Enjoyed this very much. A well-crafted structure putting a sharp twist on a much over-used caution. And a conclusion that triggers personal thought.

Comment is about Is it safe? (blog)

Original item by Pauliegreg

Fair enough, the standard was pretty good, beats my attempt (drink in the pauses) and I guess that's Travis Brow out too - what did you think Andy?

Thirst for Light

in shallow rays on threads of winding dust,
spread wide through window panes, glasses become
the vessels of a luminescent auburn
spilt fresh from distant lakes and tarns, refined
to usquebaugh (fire water) but in my reach
only the beer – well-filtered down, drawn
from valley shine on tumbling limestone paths
collecting heads of froth: this rich-stained brew
makes ale the summer sunlight strewn by birch
the juice of hill and sky – and gladly drunk

Comment is about Soaking up the words: last chance to have your poem on beermat (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Laura, re: The Blessed Man, sometimes front line capitals just feels right. Perhaps it is the subject here, so universal and simple, which maybe requires those 'standard rules' to which readers will immediately relate.

And nothing is more universal than fairy tales. Or mythology - sort of the same point... sort of.

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Laura, sometimes front line capitals just feels right. Perhaps it is the subject here, so universal and simple, which maybe requires those 'standard rules' to which readers will immediately relate.

And nothing is more universal than fairy tales. Or mythology - sort of the same point... sort of.

Comment is about The Blessed Man (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Read this today for the first time.

Kaboom! Very strong and powerful.
'Through those eyes... cold as caves'.
As valid today as throughout the centuries.

Comment is about incoming (blog)

Original item by garside

Hi Tommy
I like your work because its always fresh and has a rhythm all of it's own. This piece is no exception. I can just picture the pen and the coffee and smoke. I look forward to more.

Comment is about A meeting in Algiers (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Shirley-Anne beat me to 'bazzin' so I'll have to settle for second best,and say...dead good!

if twas my poem-twould be titled(tyculled)..

...So Northern.x

Comment is about NORTHERN CHARM (blog)

Original item by Daniel Dwyran

Here are the results, via Josephine Corcoran http://josephinecorcoran.wordpress.com/2014/09/04/poems-on-a-beermat-prizegiving/

Comment is about Soaking up the words: last chance to have your poem on beermat (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

this is very you, nigel. look forward to hearing this on monday hopefully.. lol

Comment is about Punch Line (blog)

Original item by Nigel Astell

Tremendous!

Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)

Original item by Stockport WoL

Thanks Paul hope it made the bus ride better!

Comment is about Pauliegreg (poet profile)

Original item by Pauliegreg

Just got word Caroline is coming down on Monday night!

Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)

Original item by Stockport WoL

Loved this, made me chuckle on the bus. :)

Comment is about Punch Line (blog)

Original item by Nigel Astell

Overflow

Strong current
High level.

Bank unsteady
Foundation cracks.

Falls into
Unknown depths.

The theme for Monday night is Rivers.

Comment is about Come and join the collage: Write Out Loud at Stockport art gallery tonight (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Beautiful piece, Travis. "I essay a raft of selves that rattle in my shell, like shot." Lovely line! Also enjoyed how you depicted the individual within the crowd cast, and your metaphor of crowd-river and individual-captain.

Comment is about A CROWD. (blog)

I have been in touch with Caroline Riley from the Healthy Waterways Trust to see if she can come down on Monday.

I am still waiting for a reply to see if she can make it.

Putting a poem together about the theme for the night Rivers called The False Claim.

Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)

Original item by Stockport WoL

Thanks Andy, glad you enjoyed it :)

Comment is about Crime of Comfort (blog)

Original item by Candice Reineke

Andy, this story hurts my heart. Those who hide and/or ignore the atrocity of child abuse are no different than those who commit it. Thanks for writing this.

Comment is about Unsaid (for the children abused in Rotherham) (blog)

Original item by Andy N

JC - I assume that the school equivalent of the IOC is "Investigating Outrageous Claims"?
As for the force of pee (sounds like a maths
equation!), it is surely a matter for some
rejoicing that it emerges at all when one is
aware of the alternative. :-)

Comment is about School Record (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

clever, clever, clever.

really enjoyed reading this

top stuff

Comment is about Crime of Comfort (blog)

Original item by Candice Reineke

excellent ending to a top poem. really could see and almost hear this poem.

Comment is about Nature reclaimed (blog)

Original item by Ad Astra

hanks sian. you got the point behind this poem about poor Stefan spot on. thank so, so much for your thoughts here. hope to see you put more on here soon x

Comment is about sian howell (poet profile)

Original item by sian howell

thanks sian. you got the point behind this poem spot on. thank so, so much for your thoughts here.

Comment is about For Stefan Kiszko (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Very atmospheric. Felt like I was sitting there. Could smell the hops. Well written :)

Comment is about She watched him waiting (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

I am also a fan of the spirit of this poem. Especially the funding quip ;D

Comment is about PERFORMING RANTERS (blog)

Original item by Daniel Dwyran

Thanks Daniel. Loving the feedback :)

I have always been able to "see" my poetry and longed to be able to create an image to go with it. I am thoroughly enjoying experimenting with video.


Thanks Tommy x

Comment is about My Mum (blog)

Original item by Shirley-Anne Kennedy

Hi Shirley, the title guarantees a look-see and amuses in a homely way, then the ending. Tommy x

Comment is about My Mum (blog)

Original item by Shirley-Anne Kennedy

Hello Sad Poet,

Welcome to Write Out Loud, we hope you are enjoying the site and we're really looking forward to reading some of your work. I know that you will be warmly welcomed by other WOL-ers too.

It would be great if you could upload a picture of yourself, it’s really good to see what our fellow poets look like.

Have a good look around, there’s always lots going on and if you have the time to make some comments about the work of other poets please feel free to do so, it’s often the best way to get some constructive feedback about your own work too.
There’s usually somebody who’ll help you out with any problems that you might encounter, so just ask and someone will get back to you.
WOL is a friendly, creative and unassuming place, so welcome from all of us once again.

Graham
&
The Write Out Loud Team.

Comment is about The Sad Poet (poet profile)

Original item by The Sad Poet

Hello Celin,

Welcome to Write Out Loud, we hope you are enjoying the site and we're really looking forward to reading some of your work. I know that you will be warmly welcomed by other WOL-ers too.

It would be great if you could upload a picture of yourself, it’s really good to see what our fellow poets look like.

Have a good look around, there’s always lots going on and if you have the time to make some comments about the work of other poets please feel free to do so, it’s often the best way to get some constructive feedback about your own work too.
There’s usually somebody who’ll help you out with any problems that you might encounter, so just ask and someone will get back to you.
WOL is a friendly, creative and unassuming place, so welcome from all of us once again.

Graham
&
The Write Out Loud Team.

Comment is about Celin (poet profile)

Original item by Celin

Sir Isaac Newton, he's the guy
Watched an apple fall down from the sky
His gravitorial situation
Our lavatorial consternation
2060?... I'm not worried
Chances are that I'll be buried...

(Well it nearly rhymed...)

No man indeed shall know the date
So be accountable for your fate.

Comment is about Poem: The Dark Heretic (blog)

Original item by Joseph J. Breunig 3rd

James... up in the frozen North you can sometimes smell it 'fore you see it!

Bazzin'... not heard that word for ages Shirley-Anne :)))))

Boddingtons Brewery... a bloomin' car park. S'pose it could have been a Strangeways Prison annex Martin ;)

Thank you all for your very kind words. Much appreciated.

Comment is about NORTHERN CHARM (blog)

Original item by Daniel Dwyran

Fire... flame... heat... afraid of being burned....
You sound very smitten James closing your eyes and still seeing her. Great structure to this. I liked No Reason as well mate. Very good.

Comment is about For a Stranger (blog)

Original item by James Roper

Thanks for sharing this wonderful and most personal tribute to your Mum Shirley-Anne.

I really love the way your video/adobe link puts the puts the warmth and love right in the face of the reader!
Such passion and compassion. Brilliant!

Comment is about My Mum (blog)

Original item by Shirley-Anne Kennedy

Aw... thanks, Solar.

Mum was a character. Although her passing was quite some time ago now your condolences touched me x

Comment is about My Mum (blog)

Original item by Shirley-Anne Kennedy

Another corker Daniel.
'Boddies bitter bites yer bum'

It's a shame the boddies brewery is no more. It's a car park now.

Great stuff

Comment is about NORTHERN CHARM (blog)

Original item by Daniel Dwyran

Hello John, delayed response on H.2.0. due to medical matters but now walking around again. Waterways are certainly places to reminisce eh? How is your writing these days?

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

haha! white linen rafting eh?

Great poem Candice.x

Comment is about Crime of Comfort (blog)

Original item by Candice Reineke

admirations and greatest of sympathies for you and Mum.

Such a lovely,moving
albeit so sad a poem.

My condolences Shirley-Anne.x

Comment is about My Mum (blog)

Original item by Shirley-Anne Kennedy

The three empty seats were set aside vicariously for you (Isobel), me, and Alvin! Duh... ;-)

Comment is about Is Billy Collins still at the top of his game? A fan's view from Edinburgh book festival (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Many thanks C, I and J for the comments/feedback. :)

Comment is about Is Billy Collins still at the top of his game? A fan's view from Edinburgh book festival (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Good one, Pete.

Comment is about CHASING DRAGONS (blog)

Original item by Pete Slater

You knew I would really enjoy this, didn't you?

Bazzing :)

Comment is about NORTHERN CHARM (blog)

Original item by Daniel Dwyran

Thanks Daniel.

I am some photos to go with it. Might get around to uploading them later to day :)

Comment is about Northern Soul (blog)

Original item by Shirley-Anne Kennedy

Thanks Daniel for your comment on my offering "Multi Coloured Change" It is much appreciated. Always glad to get comments from fellow poets. Cheers.

Comment is about Daniel Dwyran (poet profile)

Original item by Daniel Dwyran

So eloquent. I can almost see it.

Comment is about NORTHERN CHARM (blog)

Original item by Daniel Dwyran

Enjoyable review/read Darren.

I also like Billy Collins. I thought it odd that I could only read a little of his work at a time despite enjoying much of it. Maybe there is something more universal in that.

Regards,

Comment is about Is Billy Collins still at the top of his game? A fan's view from Edinburgh book festival (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

He did indeed, Daniel. Looks like vG's got his work cut out.

Comment is about Heartbreak Hotel (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Hi John Thanks for comments on Ali poem.

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

Love your first line "A sky for a blanket"...beautiful poem and picture!

Comment is about Eternal Moment (blog)

Original item by Ad Astra

Glad you got it, Daniel :) Aaaah, life's simplest moments.

Comment is about The Undies Moment (blog)

Original item by Candice Reineke