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The biggest crime

Council plans finally been passed,

time for renovation in city park,

along with the hired professionals

several young men work unpaid

fulfilling community sentences.

Three lads in their early twenties,

at the end of a long, hard day

leaving the grounds, fall into line

start talking along their way.

 

The first is serving two hundred hours

for his first offence of burglary,

the second, a hundred and ten hours

for irresponsible drink driving.

The third is serving six months.

“What, no way!” says the first,

“judge can’t give you that much,

maximum's three hundred hours!”

 

“Wow, man!” says the second.

“What the hell was your crime?”

“My crime,” says the third,

feeling somewhat annoyed.

 “I’ll tell you my crime.

 I was unemployed.” 

◄ Not like in the brochure

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 21st Oct 2013 13:08

Hi, Lynne. Good poem, as always. Love your posts.

As I was reading I just kept leaving out all kinds of unnecessary words. Have a finger-flicking good time and toss out several - IMO, they interrupt rhythm and your driving intent.

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Lynn Dye

Tue 8th Oct 2013 11:40

Thank you kindly, Starfish and Ray :-)

Thanks for advice, Ray. You are right on both counts (I was already unhappy with "all") and I have edited.

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Starfish

Tue 8th Oct 2013 09:23

Echoing my sentiments too. Well said.

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Lynn Dye

Mon 7th Oct 2013 23:22

Thank you very much for your kind comments, Andy and Laura. It's a bit of a work in progress, to be honest, but pretty much says what I think of Workfare.

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Laura Taylor

Mon 7th Oct 2013 14:17

Great poem Lynn - a good eye opener for those who choose to be ignorant.

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Andy N

Mon 7th Oct 2013 13:09

ooh. i agree with this one, lynn. good twist at the end but truthful and hard hitting..

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