Hi Daniel, thanx for comment, no problem! It would be great to see you perform a few - this poem reminds me of a few of the things Ive written including RnR love poem and Snakeskin Sid if you read that one. These were the days! - good stuff mate!
We have a gig in tyldesley on 4th Friday each month its in between Bolton & Wigan, next ones are 25 July & 22 August, send me a message if you fancy it, we can sort, be great to see you - ps theres a profile for it - Guitar n Verse at Cadence, cheers Jeffarama!
Comment is about SMELLY BOGS AND DIAMOND DOGS (blog)
Original item by Daniel Dwyran
Hi Laura
I like the repetitive use of 'did it hurt' and 'were you scared' in particular along with the way you have used questions.
Comment is about 23:4 re-drawn (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
leah
Mon 30th Jun 2014 22:12
CAM PLAYS A 'MEAN' GUITAR AT JUNE'S WRITE ANGLE
Owe it to the sluggish heat, holidays, football, whatever, Write Angle had a smaller-than-usual crowd to greet its June guest and open mikers. Sadly, too, as many who were there, said, the usual crowd 'missed a really good evening'. Others commented that a smaller audience made for a more 'intimate evening'.
Whatever, Cam Brown was a great guest. He plays a 'mean' guitar and his fingers fly over the strings in perfect timing, and so fast, it's almost difficult to keep up! He did folk songs and some jazz, from as far back as 1893. He plays and sings non-stop, obviously loving every moment that the guitar's in his grip!
After a brief word of how he and this writer discussed folk music and one of the Oxford dictionary definitions was 'music for ignorant people', he went straight into 'The Ram of Derbyshire'. It set the mood. From then, it was 'The Old Dun Cow, (Harry Wincott) to 'Let's Do it' (Victoria Wood) to 'The Vicar and the Frog' (Fred Wedlock), to 'The Tattooed Lady (Paddy Roberts, 1960). Several songs by Jake Thackray, such as 'Sister Josephine' (Oh Sister Josephine, What do all these policeman mean) and 'Words and Music' ('I love a good bum on a woman.....')
Some of the songs were 'a bit more than bawdy' and misogynist, but they seemed fitting to the times in which they were written and performed, and Cam managed to create an ambience of 'back then, when'....It was a true fun evening, with the audience joining in as familiar songs came dashing off his supple fingers. This writer asked about the guitar and was told it was worth quite a few thousand pounds. Not unsurprising. To keep up with the way Cam played, would require a very 'well trained' instrument!
Meantime, the Open Mic had guitarist, Paddy Brady, first timer, with 'The Irish Pub', ('wherever you go around the World, you'll find an Irish pub'). Everyone joined in. Then, a song about 'Grace Grifford, artist and lover of Joseph Mary Plunkutt, poet and scholar, who, in 1916, as a leader of the Dublin rebellion, was caught and sentenced to be shot. Grace and he were married in jail and given 10 minutes together, just before his death. The love story between them became one of the most poignant to come out of the struggle for Irish freedom. The song was done with great feeling.
Jack Warshaw, another singer/guitarist also did a tribute, but a different war. His was for the 'D Day Dodgers', the Allied servicemen who fought in Italy during WWII... he also talked of when folk singers were paid $1 and depended on tips; about Bo Jangle walking in while a friend was performing. He then sang 'Mr Bo Jangle', another familiar and loved tune! Jack was soft on the guitar. Nice singing!
Chris Sangster told of how audi maserati and he are writing songs, and performed in 'Liss Has Talent'. As a recent grandad, he read 'Boyhood' about his son. 'Gauche actions, crazy hair styles...and the transition to 'standing proud as boy becomes a man!' Then 'The Visit' where an old lady 'takes advantage' of a young man. 'While you're here, can I ask a little favour' – somehow ending up hanging a picture, fixing the light bulb, TV, Bathroom sink, etc...(don't trust 'little old ladies!) Then, 'The Taking of Troy' - how the embryo Troy becomes the thug, Troy. Finally, 'The Valentine's Day Ear Acher', about he and Jackie in a romantic mood in a restaurant being 'attacked' noisily by the totally uncaring 'Sally Shouts', and her daughter who 'remained silent throughout'.
Gilly Gillingham said he hadn't written a poem in 16 years and since coming to Write Angle, hasn't stopped writing. He thanked WA for their encouragement, then read 'Muse-less, muse-less' followed by 'how love doesn't end at 70'. He met someone in Tunisia and returns often. 'They don't speak the same language but share love'. Then 'Sex After 70' and finally 'Little Blue Pills', which had everyone in hysterics!
Jake gave a poetical update on what's been going on. Pakistan breaking agreement with Darfur, Gaza and its 'daily attacks', Iraq - the Sunis and Shiites. 'his enemy's enemy is now a friend'. Leah did a tribute to 'a porter who becomes Harrod's Santa at Christmas.
The raffle prize, a free meal for two at Fez, was won by, of all people, Cam Brown, who will now have to make a return journey from London to Petersfield, to claim his prize!
All in all, an easy and comfortable evening. Different from the others, but then, aren't they all?
Review is about WRITE ANGLE POETRY & MUSIC +OPEN MIC on 17 Jun 2014 (event)
Hya Shirl.
Glad to see you on here and look forward to reading more of your stuff. Loved this one, "I saw this live the other night" ..... heh, heh. Good stuff. :)
Comment is about Shirley-Anne Kennedy (poet profile)
Original item by Shirley-Anne Kennedy
I can't say I love the piece, but, "don't paint your despair on my shirt" definitely has something!
Comment is about Tales of a Shattered Monocle (blog)
Original item by Obviously Charming Delinquent
Haha bang on :D Happy to be of inspirational service to you :D
Comment is about HABITAT HIPPY (blog)
Original item by Daniel Dwyran
<Deleted User> (5011)
Sun 29th Jun 2014 21:18
What a cracking review Shirley-Ann.
Review is about Write Out Loud - Middleton on 22 Jun 2014 (event)
<Deleted User> (5011)
Sun 29th Jun 2014 21:00
There's fire in your words, Shirley-Ann, and justice in your motives. I love hearing you read your work, whether at Middleton or, as earlier this month, at Bolton. You deserve a wider audience. See you somewhere, somewhen.
Comment is about Shirley-Anne Kennedy (poet profile)
Original item by Shirley-Anne Kennedy
I`m aware that this kind of `mindmix` stuff is not to be approached expecting too much clarity...but
I`m intrigued by the (funereal urn?) shaping of the text in the picture.It seems too civilisedly
out of kilter with the rest of it.
Comment is about Moved by a Wheel (blog)
Original item by Juton, Villain of Truth
<Deleted User> (5011)
Sun 29th Jun 2014 14:25
You are clearly one hot reviewer, Judy. superbly done!
Comment is about Look At All The Women: Cathy Bryant, Mother's Milk (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thanks, Dominic! What kind review WOL gave it. I love Sky Spell, by the way - I love the atmosphere and the gorgeous structure.
Comment is about Cathy Bryant (poet profile)
Original item by Cathy Bryant
Thank you for your kind words, Helen. We stayed at Kokinos in 2007, and used the Makris pool, which is where we had our welcome meeting so it is probably you that gave me my first glass of kumquat, and I've been hooked ever since, lol. We have since stayed at the Rainbow, perfect hosts. Yes, I do know Sharon, her pool bar is great, even provides home made cakes in the afternoons.
I loved the Coconut Bar also. Have you heard that Hana and Kostas have recently had their first baby, a little girl?
Comment is about Kerkyra (blog)
Helen, this is spooky! The first time we went to Arillas was in 2007 and it was a Manos holiday. We've probably even met!
I don't know whether you've ever checked out the forum Arillas.com but I made friends on there over the years and wrote them quite a few poems. Lately they are telling me they miss me and my poems, but I have been unable to afford to return since 2011, so there's only so many ways you can say the same thing.
You may be interested to see this video which a friend from the forum made of Arillas, featuring my 'Ode to Arillas' at the end.
http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=30130
Comment is about Kerkyra (blog)
Oh yeh, very good! Congratulations on your new collection Cathy.
Comment is about Cathy Bryant (poet profile)
Original item by Cathy Bryant
Not usually my type of thing this but I was drawn into it as it really is so good. Very powerful, very topical. I hope it gains wide circulation and recognition. I endorse everything the others have said so far.
Comment is about War Boys (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
I believe poetry is about personal interpretation, even application. It hardly matters who it is, where it is, just how you read it and what you do with it. I think this stands out as a delectable meadow flower amongst the wilderness of WOL.
Comment is about Kerkyra (blog)
Thank you Martin, that's very kind of you. I am a but if a runoholic, so the piece has a real meaning for me, after an injury took me out for 3 months I found it incredibly frustrating and convince myself I'd never run again!
Luckily it all eventually sorted itself out, I just had to believe in myself and be patient, this poem pretty much sums up that journey :)
Thank you again for your kind words.
Comment is about Above, Beyond (blog)
Original item by Simon Austin
Ged - 'Note to self' reeled me in to 'When the stars danced' on to 'And then the heart does flutter' and the sparkling 'What if'.
'More than 50' blew me away with your energy and passion. Screaming it with you. (96 YNWA regardless of any allegiance).
Reading these was like losing a quid and finding a tenner!
Superb work.
Comment is about Ged Thompson (poet profile)
Original item by Ged Thompson
Helen,
I'm with Harry on this thinking that Kerkyka is the name of someone who may be a long lost love or a soul mate.
(Which in turn seems to be right in my shamed defence your honour)!
'Locked deep in my heart and mind, My saviour, my friend, There you'll keep to the end....'
If that is not love I don't know what is.
I'll also admit to having a look where it was on Google!
Beautiful.
Thanks for the kind words on 'Habitat Hippy' Helen. Very much apprecitated.
Comment is about Kerkyra (blog)
Lynn and Helene,
What are you tryin` to do to me? here`s me thinkin` that Kerkyra was a lads name and that I`d read my first ever poem by a woman who is
unconditionally praisin` a man. And now you tell me
it`s about Corfu...Shame on you!
Comment is about Kerkyra (blog)
I love this poem, Helen, it is so well written in my opinion, and I so agree about Kerkyra - my favourite place on earth.
It's one of those poems I wish I'd written - and believe me, I have written many about Arillas on the north west coast.
Comment is about Kerkyra (blog)
Hi Simon
I like above, beyond, particularly the opening stanza and that line' of rising larks and pigeons choir'. The whole piece has a real sense of time and place.
Comment is about Above, Beyond (blog)
Original item by Simon Austin
cheers for the feedback MC. Maybe I'm trying to be too smart with the vocal track (I co-produced so no one to blame but myself if this has back-fired) I was after a Lennon-like lead vocal with plenty of reverb/echo - but the carol at the end is meant to be distorted/distant/ethereal - a ghost of the main theme if you will. I still hear it clearly, but it's meant to sound other-worldly. Thanks again for your continued supportive comments
Ian
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Cheers, MC. Proud to be a Steam Poet! It could be the start of a new poetry movement, backwards in time ...
Comment is about The poets now standing near platform one (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I am so sorry about the sunburn - and so grateful for the review of my dreams! Thank you!
Comment is about Look At All The Women: Cathy Bryant, Mother's Milk (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Laura - The kind comments that you left on my profile page about 'Glasto in my Garden', (relating to kudos and sunshine), motivated and inspired me to pen 'Habitat Hippy'. Rock on!
Thank you Laura.
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Hearty congratulations are due to all those who
took railway poetry as seriously as this
endeavour indicates. A superior example of putting your poetry where your mike is on
behalf of our love of railways...but especially
the steam puffers!
Comment is about The poets now standing near platform one (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Hello Ian - following up on your post on my
profile page. I went to the audio link you
provided and enjoyed the tune...shades of Bob
Dyland meets Pete Seeger! However-and this is
a general complaint in today's music age:
the instrumental overwhelmed the lyric. I may
be a bit muttn'jeff these days but your words
seemed somewhere in another room, so to speak.
This is a common failing today when recordings
are done by those who are less receptive or
sympathetic to the vocal than to the instruments and tend to give the latter more
prominence than they should. This was not met
in recordings made when I was younger and
vocalists were the stars, and lyrics told a story where you could hear every word..."up
front".
Comment is about Ian Whiteley (poet profile)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
cheers - thanks so much for the kind comments Daniel. I'm hoping the CD will be finished and released by 11/11/14 - fingers crossed :-)
in the meantime - don't know if you're interested, but I have a CD and EP available for purchase (or you can just listen to the tracks for free) on Bandcamp - here: http://thecrowsofalbion.bandcamp.com/
thanks for showing an interest - much appreciated mate
Ian
Comment is about Daniel Dwyran (poet profile)
Original item by Daniel Dwyran
Ian. Thanks for taking the time to have a rummage at my work. I am made up with your kind encouragement.
I took the opportunity to check out your link to soundcloud earlier today. Superb stuff. I'm looking forward to getting a copy of your Great War (WW1) album when you finish recording and it comes out.
I have tried, and struggle, with haiku poetry but I must take my hat off to you with Passchendaele (Autumn 1917). Difficult and emotive subject yet captured magnificently.
Comment is about Ian Whiteley (poet profile)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Hi Jeff. Thank you for reading 'World Cup Widow' and 'In LlanfairPG'. Glad you liked them. Your comments gave me a big smile and really mean a lot. Just the push I need to fuel up my Vespa, attend an event and maybe read at one. Much appreciated.
Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)
Original item by Jeffarama!
Hi Ian
takes a few steep steps down to get back into the feel of this one, again, I think it's very good. Usual thing, take up or dismiss anything I say here, they are my reactions...
The first stanza gives me an image of lids opening on blood coming out as of a wound, dark, venous. Blinding and so separate rather than opening on the battlefield.
Golgotha - the photo attached does put me in mind of the crucified, but I do not like: God does not belong here, and the stench of the charnel house, they sound like re-used phrases however well the sentiment works... and "false politics" is beneath the event and the poem, whereas the other two might pass, I think a political nod is an intellectual diversion in the consuming physical presence of the battlefield.
Otherwise: you hit the point, excellent, eeriness... I pretty much agree with everyone, good work!
Comment is about Passchendaele (Autumn 1917) (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
I really liked this. I was drawn in to the poetry of the prose, and found myself reading it at a rate that surpassed the acceleration due to gravity. It had a melodic sway to it that drew me in. It was a blurry of humanistic, and sometimes conflicting, emotions. It seemed very personal, and I thank you for allowing me to read it.
Comment is about Freedom of Double Speak (blog)
Original item by Juton, Villain of Truth
Oh, that was enjoyable. And I enjoyed the cadence as well. Keep it up please.
Comment is about The Sulk (blog)
Original item by Twilbury Wist
I'm on the case, Dave. Leave it with me.
Comment is about Sweating the Small Stuff (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
<Deleted User> (9882)
Fri 27th Jun 2014 08:16
Paul-I CAN suck on this-but I cant swallow-nevertheless I will try HARDER.
Comment is about Hey Poet! Suck This (blog)
Original item by Paul Sands
A really striking well written poem, Ian. The terrible thing is there's so much truth in it. Never again!
Comment is about War Boys (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Interesting. I liked it. The structure works. Blowed if I know why.
Comment is about The Sulk (blog)
Original item by Twilbury Wist
Better sort out fracking quick John. She might be annoyed if they're under your house and you've done nothing about it.
Comment is about Sweating the Small Stuff (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Hello Anthony. Our Gert decided the arrangement, of course. She is pestering me to resolve the Eastern Ukraine situation at the moment.
Comment is about Sweating the Small Stuff (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
"Turned out nice again!" Get thysen a banjo and do it in'th style of Formby - I could almost hear it John!
"buy another car/try South Africa" - is that the equivalent to one of Les Dawson's "intentional" bum notes? By the way, who decided who was going to decide what? (If you see what I mean!)
Regards,
A.E.
Comment is about Sweating the Small Stuff (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
I like the way this is told as a story in such a lyrical way. Very Good Ian
Comment is about War Boys (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Many thanks, MC. I've always said I might have been a bit hasty with Our Gert.
Comment is about Sweating the Small Stuff (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Hello Matt
Welcome to Write Out Loud.
I hope you enjoy the site. We're really looking forward to reading some of your work and I know that you will be warmly welcomed by other WOL-ers too.
Thanks for already uploading a picture of yourself.
Have a good browse around, there’s lots going on and if you have the time to make some comments about the work of other poets please feel free. It’s the best way to get some constructive feedback about your own work too.
There’s always someone who’ll help you out with a problem, so just ask and someone will get back to you. It’s a friendly place, so welcome once again.
Graham Sherwood
Comment is about Matt Abbott (poet profile)
Original item by Matt Abbott
thanks again MC - just seen your kind comments on 'war boys' - interesting you should suggest a slow/lament - because I'm recording this one next week and I've got a big, bold marching tune in mind - that goes off-beat and more chatic as the soing progresses. This is one of the few times that I've written the words after the tune has presented itself to me - so should be interesting to see how it turns out. Here's a link to soundcloud for a demo of onbe of the other tracks I've recorded for the new WW1 album - I think you may have responded positively when I posted the poem (Vilanelle) earlier in the year - quite interesting to get a tune that so perfectly (in my mind anyway)fit the poetry form without detracting from the song element. Hope you like it - I'd welcome your feedback : HOME BY CHRISTMAS
https://soundcloud.com/the-man-at-the-back-1/home-for-christmas
there's also a couple of others that I've already recorded for the album if you want to give them a listen :-)
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
It's you again!
just realised you'd also commented on 'Roadie'- written from the perspective of both being and relying upon in my time. Roadies are most certainly an interesting rock phenomenon - vastly undervalued and yet - so stupid! :-)
Comment is about Daniel Dwyran (poet profile)
Original item by Daniel Dwyran
Hiys Val
thanks for commenting on 'children of the glamned' - so pleased that you liked it. Cheers :-)
Comment is about Valerie Cook (poet profile)
Original item by Valerie Cook
thanks for the kind comments on 'children of the glamned Harry' I am once again in catch up mode as I returned from holiday with a severe bout of food poisoning so only just getting round to replying to comments - so, sincere apologies for the lateness of my reply. Hope you're keeping well
Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
Graham Sherwood
Tue 1st Jul 2014 08:36
Hello Lopt
Welcome to Write Out Loud.
I hope you enjoy the site. We're really looking forward to reading some of your work and I know that you will be warmly welcomed by other WOL-ers too.
If you haven’t already added a picture to your profile please try and do so. It’s good to see what our fellow poets look like.
Have a good browse around, there’s lots going on and if you have the time to make some comments about the work of other poets please feel free. It’s the best way to get some constructive feedback about your own work too.
There’s always someone who’ll help you out with a problem, so just ask and someone will get back to you. It’s a friendly place, so welcome once again.
Graham Sherwood
Comment is about Lopt the Treacherous (poet profile)
Original item by Lopt the Treacherous