lovely stuff keith, a real sense of place and time captured well.
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read all of this. a solid piece of prose. good stuff.
Comment is about Genesis- Ch1 (TW and CW: rape, partying, self harm) (blog)
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i've read this a few times and i have to say, i'm nun the wiser
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Hello and a big warm welcome to all the new staff ?
*waves*
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<Deleted User> (18980)
Thu 3rd May 2018 11:57
I think I remember this story from Vicar of Dibley. Even better in rhyme.
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I agree with Ray about the last line. Maybe something to do with 'location? Would rhyme and scan better?
I love the summing up of the hugely emotionally complex experience of the evacuation of children in the line "They sat on sofas with huge cushions". That is such a touching image of comfort and safety in the midst of separation and danger.
Comment is about Evacuees (blog)
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Thank you so much for the comments. I can hardly believe this was 20 years ago. Time is so slippery.
Comment is about No wedding? (blog)
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Thanx. All my tattoos represent battles won /lost in life x
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<Deleted User> (18382)
Thu 3rd May 2018 08:56
Brilliant. Really put a smile on my face.?
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Ray,
Thank you for your comment. Yes, you are right but I was lost for words or inspiration. Perhaps something will come along which I shall add. Thank you again. Keith
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Thu 3rd May 2018 08:36
love it Hazel. I'm so with you on this one for so many reasons. Col.
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Thu 3rd May 2018 08:31
I think you managed to produce a piece of art that is quite beautiful. Sometimes, when I get a quiet moment and my head is clear, I often start my writing process by saying something similar to myself. Whether it works is another matter, but it's a starting point nonetheless. Thanks for posting. Colin.
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Thu 3rd May 2018 06:03
I admire your tenacity, however you sound confused about a person maybe u need to voice your feelings directly to that person without others interfering and maybe it's all a question of timing. If the other person isn't ready or hasn't been prepared to hear your voice, leave it up to the universe. MADELINE. AND my prayers are with u, with your career and general well being. X
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Big Sal
Thu 3rd May 2018 04:04
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Thu 3rd May 2018 03:29
Frances Macaulay Forde
Thu 3rd May 2018 02:43
Thanks for sharing this, J.R.
I liked the storytelling and the glympse into life "a bit further SW of Blackburn, Lancashire".
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Comment is about Another Day in the Life (a bit further SW of Blackburn, Lancashire) (blog)
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Big Sal
Thu 3rd May 2018 01:43
I can see this as an epitaph for Trump and his bone spurs. ?
Comment is about Gym Gigolo (blog)
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Original and it works! Love the juxt on the champagne and the last two lines are excellent.
Good work
Comment is about No wedding? (blog)
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As the old comic says, don't buy any long playing records. A serious subject, treated with world weary resignation. I personally think those funeral plans are just cynical exploitation.
Ray
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A nice trip down memory lane, with no doubt a lot of people displaced, not so bad for the kids as for the parents I suppose. Life changing stuff and worthy of record Keith. With respect I would have liked a few lines at the end to round it off. Only my personal feeling !
Ray
Comment is about Evacuees (blog)
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This sounds like a lot of spirit and little formality, which I think works well. Better than planning everything and getting all OCD about it. I feel comfortable and intrigued with the poem, Hazel!
Comment is about No wedding? (blog)
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This was an idea I wanted to bring to life in a filmic context, so I'm so pleased with all your comments.
David, especially like your mention of the 3rd Man, bringing to mind the Harry Lime Theme on zither, which was a hit when I was a kid. I think black and white was the best medium for stark qualities of the genre, and also the subtleties. It seemed to have its origins in Germany, or at least Europe, and was picked up by Hitchcock. A sort of primordial recipe for all things intrepid and fearful. I was thinking too of Maigret. It's nice to watch these old films !Keep in touch mate.
Hi Brian, what a great track that is. Thanks.
Col, I think you should be respected for that comment, so I have added another verse. Cheers.
Hazel, very nice of you to say so. Praise indeed!
Cynthia, nice to hear from you - glad it worked for you.
Thanks.
Much appreciated Graham. I respect your comments as much as I do your poetry.
Jennifer, welcome ! As I mentioned above, I did think of Maigret. The books were always excellent to read. I quite like the Rowan Atkinson re-incarnation of recent times.
Thanks for that.
Trevor, Hannah and Rachel thank you so much for the likes.
Ray
Comment is about FILM NOIR (blog)
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A bit barmy this one Hannah, so I'm glad it appealed. Just developing the name into something really. A bit of fun, shall we say. I like to stretch the imagination . Thanks.
Ray
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Thanks Hannah; glad you like it!
Suki, you're right, for a happy life we should try for balance of opposites. It's hard to reconcile our moods on occasion.
Thanks for the like Rich.
Ray
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<Deleted User> (18118)
Wed 2nd May 2018 22:02
A warmth in this poem, really enjoyed.
Hannah
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Wed 2nd May 2018 21:57
Really enjoyed this one. Enigmatic.
Hannah
Comment is about garnets and emeralds (blog)
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good poem. the prof needs a career change asap as hes damaging students education/careers by his methods... as you say this does happen.
Comment is about Because My Professor Can't Teach (blog)
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all gone up in smoke. good write.
Comment is about Burning Buildings (blog)
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accurate and of the times. wouldnt say youth is dead just stifled by the tek. lacknig skills for life. i remember the world as it was before. in ways it was better as simpler things are.
Comment is about The Age of Technology (blog)
Original item by AmyLogan
very good. ive lots to say on the topic...
Comment is about The “Great” War (blog)
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Cynthia, sometimes I just have to tie myself to the bloody mast!
Comment is about Old Love (blog)
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wow like my own work and tattoos and more. same as me. ive tattoo poems and quotes and more. and i wanna learn to tattoo soon. can do by hand tho its hard. wanna read more of your work. how many tattoos do you have? im covered with little room. gonna get a kit soon to practise. well done on your ink. so glad you did so. best regards.
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Tracey Louise Brunning
Wed 2nd May 2018 20:52
I love this poem Joe. Very well deserved... ?
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Cannot be clothed in permanent feature of your plans. Beautiful expression
Comment is about Death (blog)
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Great reading, (as usual)! Can almost see it happening in murky detail. Maigret or Simenon?
Jennifer
Comment is about FILM NOIR (blog)
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IN depth and insightful. Many are not aware of their need to exercise wisdom and that as you bring out they do have choices. Good thoughts
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Big Sal
Wed 2nd May 2018 16:43
The only thing I can suggest to you, is to not forget to add a 'd' to 'supposed' in your last line. Otherwise, great work here. ?
Comment is about One Of The Good Guys (blog)
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I shall like to put my work here
Comment is about 'We longed to go to Virginia Beach and put our toes in the tide' (article)
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Big Sal
Wed 2nd May 2018 14:56
I like how the stanzas are framed in the poem.
Comment is about Playing the Game called Life (blog)
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Big Sal
Wed 2nd May 2018 14:55
Great piece of literature you have here, well done.
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Stu Buck
Thu 3rd May 2018 14:09
shapeless viscera. how wonderful. always love seeing you post zach, one of my favourite writers on here.
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