! Nobody told me parody was supposed to be deep. Not sure what you mean by 'How do you know this?'

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 29th Apr 2010 16:51

The play on words is clever only, not deep. 'gaffe' seems much too mild a word for the incident which, I think, will have major repercussions.
How do you know this? Was it in a newspaper?

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 29th Apr 2010 16:46

I like work based on literary characters; it's always very 'in'.
This is interesting. I presume the last verse is not sex with the dog, however 'in' that seems to be lately. You might enjoy Kosinski's "The Painted Bird".

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 29th Apr 2010 15:19

Well Banksy wrote a poem called calcium and . . . . .

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maipenrai

Thu 29th Apr 2010 14:59

Thanks Cynthia

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 29th Apr 2010 14:58

Quick tip Joseph - if you want Graham to see your query then put it on his poet's profile page. He might miss it otherwise! x

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Joseph Kennedy

Thu 29th Apr 2010 11:35

Looking back on it, I see where you are coming from. Do you mean the rhyming couplets and the fast-paced style of the poem reads like 'rap'?

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barrie singleton

Thu 29th Apr 2010 11:23

Thanks for laughing-with. For your next imagining: 'Lunch with the man I never met'?

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Tim King

Thu 29th Apr 2010 11:12

Dad brought a tear to my eye. So tender and so true. It's tragic and hilarious and brilliant. Thank you.

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 29th Apr 2010 11:09

Teehee! Grumble pie! Jolly good!

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Tim King

Thu 29th Apr 2010 11:03

Hi Graham,
Thank you for your generous comments on my non-sensical samples and for your warm welcome to WOL. In the light of your own beautifully crafted work I scarcely feel worthy.

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Graham Sherwood

Thu 29th Apr 2010 09:50

This reads quite like a rap-style piece Joseph. Good to see you on here.

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Graham Sherwood

Thu 29th Apr 2010 09:46

Hello Vicky, welcome to WOL. Liked your sample, keep them coming.

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Graham Sherwood

Thu 29th Apr 2010 09:44

Welcome to WOL Martin. You'll get plenty of feedback here if you ask.

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Graham Sherwood

Thu 29th Apr 2010 09:42

Welcome to WOL Tim. Liked your samples and will keep an eye on your work.

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David Cooke

Thu 29th Apr 2010 09:17

Hi Kealan Just catching up with your poem Modern Saviour. I enjoyed and found the last stanza particularly intriguing - maybe it's because I'm a lapsed Catholic with a Muslim daughter.

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David Cooke

Thu 29th Apr 2010 09:12

Hi Cynthia Thanks again for your comments. I've enjoyed your last couple of poems too. I appreciate the 'objective' style.

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 29th Apr 2010 08:09

I think phosphorus is a nice word. And would be a good title for a poem too. Later somewhere in the forrest . . . I just wrote a poem called phosphorous! Might be here anon. xx

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Banksy

Thu 29th Apr 2010 07:45

Hi - another one based on a reportedly true story. The girl had slipped away at the Xmas office party & run off 20 copies of her bits, carefully cleaned with a tissue & left one on the desk of each of her male colleagues. After the Xmas hols & a largely forgotten alcohol-induced incident, the first day back she wondered why everone seemed so highly amused - but it had all been caught on CCTV & the security man had them all in his office to take a look to much hilarity. I bet there's still a few "gash" copies hidden away to this day. B

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Banksy

Thu 29th Apr 2010 07:35

Hi - I dont think he's died.
Calcium?? because it's Calciyummy.

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Banksy

Thu 29th Apr 2010 07:31

Hi Ann - Edward - I dont think he's died. Calcium - I really dont know - it's just the feeel of the word - the shape of the word in your mouth. A bit like how some guys look really dapper in a bow tie & others just look a complete tw*t. And he does look like a chemistry teacher - dont you think? all the best. B

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 29th Apr 2010 07:27

Eeuuuu. . . makes me glad I don't work in an office - or use a photocopier! (Not the office photo copier, the orifice photo copier perhaps. Sorry, terrible joke and I expect I've spelt it wrong too. "It's the way I spell 'em!" x

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 29th Apr 2010 07:23

Thanks for commenting recently on me poems John. Glad you like Shirley and Dolly. And Sandy Denny, "Who Knows Where The Time GOes" is one of the best songs ever. Re adding a bridge to Blackthorn - I would have added a bridge but I didn't manage to get planning permission! Tehe!

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 29th Apr 2010 07:21

I would've added a bridge but I didn't get planning permission!

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Tony Walsh

Wed 28th Apr 2010 22:55

Oh, I get it! :-(

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Isobel

Wed 28th Apr 2010 22:51

I found all of these highly entertaining Simon - and the blurb. I see you and I agree about the necessity of eating meat. I've known so many unhealthy vegetarians. Perhaps it has something to do with a depleted nut intake...
Don't know why I'm bothering to leave this comment - you don't looke to use the site much - I bet your email doesn't even work...

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Tony Walsh

Wed 28th Apr 2010 22:51

“FROZEY TOESIES” (Kids' Poem)

So the TV gave a warning that the snowy clouds are forming

And they said it's global warming but it's feeling cold to me!


And the wind is really blowing and “Yippee! it's started snowing!”

So I think that we'll be going to the park, my Mum and me


We'll be turning off our tellies, putting warm food in our bellies

and then pulling on our wellies - we like sledging when it snows


And with so much lovely snowfall we can roll a giant snowball

'Til our snowman starts to grow tall with a carrot for his nose!


And we'll meet with my friend Billy, we can giggle and be silly

We'll get cold and wet and chilly and throw snowballs at our Mums!


And then when the big park closes we'll go home to blow our noses

And we'll warm our frozey toesies and we'll dry our soggy bums!

© Tony Walsh 2009

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 28th Apr 2010 22:50

Rachel - you are so clever - I never noticed! And they are both bits of music that I like too. I'd love to get some of my love poems printed and call the great tome "Two Steps On The Water", do you think Kate would mind? ;-)

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Rachel Bond

Wed 28th Apr 2010 22:34

i like the way it starts with kate bush and ends with pink floyd. like my music tastes fro 1976-1985.
a nice read.

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John Coopey

Wed 28th Apr 2010 22:15

Enjoyed the rhythm and rhymes, Ray, many of them unusual connections.

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Tim Ellis

Wed 28th Apr 2010 22:08

A lovely reading - spooky yet seductive.

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 28th Apr 2010 22:00

Banksy - you have mystified me totally! Has he died? Why calcium! I MUST KNOW!!! A wonderful photo you've got of him. x

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 28th Apr 2010 21:41

Thanks for nice comments on Dark Moon. x

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Francine

Wed 28th Apr 2010 21:22

Ha ha 'Bored witless poet' AND 'saving Shithaiku' ; )


Tu es folle...
xxx

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Joseph Kennedy

Wed 28th Apr 2010 21:18

That is really encouraging, thank you so much, I wish more people my age enjoyed poetry

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 28th Apr 2010 21:04

It's interesting to see this rueful take on this innocent piece of your childhood. Very pared down and wistful?

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 28th Apr 2010 21:01

Some lovely juicy (sorry) lines in this one Isobel. I love the thought of boy scouts jobbing or robbing and bald heads in damp beds and the sticky £5 note.
By the way is the last word a misspelt mushroom. Bravo!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 28th Apr 2010 21:00

Visceral images which are hard to consider, but necessary to remember. Well done.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 28th Apr 2010 20:56

Forceful and provoking, in a racy casual style.

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Dave Carr

Wed 28th Apr 2010 20:42

This is great. Full of literary connections for me. I'm sure I've missed some.

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Dave Carr

Wed 28th Apr 2010 20:32

Left me sobbing

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 28th Apr 2010 20:20

This is terrific - really thought provoking. The ideas, diction and images are outstanding - especially 'I'm destroyed by culture'. Great title. By the way, 'criticised' on WOL generally means 'noticed/considered/commented upon', nothing negative.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 28th Apr 2010 20:15

What a powerful story you weave, true or not, almost the element of tragedy - preventable disaster.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 28th Apr 2010 20:08

The tone is very bitter, but the scenario is too true, and the poetry itself is really good.

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David Cooke

Wed 28th Apr 2010 19:23

Hi Cate Thanks for your kind comments about the poem. Glad you like it.

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Ray Miller

Wed 28th Apr 2010 19:07

Ann, thanks for your kind remarks on Analgesic. I'm not a smoker myself for 20 years. I do feel, though, that the focus on smoking has gone over the top. I think it's a form of displacement; we'd do far better to restrict the use of the motor car.Wine is the most wonderful thing in the world. Apart from football.

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Ray Miller

Wed 28th Apr 2010 19:02

Hello Joseph and thanks for your kind remarks on Analgesic. Glad you liked it.

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Cate Greenlees

Wed 28th Apr 2010 18:10

I would say this Haiku is bob on Isobel!!
Cate xx

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Louise Fazackerley

Wed 28th Apr 2010 17:22

John Darwin was there-doing a fabulous set too! But not sure what happened to the pic...

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