Yes, there's a lot better life for a chicken than to be squashed into a tiny cage with it's bill clipped to reduce pecking injuries... Best wishes, Dave
Comment is about Hell From Leather (blog)
Original item by Dave Dunn
Well personally, I do not eat other creatures, fact, so I will never see eye to eye with fox hunts either.
Comment is about Animals (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Hi Cynthia - Great to see you posting!
Yes, you do create the mood here.
And as Isobel stated, that line jolted me as well - I think you can keep that same effect though by saying it in a different and more subtle way.
Comment is about The Bath (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Like your vowel choices in this.
(it would be a good performer)
Comment is about Assignation (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Ian,
Vividly themed and (as always) strongly rhymed.
The `doubloons` and `jewels` are colourfully apt
but harden the vegitative profusion of it a bit.
Lovely and clear though.
Comment is about Buttercup (blog)
Original item by Ian Gant
Thanks fellas,
They couldn`t get what `basking` meant in the context.I never lived it down in our union office.
It was post-revolution but pre-freedom Hungary. The place seemed to be swarming with German salesmen
with folders.
Comment is about THE STORY OF THE POEM (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
At least I know that part of my anatomy from my elbow MC what's your excuse? You seem to be saying its oK to act humanely to animals providing its on your list of justifiable causes. There is a difference between hunting for food & hunting for vanity or fun & if you can't see that you really are miopic - we won't see eye to eye on this - you have your view - enjoy the thrill of the kill - I'll pass thanks
Comment is about Animals (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
This is elegant, beautiful and, to an extent, terrifying. A powerful piece, I really like this.
Comment is about The Bath (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
To read words for someone is a privilege for the performer and the receiver. I am new to the poetry scene but have already been smitten by the word magicians I have been fortunate enough to meet. To be invited into their world on such a personal level is special indeed. my own style is more performance than page. When I first started to write I didn't know there was such a thing as "performance poetry" To hear a poet reading his own words, bringing them to life, is a treat for me. This inspired me to perform rather than just read my own offerings. Performance poetry should never be seen as inferior even to the purists. What would happen to a classic film script if it were only read from the page and never acted?
This from a newcomer to the poetry scene. I just know what I like.
Comment is about The Write Out Loud interview: Tony Walsh (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Missing the point? (as usual?) Hmm. You cannot absolve mankind from its part in the ways of the world. Man was, is and will always be a predator. The evolvement you speak of so glibly merely takes that inheritance to a more "sanitised" level. The biggest sin we admit to ourselves is "unnecessary cruelty" and define this according to our lights. If "Rat hunting" replaced "fox hunting", would the heated accusations be so readily forthcoming. I very much doubt it! Fashion dictates
profit and over the centuries various wild animals
have been targeted, only for the fad to decline to
its present virtually non-existent "desirability", whether it has been beaver (hats), fur (coats/stoles), or hide (shoes/bags) - as domestic replaces "wild".
We hunt and we eat other creatures - fact...yet - We ensure the survival of species - fact...and We alone can control the numbers of a species ensuring the survival of a habitat and that of inter-dependent species. And so it goes on. I have the personal knowledge of contributing directly to the removal of sperm oil from industry and its replacement with an artificial substitute...an action that led directly to the saving of a whole species of giant whale. Where were you?
Checks and balances - and you are welcome to dwell on that part of your anatomy you mention in the hope that nothing bites you there :-)
Lynn - "Only the humane"...help other animals? In a limited domestic setting perhaps. But in a wider context, it is done to ensure the proper regulation and survival of countless species and their worlds. Those so passionately involved are unlikely to adopt that word to describe themselves or their dedication.
Comment is about Animals (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
If there's one thing about husbandry I'd
willingly change,
It would be to make battery chickens "free range"!
Comment is about Hell From Leather (blog)
Original item by Dave Dunn
My tribute to the view from my former seafront flat in Roker, Sunderland - heightened by a few drinks while sitting on the balcony with a guitar.
Comment is about Living Life on the Ledge (blog)
Original item by Marksy
Well, the Gallery has absolutely CONFIRMED our meeting on the 17th, so additional June meetings are now unnecessary. The same start time, 7 PM.
Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)
Original item by Stockport WoL
LOL - now there's an award to scrabble for - the podium wouldn't be in one of your old wardrobes, would it? ;))
Comment is about John Togher (poet profile)
Original item by John Togher
Congratulations Isobel.
You win a free penis down your ear canal!
Comment is about John Togher (poet profile)
Original item by John Togher
I'm not surprised you're fatigued with all those festivals, Laura!
I can't see why the idea of a bath would be disrespectful - I love the way you have framed it as the place one might allow oneself to slip away - to just throw in the towel, if you'll pardon the pun.
I like the way you've compared it to a warm womb - the circle of life making its full turn - and I like the heaviness I feel in my senses - something you've communicated to me through your words.
If you don't mind me critiquing, I'd probably change the water up nose line - I think there might be a more subtle way of saying that.
I'm delighted you're taking part Cynthia - this a great contribution and I love your interpretation. x
Comment is about The Bath (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Meeeeeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!!!!!!! :)
Comment is about John Togher (poet profile)
Original item by John Togher
Love this - incredibly atmospheric, beautifully phrased. I think I may be identifying with it more closely than I would otherwise though, cos have been going through patches of what can only be called 'fatigue', lately.
'Drugged by wet heat and sweet oil' mmMM
Comment is about The Bath (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Will leave it John will be seeing you tomorrow night and we can catch up then and see if anyone wants to come out another night from Write Out Loud.
Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)
Original item by Stockport WoL
Thanks Cynthia. Made some changes to make it more direct, like you said. Needed another pair of eyes on it, so thanks!
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Who's going to be the 10,000 visitor to my profile?
Comment is about John Togher (poet profile)
Original item by John Togher
I hope the idea of 'a bath' is not disrespectful. I find the very element of 'water' thought provoking, considering so much of 'us' is just that.
Comment is about The Bath (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
I hope the idea of 'a bath' is not disrespectful. I find the very element of 'water' thought provoking, considering so much of 'us' is just that.
Comment is about 52 Hertz - WOL Comp (blog)
Original item by Isobel
Thanks Cynthia. Yes, that's more direct.Isobel, don't get me started on a finely shaped ankle.
There's the connection with the word 'supercilious' as well in the title.
Comment is about Supercilium (blog)
Original item by John Togher
You've lost me on all the versions. I like the poem though. I like the way you always home in on something seemingly insignificant in a woman as a focus for her sensuality - I think you've done the same with freckles.
Arched eyebrows do say a lot about a woman - a) that's she's got time to pluck them and b) that she's got a high enough pain threshold. The lazy ones just hide them behind glasses ;)
For some reason I find myself wanting to change the tense in one line to 'what you were worth to her'
Lovely ending - it leaves lots to the imagination :)
Comment is about Supercilium (blog)
Original item by John Togher
John, a suggestion - would you consider:
She had that arched eyebrow
a black eagle's wing.
This eyebrow asked
what you are worth to her.
......
The weight of each other
catching breath
and that eyebrow
relaxed for the first time.
I have reread your poem several times, and finally decided that I would risk this comment. I find this directness very powerful. But it is just my opinion. I really like your work.
Comment is about Supercilium (blog)
Original item by John Togher
Changed. I do like the second version too. You're right Francine, the eyebrow remark does draw you in better. Thanks! x
Comment is about Supercilium (blog)
Original item by John Togher
It says a lot with the words you've chosen - conjures up the images and feelings of loneliness well.
Comment is about 52 Hertz (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
After reading both several times - I like the second version better.
I prefer it because it draws you in from your description of noticing her eyebrow, which is an interesting, if not odd detail, to what you know/overheard and imagined of her.
xx
Comment is about Supercilium (blog)
Original item by John Togher
Still unsure as to which version works better. Below is the other with first stanza later in the poem.
She had that arched look to an eyebrow,
not used to prevent moisture,
but a black eagle’s wing.
This eyebrow asked questions of just
what you are worth to her.
I liked that.
She said she was from the dark end of town,
that place where thievery smoulders
and street corners are plagued by crows.
None of that mattered.
I imagined that moment
after our first time in bed.
The weight of each other,
eye to eye, catching breath,
and that eyebrow,
relaxed for the first time.
Comment is about Supercilium (blog)
Original item by John Togher
tony sheridan
Tue 11th Jun 2013 00:36
I could be there for 8.45?
Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)
Original item by Stockport WoL
thanx for reading and commenting on my varied poems George. regards Nick:)
Comment is about George Stanworth (poet profile)
Original item by George Stanworth
Thanks Lynn - you've got it in one :-)
Whereas MC, as usual, has missed the point. If we are so 'evolved' why do humans kill for 'fun'? or for 'fur' or for 'accessories' when we don't have to? and why do we try to attribute 'human' characteristics to foxes in order to justify chasing them to ground and ripping them to pieces? And why do we kill whales just to see the seas coloured blood red. Checks and Balance my arse!
Comment is about Animals (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Updated and now with supersonic sound.
Comment is about (Be my) Only One (blog)
Original item by Marksy
Another good one, Ian :)
M.C. Only the humane among us humans help other animals. Dolphins and dogs have been known to save human lives. :)
Comment is about Animals (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Background scene is set
Lines then go wrong
Script is completely misplaced
Role play itself stops
The trap door opens.
Comment is about Exit Stage Left (blog)
Original item by Katy Megan
Man - the primary predator who, unlike the other animals, saves what the other animals do not; preserves when the other animals don't
know how, and steps in to rescue those not of his kind when the other animals pass on by
Checks and balances.
Comment is about Animals (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Anyone going to the Elizabethan for a drink - -
oh yes a chat about the Heaton Arts as well.
Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)
Original item by Stockport WoL
Hi Nick
Just come across your poetry. I love the diversity of them. There's some great imagery in your poetry. I particularly like the start of 'Pathway' and 'Epiphany On The Edge.' 'Reed' is another great poem.
George
Comment is about NICK ARMBRISTER (poet profile)
Original item by NICK ARMBRISTER
This resounds for me - I can so imagine how that creature must feel.
Love the 'booming through the murky darkness' and the 'leaping, soaring, diving, plunging into depths of solitude'
Thanks for taking part again Lynn. x
Comment is about 52 Hertz (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
thanks for your comment on 'vermin' Lynn - it's one of the few things that gets my goat, when man thinks he can apply morals to animals and then kill them because they don't act 'human' grrrrrr lol :-)
Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Hahaa :D Yehhh, know THAT feeling!
Comment is about Just one more time, please (blog)
Original item by Ged Thompson
Very true M.C its a crazy bandwagon that we ride upon. The full truth can never in this case be confirmed...
Comment is about Jimmy Who? (blog)
Original item by Brian Wood
Good one, Ian, enjoyed this and your sentiment.
Comment is about Vermin (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Isobel
Wed 12th Jun 2013 07:15
What's going on there is just so tragic. Let's hope the people prevail - or all those women are on a slippery slope back to a place they really don't want to be.
Don't know whether I read it or was told it, but apparently they are cracking down on shades of lipstick air hostesses are 'allowed' to wear... it's just unthinkable - where will it end?
Comment is about Poets urged to show support for Turkish protesters (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman