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Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sat 9th Jan 2010 18:20
A lot of philosophy tucked into this in a chuckling way. Well-written and completely engaging from start to finish. Ending is great! Nothing like a good question. Made me think of a puppy teasing a rag and just getting totally bored, dropping it and sniffing around for more responsive entertainment.
Comment is about More than a puzzle (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Sat 9th Jan 2010 18:03
Comment is about No way out (blog)
Original item by Dermot Glennon
Sat 9th Jan 2010 18:01
Delightful, difficult, delirious - a warm ocean of words to swim in - with the mind gone blank and therefore receptive.
'Turning down the sodden edge of somewhere beautiful' is magnificent.
Comment is about Electric Tapestry (blog)
Original item by Augusta Darling
Sat 9th Jan 2010 17:45
So... This is the poem you wrote huh?
Jeeez DG, you say "No way out' but clearly there were some options...
You could have sat by the fire reading a really good book - and I could come up with many more fun things for you to do...
What happened to your inner child?
Did you go build a snowman, fort, or igloo like I told you??? ; )
Sat 9th Jan 2010 17:41
Is the 'woman' real or the memory of yourself? It doesn't really matter; I just wondered where your thought was.
I haven't figured out why you need 'and yet, a loss nevertheless'. I find the thought flows more strongly without it. I'm probably missing a connection because the poem is carefully and skillfully constructed. One thing did throw me: the switch in tense from present to past in the first four lines.
Comment is about autumn leaves (blog)
Original item by Banksy
Sat 9th Jan 2010 17:18
Well ... OK ... neat analogy with 'The Big Freeze' ... a clever topical outlet for pent-up emotions, perhaps typifying many of us. But, in honesty, while this is an interesting approach, I think the poem is roughly written.
Sat 9th Jan 2010 17:06
Or a ninety-year old lady giggling hilariously. Quite a warm little poem.
Comment is about Kicking the leaves (blog)
Original item by Alan McKean
Barring a thing that stops me, I will be going to the Tudor, and will do that poem there. Must say I'm rather touched by all these requests I've been getting from people lately.
At other times, they request me to do bad things, and when I open my eyes they're not there. Strange that.
Comment is about Dermot Glennon (poet profile)
Sat 9th Jan 2010 16:40
I don't recall Godfrey Winn, Ann. Although to be fair I didn't spend all of my youth reading women's magazines!I became aware of different genres of publication where pictures spoke louder than words which drew me away from the delights of 'home making'. Men with bouffant hairstyles did sometimes make an appearance, but in a supporting role......
Comment is about cdl (poet profile)
Original item by cdl
Sat 9th Jan 2010 16:28
Sat 9th Jan 2010 15:55
this is great. the rhythm, meter and rhyme really carry it on. i'm sure it must be fun to read aloud.
Comment is about Darling Sweatheart (blog)
Original item by Rachel McGladdery
Sat 9th Jan 2010 15:51
excellent rhythm, meaty syllables and strong imagery. well done.
Comment is about Force Seven (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sat 9th Jan 2010 15:30
i like the way you extract emotional depth from such a prosaic wordly phrase. it reminds me of latter day joni mitchell.
Comment is about If you can read this . . . (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Sat 9th Jan 2010 15:18
this is a very common scene from my life. i have been through every brand of cat food in the last year to keep my cat - leonard - entertained. it's amazing how cool and aloof cats can seem whilst just as equally brain dead.
Comment is about twit-like (blog)
Sat 9th Jan 2010 14:20
love the poem and the repetition works really well.
I enjoyed listening to the audio too. It's difficult for me to comment on how you portray it because as a reader, i expected more anger as he spoke those words which didn't come across except in the latter part of your audio.
Having said that, it was a lovely surprise because as you interpret it, it's more of a private conversation between two persons who are close enough to speak candidly in such a way as to let the other know how they tick.
That's the thing about reading poetry and listening to it performed. It can be portrayed in many ways and not always as expected. Chris Dawson's the one to speak to for advice on this.
She did an audio on one of hers once which had the same response from me. Where i expected an angry rant style poem and the reality was so very different.
That's what's so great about the performance scene... and the website enhances the experience when we can actually read the poem and decide for ourselves the reaction to it.
That's what's so good about poetry in general. Everyone has the opportunity to interpret for themselves how a poem can be and so different to what the author intended. Sometimes it's good when people get it wrong because it puts a whole new perspective on the written word which even the writer might not have realized when writing the piece.
I love poetry like this.
Sat 9th Jan 2010 13:49
That would be greatly appreciated if you could
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
Sat 9th Jan 2010 13:43
We are on same wavelenght with your idea '0 unread' , i had similar feeling/sentiment i wanted to capture. Do you want to write one and we can splice the 2 together? A project? ..I have not YET seen ajoint or HYBRID poem in here so we may be the first? Send it to Dermot for his magazine section
Sat 9th Jan 2010 13:09
Is the voice your own this time Ann? Nice voice and interestingly spoken intonations. Please don't think this is a slight. I'd like it to have been a bit slower. In actual performance we only get to hear it once so don't have the luxury of savouring the words or able to press a button to listen to it again.
Good work once again.
ps. in my opinion, no-one should need to apologize for the number of blogs they put up in any period of time. The people have a choice whether or not to read them...and they, of course have opinions too. Sorry for going on a bit. It just really annoys me when some people make others feel guilty by foisting their own opinions on the newer poets trying to make their mark and love the interaction this site provides for all users. Yes, i know! I'm 'off on one'' too.
Comment is about newsreaders (blog)
Sat 9th Jan 2010 12:43
Enjoyed this. It has a great image in the blackberry picking in Autumn leaves. It's deeper than at first read and has an element of nostalgia in nature and human nature. In fact the more i read, the more i like it.
Sat 9th Jan 2010 11:54
hi - many thanks for your kind comments
Sat 9th Jan 2010 10:44
Pleased ye enjoyed me verse especially MEMORY LOSS. After reading your poems I might rename it WALKING THE PLONK. Did ye write your verses or are they pirated?
Comment is about I Still Gets Excited By Snow (blog)
Original item by Mingo Backhair
Patricia and Stefan Wilde
Sat 9th Jan 2010 09:19
Good morning,unloved little waif.I really love this poem.excellent.have no fear,dear Lady,people like yourself can rest assured you will always be loved.from one human being to another,I say MWOAH! (thats a friendly peck on the cheek,and inclusive of a great big warming hug.)so many blogs??? wrong! not nearly enough in my books.yes,I really love this poem.thank you so much-Stefanx
Comment is about my love is like the train waiting (blog)
Sat 9th Jan 2010 09:05
sorry for so many bloggs lately - it is the snow and I am trapped. Help! ;-)
Sat 9th Jan 2010 08:53
My mum always read Woman and it seemed to be full of Godfrey Winn - do you remember him? Boufant hair and retouched eyebrows as I seem to recall!
Sat 9th Jan 2010 08:03
Really? Bloomin eck! In that case, if I do try it at Preston, I shall declaim it a la the actORS from Blackadder. Ta for looking it up Isobel! I feel very literary right now! x
Sat 9th Jan 2010 07:05
Hi Craig - thanks for your comments on my newsreaders! If your poems are as interesting and well written as your comments, should be good. Hope your mum is feeling better!
Sat 9th Jan 2010 02:28
This has a very sad and desperate feel to it...
I can hear the music playing in the background...
Comment is about Claire (blog)
Original item by Gus Jonsson
Sat 9th Jan 2010 00:45
This is a really touching poem banksy. My guess is, if you have feelings and emotions (and it is not just a guess), you can feel affinity for many things and people. And despite what the years do to you, you can always revisit those places at a glance. A truly nice poem.
Sat 9th Jan 2010 00:29
Enjoyed this! You have a sharp eye for tv related interactions! I was watching BBC 24 hour news programme recently thinking exactly that about the two presenters. Their body language spoke the complete opposite of their silly grins and fake flirtations. I like the way you rhymed 'breath' with 'death' by the way! No poem should be without that pair. Truly a match made in heaven! ;-)
And yes, I will post a poem tomorrow for you. I can indeed take it as well as dish it out. I just need to decide which one of mine has got the least cliches and forced rhymes in it so that I don't appear to be a total hypocrite! And on a slightly more serious note I would have done so already but my mum had her old bone and gristle knee replaced with a metal and plastic one today so I have had to put poetry to one side and visit her in hospital instead! Very inconsiderate of her.
She wanted a couple of magazines to read this evening but it appears there are no publications whatsover these days that do not feature Cheryl Cole, Jordan and/or Peter Andre on the front cover and I am having to take medication in order to recover from the trauma of being forced to handle and purchase these appalling publications. I would rather inhale asbestos dust frankly. Oh for the days when 'Woman's Own' featured the poems of Patience Strong, cake recipes and knitting patterns.
And back in those days Robert Dougall and Kenneth Kendal read the news. No nonsense, no autocue, no winking at some floozy with a botox face jammed against their thighs. Just a pile of A4, a stern look and some REAL news. In those days a bit of snow wouldn't have warranted a mention. Now you'd think the polar ice caps had shifted permanently onto our dismal little island for all the fuss they are making. Even Jordan is thinking of wearing underwear when she goes clubbing, according to reports in Angling Times and The Antiques Trade Gazette!!
Sat 9th Jan 2010 00:14
It has to be said, there was a time when news was news, and would be read by those you would respect as being serious in intellect and thinking. But now, as with everything else you see on telly, it all wreaks of showbizzness. You said something in this poem that i have been thinking for some time.
Fri 8th Jan 2010 23:41
I may be totally wrong on this one. Have just got me little book out. I see you are writing in Iambic Pentameter - if it was good enough for Shakespeare....Funnily enough, I am trying to write one in the Bard's style at the moment - it is so hard!
Fri 8th Jan 2010 23:24
Amazing! - easily the best I've read in donkey's aeons :)
Comment is about Freedoms Of.............. (blog)
Original item by Noetic-fret!
Fri 8th Jan 2010 23:11
A lovely poem Banksy. We see a blank canvas and we fill it with ourselves, maybe. Goodnight!
Fri 8th Jan 2010 22:28
"It's steam trains, plugs and sockets they admire,
a trip to Wickes will really light their fire.
In boiler suites and steel toe caps they go,
a pencil stuck behind the ear - they charm me so!
Arms up to elbows in old oil and grease,
Swarfega like a perfume to their nose.
How I love men like those!"
Swarfega Stuff Poet Foxglove!
Fri 8th Jan 2010 22:18
Hi Mr J.-This is one to take to the lav!-but bring it back again-though slightly moistened.but colourless-lol-really lovely poem Gus-our Monica was good at wailing-tee hee! ta Jonssons Lad-Stef-no x on the bottom sorry
Fri 8th Jan 2010 22:11
For a moment Ann,I that was you on the badly drawn telly-I was going to say,one of your nellies is lob-sided.wonder if those two might mention snow? loved it Ann-the poem.lol! Stefanx ps-the two readers I mean,not the nellies.
Fri 8th Jan 2010 21:37
Too right Ann-titles can be harder to conjure up than the poem(in my case poo-em)my thank you,s to you Ann-Stefan
Comment is about You are of Love (blog)
Fri 8th Jan 2010 21:34
hi noetic-that smile is priceless to me-no fear!
ta mucho-one day i,ll reach the bottom rung of your gifted ladder.if I live for a millenium-lol! well appreciated dude-Stefan
Fri 8th Jan 2010 21:16
..thanks for th'comment...no it's not bitter...just summing-up life a bit....I like your 'dance' poem...if you google 'stepmoth' and go to my 'myspace' you can select 'Easy when y'dancin' and hear me singin' on said subject....doesn't mean I can dance though..!!
Fri 8th Jan 2010 21:14
I shan't delete it. yep I was after honest feedback and nope I'm not in the least offended. I have a thing for Stephen Fry (pointless I know) and Dara O'Brien too....you should see me watching Mock the Week and QI.
As for writing lots, I have a one track mind at the mo and it's to the detriment of everything else...Bills....ironing...pah!... there's a poem to be written. Actually I go through phases, seems to be a prolific phase at the moment, maybe it's hormonal!
Comment is about Rachel McGladdery (poet profile)
Fri 8th Jan 2010 21:05
Glad I haven't offended - you seemed to be asking for honest feedback and critique. Yes, you are right about the first few lines being the ones missing rythm and it gets better thereafter. I seem to naturally prefer a structure where the lines are not all the same number of syllables. I don't consciously sit down and work them out though - I just read it to myself until it sounds right. I have got this book Stephen Fry wrote called 'The Ode less Travelled' which tells you all the different rhyming schemes. I keep meaning to read it - it seems good or perhaps I should invent my own and write to him with it. LOL. From a page perspective, your poem is great - beautiful. I always tend to see things from performance cos that is my first love. Wish I could write as much as you - I have become a bit lazy - I read a lot more than I write. Should put this in an email, rather than clog your profile - feel free to delete once read. x
ps Atonement is a dead miserable book with an aggravating ending - have you seen the film?
Fri 8th Jan 2010 21:04
Hiya Tommy, thanks for tellign me about Atonement, I googled it tooactyually, must get a copy of the book.
Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Fri 8th Jan 2010 21:03
Thanks John, what a lovely thing to say. I'm glad you liked the poem, I'm trying outsome new techniques at the mo, they don't always work so well and it's great to get feedback.
This is a bit of a hijack by the way but in response to Chris's comment below this, about liking things that make you cry.... I do that exact thing with Elgar's cello Concerto and Paul Gallico's book "the Snow Goose"
Comment is about John Aikman (poet profile)
Original item by John Aikman
Fri 8th Jan 2010 21:00
I really appreciated your lovely comment....thanks
Comment is about Shirley Alexander (poet profile)
Original item by Shirley Alexander
Fri 8th Jan 2010 20:54
Brilliant subject to attack head on. I take your point exactly. I love the freedom of poetry to spear anything with impunity .... well ... almost.
This WOL site really is a stimulating forum ... well ... almost.
Fri 8th Jan 2010 20:53
Oh, it's merely the cooking whisky! all gone now too, there was only one measure left, might have to sup the sherry next! then the listerine! No purple teeth for me tonight then!
Nope I did think that about the flow of it to start with....honest!
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Fri 8th Jan 2010 20:50
I bet you aren't that much older than me.... anyway, maybe you just had more discerning televisual tastes...I might try and find it on youtube unless they've burnt all the footage....they ought to have!
Fri 8th Jan 2010 20:49
I totally agree about the rhyme thing. I am messing around with styles and stuff at the mo and I'm not really comfortable with rhyming. it feels like I'm trying too hard and having to leave out stuff I want to put in but just can't tesselate. Practice at the jigsaw table for me I think. Lol!
Thanks again for the comment...also I am pretty sure the first few lines just don't work rhythm wise ...I will mess some more with it at some point.
Fri 8th Jan 2010 20:45
Hi Rach - I don't recall the prog of which you speak, I think I'm millions of years older than you. I was struck by this new thing where you seem to have to have two newsreaders, always a man and a woman, to let you down gently when they tell you the news, on local stations anyway. And they always seem to have to flirt with each other. Gets right up my nose - so false!
Fri 8th Jan 2010 20:44
Bloomin heck - so it's not just red wine you drink - dare I join you with a glass of brandy? Don't take what I say as read, Rachel. Often you know how to perform your own stuff - it is inside you - it isn't as natural with someone elses. And yes - I think it is about the rythm not the syllables - or is it the syllables that create the rythm? You'll have to try it out in Preston. It is great to try out new styles though. I went the other way from you. Started off pretty much rhyming everything and struggled not to rhyme. Now I'm never sure what I'm doing - perhaps that's the purple teeth....x
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