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Shirley-Anne Kennedy

Sat 13th Sep 2014 19:36

Touching Chris.

Strange reading the comments from Dave Carr and yourself. I read it as tears even though I saw tiers. Hopes that makes sense!

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Shirley-Anne Kennedy

Sat 13th Sep 2014 19:32

Agree with Lynn, clever.

Think he will have it easy. Certainly will compared to his victims.

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Shirley-Anne Kennedy

Sat 13th Sep 2014 19:23

Chris Co: Long time, no see :) Thanks for the comment, really appreciated. Coat of Snow is one of my favourites and a bit lighter than my usual rants! lol

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Shirley-Anne Kennedy

Sat 13th Sep 2014 19:23

Daniel: Thanks so much for the feedback on the video version. It's made my day :)

Though I'm becoming more confident 'performing' live now I have a heck of a long way to go. I am much more comfortable letting the poems and words to the business.

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Chris Co

Sat 13th Sep 2014 16:56

I'm glad it showed Dave. Given the subject I did spent a very long time - only seemed right.

I was not sure whether I was right to spell it tiers or tears given the wish to convey both. In the end I went with the former in the hope that people reading would feel the latter and understand the duality.

I suppose the key is to give of your best with such delicate and important subjects.

You were missed at Wigan, hope all is good. Maybe see you at the next one?

Best of

Chris

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Graham Sherwood

Sat 13th Sep 2014 15:23

Thought provoking work Alexandra.
Some lovely words too. particularly like candy-like diction etc.

On the wider issue of the poem, we all have to elevate words to be more powerful than our actions. People can hurt with words too, so having control over strong words is important when writing.

If your piece is in any way biographical (you allude to that) then I'm glad that you have exchanged blades for words. Keep writing!

regards,

Graham

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Ged the Poet

Sat 13th Sep 2014 13:41

There was a time years ago when the Krankies were forever on television... if you didn't have a TV and lived in a wigwam you might not know who they were;)
Thanks for your kind words Tommy. Much appreciated.

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Alexandra Parapadakis

Sat 13th Sep 2014 11:11

This is wonderful. I love the structure, it's as if the old voices are still echoing down the halls

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Alexandra Parapadakis

Sat 13th Sep 2014 11:05

This is a brave text to publicise, well-done.These are very true points within our society you have picked upon

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Alexandra Parapadakis

Sat 13th Sep 2014 10:37

Thank you Candice! And no problem

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tommyfazz@yahoo.com

Sat 13th Sep 2014 08:49

(said in a stiff slightly confused manner lacking all natural inflection) ''I am from planet 5K-J890 Alpha and I know not what 'pocketsofhisponderingexhale' means, please explain please.

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Dave Carr

Sat 13th Sep 2014 08:44

Wonderful. Makes me want to tear up everything I ever wrote. Dave

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tommyfazz@yahoo.com

Sat 13th Sep 2014 08:40

I don't get the TV reference Danny...otherwise quite clever and moderately hilarious. ;)

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Dave Carr

Sat 13th Sep 2014 08:26

I like the ambiguity in this. Good luck with Diggers. Dave

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Dave Carr

Sat 13th Sep 2014 08:23

Good choice of words. I bet you spent some time over this. Dave

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Dave Carr

Sat 13th Sep 2014 08:14

I read this several times to fully appreciate it. Excellent. Good luck with Diggers. Dave

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Kassandra

Fri 12th Sep 2014 18:35

How Beautiful. The imagery of our world and the detail of what you see just stands out so well. Very nice!

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Alex mills

Fri 12th Sep 2014 18:31

hahahah, yeah I meant scrabbling. lol
I read over these and still miss the odd one.
Thank you x

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Chris Co

Fri 12th Sep 2014 17:47

Hi Shirley-Ann,

Loved hearing you read this poem at Middleton earlier in the year, well written.

Best of

Chris

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Chris Co

Fri 12th Sep 2014 17:27

Memorial...if only there was more.

Warmest wishes Candice

Chris

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Laura Taylor

Fri 12th Sep 2014 16:26

You're a cheeky bleeder Tommy Carroll! :D

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Fri 12th Sep 2014 16:10

feeling like doing that gets one at times-
re/i.e.-the bastard/s
who set fire to the Manchester Dogs home

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Fri 12th Sep 2014 16:05

quite sensuous-love it!xx

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Fri 12th Sep 2014 16:03

Hi Sunny-very moving!xx

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Fri 12th Sep 2014 16:01

Always with you in your hurt Mikey-for certain!
(one tiny nit-pick)

..'pissing AGAINST the wind'..? xx

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Fri 12th Sep 2014 15:56

Really nice piece Q.C.-

did you mean 'scrabbling?

xx

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charliebrogan

Fri 12th Sep 2014 15:54

Thanks for your comment Evenings when in love with a painter.
You're right it was a smoky evening! I'm happy you could feel that. :D xx

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Ged the Poet

Fri 12th Sep 2014 13:36

Love this. Great visions with the video version. Coat of snow and changing fashion. (But remains). Buttons, stitches and the heart drawn in the snow.
Great work.

The rhythm, speed, volume and pitch is right on the button... (no pun intended S-A) ;)

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charliebrogan

Fri 12th Sep 2014 13:32

oi tommy!! watch it!!!

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Laura Taylor

Fri 12th Sep 2014 13:30

Thank you folks.

What's really spooky is that my first thoughts about the photo were to do with babies/hospital/prison. I'm not sure why - it just 'felt' that way. So I thought I'd write something along those lines, and then halfway through thought to myself 'Ah. What if it's an old office block or something, and someone sees an old filing cabinet?'.

Soo - I asked Richard where it had been taken. He told me it was the hospital wing of a derelict orphanage in Preston!! Brrr!!! That felt pretty weird. And when I looked it up, it turned out to have been run by nuns. It's a fairly safe guess those kids didn't have the easiest of lives,eh?

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Ged the Poet

Fri 12th Sep 2014 13:27

Glad you are not... Keep 'em comimg.

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Ged the Poet

Fri 12th Sep 2014 13:23

Thanks Natalie. Red Wharf Bay is one of the most beautiful places on the island (Mon Mam Cymru). To forage, prepare and cook for a loved one makes it even more special. :)

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Ged the Poet

Fri 12th Sep 2014 13:19

The picture adds to the mystic feel of this work. It could be the cloisters of any great religious building. I love the interchange between prayer and nursery rhyme. Fantastic.

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Travis Brow

Fri 12th Sep 2014 12:48

I hope you're not lonely, depressed or suicidal.

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Andy N

Fri 12th Sep 2014 12:32

i agreee with greg here, this does feel different to some of your earlier stuff (which i do love i will state) but i still love it.

excellent.

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Andy N

Fri 12th Sep 2014 12:30

excellent stuff. i can really see this.

particularly like 'pockets of his pondering exhale' but a top piece all round.

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Andy N

Fri 12th Sep 2014 12:27

excellent piece but i do love the image of swallowing silence in particular at the end.

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Andy N

Fri 12th Sep 2014 12:26

says a lot in four lines, really like the image of fleeting clouds on a free horizon.

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Laura Taylor

Fri 12th Sep 2014 12:14

I don't know how I missed this first time around!

Oh I LOVE this! The gleeful delight that rollicks around each line in the mid-section made me smile as wide as you did :) Twiddly belly :D Fantastic!

This is a such an evocative exciting piece - I have twiddly in my belly just reading it.

Also, like Is, brought up in the same conditions, I am so far from precious about germs I positively encourage them. That, and I am incredibly idle and would far rather lie on my back having a good old think than waste away the day doing bloody housework!

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Greg Freeman

Fri 12th Sep 2014 11:16

You're breaking new ground here again, Laura. Exciting stuff.

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tommyfazz@yahoo.com

Fri 12th Sep 2014 11:01

Cheers Laura for your wonderful review of 'Scots wha hea!' ;)
re your further comment- I find the 'debate'(on Scottish independence) both interestingly provocative and outrageously deceptive. It really does just pip Oscar (Precious) Pistorius' trial for mendacity, incompetence and contempt from the leading 'players'. If it were not for the seriousness of the issues involved it would be hilarious.

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tommyfazz@yahoo.com

Fri 12th Sep 2014 10:58

Laura: I find the 'debate'(on Scottish independence) both interestingly provocative and outrageously deceptive. It really does just pip Oscar (Precious) Pistorius' trial for mendacity, incompetence and contempt from the leading 'players'. If it were not for the seriousness of the issues involved it would be hilarious. ;)

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tommyfazz@yahoo.com

Fri 12th Sep 2014 10:53

''Glad you're 'loving this' Natalie.'' ;)

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Ian Whiteley

Fri 12th Sep 2014 10:27

brilliant Lauara - I think this is my favourite one of the Richpix series so far - I love the way you've integrated the nursery rhyme and prayer into this - so that something we relate to as comforting in childhood and later life becomes eerily threatening in the context of the setting. I think this one really would work well as a performance piece as well - with my 'recording' head on I would love to have a stab at putting some backings to this with those distant, eerie children's incantations :-)

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Laura Taylor

Fri 12th Sep 2014 10:06

Ohh I like this, very much. Simple, delicate, and yet as wide as the freedom within it. Beautiful poem.

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tommyfazz@yahoo.com

Fri 12th Sep 2014 09:25

Ladies have you no house-work to do?

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tommyfazz@yahoo.com

Fri 12th Sep 2014 09:16

I have to disagree M.C. I find the 'debate' both interestingly provocative and outrageously deceptive. It really does just pip Oscar (Precious) Pistorius' trial for mendacity, incompetence and contempt from the leading 'players'. If it were not for the seriousness of the issues involved it would be hilarious. ;)

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Graham Sherwood

Fri 12th Sep 2014 08:37

Hello Muse,

Welcome to Write Out Loud, we hope you are enjoying the site and we're really looking forward to reading some of your work. I know that you will be warmly welcomed by other WOL-ers too.

It would be great if you could upload a picture of yourself, it’s really good to see what our fellow poets look like.

Have a good look around, there’s always lots going on and if you have the time to make some comments about the work of other poets please feel free to do so, it’s often the best way to get some constructive feedback about your own work too.
There’s usually somebody who’ll help you out with any problems that you might encounter, so just ask and someone will get back to you.
WOL is a friendly, creative and unassuming place, so welcome from all of us once again.

Graham & the Write Out Loud Team.

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Thu 11th Sep 2014 23:37

this poem does what a windy day does to my socks-

do I need to tell you? ;0) x

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muse_123

Thu 11th Sep 2014 20:16

Thanks tommy

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